Thanks for taking the time to read my fic and leave a review. I am very interested in your opinions, questions, and helpful hints!

Yeah, first to review! I really like how you've done the chapter with Hermione reflecting on her frendships that have been broken with Harry anad Ron. It is so sad and emotional to read how she feels.
Since this is a HG/SS fic I decided I had to read so I am glad I did because this is really good so far and I cannot wait to find out what happens when she goes back in time with the time turner. I hope Severus is nice to start with.

Please update soon!

Caity

Thanks Caity!

Yep, I chose the precise moment in Hermione's third year when she was stretched about as thin, emotionally and physically, as she could get. She was stressing over her heavy class load, not getting enough sleep, worrying about Hagrid and Buckbeak, and Harry and Ron were being hateful to her.

I have another chapter ready, but won't be posting it till tomorrow evening, as I don't want to overwhelm everyone right away. The second chapter will switch to young Severus, his life, and his feelings. I'll be switching back and forth between their points-of-view each chapter throughout the story.

Thanks so much for the nice review, hope you keep enjoying the story!

This review has been erased and saved until Darcy posts chapter two.

Signed,

The complete idiot that has already read both chapters and gave everything away with her initial review.

Emily, you goof! You just gave away chapter two and I haven't posted it here yet! lol

Yeah, I asked Ygraine how she felt about it and she was cool with it, so I went ahead.

Giving away chapter two aside, it was so nice of you to review here as well! I hope to spend a lot of time exploring their feelings. And I'm glad you like Regulus as I see him.

You had a great idea here and I'm having loads of fun playing with it--about the only fun I have these days, so it means a lot to me! Thanks for such a terrific idea!

This is Darcy, who read Emily's edit and laughed very hard. You're a sweetheart, girl!

how did emily read the chapter two already? post it soon. i'll read it in tech on monday! or tommorrow...or whenever you post it!...yay. new fic. i love your fics darcy

~PhoenixTears

Wow, this is great! I've been reading Ygraine's version of the story which is also amazing, in a very different way. It's pretty cool how you both thought of a different way for Hermione to turn the time turner back too far. Just one thing though, I really can't imagine Hermione swearing, she's too polite. I'll definitely read more, I love this plot bunny by the way LilyPotter, I wish I'd looked here before you deleted your review of chapter 2. I want to know what happens! Post the next chapter soon! It's already been a whole day!

Chapter Two is up!

GoldenPhoenix, I think you are right about Hermione not swearing, but in this case it was a fairly mild epithet that begins with the letter 'D,' nothing worse. And she was by herself and stressed out, so it slipped out.

PhoenixTears, sorry about that. It's just that I was nervous that Ygraine and I would write stories so similar that it would just be weird, so at first I was only going to post mine to fanfiction.net. Then Emily asked if I'd please post it here as well. So I had 2 chapters on ff.net before I posted here, and knew if I tried to post chapter two in the same day they'd end up in the same post and I wanted them separated. No worries now though--I will always post a new chapter here when I post it to ff.net!

And thanks, sweetie, for saying you like my fics. Chapter three is in process, so hopefully will be ready by mid-week.

Thanks for reviewing!

This is a much easier way to envisage the relationship...I am so glad that you did write in the end Darcy. I have loved Helens fic, you are both geinuses (?)

I especially like the warts on Sirius's bum...I would love to be a wart on Sirius's bum!!!

Are you sure you're not part Brit? You come out with such great expressions, totally worthy of any English school boy!

Reading this has made my dark mood so much lighter.

ElaineX


I notice the name Zenton...hmmm remind you of anyone i know? te he!

I can't believe a whole half hour went past before I realised you had posted the new chapter.Okay, I've set it to Immediate Email Notification so I know when you've posted! Right... firstly, it is really good having it from Snape's point of view. is this when he is in third year too or is he older? Hermione is in her third year, right? I was just wondering, how do you say that girls name - Gbenisola Boipelo? It looks impossible to say. Oh yeah, about the swearing, does the board really read that as a cuss word, it isn't really that bad. Or maybe I'm thinking of a different word. Woah, that is a lot of rambling, I'll shut up now. It is brilliant so far, can't wait to read more!

