Please feedback on my story - The Memory Chest.

At the time of my posting this, I am still having problems with the board, so replies to feedback and updates might be a bit irregular, but I will try to respond to every question or comment as I can. If you spot spelling or other erros, please PM me rather than put it in the feedback, because once I fix it your comments could look silly.

Thanks for taking the time to read my story.

Yay 1st comment!
Wow this is reallly good. Please post again soon. Love the idea of the "oath". Great Story! Keep udating!
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Hello bajab! Just discovered your fanfic and I like it very much indeed! I like your style of writing and also your ideas. I wonder what all the memories will reveal... Keep the good work up!

wow! this is brilliant. i like how you used JKR's ending as your intro and how DD used the idea of the marauders map on the chest. so DD gave harry all the memories. are they DD's memories or the ones that he got from other people? post again soon. this was great

nice long chapter, and action packed. i loved it. post again soon.

Wow that was such a good chapter! please keep writing! Loved the argument - brilliant idea!
Please keep posting
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Sorry, I did not leave a feedback on your second chapter, although I've read it, too - naturally!

That was quite a surprise at the end of chapter 3. Harry working for the ministery. How exactly does he want to do that? I wonder....

As I said in my first feedback: I like your style very much, it is really very smooth, and pleasurable to read! Keep up the brilliant work and post again very soon, please!

Wow, that was heavy! I never thought Harry would engage in politics like that and although it is very uncommon, you've succeded in making it sound quite like Harry!
And who is the person who discovers Harry on the station? Doesn't his cloak cover him entirely? If it does it can only be one person I guess: Mad Eye Moody.

One more thing: Could you perhaps put the link to the feedback thread at the end of every chapter? It is a bit inconveniant if you always have to scroll back to the beginning of the story - although I don't mind too much, as I very much like to give you a feedback!

Hey Bajab,
Nice job! Your sense of humour shines through and you have a nice plot going!
Looking forward to reading more.....
Wackywand

Hurray, link to the feeback thread at the end of the chapter.

So, I was right, it was Moody - but I'm really glad it was not somebody else because I would have hated it for Harry to be in trouble so soon and in addition to everything else.
As Wackywand say, you have a nice plot going on, and I'm looking forward to every new post!

I really enjoyed your story. You write very well. I liked the way your story is unfolding so far. Cant wait for the next chapter

Ha that was brilliant! I loved how he used magic on Dudley - fat twit - was so funny! ! !

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Great update. I loved your recent chapter. I like how you had Harry and Ron compete to see who could be the laziest. That was very funny! I also liked that you had Harry use magic on dudley. that fat git

Your story is excellent! I really enjoyed reading it. I can't wait until you post again. I think you have a real gift for writing!

i like this fic a lot. you have a really good story here. post agsin soon. i cant wait to read more

brilliant. this story is absolutely amazing. i hope Harry goes to the wedding. you need to post more as soon as you can. i want to know what happens. what happened to the chest Dumbledore gave Harry though?

All Right bajab! Good job on Mrs. Black's portrait!
Still wonder why JK left it there.....
Wackyllwand

another excellent chapter. i like how you had that line hinting that Kreacher was still following Malfoy (if i interpreted it right). post again soon. i want to know what happens. this story is really good

Hello bajab! Sorry, I did not leave feedback before! Of course I read your new chapters almost as soon as they were posted and I'll go on checking for your updates, because I absolutely want to know how it goes on.
So, now Harry has 3 houseelves . Might be quite useful. I liked the part with Arthur Weasly coming and talking with Harry - I wonder what Harry is going to do about that... And of course I also want to know why there has been a sudden meeting of the order....

Keep the good work up!

OMG! I just spent nearly a whole 2 hours reading you fic and omg, I LUV IT!!! It is absolutely brilliant. Man, you have a great writing style; its' very unique. And the whloe chest of Dumbledores' memory....wow...igenious....brilliant. lol, I luv it, please please please please please please please please please please please (ok, I'll shutup now) post soon, I really really really wanna read more.

excellent. i think Ron's fear of Apparating is something that would definately happen in the books. everyone is in charater. post again soon. i want to know what happens at the wedding. can't wait to read more.

another excellent chapter. i like this story a lot. the egyptian magic sounded really interesting. post more soon.

