Sorry i didn't feedback on the last chapter Stef!
Ok firstly, Carmel is very cute and all, but she's hurting Lily. meanie. I wonder, when push comes to shove. Who James'd choose...hmm
Liked her own spell though, pretty cool Even if she is breaking Lily and James further apart... ( although they were acting almost like friends again in this chap )
Sirius used the L word bless him, cutie !
Lucius is *shudders* evil... and a pig. ugh.

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Stef,Stef,Stef!You are great! Lucious and Severus are alike after all!I can't belive they both love Lily!Is "Anything" your favorite song?I love it!Are you going to make Snape hurt Malfroy?I hope he does.

oh i'm sooooo sorry JSB 073 lol i've been all over the place and i didn't see your post! sooo yay! new readers are always welcomed! oh you and AJ are sort of figuring out what i have planned! lol so yeah snape loves lily also! she is very popular with the slytherins lol carmel is a very sweet girl! it's a shame! *sigh* sooo thanks for reading!

amortentia_lover : soph lily is hurting herself! she is being stubborn and hard-headed, oh don't worry lily and james will be together but a lot of drama is going to start so hahahaha own spells rock! i know! i love sirius! lol yup he's a pig thanks for reading soph!

snaperules : hahah tori i'm glad you noticed they are similar! example lucius hits on narcissa and snape hits on bella lol so they are more a like than anyone thought! hahaha i was listening to that song when i was writing so i thought it'd be good because of the lyrics and plus i love the song! hahahah well lets just say snape won't be thrilled to know that malfoy hurt lily! lol thanks for reading tori!

aww. that was a cute chapter! carmel andjames are cute together, but i just wish lily will pluck up the courage to confess her love for james. she has to stop being a fn-sucker when it comes to love! haha. but i can't believe lucius hit carmel, then lily! that's horrid. i hate getting hit by guys because they're strong... well i've only been hit by one, and he's never meant it on purpose to hurt me, but it still does. i wonder what james surprise is! and sirius using the L word.. that is oh my goodness amazing. can't wait for more. post soon!

please write more kuz i spent like four hour reading it and i loved it! (ya sure im a slow reader) it was soo good so please write more soon!

JSB 073: it's always good to see the word amazing being used so i really hope you puched the jerk you hit you! no guy nbo matter who they are has a right to hit a girl! no one! so i'm glad you liked! thanks for reading

icesk8erqueen8: oh i'm sorry lol it's a long story isn't it? well i'm sooo glad you liked! it's always good to have new readers!

really... em *cough cough* cheesy hahaha just playing, it was a nice chapter, but i still say love sucks, it really does so... you know what i think about valentines day, i suppose that's where you got it from ok whatever, oo yeah "anything" very cliche hahaha

peace

your annoying little bro and love hating child

Andy

I hate love. but you say you are not romantic, i seriously had the Chills. I was like OH HOW CUTE!!!!!!! AWWWWWWW!!!!!! So ya poor Lily, All tho i cant wait to see what happens between james and Carmel. Ha ha that is Bren's moms name and she is short. lol BAD MEMORY! lol OK good job once again ~Kaili~

This is a really good fan fic. I like how you mix adventure with romance.



Watch your sentence structure though

Sorry couldn't resist. I'm a nerd, I know.

cruciatus_andy: you'd know about chessy huh andy? you like the song anyway do shut up!

FredsSweetie14: were they good or bad chills? hahahaha well i'm glad you enjoyed and emm yeah love sucks!

gryffindorgirlie: well thanks! i try not to only have mushiness but some action in there! emm will you explain the whole sentence structure... i'm abit ignorant! it's ok! i always love to see what i could do better!


ok chapter is up! hope you liked!

Okay Stef, WHEN are they going to get together?! you know i only ship Lily/James...

Peter is *shudders* the most pathetic, stupid, gross, disgusting wip of a boy..ever. he joined the Death eaters because James was going out with Carmel? come one...