As the others have mentioned, I too like the POV switch. (Point of View for those who may not know. . .) I think it adds a depth and interest to a strictly one-sided third-person telling of the story. Unlike with most of the canon HP, which is told only from Harry's POV, this will allow us to get deeper into the minds of different characters who are bound to react (and already have) differently to the same situations.

First chatper: I really do like the setting. I think your precision here is excellent. It's the most logical time for this type of thing to happen for all the reasons you described; physical, emotional, and practical. I like the accident, as well. . .very much possible with those long winding, missing, disappearing staircases that make up Hogwarts! I think you captured Hermione's emotional state quite well in this chapter. I could hear her frustration and loneliness quite clearly.

Chapter the Second: I loved that you've given Regulus to Severus as a friend. How that never crossed my mind before, I'll never know, but I love how you've woven him as a major player (or minor player, but at least some sort of player) in the game! I enjoyed Severus' interactions with him as well; it shows that he IS a human being, after all! He knows how to laugh and almost enjoy himself, even if he's enjoying himself at the expense of others! And I loved the "meeting!" How shocked was Hermione to be where she was, faced with whom she was facing!? I loved reading this interchange from Severus' perspective! And he's got himself a time-turner, has he? Very interesting. Very interesting, indeed!

Great, as I knew it would be! I look forward to the next chapter (as I diligently work on my own neglected fic! Though that tricky spot I told you about is all tricked out and worked through. . .now I just have to write at it!).

Update soon!

Wow, Darcy, this is such a great chapter! So, Regulus and Severus hung around together? Cool and the four Gryffindors only attacked Severus when he wasn't there. Severus seems kinder than I imagined he would be at Hogwarts but still he is really in charactor with the blackmailing and everything else.
When he meet Hermione my heart just lept at how kind he was to her and how he helped her. I never knew he had a soft side but it really suits him. I hope he helps Hermione to get better!

Caity

Oh my Goddess, Darcy, it's simply brilliant!! I love your style!!! I was captured from the very first words.
And, I laughed madly to Severus/Regulus teasing of the girl. Severus' description, character, mood, are simply perfect. I could fall in love with him again if I already didn't, just reading of him in your story.
You're an excellent writer!! Can't wait to read another chapter!!!!

Clara )O(

Oh, wow, thanks for so many nice reviews, I'm pleased as punch!

Elaine--You want to be a wart on Sirius' bum? Well, I suppose it would be one way to touch his bum! Naughty!

As for the expressions--I was internet friends for a few years with a couple of little brats from Eton College, so I picked up some of it from them, some from other places, mostly reading, and there are some lovely British slang sites online as well. That's where I got the term "I'm shattered as it is!" Shattered being utterly exhausted. How wonderfully descriptive is that word? I swear I'm going to use it from now on.

How do you read "Zenton?" I was thinking of Zen Buddhism and thought a name with Zen in it would be fun for a Divination teacher--what else does it mean?

Golden Phoenix--Severus is a sixth-year in this story. He's already endured his terrible humiliation on the shores of the lake the year before--the incident Harry sees in the Pensieve. It has traumatized him terribly, though he hasn't really dealt with it. He's so busy and it just freaks him out to even think about it, so he's kind of tucked it away. In her first review, the one she erased, Emily commented on the age difference for Sev and Hermione being no greater than it would be for her and Viktor in her fourth-year, and I think Hermione is mature for her age anyway, so hopefully it will be OK.

As for Gbenisola Boipelo, the future mother of Blaise Zabini, I believe her first name is pronounced Gebenisola, but the kids just call her 'Sola. Both her names are of African origin--her first name means "carry me to wealth," and her last name means "proud." Very fitting, I thought!

