I have now posted my first fan fiction ever. I am excited and I hope you all enjoy. The link to my fanfic is below:

Dumbledore's Pensieve


PLease respond exactly how you feel, I want to know everything. Thanks

Albus

Hey, I like this. Its a very original idea, and you paint a rich, beautiful picture with your story. Dumbledore must have done some hard work to get those memories.

I cant wait until you update,
angie.

you know i would be willling to take ideas for memories that people would like to see me write about. just let me know through PM or this thread...

albus

thanks nymphadora

Hmmmm... very Interesting it is quite true i think. The Evil is the only thing Tom Riddle(Lord VOldemort) Fears these days i think if that were true very original good idea

Tom, this is a great fanfic! I'm glad I caught while there were only two chapters, giving me enough time to catch up. I have to agree with NyMpHaDoRa, its a very original and intriguing idea having it go back to events that were mentioned in passing but nothing else mentioned later. I really enjoyed it and will keep tabs on it.

Your writing and descriptions are incredible!

About the first chapter (or part), I liked how you incorporated the mysterious quote from book 6 into it. I can see that happening how they came upon the cave, discovered the being, and everything else happening (was the being Grindelwald too?).

In the second, you invented a great battle. I really enjoyed reading how they weaved in and out of curses and hexes and other magic. Is there going to be another part to it later where Dumbledore fights Grindelwald for the final time? Any chance of it having any parallels with Beowulf (since Dumbledore's full name has parallels to it, as does Grindelwald?)?

Yes I could work my installment about that battle around Beowulf, seeing as, like you pointed out, both Dumbledore and Grindelwald have allusions to. I will have to refresh my memory on the topic Im afraid for I seem to remember litle or nothing about the story.
Whether or not my next installment is sbout that particular battle, I will have to see the feedback, if any, as to where the memories will go next...


So.. Please guys, who ever reads my fan fiction, if you dont give feedback on the writing style, please please please, give me ideas on what past events you would like me to write about... Im up to anything really!.

~Albus

P.S. Im glad someone finally told me that they noticed the introduction of the quote from HBP... as for the dark being in the cave, I originally wanted it to be Grindelwald, but the timeline wouldnt have worked out... so I opted for a nameless, faceless evil... it suited its purposes.

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I always meant for Dedalus Diggle to be the one who set of the explosion and fireworks in the forest as a sign, for I believed it to be wonderfully in character and a great piece of Foreshadowing of the Night of the downfall of Voldemort...

you know I think it would be a great idea for you to write about Marvolo Gaunt's Raing and how he found it . I really don't know too much about it but I think tha twould jst be cool to see what happened when Dd was there

original, very original. i like it! very descriptive, too, and long haha. long chapters are good, um i really have no suggestions at the moment haha. but i hope to read more of this awesome story!

Thanks Fall Out Girl... Hopefully I can pull my fan fic out of this rutt... it seems as if few people take the time to read it... I hope it picks up!

Thanks,
~Albus

Ah, well as you instructed i read the story, and as you presumed i liked it alot. it certainly explains alot about dumbledore that not many people venture to guess. I can very much see this becoming a side-book by J.K about Dumbledore and his many adventures. I also love how you made dumbledore 166 years old. which if im correct is 16.6 the age of harry potter at the moment. well if thats not what it was then no matter. Anyways, I respect you for your courage of touching the Albus/Minerva relationship that nearly everyone else has see, but nobody has cared to say anything about. I would love to see farther back into Albus's memories such as, childhood sweethearts( he must have had a girlfreind at some point in time... lol). what would be interesting and i feel as if you already plan it... would be to introduce aberforth. He could have some part in history just as much as Dumbledore. Hell i wouldent be surprised to find out that Dumbledore and Aberforth are decendants, if not sons, of Merlin himself. Ah well Just a thought. i hope this grows on to be a very long and explanitory fanfic.

