Hello everyone! This is the feedback for my brand new fanfic, which you can find here. At this thread, you can post your views on my fanfic, critisize, judge, correct any possible mistakes (although i have a very good beta!), say anything you want to say about my story! I accept every thought and any suggestion you may want to make! So, feel free to post here!
Happy reading!
alkisti xxx

is that it.... was that your whole story???? hmm i like it, its quick, and i think that was the end of your story.

Nice intro
Good thinking to let the battle end shortly cause it is really difficult to keep a battle intresting for long.
Anyway since I think this is just the beginning I'm looking forward to read more of this

No, Polandbaby16 that's not the whole story, it is just the beginning!!! I try to show Harry's life after Voldemort's defeat, i guess the next chapter will help you get into my story! But thanks for saying that you liked it anyway!
Sond thank you for your comments! I didn't want to make the battle too long, i think there are more important things to tell. I hope you will read the next chapters as well!
For the rest of you, take a look at the story and post your views here!
Chapter 2 will be posted soon! Happy reading!
alkisti xxx

hey i like it and i really hope that you write more because that was totally awsome so far. this is just me thinking out loud but i really want harry to kill voldemort in HPDH but i don't know its wierd but i can't bring myself to think that harry could use an unforgivable curse but i want him to. isn't that so wierd. it just makes it much complicated if volemort dies durin the battle because of tirdness exaction(sp?) or something . oh great i just confusd myself. anyway alkisti i like it keep up the good work
much love from me
p.s.
happy holidays

Phoenixgirl, thank you for both your comments and your wish! I think i understand what you mean, in the second chapter Ron and Hermione are worried because of what you mentioned, because Harry used an Unforgivable Curse and i believe this same thing will be visible at the next chapters as well... I hope you will keep reading the story! I'm waiting for my beta, Phoenixtears, to send me the edited chapter which i will post as soon as possible!
So, happy reading, happy holidays and Merry Christmas to everyone!!!

omg nice intro hun cnt wait for the second chapter!! oooo Harry killed voldemort * doin a lil jiggy* woooo
Hope your second is as good as your first!!
x-x-x x-x-x

Thank you sweetie! I'm glad you liked it and i wait for your suggestions as a fellow writer! And of course of everyone's suggestions!
I hope my beta will reply soon...!
Happy reading!
alkisti xxx

OOH!! great second chapter you left it on a huge cliffhanger * evil laugh*. Hmm i wonder what happened to Cho. I got a lot of ideas what could've happened to her but hmm....Cho....* thinks*
Haha it's so typical that Ron and hermione would be talking and Harry would come down!! hehe. It was nicely written. Keep going it brilliant!!!
x-x-x em x-x-x

Haha thank you gorgeous_granger!!! Yes, we have seen Ron and Hermione talking to each other like that many times and i think it fitted at this chapter!
Well...for the rest of you, i have updated and sent chapter three to PhoenixTears, my beta! So...now...i'll wait!
Happy reading and take care!
alkisti xxx

hEY alkisti!!!! That is a very good story but I thought Harry would be concerning Ginny, not Cho, to tell you the truth i don't really like Cho when I read The Order of The Pheonix. . But to complete this feedback, your story was REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!!

and

Oops! I didn't know there were so many people waiting for the update! I will try and get chapter 3 to you sooner than I did chapter 2!


I almost gave away the new update with my post.... Good thing you reminded me, alkisti, that the third chapter isn't posted yet. Moral of this story...don't comment on feedback threads until the new chapter is posted.

Off to edit. I'll get it to alkisti tommorrow...or the day after.Promise guys! I don't completely trust my beta-ing skills this late at night. It's almost 1am where I am.
~PhoenixTears

oh i totally love it i wonder what happened to cho. i seriously thought that ron was going to say i am worried about us or along their linehe he he any way keep up the good wor
much love from me and enjoy the new year

Wow! Thanks to all of you!

timeturner (cool nickname!), i don't want to give away the next chapter but i think you will like it if you read it! Ha ha!... And there will be some Ginny in the following chapters, i promise! Oh and thanks for liking my story!

