Please leave feedback for my story - The Phoenix’s Choice.

Even if you didn't like it or thought it was poor, let me know!

I have never seen anything so full of original imagination--and I mean it. The notion that the wizarding world is letting these death eaters choose their punishment is brilliant! I also like the different potions--never actually thought of it, but they are interesting and I could see them working. Keep writing--or as John Keats would say, play on!"

I loved it. It was a wonderful story with a very original plot. Do you think that it would be possible for a sequel to be written?

~PhoenixTears

Holly molly!!!! You are a good writer, with such good descriptions, and just awesome imagination!!!! and its so awesome with Lucius...wow awesome story, and im glad that its not over, so im looking forward to reading the rest of the story.

Yet another wonderful fanfic from you. And this one was one of your best . How can you say the idea is not developed? lol
The plot was as original as any fanfic could be. Especially the three potions.
It is true that when we face our own cruel actions we change a lot. Harry was right in saying that the death eaters would change however strong they consider themselves to be. It might not change what they have done but it sure would change them.
Good job.....

good story you got here bajab, a very nice one indeed, i hope there was more though of lucius' torchering and so, and his life after he is released from azkaban, but anyway it's a really nice story.

I'm finally reviewing! Sorry it took me so long.

This just struck me from a purely grammatical standpoint:

It's a bit better to say "to brush a stray lock of platinum hair away from his pale, gaunt face." It's not exactly a rule, but it stands out.

For some reason, this one sounds odd to me at all. It sounds better to me as "noble birth" instead of "noble born" unless you were going for that whole muggleborn type feel.

Oh, I can definitely see Luicius finding amusement and pride in something like this! Nothing, given his current position, should make him feel any measure of pride, but I guess a leopard can't change his spots. (Thanks, gram, for that saying . . .)

Nice teaser line here! Knowing that he's going to have a choice to make, this line really creates a sense of animosity between the reader and the character.

I like this line as well. It's more realistic to think that even in a post-Voldemort world there are still injustices. Life after Voldemort should still have its share of troubles. After all, Voldemort didn't invent evil.

Hmmm. . .this line makes me think that nothing good will come of this choice for Lucius. I almost suspect it's Potter under Polyjuice getting ready to kill him!

This one made me laugh, too. Imagine Lockhart having something named after him for being his own!

I find this an interesting name for the potion given what it does balanced with what we know of the Dementor’s Kiss. . .it seems that this potion would almost act as a reverse kiss, in a way. Interesting.

Ah, that old, dear friend of Harry’s. . .

I had a feeling.

This is an ingenious idea.

I absolutely love this line, as well. I love it because they are finished with him, he’s made his choice and it no longer effects them . . . even though moments before taking that potion, Lucius was convinced he would be returning to his former glory. It was just such a stark contrast that, despite everything he’d done- he no longer had any effect or power over anything. I also think it speaks to how either side can remain distant and even blind to the pain they cause. . .

Very nicely done, as always! Thanks for sharing!

WOW!!! ur story was brilliant!!!!!! It was belivable too!! I could actually see that happening in the wizradin world!!! HEHE!!

Great story! I was wondering where you were going with the choice, but you pulled it off wonderfully.

I also like the fact that we see his initial reaction and we know there are much worse things to come.

Another masterful piece of work; keep up the good work.

WOW!!! hte phoenix's choice sounds like something stright from JKR's mouth!!!!! thats crazy! i dont know how you came up with it!!!!

great idea. great writing. i have one word to say to this; WOW!!!!

Brilliant! Wouldn't it be amazing if we had this in real life?