Best Wishes
A.Dumbledore

well I actually have Dumbledore in my fanfiction, the second installment, as 104, because he was born according to JKR in 1840, so in my third installment Dumbledore would be 105 years old... we must also remember at the time the last book took place took place in 1997, making Dumbledore 157 at the time Harry is 16, so no Im sorry I did not want Dumbledore to be 166, that would be his age today, which is 9 years after the book six takes place

thanks for reading

~Albus

Tom, brilliant chapter! Sorry I didn't read it sooner, I was in California over the weekend and got caught up with school these past few days

I like how you paralleled the Beowulf story, great stuff! I was just wondering how Grindelwald knew about the Order if Dumbledore started the organization to combat Voldemort back in the 70's , Unless I missed something!

hmm did I have Grindelwald mention the Order... Ill have to check that.. I had a mere mention of it in the installment "Beginning of Eternity" but it was only called "his movement" and "the Order"... nothing to specific.. I thought it would be great to have him planning his "movement" with the First Dark Lord.

Also, yes I only mildy made my plot surround Beowulf, like with Grindelwald storming in on the dinner, and him losing his arm... just minor allusions...


thanks for the positive comments!!! I am trying to get this thing moving, with more readers, but it is really hard!!!

My next installment will most likely be about Dumbledore's solo trip into the forest to retrieve Dolores Umbridge from the Centaurs... I really think it will be exciting...

~Albus

Hello! I've just read your first chapter and i've got to admit it is really inteteresting though i can't read it all [english isn't my first language so translation tires me]. It is really clever making Voldi fear the evil, it reminds me of Harry who was afraid of the Dementors and consequently, the fear itself!
I would like to read a memory about Erised mirror- what do you think he saw in it? I have something in mind concerning my fanfic. Hmmm... i can't think of something else right now. Keep up the good writing!

Hi Tom.

In essence I loved your story, it was well thought out, fluid and wholly appropriate. The only criticism I would level at you is that sometimes you are trying to be a little too clever with your vocabulary, producing words in the wrong context. If you would like me to specify where and how you have done this, pm me. The trick is to keep it simple - if you try to be too clever, you increase the risk of falling on your face. I would strongly recommend keeping a dictionary in front of you, I do and I am 38 years old - you can never be too perfect at writing english.

Otherwise, I loved the style, the plot line and the characters you included. Well done, I look foward to reading more.

Ok the 4th installment is posted!!! I really like this one!! It is about Dumbledore's trip into the Forbidden Forest to find Dolores Umbridge!


Thanks to everyone who has read my fanfiction, as well as given me some feedback!!

~albus

Nice addition Tom! And when I say nice, I mean niiiiiice (long and drawn out like that I guess ). I like how Dumbledore kept his cool in that situation, along with showing his respect for the centaurs despite the threat of death (whether his or Umbridge's). Great portrayal if I don't say so myself.

I thought of a few ideas for you:
-what Dumbledore was doing before arriving on Privet Drive the night Voldemort was defeated
-where Dumbledore went in book 5 when he was forced to leave (I bet he stayed in his office the whole time).
-how he formed/created the Order of the Phoenix
-finding Slytherin's ring
-how he got his burnt arm
-perhaps a day in his life as a Hogwarts student
-have an example of one of the times he is absent in Half-Blood Price

Alright, I guess I'll stop there. They're not really good, but thats all I could come up with at the moment. Like I said, great addition! I'm looking forward to the next one!

Thanks again... I like your ideas... and I was thinking to do the slytherin ring and absences in book 5/6 as well, but what I really like it...what Dumbledore was doing before arriving on Privet Drive the night Voldemort was defeated... Ill have to give that some thought on how to tackle it.... and figure out what the heck he was doing!!!

~Albus

Love DD going into the forest to rescue Umbridge: brilliant. And I am becoming very excited about your slant on what DD was doing the night LV killed the Potters. You have an interesting insight into the peripheral goings on, and I think looking at DD working out what to do with Harry etc will be a very interesting read.