PhoenixTears, please take your time, i don't want to make you worry about that! It is amazing that i have you as a beta, i don't mean to exhaust you, teehee!

Phoenixgirl, happy new year to you too! I'm glad you liked the story so far! Well..answering to your comment, Ron is not that worried in this feedback, but when is Ron seriously serious? lol! Hmm...maybe i should put more of Ron in the following chapters...I'll think about it!

Alright, that's for now! Take care and happy reading!
alkisti xxx

OOH!! another major cliffhanger!! * evil laugh* That chapter was great and I wasn't expecting her to be dead I thought she'd gone mad like neville's parents! Hmm..... another great chapter hunni keep em coming.
love ya
x-x-x em x-x-x

Hey Em! Thanks!
Yep, I promise no cliffhangers at chapter 4! But this cliff hanger is good, no bad news for the trio! I hope that you didn't like Cho, someone close had to die, it was the smallest sacrifise i could do!
Anyways, thanks very much sweetie!
Take care!
alkisti xxx

Don't worry i'm not a big fan of cho and I'm happy it was her and not any of the trio or ginny.
Can't wait for chapter 4 hun. I'm glad it's good news too. I also don't really care if there's a cliffhanger in chapter 4- i prefer cliffhangers because it means there's more suggestions. It's like an open possibility ( if that makes sense?)
x-x-x em x-x-x

Yes, i know what you mean! I think that cliff hangers make people be interested in the story and wait for the next chapter- it is crucial. I have a very nice turn in my story, chapter 5, i think that especially you will like it! Let's see... Of course, let me remind you that if you have any suggestions, i would be glad to hear them, ok?
See you!
alkisti xxx

Hi alkisti!
This is a very nice fanfic. I just read the three chapters, and they are really very nicely done.
Though I can't understand where did Cho come from. And where did Ginny go.
The part where Hermione tries to go round the topic of Cho was very good. And I can't wait to find out the good news!

Hey the_animagus! It is very nice of you to read my story and leave a comment about it! Thank you!
Ok, let me see if i can explain to you my thinking about Cho. The War is over so, people need to know who survived and who didn't. Hermione starts talking about everyone, filling that gap, but she forgets about Cho. Alright? Someone close to Harry had to die, so i chose Cho to be that person. Ginny is not gone, she will appear in the following chapters, but there are so more important issues to handle first.
I hope i sorted out this issue for you! And i hope you will keep reading my story!
Happy reading to all of you!
alkisti xxx

Aww...thankyou alkisti! And no chance of *that* happening anytime soon! So don't worry. I enjoy beta-ing/editing. In fact, I think that maybe I should make a career out of it. $1/page everytime someone at school wants me to edit their essay or assignment.... *looks thoughful*

Anyways. Finally! I get to write a constructive comment! And I haven't read the next chapter yet so.... I'm SAFE!!!

This may be redundant for alkisti, but new for you readers.

That sounds like a line taken right from the OotP! Where Harry just vents by yelling at the two of them? Lol.


Hmm...wonder whether anyone made this connection other than me. Or am I just weird. At the end of Martin Luther King's speech, "I have a dream", he quoted and referenced “the words to the old Hebrew spiritual, ‘Free at last! Free at last! Thank God Almighty, we are free at last!’” <http://www.windmillworks.com/games/dream.htm> How interesting…

Hmm...I don't think you'd want me writing more corrections on here, so I'll just...scoot off and read your chapter four. Have you written all this on Word already? So fast....

~PhoenixTears

wow! i didn't think shed be dead i thought maybe she got hurt badly or somethhing.. anyway on a much happier or sadder note (depends on how you want to look at it) the 7th harry potter book is coming out hopefully this year and i KNOW that all of you know this but i don't know i felt like saying it lol and i know totally off subject
alot of love from me

Hello guys!