Yep, VTM is quite serious about 'cuss' words, which is fine, because even a word that would be fine in a fanfic would not be so fine all over the site. I suppose I should have changed it when I pasted here, to "bother" or some such which would have made perfect sense! lol

Janet--It's so nice that you reviewed here! I'm really glad that you like my plan to alternate their POV. I really want to see this from both sides, and the way it will work out, I think it will be necessary. You are very right to wonder how Hermione must have felt to be faced with Severus, of all people, when she's in such a vulnerable state, and that will be explored in chapter three, when it's Hermione's turn again.

Yes! You're writing! I so look forward to that! I love your fic.

Caity--Yep, Sev and Reg are friends. Sev also has two more friends in his own year, one you saw, Stirling Wilkes, and the other is Evan Rosier, but I haven't shown him yet. He'll come in though, soon. I know people see Severus as a loner, but my take on it is that it wasn't always so. Even in adulthood, his attachment to Slytherin is very, very strong! So it's my take that he felt very comfy and safe in Slytherin and wasn't picked on in his own House. I sometimes wonder why I wasn't sorted into Slytherin myself, because I just love that House. I think there's much more to it than the one-sided view Harry always has of it.

I'm so pleased you enjoyed the scene with Severus and Hermione. I really wanted Sev to be her first contact after her accident, and for the meeting to be positive.

Clara! It was great to see your review. I'm so glad you're enjoying it so far and I hope to keep on pleasing you! As you know, Slytherins definitely rescue kittens, so Sev would certainly rescue a pretty girl!

My sincerest thanks to all of you for taking the time to read and review! It's very exciting for me to read your thoughts--welll, not with a crystal ball, but you know what I mean....

*Tear rolling on her cheek*
First, thanks for your words on Slytherin House...They're such beautiful things to say, Darcy....and I support totally this way you see Severus, as a "social" being, with just a few restricted members of Slytherin, ok, but friends!!! It really touches my heart...

And, a huge percentage of Somalian women (and some men) are simply regal in their gestures, and more than beautiful, with top-model-like bodies and black madonnas faces... Sola is perfect, with her princess-like attitude...

Clara )O(

(By the way, the kitten is perfectly ok now...)

*phew*

Ok, now that both chapters are posted, I can stop being a complete dolt and review for real this time.

Darcy- magnificent.

I am so happy that you expounded upon Hermione's feelings in her third year. She was hurt and betrayed by the two boys that she thought were her best friends, and that is a very important aspect of PoA.

Hermione's characterization in your story just furthers the opinion that she and Severus are much more alike than once thought. They were both somewhat lonely, and misplaced, and had an incessant fury to prove themselves and their abilities.

I love how you characterized Severus. He's a human being, not the monster that most people make him out to be. It's important to realize that he had a rough childhood, and that his attitude reflects upon that. I love how you made him poor, which is how I always pictured him, contrary to most people's view.

I also love how you have paired him with Regulus. It just goes to further Sirius' cannon hatred of Severus. Perhaps dear Sirius blames Snape for Regulus' fate. It would make a lot of sense.

The way you explained Hermione's journey through time was brilliant. the description of how she found herself accidentally falling through time via the time turner was simply brilliant.

My favorite part was the ending- Severus had a time turner too! They are so much alike! HA!

I can't wait to read more!

Hahaha. Reading your fanfic in class again. It's becoming a habit now.

This just shows how good your fanfics are Darcy. I love them. The end, where Severus found that Hermione had a time-turner too. That was brilliant and such a shock. In the future, will Dumbledore and McGonagall find out about the time-turner incident? That would be interesting, how it will be resolved. It is also interesting that in Severus' day, he was the only one with a time-turner and in Hermione's day, she was the only one. Yet they are seperated both by a generation in age, and the cross of houses- one Gryffindor and the other Slytherin.

Keep writing Darcy! And post again soon!

~PhoenixTears

I say that all the time! Well that and Knackered! It had to be Eton...they sound so much like the public school boys that I knew and loved when I lived up the road from Eton.