And then he was hitting on Carmel...ughh the gross little dweeb ughhh

I liked how the bracelet was only green when lily was in the room, James still loves her YESSSSSSS ! *dances round* knew it...*sticks out tongue*
okay after that mature reaction...
Anyway, great post and i can't wait for more (threatens Stef to post soon), i have my trusty tea pot (with a dent) and i'm not afraid to use it!
Great stuff
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PETER IS AN OFFICAL DUNG BRAIN...filthy little pile of scum!!! Pathetic little wimp! *shudder* I feel so sorry for carmel...
sorry, just needed to get that out of my system...all better, now...
HOLLY CATS! what a post...darn; stupid lucius' rich-bum dad! I have the right mind to punch the living pulp out of him!....
Brilliant post Stef, I absolutely loved it (in a weird way)
omg, james is the sweetest thing on the planet (after chocolate & sirius off course!)...the whole guitar/braclet thing was very cute!
ooooh! so james still has feelings for lily, eh? should be interesting to read how james & carmel break up! even though I love James/Lily...James/Carmel is just sooo adorable & charming...
wonderful post! and I really hope that you post soon!

amortentia_lover: hahahaha very mature soph when are you going to learn from me to be mature? *snorts* hahaha i know that you love J/L but Carmel is important to the story! she's making James ready to be with Lily! so emm yeah james does still love lils but you are going to have to wait just like everyone else don't threaten me with that pot tea lady! hahahaha it has one dent already huh? have you hit any crazy ladies lately? hahaha remember shh ok i will post soon i promise! thanks for reading!

ChOco: it's always so funny to read your rants about how much you hate the bad guys of the story! lol next chapter you will be fuming so i'd save up some insults for next chapter! james is sweet but i still like sirius better i don't know why... ok fine i like them the same! oh jay you really don't want to know how james and carmel are going to end... thanks for reading!

*raises eyebrows in a dangerous manner*...what are brewing stefany...collecting mental insults in mind...

you just called me stefany! *pouts* you and sam are the same! calling me stefany when you want me to do something!
well sorry jay i can't tell you! it wouldn't be a surprise if i told you what i was brewing up! *cackle*

Oh Stef this was brilliant! It was so romantic it broke my heart...
I don't care what people say but i like Shorty and James! They seem so nice together!
As for Pettigrew, he is gross. Yeah, he is a pathetic loser gross. A horrible pig not worth living. Arg...he is a scam.

That was a really great post Stef! James is so romantic with the whole candle-lit present exchange thing .....But I wish it was Lily he was with and not Carmel... I think she's sweet and everything but I'm like Soph I'm a J/L shipper and I don't like to see him with other girls!! Anyway that was a great post!! Post again soon!!


-Kelsea

awwww. carmel and james are so cute, but i really want lily and james to get together! i have a bad feeling that snape is going to be the one who breaks up carmel and james.... that'd hurt them so much, and then lily can confess.

OH please hurry! I want James and Lily together now. (I should talk!) Carmel is getting the hints but she wont believe it. Gio Peter and bad Peter. He kissed the girl of his dreams but he has gone to the dark side. Please put Lily and James together. Its hurting me.

Post soon!
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Oooh.. Im so glad James still has feelings for Lily!I am a total J/L ship lover even though i do think Carmel and him is cute i just cant wait to read the breakup even though I bet it will end in a sad way like Snape and that idiot *cough cough* Peter will kill or do something that will damage Carmel forever and then Lily will be there for James. Your a great writer and i cant wait to read more!
Kaley

alkisti: yeah james is such a sweetie! lol i want one like that! hey i'm sorry i didn't keep my promise! i had to do it! hahah the promise of not killing anyone! well you could curse at Peter now well i'm glad you liked the chapter!

Kelso2010: well kelso james and lily will be together very very soon! lol i promise! Carmel was needed in the story but not anymore! thanks for reading!

JSB 073: you were right! it was snape! snape is an evil git from hell! so yeah there is nothing stopping lily and james anymore! well actually there is still something but emm that will be fixed soon enough! thanks for reading!

GryffindorBabexhott: well i hope you don't like peter anymore! he went all othelo on Carmel! lol well emmm yeah they are gonna be together soon! i promise lizzie! no more hurting! thanks for reading!

DD's-man-through-and-through: yay new reader! wow and one who saw where i was going with the story! wow kaley! you are smart! yup it happened just like you said! thanks for reading!