PhoenixTears, yes, i think you should do it a job, or at least use it for favours. Everytime you edit something, you will be able to ask for a favour, this may come handy!
Thanks for your comments and i hope that you like chapter 4!
About your quote from Martin Louther King, i didn't mean to do it, i haven't actually read any of his speeches -how useless was the histroy i have been studying all of these years...-. But that was cool!

Phoenixgirl, as I said before, someone had to die and since i don't like Cho so much, it wasn't that hard killing her! Teehee! I'm glad you mentioned that about the 7th book, i haven't actually heard of anything concerning its release date. I guess we will have to wait and see!

Anyway, happy reading!
alkisti xxx

I just read your story and I LOVE it!!! Oh and I'm glad you picked Cho to die (sorry if that sounds mean) but I absolutely don't like her character at all!!!!(again sorry if that sounds mean just my opinion) Anyway it's also better that she died instead of Ginny or someone else that is more important and I can't wait to see what the good news is!!! I love cliff hangers!! Can't wait 'til you post more!!!


-Kelso

Kelso2010, i loved your feedback- thanks! I'm so glad that no one seemed actually disappointed by her death! There was NO way i would kill Ginny- there are so much to write about her! I hope i will update soon! And that you will keep reading my story!

Happy reading!
alkisti xxx

Hey!
Thanks for sortiing out that issue for me. It's good you didn't kill off Ginny. That'd be a great disappointment for our hero. And Harry deserves to be happy after the war.
I hope you update soon.

Yep the_animagus, he does desevre it, though he won't be that happy any time soon... I'm glad you are (still) interested in my story!
As for the update, PhoenixTears is having exams this period so i don't want to stress her more with the beta! Hopefully, she will be able to beta the next chapter soon!
Until then, take care!
alkisti xxx

Hi!
I just read the fic and I LOVE it! I really like all the little details like when Hermione yells at Ron to leave Harry alone. I don't know why I like it, I guess it just make the chararcters more real . I must admit that I also like that you killed Cho. Someone had to die and I would have been really sad if it had been Ginny or another really important character.

I also love the cliffhangers (HeHeHe). THey have got to be one of my favorite things in writing. *HintHint* It will guarentee that I will come back to read the rest of the fic if it has cliffhangers . I can't stand to not know what happens!!!!!! Well anyway I really like your fic and I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep writing!!
~Jyljoc

Hey jyljoc! Thank you very much for your feedback! It really made me smile- it is weird realising that i'm writing a story and people are actually reading it....! Anyways, i hope you will keep reading it!

Oh, i have updated, please read the chapter and leave your comments here! It is un-betaed so it is not mitake-less, but i did not want to have my story locked. Anyway, happy reading!

alkisti xxx

this is pretty good. keep posting

Hey your story is great! This chapter had many surprises. Hagrid and Madam Maxime getting maried! I didn't see that coming. I wonder what Ron meant by plans for the future. I guess I'll have to wait and find out. Keep posting!

wow! this is an awsome chapter. hagrids getting married. YAY! i can't wait to see what happens its really awsome how you write this it has incrediable writing style. keep up the awsome work
much
~mya
p.s.
please update soon

Oh wow! this is an awesome fanfic! I love it I want to know what Ron and Hermoine are thinking and I really really want to know where Ginny fits into all of this. Also that was so cool how Hagrid and Madame Maxine are getting married. I like them together.

Wow all of this feedback- thank you very much!

eagleanimagus, thanks for leaving a feedback! I hope you will keep reading the story!

GryffindorBabexhott, thanks for your feedback! It was very out of blue for me too but i thought it would be nice to have these two get married- Hagrid has to be happy, at least for once, in his life... As for the future plans, it is not as important as it seems. I guess that all of them are wondering what Harry is going to do now that he is out of school, without Voldemort, Death Eaters and Horcruxes. I hope that the next chapters will make this more clear! Anyway, i hope you will keep reading my story!

Phoenixgirl, a big thanks for your feedback! It is so amazing that people like my story! Teehee! I promise i will update soon, probably within the next 5-6 days. And also, i promise not to let you down!