Your character naming was more intelligent than my little brain could understand. I didn't put two and two together for Zenton and come up with Zen, I just noticed that it rhymed with Kenton!!

Anyway put down the sewing Darcy and write the next bit!!!

more more more!!!!

your is one the best fan fics i have read so far so MORE MORE MORE !!! honestly please right some more, its so intelligantly written out, i wanna know whats going to happen next!

Wow! I never expected such wonderful reviews!

Clara, I'm glad the kitty is well! I'm so glad you spoke of Gbenisola! In my mind, she looks like the beautiful Somalian supermodel, Iman, wife of David Bowie. They are very tall, very graceful people.

Yeah, I have a soft spot for Slytherins--I must! I've written four fanfics now and they are all about Slytherins. Ha!

Emily--you are not a dolt! And I like the way you and Janet connected with the Regulus idea of mine. I feel that in OotP, when Sev and Sirius argue, Reg is never mentioned. And why might he not be, except that his memory is too painful for both of them? My take on it, anyhow.

PhoenixTears--reading this in class? Naughty! Severus would give you detention for that (but would you like that too much? )! I'm so glad you like what you've read so far!

Elaine--I feel stoopid now! I wonder if, subconciously, I didn't rhyme that name with Kenton, because I remember a few days ago, as I was sewing, thinking that the name Kenton is quite unique. I've heard of Kenneths, and Kennys, and Kens...but never Kenton.

That's right! I forgot you lived close to Eton--such a pretty place, isn't it?

I've made some good sewing progress in the last couple of days, despite the possessed sewing machines from hell , so I will post chapter three tonight.

Dumbledore_Rocks--More more more is on the way! Thanks for reading! :-)

Off to put all of the html in my chappie so I can post it!

Aethonon. not really my fault that you make your fanfics so darn interesting. besides, i'm always doing everything but graphics in my computer graphics class...so... *shrug* what better way to spend my time than re-reading your Winter Sun fic. love that one. i'm gonna keep a permanet copy on my computer....

yeah...i'm gonna rush off to finish my portfolio now

~PhoenixTears

PS as for having detention with sev......

I was a bit hesitant to read this fanfic for many reasons one...i love your draco's seasons fanfics i mean it i love them...and i wasn't sure if i would want to read any other fan fic's by you as they wouldn't have the caractors i love in them...sort of the same way i will be scared to read any of JKR's books after she is done with harry potter.

the other reason is i love the other fanfic away from my window i think it is called.

but you will be happy to know that i loved it as i always do you writting!!! it's very discriptive and i love reading it.

Hi Darcy

Severus is an interesting person. It is amazing he cares for her when all we know about him is the one-sided Harry Potter books that are mainly from Harry's side not our beloved Severus. The way he is treating Hermione is really nice about how he was with her at 4 in the morning reading his History of magic book allowed when she woke and they had a wonderful conversation.
Hermione and Severus are interlectually equal and it is great to read simillarities between them with how they like to remember things they read.

Caity

ohmygosh! wheeeee!!! new post!!!!

it was interesting, to see their similarities laid out before them. and unlike harry and ron, her usual company, she has found someone with an intelluctual status equal to her own. the fact that he, too, possess a time-turner just goes further to prove this fact.

keep writing darcy! wonder what will happen next. i wish i hadn't started the fic till it's complete, but i couldn't wait when i saw it posted....

~PhoenixTears

Darcy, Darcy, Darcy...your story is beautiful. This third chapter is more exciting and touching, too, than what I expected! What I find very interesting is the idea that Severus is still human at that point of his life, and something must have happened later. In the meantime, my heart is already breaking for all the possible implications of this encounter...what is going to happen? I have a thousand questions so please...let us have another chapter soon, please!!!

Hugs

Clara )O(

Awww!! You've made him such a gentleman.

I can see why Hermione would be attracted to him. I hope you are going to explain what made those eyes so cold in the future!!