I also like the idea of exploring the time he got his arm burnt destroying the ring. That was never fully explained (or as much as I would have like it to have been, anyway) in the book. I've now read that part for the 4th time, and still it makes me want to know more .

Get writing Albus!!!

thank you so much magelirose.. and since your post you have indeed helped with my excesssive attempts at being clever. I know I try a little too much, but the fact is, I usually right these late at night, when the inspiration comes, and it seems the twilight effects the brain.... mostly good, but the unfortunate product is made up words and contextual (thats probably made up too ) mistakes

thanks again, and I really hope people read this now, because I made this my graduation project for school!! Read Up and give me some feedback please... my grade depends on it.

~albus

I really enjoyed your story. I liked how that when DD came into the area he had the same authority that he had allways shown. Now that that part was done I think it would be nice to read about that ring and the potter's nigh and some other thingsfrom the books that I would entirely enjoy. Keep writting its great stuff

Thanks again for the feedback!

As for my next installment... I had it all but finished... and i decided to chuck it... im sorry... with the new development with JKR and the NAQ business, I have decided to rewrite the entire installment reflecting my opinion of that... for I had some thoughts about this topic before...

Thanks
~Albus

IT'S FINISHED!!!

I finally finished my fifth installment of my fanfiction, Dumbledore's Pensieve. It took rather long because of other commitments and school... but it is done. I have had some extra time lately, with the quiz threads locked, to focus on this!! I need more feedback on what everyone wants to see next!!!

Thanks for Reading!!!

~Albus

It was as good as I expected Albus. it fitted the story and it explaines alot if it was true. I enjoyed how James had the coak and how lily and james was prepared to give their lives for harry, and how there was a plan that Voldemort didn't know about. I expecially liked the part adding in with severus and the forgivness needed in the situation Keep writin g

ddisalive

Thank you DDisalive, I really enjoyed writing this installment, but Im serious, I need to know what the general agreement is for my next memory... I want to get started... feedback please!!

~Albus

Great addition, Tom. Very well done! I found the plan very interesting, and how Snape pushed Dumbledore in the right direction (I have to admit, for some reason I was thinking he was talking to Slughorn the way they were talking about going into hiding). I like how you also explained how Dumbledore came into possession of the Invisibility Cloak! This really explains a lot, and fills in a lot of holes, and of course its an excellent addition to already fascinating fanfic.

*On a side note, I don't think Godric's Hollow was an all-wizarding community. Hagrid says that the Muggles had started to gather around after the house was destroyed*

-Maybe later you can add what the plan was, maybe some sort of discussion between James, Lily, and Dumbledore with baby Harry crawling around all over the place...or something. Not yet, though, just later I suppose.

-Why Dumbledore trusts Snape (I've stated in the past that it could be that he heard the entire prophecy but never told Voldemort the whole thing).

I assumed that it was completely uninhabited now because why would Godric Gryffindor name a village and have muggle's live there. Wizards would naturally flock to such a place, so it would be hard to keep them a secret... you may be right though. I will fix it though, to make it so it goes either way, for it is not key to the plot.

As for the plan... i thought you would guess that they planned for them to die for harry... perhaps I need to make it more apparent.

thanks again for all the great feedback chris!!!


~Albus

Again Tom - you've blown me away! This was superb, and a fantastic addition to the series. I like the idea that Snape forewarned Dumbledore in the fire, and also El Barto's theory that he possibly only told LV part of the prophecy. Once again, I am looking forward to your next instalment - JKR look out!

Thanks Magelirose!!! I particularly enjoyed writing this installment. As I have repeated a hundred times before, I need to know what the general census for the next memory is going to be.

Thanks for the great feedback!

~Albus(Tom)

I think that your next addition should be on the horocrux ring. It would reveal somehting and would be rather interesting. i have been waiting for this for a while now and expected ti to be already written but I guees you liked other things that were just as intriguing. But the ring would be great to know about

the ring has been on my mind alot lately, ever since I wrote the first one... so I have been mulling it over for quite sometime... I may just write that for my next installment.