I just finished reading through this, I think it is great. The idea of the memory chest is good. I hope Harry finds a pensieve soon, I can't wait to see what all those memories are!
The games Harry and Ron have been playing sound fun. I wish we could play Apparition Tag.
Can't wait for more.

wow really good! i want to know the memories ! ! !
wedding soon then? loved the nude idea - laughing my socks off! ! !
keep writing becuase this is fab !!!!!!!!!
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another great chapter
apparation tag was great! ! ! loved this chapter ... oooh ron adn hermione getting close, harry shouldn't have disrupted them (sorry H/R shipper here)
Well anyway really great chapter and write again soon, can't wait!
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Brilliant chapter. I absolutely luved it. Especially the whole apparation tag thing...very good. But what about the chest full of memeories, do we find out what Dumbledore left for Harry in those memories soon? lol, well I sure hope so. And I like how your kinda showing the 'closeness' of Ron And Hermione, instead of just having them say 'I love you' to each other on the spot. lol, great writing, very descriptive as well. lol, please post soon. I really wanna read more

omg, omg, wow, so much has happened in the last two chaps! lol, ok, i'll start with chap 13, I simply luved this chap, it was brilliant, especially with the whole wedding scenario, i thought that it was wonderfully described. And I'm so glad that Harry & Ginny are on good terms again. lol, I also liked ron and hermiones' role at the wedding...it was very well described. all in all, the chap was great. k...Chap 14. Woah...is all that can be expressed. lol, talk about, speechless. I liked how you reflected on the previous chapters events and also the whole 'locket' thing. I hope they find it real soon, their way too close to just lose it now. And OMG, fred and georges' shop got attacked...NOOOOO!!! omg, please tell me their alright? please? lol, I guess i'll just have to wait. And I don't know if i said this in previous posts, BUT you are one hec of a brilliant writer, bajab (I only wish I could write as well as you). lol, well great work, and please please please be sure to post soon.

What happened. I thought we were going to find the locket.
Please say that the twins are alright! I just can't wait for the next chap.

What happened. I thought we were going to find the locket.
Please say that the twins are alright! I just can't wait for the next chap.

Oh my gosh - where did the locket go?! ?! ?! ?!?
Oh no poor twins - i hope they're ok
loved all the battles with tonks, lupin etc. sounds like great fun
please write again soon! this is great!
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No pensive yet, to have a look at the memories, the locket not to be found and the twins injured! What happened? I'm in an uproar!

You're writting is very good indeed and you are really putting up tension. I don't like this because I want to know everything right now , but of course it is a very good method. Please post again very soon!!!

haha, YAY! the twins are alright, thank the good lord. AND omg, that portal door, was simply amazing, brilliant in fact! I Luved this chap!!! it was excellent, and I especially like the whole 'fred's favourite pinky thing'. haha, that was funny mmm...so Harry is gonna meet dung, eh? should be interesting to read...omg, wht if dung has a penseive???? lol, I guess i'll just have to wait and find out. lol, once again, brilliant chapter, and I hope you post ASAP

so how long till the next chapter i cant wait to read it

Absoultely Superb I can't wait till the next chapter or you finnish your story!!! I loved it , the fan fic kept me interested all the way long . Please write more soon. THIS IS YOUR BEST FIC YET Sincerley,
Krisiebug88

That totally rocked
So he has the locket back who would have thought - had DD just asked Aberforth...well lets not get into that
That was brilliant! Can't wait for more ! Please write soon ! ! ! !
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Hey I just read your last update, Great Great Great is all I have to say . To leave a cliffighanger like that is just brillant . I love this fic its your best ever or so far Keep on writing . I'm so interested . good job ,
Krisie

Your fic is absolutely brilliant. Do we find out who the persuers were by any chance?

You have a gift for writing, i am absolutely loving it. keep up the good work

~ashes

Oh wow ! That was one of the best chapters yet!
Poor Harry, he must have be horrified to find himself back there ! Who were the attackers? Are we going to find out?!
That was brilliant! You really are a great writer, please post again soon. I can't wait!!!!
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im just checking my signature

Please write more soon I want to know if he sees the memory and what does he see when he sees it . Please writie more I love this fanfic,
Krisiebug88
p.s Hoot hoot horay on your fic

this story is getting very good i cant wait for the next chapter

Hi bajab,
I must admit... you got me! I thought for sure Harry would take Mrs. Weasleys'
ceramic bowl and turn it into a pensieve..... but I never expected Harry to be stupid
enough to shove anothere persons memory, ie Dumbledore's, into his own head.
Definitely made interesting reading. Keep up the good work!
Wackywand