Hi! Man, am I ever annoyed. But not at ANY of you!

I've got a Freudian case on ff.net who is giving me a lot of grief over the timeline. She says I'm off by a year, that Snape should be a sixth-year in 1976, not 1975. The HP Lexicon's personal timeline for Snape says, however, that his 6th-year was 1974-1975. So I told her that, copied and pasted it, even. Then she writes back that it's 1976 on the main HP timeline, but there's some dispute about that, since even Jo has messed up some of the dates. All I can think is--why is this so important? If Jo doesn't even know for sure, then why should I? And why is it so important to this person what year I put in a fanfic? Geez Louise, already! Get a life! Sorry, but no one should be this anal about fiction, especially fan fiction! I am annoyed, but it also makes me laugh, because really, who cares?

That vented, I can go on now.

PhoenixTears, if computer graphics is that boring, then by all means, read "Our Turn in Time!" lol You're sweet. And I understand about the WIP thing...I can only really follow about three Works-in-progress at any given time, otherwise the long breaks that can occur between chapters make me forget things and I lose the thread of the story. But I'm going to try to update mine twice a week if I can. Since I have the story worked out in my head, it shouldn't be too hard. Hopefully that will work out for you.

lozza-cm--Isn't Ygraine's fic cool? I love it too. I love how they are actually different, though there can't help but be some similarities. It'll be really interesting to see how each one ends up. Thanks for taking a chance on mine, and I'm so glad you're pleased with Draco's seasons! I hope to do the final one this winter, if I can get a good plot.

Caity--More will come out about Severus in further chapters, of course. I do think some might find him to be too sweet now, so different from what we're used to, but that will be explained very soon. Thanks!

Clara--It was like when I read our book for discussion--The Constant Princess, and I knew Arthur would die...it was almost as if I couldn't bear to have it happen--I put the book down for a week till I could get it read through. Hopefully you won't find yourself doing the same thing with this fic. Hopefully I can do a new chapter from Severus' POV by Sunday.

Elaine--Definitely! I'm starting gently, as I seem to tend to, but a lot of info will come out about Severus!

*Takes deep breath* Thanks for such wonderful reviews. It makes up for the ones that go beyond "constructive criticism" and into the realm of 'anal retentive.'

So Darce, when you gonna update?

Erm ... please don't say "when you do, Emily" and make me look stupid...

Yeah, I could see that one comin ha ha

Listen, forget that idiot on FF.net. Seriously, if it bothers her that much, she doesn't have to read it! Plain and simple! Tell her to accept your POV or move on, man! Your fic is way too good to worry about one dunderhead .

I just updated last night, sweetie! Chapter three is up.

Yeah, I know, I should let it go. And I will. It's just that this stupidity has gone back and forth all morning. She's a real Snape person, all her fics are about him, so I understand her desire to help--if that's what it is. Sometimes it isn't though--it's about boosting one's ego at someone else's expense, and I don't have time for head games. This is beginning to step into that realm. Thanks, hon!

Sometimes....well most of the time, I'm so stupid. After I posted I was cooking the tea and I was hit by the proverbial 'Lights are on but no-ones home' effect. I stated the obvious didn't I? Ofcourse your going to tell us why Snape became what he became. I mean, I have read between the lines correctly haven't I.......

Emily is not a happy camper . Emily had this fic flagged for e-mail... and Emily has gotten no such e-mail of this update! Grrr...

Ok, now that I've vented...

*Squee!* I loved this chapter! Severus is so different as a young man... He hasn't yet experienced the tragedies that changed his demeanor for the worst...

How on earth is Hermione going to get back home? Poor thing... At least she has Snape! And, Snape said he knows a trick to making the time turner use easier... will that help her get home? Maybe get home... in an older body? So that she and Snape can... well... Ha Ha I'm horrible, I know. I can be such a perv.

I love how Snape was sitting at her bed, reading. He is so concerned about her. How sweet is that? Awe, I really am loving this fic lately, Darce!