ILoveHarryPotter07, it is nice seeing you here! Thank you for leaving a feedback! Ron does not think so much about Harry's future, it is Hermione who cares more. But they will both be there to help him go on with his life. As for Ginny, I guess you will have to wait a little bit more. But she will have a big part in this story, i promise!

Alright, thank you once more for your feedback! Chapter 5 will have a big...well let's call it surprise! I hope you will all like it!
Until then, happy reading!
alkisti xxx

Looks like I'm running late in reading this one.
But this one was a nice chapter. Tremendously funny, Hagrid and Madam Maxime getting married! I always like a little fun from Fred and George.
I think we'll hear from ginny soon.
Anyways don't keep the big surprise for a long time. Post it soon.

Hey the_animagus! (i just posted some feedback for you, check your thread). Yeah, Madam Maxime and Hagrid together, this is going to be fun...! I'm afraid though that we will not be seeing a lot of them in the next chapters, well not until their marriage. As for Ginny, we will see her soon! I promise to post the next chapter in 4-5 days, i think you will like it! But i can't say anything more right now...
Teehee! Anyways, happy reading to all of you guys!
alkisti xxx

That was a great chapter!!! It's so cool that Hagrid and Madame Maxine are getting married and I do hope we hear from Ginny soon!! O and one question who's Natalie??? Will she play a bigger role or is she just a name thrown into the story?? I can't wait until you post more!!!! post soon!!!!

-Kelso

Now I just feel bad. Irresponsible. Yeah. Erm...I'll get that to you tomorrow definitely, along with chapter 5 if I can manage it.

*sigh* Speaking of exams, I think I flunked all of them...and we don't get our results until Monday either so I'm in suspense for another...what is it? four days? Yeah. But anyways, not related to Daylight Dancer at all, so I'll stop my complaining here.

~PhoenixTears the very late and feeling very guilty beta which is the reason why alkista didn't post the chapter update for so long....

PS Two weeks away from VTM forums made me forget all the codes to use when typing a post instead of using those annoying clickable stuff that never seems to load on my computer.... and I had about 20 e-mails in my hotmail inbox too....

Oh no, now i feel guilty too! Sorry PhoenixTears, i didn't mean to make you feel like that! I told you that your exams are your priority of course and by no way, i don't want to be the reason why you may not do well at one of your lessons!

I'm sure you haven't! But it is reasonable feeling like that, i was always nervous when i was sitting for an exam, even if it was Religion or something! I wish you good luck with them!

I don't know how you managed to stay away from your computer, yesterday the lights went out and i was so furious because i could not do anything! I think i'm becoming internet addicted...


Anyways, back on topic!
Kelso 2010 (by the way, you have chosen 2010 because then you will turn 18? Cool haha!), thanks for your feedback! I'm glad you liked the chapter! Yep, Ginny is in chapter 6, if i remember correctly! So, you won't have to wait too long! As for Natalie, i haven't really thought it through, maybe she will have a role in the story! I just used that name because i wanted to add some humour in the story, enlighten it a little bit! But i may make her appear more often... We'll see!

Alright, long post! Happy reading and take care!
alkisti xxx

My computer just crashed right after I posted my last post and I couldn't get onto the Internet for the last two days. I sent alkista the chapter 4 beta, but I don't think that it was really necessary seeing as everyone read it already. I'll just...I guess I'll start on chapter 5 then!

~PhoenixTears

So I just read the four chapters. It is a good story, I really like it. The chapter I enjoyed the most was the third one, I felt like I was going through the same pain as Harry, it was awesome the way you expressed that:

QUOTE

“Do...you...have ANY IDEA HOW MANY TIMES I HAD TO PAY THAT PRICE? Don't you talk to me about death as if it is something natural. You have no idea what death is. YOU didn't have to witness your parents' death. YOU didn't have to see one of your classmates murdered. YOU didn't have to watch your last relative die right in front of your very eyes. YOU didn't have to hear Dumbledore pleading for his life. So don't talk to me about death.”