THe fic chapter you just wrote was Brilliant I loved it keep writing , this fanfic is getting so interesting I hope it never ends or at least to book 7, just kidding, keep on writing i reallly enjoyed it . I wonder if hermoine makes the potion. I hope so because it so unlike her . Be sure to write soon,
Krisiebug88

Ha! i loved Harry winding Ron up saying maybe she can't halp! haha !
Ohh what's going to happen next?!?!?!
I loved that chapter - you ar a really great writer! Please write soon!
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Hey. Sorry I haven't posted here in a while. Those were excellent chapters. Here is my feedback for each one.

Chapter 13: I like the wedding a lot. Ginny seeing through Harry’s disguise was perfect. I hope he gets back together with her.

Chapter 14: I like Harry’s whole ‘work-out room.’ Especially the wrestling ring idea, it was brilliant .

Chapter 15: I like the way the twins protected their store. Very smart, I had really never thought of that before.

Chapter 16: Good they have the locket. I see Hermione and Ron are together. That was pretty funny (the "Wish I had found that was a way of stopping you a bit earlier" line)

Chapter 17: I like how you brought the cave back into the story. Is Harry ever going to find a Pensieve?

Chapter 18: I gues Ron and Hermione were having some fun. I wonder what’ll happen when Harry wakes up. Does he know the spell or not?

Chapter 19: Too bad Harry doesn't know the spell. Harry’s struggle with how he felt about killing people was really in character

Chapter 20: It seems like Sirius' father had an 'interesting' personality. I wonder why Hermione was reading the book with the Occlumency ritual in it.

Post again soon. I want to read more

Hey. excellent chapter. really great. Umbridge is so stupid. i bet Voldemort was the one giving her instructions. if she wasn't dead (which i am not complaining about) she should be thrown in Azkaban. post again soon. i can't wait to see what happens next.

THanks for writng anther chapter . You fanfic is really good. Love your fanfics ,
Krisiebug88

THanks for writng another chapter . You fanfic is really good. Love your fanfics ,
Krisiebug88

That was great - haha umbridge is dead! ( sorry i hate her )
his hogwarts letter...i wonder what he'll do now...
That was really good, well done! post soon!
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Hey.
Amazing chapter. How did anyone find out where they were going to be? Harry must have felt terrible at the graves. It's bad enough to go their with memories. I can't imagine going their with only the memory of your mother screaming and no other memories. This fic is really good. Post again soon.

Oh no, lupin had destroy James' grave. I don't know why but that made me feel horrid. Poor JAmes - even if he is dead.
Oh my gosh dementors! inferi! ahhh !
that was a startling chapter! pleaaseee post soon!!!
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This was another great chapter. You are a really good writer. I wonder what Voldemort was up to. Hopefully Winky and Dobby can fix up the house at Godric's Hollow. Post again soon. I can't wait to read more.

sorry I haven't left feedback in a while, but i've still been keeping up. well, i'm going to make this very brief, cause if I had to go throughtand comment on each chapter...i'd be here all night omg, brilliant few or more chaps there. and I say that with all my heart. and omg...umbridge...dead (I dunno, whether I should be feeling happy or sad?)...and mmm...so percy's finally realising the importance of family, eh? and ron and hermione...mmm...they had a bit of a blow at each other...but I guess I can understand why ron feels like that, and why hermione reacts to him in that way. ANd haha, Harry became head boy; again I don't know what to feel-happy or guilty?. lol, this has to be one of the best fics I have ever read!!!...and I mean it. (tell me your secret) lol, please please please post soon, I hope to read more!

that chapter is awesome really good length i cant believe how much ginny and the others have created in the time that they have had also how harry noticed the bench before hermione and ron and he was right it was a portkey

Please post again soon i cant wait for the next chapter this story is so good

Thanks for all your great feedback guys. I appreciate it.

One thing I don't think came across clearly was that there are a lot of people in the new D.A., and not all of them are students or recent graduates. Most of the things they have done were organised by the group, but it doesn't mean (for instance) that Ginny can create portkeys or Cho make the target dummies.

Hope that helps keep it a bit more 'canon'.