I can't believe that the new chapter has been up for so long without me realising. I had it on email notification and everything (yeah, it's that good)! Anyway, that chapter was just... amazing! I love the way you made Snape into such a sweet, sensitive guy. He and Hermione are the perfect match, only in the past though. I wouldn't like the thought of them together in the future, it's just... Don't kill the HG/RW ship!!!! But your fic (and Ygraine's one as well) makes them seem so right for each other. I love the way Hermione asked Severus to stay and read to her until she fell asleep... it was so cute. I really want to find out how Snape turned into the person he is now, he seems so much different in that chapter. Is Hermione going to find out much about him? I hope so! Thank you soooo much for writing such an interesting fanfic, it's so good to read!

Darcy! I love this chapter! You're right, I DO think yours and mine are going in different directions, which is cool!

Severus is such a nice guy... aww *swooms* But i do hope that we see a darker version of him too! I do like my dark Severus i do

Oh, and ignore that twit on ff.net. You know how much i hate that site... *rants about the pantness of ff.net*

Update soon!!!!!

LOL--Elaine, you are hardly stupid! And yep, I sure will be revealing more about Snape as we go on--already I have sown the seeds for Hermone's curiosity--she wants to know what happened to change him. The question now is...will she ever get to know? Or just us?

Emily and Golden Phoenix--I did some research on the Time-Turner, and from what I can tell, it only goes back in time, never forward. It would be so easy if it spun both ways, but then, the fanfics of Ygraine and me would be rather short! I'm glad you like Sev as he is now. He's had his share of personal tragedy, but it has not made him bitter...not yet. That will come out as the two of them get to know one another. And as for the email alerts, something is up with them, I think. Clara wondered where her alerts have gone lately, too. Maybe someone should ask up in Dumbledore's Office.

Ygraine! Hi! Yeah, we're kicking this plot bunny! Poor Bunny! Who would have thought they'd be so different! I feel a little better about being nervous at first, since lozza even said she was afraid to read mine because she liked yours so much, but it all seems to be working out just fine. I'll chalk my goofiness up to my lack of experience in fiction-writing. And don't worry--the angst you love is involved in this story--just not yet. lol

Thanks for such lovely reviews! I hope to have chapter four up by Sunday!

That was a very touching chapter, Darcy! I immensly enjoy that you've made Snape . . . likable! He's still got his edge and his intensity that we all (well, all of us snapelovers) know and love about him; but he is as Hermione noted: Caring, compassionate, helpful, and even soothing. I do wonder how you're going to reconcile this with canon! I kind of fear for what's going to happen to make him so hateful toward her in the future!

I can't wait to hear his "secret" for dealing with life using a time-turner! Knowing you, I know it'll be something brilliant! You always come up with the most interesting stuff.

Dumbledore was great! He was so . . . grandfatherly, even then. And noncommital in answers! Gah, drives me up the wall! McGonagall was perfect, too! She always has the edgy, wringing-her-hands type of "what do we do? what do we do? what do we do?!"

Very nice installment. I look forward to seeing from Severus' eyes next chapter. Which is coming soon, right? I mean, surely you'll have to take some more sewing machine petal cooling off breaks when you can add to the fun!

Just finished it, and i have to say: Awesome job! I love the way Snape acts and behaves. He's even funny at some points, and thats a big thing, making Snape funny. I'm really anxious to see what happens to him, what takes the smile on his lips
It feels a little odd to read about Snape behaving so, normal, having fun and smiling.

I can't wait fo the next chapter to see whats going to happen!! Hope you'll post it soon!!

MaYa

Thanks, Janet, and hermione_4ever! I'm really glad you enjoyed chapter three.

Janet, I tried really hard to get McGonagall right. I feel she's a real control freak with herself, and it upsets her to be shocked--even more so than it might be for other people. I remembered the wonderful Maggie Smith's performance in PS/SS, when she came into the girl's bathroom right after Ron had disarmed the mountain troll, and the funny, flustered way she had acted. I kept that in mind when I wrote.