~Albus

Your Attention Please....

My next installment is well under way, it is indeed about Dumbledore and his finding of the Ring Horcrux. I have taken so long to do this one because I thought for a very long time on how to start it... it was quite hard....why i do not know. I am writing by hand first, and I am carrying the notebook everywhere so I can write down all of my ideas the moment I think of them. I hope to have it transferred to the computer verrry soon.

Thanks for reading, and while everyone else waits for the new installment, new readers PLEASE!!! read my story. I really need the feedback....!!!

Thanks!

~Albus

I dont know if this is allowed, I feel as if Im going onto shaky ground... three posts in a row...

anyway, my latest installment is now posted... enjoy!!!

~Albus

I think the idea of DD and how he destroyed the ring was rather interesting. to em Mcgonagall seemed to motherly like, it just didn't seem professinal, I think but it was great none the less and keep doing a good job *I broke your consecitveness heehee*

ddisalive

ahh ok... but is it "motherly" or "lover-ly"... thats the question. I saw it as an evolution of their relationship from my second installment "Beginning of Eternity". They wont be together as a couple, but would have strong concern for the other... think of it this way, if you were married wouldnt your wife act like that?

~Albus

Great addition Tom! I also really enjoyed reading about the protections on the ring. Your descriptions are probably among your best attributes when it comes to writing fan fiction! I understood where you were going with the McGonnagal/Dumbledore relationship (how its evolved and everything)...

Whats your next installment gonna be?

Thanks!!

I finally remembered what my great idea was ... I was thinking the other night about a great installment idea... then I forgot it... but it came back to me!!!

Ok, Im not so sure yet, but Im thinking of a completely fabricated scene of the rounding up of Azkaban after the Dementors leave... I would of course incorporate Dumbledore, and maybe the Order... I really want a war like battle... and this is where I can do it!!!

There are the usual snags of timelines, who is where at what time, how the escaped convicts will get wands... but I hope to make it work!!

Let me know what you all think!

~Albus

Another great addition to the series Tom, well done. Being a bit of an English grammar fiend, I spotted a couple of issues I would love to tell you about - but I won't unless you want me to. Can't wait for the next one!

Spot away!! haha, I had time to write them but no more, but sadly I am impatient and do not wait to post my stories until after I edit them. I still need to fix the errors in the other ones!!

~Albus

ok,... its been a while since i updated.. but I assure everyone I have not abandoned it... it just shoved to the back burner. My idea for the next fic keeps cropping up in thought more and more frequently so it should be a matter of time before I succumb to the inspiration to write.

Thanks!!

~Albus

Hi Everyone!!

I know its been a while since I updated my fanfic but I am here to tell you all of the previous installments have been edited. I edited the last one, but I am not sure if it saved properly, so with that installment, as well as the others, please notify me of mistakes. I want to thank Magelirose for editing the first three, giving me the tools necessary to try to carry on editing myself. I thank you very much!!

And to everyone else who hasnt read my fanfiction.. PLEASE DO!!! I really need the feedback, and more importantly, I want to share my work.

The link to my fanfic is in my signature.

~Albus

That was a really excellent Fanfic, Albus Dumbledore!! I really enjoyed it and i cant wait till the next installment..

My favourite installment was "The Ultimate Sacrifice" and i liked the fact that James asked Dumbledore to apologise to Snape on his behalf..and that Voldemort was actually friends with Dennis and Amy, and cared for them. However, i thought that the whole point Harry lived was that he was able to do something Voldemort couldn't, but in your first installment, isn't that showing us something different?
The way you've put the story is really good and personally, i'd love to see a part about when Dumbledore spoke to Snape in the forest in HBP..and how you would put that in a story..

Excellent Work...i'm sure JK Rowling would be proud if she saw it I mean it!