I just loved this part of the dialogue!!! Keep up the good work!!

Hey mrsshinoda! Thanks for leaving a feedback! It is kind of you! While i was writing that part you mentioned, i actually thought it didn't fit a lot to the whole atmosphere, but then again, we have seen many times Harry yelling at Hermione and Ron lately...It really had me thinking...
Anyways, i hope you will read the next chapters!

PS: I know i promised to post the next chapter last week but i have been waiting for my beta's corrections as i realised that i make huge mistakes and this probably ruins the story...So, sorry for making you wait... I promise it is worth it!

alkisti xxx

I just posted chapter 5, which i sincerely hope you will all like! I also beta-ed chapter 4, since i received PhoenixTears' corrections.
Ah...I'm really excited about the new chapter!
Anyways, happy reading!

alkisti xxx

hey i liked it. it was good. especially cause i'm a He/R shipper. post again soon. i want to know what happens with them, are Harry and Ginny going to get together soon too? i hope so.

Yeah! You posted more!! I loved it! Yeah for Ron and Hermione..I agree lol good day to post it on valentines day. I cant wait to see what else will happen. Great job!

Wow this is great!
for some reason i've only read the first chapter, so then i had to read loads of them to find out what happened
Hermy and Ron - finally together how cute is that? I love it! - blimey hermione went for it by snogging ron - i always thought she was quiet!!!!!!!
Well anyway this is great
write again
.X.

Wow! Yeah. Won won and Hermy kissing in a tree. Ok it wasn't a tree but YEA! You have made me a happy person. Please write more soon. love it!

Yeah! You liked it! Thanks to all of you guys for leaving a feedback, it means a lot to me! Maybe i should put more Hermione and Ron in the story...It seems you want it!


eagleanimagous, i'm glad you liked it! Hm...Ginny and Harry...I'm afraid they have issues to solve so, it is going to be hard for them to get back together. But, eventually, they will! This is not a ship fanfic but i want to add little bits and pieces of love in it. I will try to fix that...

ILoveHarryPotter07, thanks! Ah...it wasn't great job but thanks for saying it anyways! I will update soon i hope. I also hope you will keep reading the story!

amortentia_lover, welcome!!! Hm...i actually had Hermione kissing Ron at the first version but i thought Hermione was nothing like that so I changed it and had Ron kiss her. I think it seems a little bit awkard the whole scene and that's what i wanted to show. It is awkard if you think about it... Well, i hope you will keep reading the story!

GryffindorBabexhott, haha, yes, it was not in a tree but i picture the scene next to the kitchen table which is wooden, so there was a (former) tree around there! I'm glad i made someone happy- my lifetime aspiration! Anyway, thanks for your feedback!


Once again, thank you for leaving a feedback! I promise to post the next chapter as soon as possible. The story will start to change a little bit from now and on, but i don't want to ruin the fun!
Happy reading and take care!

Alkisti xxx

wow girly! i finally found your fanfic! good job! you and dianne make a really good team! lol ron and hermione kissing! great!
i kinda feel bad for harry i mean how can he ever be normal if he's been through so much?
but ok so post again soon!
great job by the way

Hey girl! Oh...it has gone to the bottom since i haven't updated for hm...a while. Dianne is very busy and i don't want to push her, she is volunteering after all! But she is a great beta and i thank her once more for doing the hard work of correcting... I'm really glad you liked it so far! When it comes to Harry, he will never be normal. But why be normal? His life is like that and it is a part of himself which he can't ignore...Poor guy...But he has a bright future ahead! Thank you for leaving a feedback fany_monkey! (BTW, funny nickname! I'm sure Darwin would love that Also, what happened with that guy? This is random but i just remembered! And, i will take a look at your fic as well, i didn't know you posted it!) Okay okay i started talking endlessly again...I will post soon, tomorrow or during the weekend! Thanks again!

Alkisti xxx