Stupid sewing machine pedal! I'm still not done with all the pants, but I just needed a break! So I wrote. lol

hermine_4ever, I hope you like this next chapter, too, from Severus' PoV. I know that his warm nature seems very unlike him, but I am glad you like it. I know it seems rather confusing, but to me, he's only 17. He's too young to hate everyone. We never want to hate everyone...I can't bring him to be the cold creature people think he always was since birth. I just cannot believe he could have been.

Thanks for reviewing! I'll go put chapter four up now.

OOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHH, Darcy!!!! This fourth chapter is so sweet!!! You have perfectly caught the problems and melancholy of adolescence, and its very intense emotions.
Severus is still open to feelings, you can see a shred of his sensitive heart through the already unpleasant events which occurred to him. Hermione shows balance and and an extrordinaire ability to cope with unexpected situations.
Your characters ,in two words, are realistic...although we are not used to see Severus so caring, and this makes him both a treat for Snapelovers , and a character in full growth.
I can't wait to read another chapter.

Hugs sweetie

Clara )O(

this fic is wonderful, i love it.. ss/hg fanfics are my fav. Keep up the great work, i cannot wait until you post again.

thanks xx Sarah

Your chapter wasn't long enough!!!!!! I want more...now!!

Seriously though, great job Darcy, I keep forgetting this is Snape, he's so...so...nice!!

Your Hermione I hope, plays this to the advantage of her friends as well as herself.

Love it, love it, love it!!


grrr, groan....the diggers have started!!

Awwww Sevvie's so cute! He's so smitten with her, Come one all together now,

'Awww'

I loved it how Hermione's scared of Sirius, cos she would be! Can you do a scene where she's running away from him like the hounds of hell were after her? Pwease? Cos that would be awesome.

Anyway, I love it how out fics are so different, and how our minds work so differently when given the same idea.

Speaking of which, i'd better get back to my one

Awe

Now I really liked this chapter. Severus is so different in his youth! And I had to think about Hermione's warning regarding Sirius...

I'm so used to thinking of Sirius from book 5. I had forgotten that everyone thought him a murderer after Harry's life in book 3. Good job with that!

Oh, I can't wait until Hermione and Severus get to spend time alone together on Saturday! Ah! So sweet!

i agree
please update next chapter soon

Hi

I love this chapter! It is such a surprise that Hermione is willing to cry and be so open to Severus after all she knows about him in the future. Will something happen between them to turn him so cold or will the two of them have their memory wiped??
I cannot wait for their 'date' on Saturday and I hope a kiss may happen if possible?? I would be so good!
With Sirius Black, I was shocked at first with what Hermione said and then realised that it was when he was an escaped 'murderer'.
The two of them are so perfect and I cannot wait to see True Love happen properly when they both realise they have fallen for each other.

Caity

Yay! People liked Chapter Four!

Elaine, I am sorry it was so short. Mine usually run over-long! But I've been really busy, and then, I decided I wanted this next bit shown through Hermione's eyes. But I've already started it.

I want to thank everyone for their patience, too! I am finding that I definitely have a habit of starting out slowly on my fics, so for those of you who read one installment at a time, it can probably drag in the beginning. But things are going to start happening in this next chapter--hopefully some pretty exciting things! At Hogwarts, no matter what the era, things never stay mellow for very long!

A lot of Hermione's feelings will be explained in this next chapter, and hopefully it will become clearer how it is that such a normally staid person can be so open now.

Angst (Ygraine!) and sweetness coming in chapter five! I promise! And I only have two Hallowe'en orders left to fill, so it should come soon.

I don't have a lot of individual comments to make, since there really wasn't much to this chapter, but thanks for bearing with me as I set the stage!

Thanks so much to everyone who reviewed!

Short and sweet for you is like a book for me!