Vian

Im sorry for not answering sooner, I grew used to not getting any feedback

Thank you for all the compliments, I may be able to work out a small scene where Dumbledore and Snape are talking in the forest, although it would be a little short... it could be like a little vignette (i guess that's the right word )

Thanks again!!!

~Albus

Hey Albus, I'll give you the credit that yours was the first FanFic i've ever read on here and I really wanted to say Bravo. Can't really cover the parts that I liked since they've already been posted but, I'll just reiterate the fact that I enjoyed reading it.

I've just seen this:

It was a pleasure to be able to help you out. Sorry I've been unavailable recently (but you know why). But I am glad to hear that the help I gave you was enough to enable you to do it for yourself.

Looking forward to reading some more of your work!

Magelirose

While I am extremely slow on the uptake of my next installment, I do have an idea for it, and I am really excited to write it, though I need to find the time. In the mean time... Spread the Word. Before I finish my next installment I would like to have more readers, because more readers = more feedback! I want to know what everyone thinks, good and bad!

Read up! Ill beg if need be.

Read my Fanfiction please!

~Albus

Ok... it's the end of January and still no reviews! I posted up the first part of my newest installment.. its in my fic whenever anybody is ready to read it! I really would appreciate the feedback, because then I would be inspired to write more!!

Here is the link to my fic! Read Up!!!

Well, I got bored at work today so I thought "eh, I'll read some random fanfic and see what happens." Lo and behold it was this one!

Just kidding Tom.

Wow! I know I told you once that you are wonderful with words but that was from only one enstallment. This really takes the cake.

The way you talk makes me really see what is going on. So many fan fics just want to jump to the situations and you really can't picture them. These musings of Dumbledore's are so clear and so alive.

The only thing I really wasn't too sure about was Professor Snape telling Professor Dumbledore that the Potter's switched the secret keeper to Peter. I was always under the impression that Professor Dumbledore didn't know about the switch which is why Sirius spent 12 years in Azkaban. C'est la vie. I guess since we really don't know you have that opportunity to embellish (if you will) on what we know and don't know.

I like how you made him seem like a person rather than an All Mighty Being as we tend to think he is.

I do hope you find your inspiration to continue with this as well as working on your next one. I'll pop over there and 'review'.

~McKenzie~

Gah!!!

Feedback!! I have been waiting for months for feedback!



I really tried to channel my respect and liking for the character of Dumbledore, as well as the other characters into making them... erm.. a little more dimensional. I like the fact that I am working off the books here. I have all the timelines I could ever want or need, all I need to do is dig them up, and work them together. This gives me certain guidelines to work off of, which is nice, but also gives me the dramatic license to add my own twists, and make the scenes feel alive, as you say.



Hehe, one of my favorite installments. I was growing tired of the usual explanation as for what happened on October 31st, that night at Godric's Hollow. If you notice, alot of the theories I subscribe to, happen to fall into my fanfiction, and this is a prime example. I find the thought that Dumbledore and the Potter's planned their deaths to be very intruiging. Kind of romantic almost, in the literary sense. I found it touching that while James was talking to Dumbledore, Lily was inside spending that last moments of her life with her son... she felt it was near. Mother's intuition... as Im sure you know all about.



Hmm, I tried through my writing, to paint Dumbledore as human, but above and beyond other humans. He still makes mistakes, he still cries over emotional things like in "The Ultimate Sacrifice", and he still relies on others when he needs help (Send for Severus).

After I am completed with "the Retaking of Azkaban", I want to stray away a little, and write an installment about another growing favorite of mine... Severus Snape. He makes a few appearances in the other installments, but I think I want to focus on his return to the Dark Lord that night in GoF. I have some good ideas for that... and it should wrap that scene up nicely for what I think happened. I am REALLY excited to write that.

~Albus

Woohoooo! Finally, a new instalment!!! It's a good 'un too! Now I am champing at the bit to find out what happens when they get to Azkaban. Come on Tom - get writing!!!