okie dokie...here is the feedback thread for my new fic. whether it seems harsh or not, please leave all forms of criticism. all types of comments help the development of a writer. let me know what you think of my fic!

hey monee malfoy
i read your first chapter and i like where it's going. its written very well. you did say it is slow at first and i can't say i disagree, but i think you can go far with it. im excited to read the rest of the story. please post soon!
-Lisa

p.s.
if it's not a burden, could you please read my fanfic A Look at Love and review it (link in my signiture). I'd really appreciate it because not many people have been reviewing it...thanks a bunch.
Keep up the good work on your fic!

You have a talent for writing, this is a very good first chapter. I like your descriptions because they remind me of how J.K would describe harry and his surroundings. i stongly encourage you to continue to write and post the rest of your story for others and myself to read.

Bookmarked.

Best wishes
A.Dumbledore

P.S: although this was your first chapter and your first time posting the story you should think about posting the next two chapters soon, it would most likely have been easier to just post both chapters 1 and 2 at the same time so there is more story to read.

thank you all for replying to my fic. yes it is very slow...i'm about to post the next two chapters...so let me know if those get any better please. i appreciate all of your comments!

Nice two chapters. although i could see these both being one chapter, the place you stopped at was a good one to seperate at. I loved these two chapters and i hope to read more of your chapters. do you have any ideas when you are going to post the next chapters? Looking forward to nezt chapter!

Best Wishes
A.Dumbledore

A.Dumbledore-thank you very much for your review. yes, i know what you mean about the whole, combining chapters thing. i'll probably go back eventually and edit that to make it one chapter...you know, once i get all the other chapters up and running. just to let you know...after i finish this, i'm going to go and post the next chapter...so let me know what you think about that. . i know that my chapters, as of now, are rather short. they'll start getting longer after this one; hopefully . well, feel free to scurry off and check out my new chapter now! its getting good. lol. maybe.

I like the new chapter alot, although it is a little short i dont mind it much . i like nicolina, the way you describe her, it sounds exactly as i could imagine an italian cousin of harry's. A little abrupt there at the end, but not in a bad way. lol it seems that if harry didnt find out she was related, he would most likely have developed a crush on her i know i would have... well i hope to read more of your chapters as they come.

Best Wishes
A.Dumbledore


P.S: do you know how many chapters this story is going to be?

Hey again!
i love the new chapter. it is funny that the names are almost the same. Nicole and nicolina! funny, funny. well i think the new chapter was very good and really good discription. i think it was a little to abrubt by telling harry that she is his cousin. but it was still a really good twist! i want to know what happens! its going to be so cool to see how harry reacts to her being his cousin. please post the next chapters soon!

p.s. thanxs for reading my story and replying i really appreciated it.

-Lisa

Hey! I just started reading your fic, and I think that it is excellent! You're a great writer, and I like the plot. Keep up the great work and update soon please!

hey everyone!

so i went to post a new chapter and i realized i didnt have the disk with me that i had my fic saved on...so i'm sorry, but i'll put up the next chapter tomorrow.

thank you again A.Dumbledore for reviewing. its nice to see that people are actually interested in my fic. yes, harry was starting to feel kind of attracted to her...he thought she was pretty. . hehe. good thing it didnt get too far, yeah?

SummerGirl-HEY! i know, isnt it funny how we both introduce new characters in our fics and they have almost the same name? hehe. .... ...maybe its some form of foreshadowing... ... ... hehe. just kidding. yes, i know her telling harry she's his cousin seemed rather abrupt, but i didnt know how else to bring it about. i mean, if you were in Nicolina's shoes, how would you tell him. . lol.

ringette_rox27-welcome! thank you for reading my fic. i'm glad you enjoy it! i most definitely will be posting soon...tomorrow morning. hehe. you'll be getting the whole explanation about how they are cousins in this next chapter.

well, thank you all again for reviewing! i will have the next chapter up tomorrow morning, so please read and review that as well! hehe.

~arrveriderci~

Again, great chapter! Poor Hermione though, Ron seems to go after every pretty girl doesn't he? I'm glad Nicolina & Harry both know how they're "connected". Hmm i wonder what will hapen next. Anyways, good description and update soon!

OMG! thant new chapter was so good! i love how you ended it! and good job thinking of all of that story about how she is harrys cousin its so good!
you should really consider a career in writing...ok kidding...but you've got some talent and really good discription. keep it up and please post soon!
-Lisa

I really liked your story. I enjoy your writing stle, its very descriptive and enjoyable to read, only, your plot line seems very abrupt. For someone who just met Harry, long lost cousin or not, she seems very forward. Anways, I really like it and I cant wait for the next chapter. The idea of toying with relations to Harry is good! Keep up the good work!

good job you!!!! keep up the awesome work!..................uh....when are you going to post again? i love you!!! see you later!

hello all!!! thank you for your replies and patience...the next chapter should be up very soon. i've been so busy with school that i'm finding it hard to find the time to sit down and write...but its coming along. hopefully i'll have it up very soon. thank you for replying!

P.S. welcome shark.hearts to my fic! thanks for your feedback!

i have only had time to read chapter one for now but muy bien, very good, i love how discribtive you are, it wasn't really slow at all but it was amazing

i just love this fanfic. that was awsome how you got the whole cousin thing and it is really orignal so please update soon because i would love to know what happens
alot of love from me
p.s.
keep up the awsome work

What the Frikin heck!? O M G!!! WoW! Nicly writen. Good job at giving a very acurat explanaion! It was... WOW. I loved it. Pleas hurry up with the next chapter.

wow! that was brill!!! i want more!!!please post more like NOW!!! hehe! cant wait!!
Talk to you later!!
lol x <3

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Hey. I just started this tonight and I feel in love with it. Harrys cousin. If that gets out it is front cover for the Daily Prophet. I can't believe she doesn't know anything. This is going to take a while for the exact story. I wonder if Harry and Ginny will get back together. I can't wait to read more. Lovin your story.

I really am enjoying this story. Your writing style is very good and you have all the characters down. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

So I'm guessing that Ron may have a little crush? Poor Hermione. Are you going to ship any Ron and Hermione in this story?

Well keep up the good work and I will be checking in for more to read

~LovelyLily

Okay...so you want to hear a funny story...

My laptop (the one that had my fic saved on it) decided one day at school that it was going to sabatoge me. I ended up tripping on the cord on my way back over to type more to my story, and there just so happened to be an open water bottle right there that I hit and spilled all over my laptop.

So in short: water+laptop=fanfic bye-bye.

So the chapters I had written and was going to post have disappeared. I'm going to have to start back over and try to remember it all in order to update my fic. I'm so very sorry to all of you who have been so patient and who really do like my fic. I really appreciate it and I'm very grateful. For you, I'll try my hardest to update very soon.

Sheesh, it seems like everytime I start to write a fic, the computer that its saved on suffers some sort of malfunction and there's no more hope of updating the fic. Maybe its a sign or something... I'll try very soon though to update.

Thank you all for remaining so wonderful!

Hurry up and write more! It is awsome! You should think about becoming an author someday. Unless you're like me and have to get a topic by someone assigning it to you. I like where this story is going!

Oh, wait I just noticed what you wrote above. Sorry! Thats why I write my fan-fics on paper just because my computer might mess up. No, its because i'm a slow typer.
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That was really good. It feels weird to be reading it when the 6th book already came out. Very will writen. Glad I found it .

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only 2 words ph wow. In other words really really really really really really etc. good