I really, really enjoyed reading your Severus. I think his "gentle urgings" were very indicitive of the Snape and the Slytheirn that we know. He had intrigue, sure, and he seems to care about her well-being. . .but it really was about what information she could confirm to him about his own life. Very nicely played out.

I noticed this, and it won't bug many, I'm sure. . .perhaps you can reword this?



She's 13, right? To me, that's still a child. My basis of child is probably different from many HP fans, of course, but perhaps you could add "young" to child? (Want to talk about nitpicky? At least the mistakes you point out for me are actual mistakes!)

Wow, all that from the second paragraph. Let's see if I can get further. . .



YES! Way to keep her around him for a while. . .nice! (Ah, the things I celebrate. . .)



lol, Snape the existentialist. . .I really like the way this particular sentence plays into our current canon Snape.



I really like this, too. Nice exploitation of canon loose-plot!



An interesting statement coming from Hermione. She's seen first hand the open hostility that the houses have for eachother. . .(Of course, it's all kind of shadowed by Harry and Draco's extreme hatred of eachother. . .but she's still been a witness of it).



Oh,this is great! I didn't even think when I first started reading that Sirius would still be guilty in her eyes! Very nice twist of irony for us.

Wow, I'm really looking forward to your reconciling who he was in the past with who he is in her future. Really looking forward to it.

Thanks, Darcy, for this excellent chapter! I'm eagerly awaiting more. . .and I hope that now you've got Halloween orders over with that you can find some time to do something just for Darcy!! (And, if is should happen to be writing more in this wonderful fic, I wouldn't complain too loudly.)

Bravo!!

Janet! I love your reviews! And I'm so glad that you saw what I did with Severus--his brain works like an acupuncture needle! Always probing, but so gently that people he's doing it to don't really notice his ulterior motives! lol Such a Slytherin!

The 'child' thing...I can see where that would bug you. I guess that I was thinking how Severus would see her, and at 14, she wouldn't seem childish to him, just a bit younger than himself. So that's why it was worded that way.

What's meant by 'loose-plot?' I'd love to know! I haven't come across that term before.

About Hermione's statement that "Gryffindor's don't do that!"--I'll be dealing more with that in the next chapter, too.

Yay! All done with Hallowe'en pirates! I do hope to write some more, and my friend Laura is coming to visit soon, too! We get to go down to Sioux Falls Friday. She's so sweet--she's read my 'Draco and Emilie' fics, ha! So yeah, I should be in such a good mood by the weekend that chapter five will flow from me like wine!

Thanks for that thoughtful review!

ahhh.......i didn't get chapter four until just now.... i can't believe i didn't get an update...no notification when there were new replies posted in the feedback either....i better go check my other threads to see whether they're okay.

i haven't read chapter 4 yet...and skipped over the quotes from...someone...lol. I was actually working on my Remembrance Day graphic...it's pretty interesting and I really love the topic: the loyalty and sacriface.

I just came up with a theory with this fanfic.... i know i have no life. lol. I just thought, didn't Dumbledore once said that many people have meddled with time and changed the future? Could what happen is the Hermione stopped the change in Severus because of their love, and him doesn't going to the dark arts? Then Harry wouldn't loose his parents since Severus wouldn't be a Death Eater and have told the Dark Lord this information....

Just a theory I had . woot if i get it right. hm....why do I always refer to voldie and dark lord in writing...interesting...i can't be a *gasp* surely not...

okay...now i'm just rambling cuz i'm so darn tired and don't feel like studying for test next period...i'll stop here now though...and *squeals and run of to read chapter 4 "love you darcy!"*

~PhoenixTears

PS. name is dianne. i realise that everyone on the feedback is pretty much on first name basis...so i'll give mine

i really like your way of writing, i feel you know how to word each sentence to make the reader feel compelled to carry on writing

i have by far enjoyd your fan fics the best and i can't wait for your next chapter

Brilliant
I really like this young Snape!
Last chapter was really sweet but short
I hope that next one will be longer. . .
I can't wait to read it

So,
When are you going to update next chapter?

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