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!! *screams until voice becomes hoarse*... ...carmel...dead?...ARGH! bloody ****ing Snape/Peter/Voldemort....and urgh...I can't believe peter had the bloody nerve to attend the funeral...*rambles heatedly...*
wahhhh....why did you have to kill her off stef...why...
*sigh*...I guess I can understand why you did it...but still...
*tear* that song was so sweet......
post soon stef...if james/carmel can't be together...at least don't sabotage lily/james...*glares daggers at stef*...
hope you update real soon!
sorry about my confusing post...but listening to depressing songs & reading sad chapters...is not a good combo with me...

Stef! I think i specifically said in my last PM - " DON'T HURT JAMES " - and what do you do... you kill off his girlfriend. I mean, i know Carmel is stopping James and Lily being together, but you didn't have to kill her! Why couldn't she just give James the letter, and then they could break up?! Stef you're evil, evil! She's dead! *sobs* but she was so sweet! James had better go kill those Slytherins *gives teapot* and yes it's dented
Well it was a very sweet chapter, even if you did commit fictional murder! grrr
Yeah so umm good evil stuff, haha, well done! Post soon ( or i'll come after you with the teapot) !
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Aww. That was so sad but i really liked it. it made me hate that git Pettigrew ever more! I love the letter that Carmel wrote to James you could see she really cared for him if she would have lived that would have been really hard to go with what she said. James song was really cute! I love this chapter. Kee them coming!
Kaley

i don't think i ever posted feedback to this so well this is an amazing fanfiction and i love it. i love the idea james and rebecca came up with. my favorite part i think is when lily was yelling at becca and telling her she did like james that was pricless. i know that this happened a while back but still. and i gotta tell you i really thought snape was lily's secret admirer and i was shocked to find out that it was malfoy sending her those letters. who knew he was s o romantic? eww*makes face* i just grosed myself out . i feel so bad for rebecca because her parents died and she never knew them. but also i'm so happy for her because she is with sirius. and i have to say i am(or was ) happy for james and carmel. i really think he loved her. and when she died i felt so bad for him my eyes teared up. i hate snape and pettigrew and voldemort and malfoy and everybody evil.oh yeah that joke they played on malfoy. that was amazing.i love the valentines day gifts all of them. if you kill off any more girlfriends.. i won't finish that i love carmels braclet almost like a mood braclet.before i forget i love dotty she is so sweet and i love all their parents they are so nice. now for more recent issues. how could you kill carmel.i am really sad but in a way i'm relived. let me explain so yeah i'm sad she died i mean who wouldn't be? and i am so sad for james and how he held on to her it was heartbreaking. ok now i''m relived because she died with someone loving her and she loving him and she didn't have to live through seeing james dating lily.i hope that makes sence. and i agree with what she said that if you love someone you want them to be happy even though it makes you unhappy. once again this is an amazing fanfic and update soon.
love ya
~myasar

ChOco: *give cough drop* don't yell jay you'll hurt yourself well everyone wnated james and carmel to break up so i did it in a dramatic way that wouldn't hurt carmel! *runs away and hide behind sexy dark haired wozard* i won't sabbotage Lily and James relationship, once they are together it's going to be really hard to break them apart yeah that song is one of my favorites, sorry about the sad chapter! thanks for reading!

amortentia_lover: you keep threatening me with the tea pot that i don't think i'll ever be able to drink tea again i didn't hurt james physically you never said i couldn't hurt him in another way! i could bare to think of Carmel seeing Lily and James together! it would be too sad! so yeah i killed her ha talk about sad! oh don't worry James will want revenge! you'll see what he does! *take tea pot and hands it to james* thanks for reading and i'm glad you enjoyed the chapter!

DD's-man-through-and-through: yay kaley you understand what i mean! i killed her off to spare her pain so yeah James is heart broken but he will slowly get over it! i hate stupid evil Wormtail too! argh git! anywho thanks so much for reading

Pheonixgirl: i'm so glad you liked! it was amusing to see the whole fanfic all summed up in yoiur post yeah i like to throw in a few curve balls like the malfoy thing and ohhh i love Dotty too! she will have a bigger part soon hahaha you can ask sophie to borrow her seeing as she said Dotty was hers yeah i love sirius and james! they are both so romantic! ok i killed carmel because it had to be done! i get your point and i'm glad you understand. so thank you so much for reading and your feeback is always welcomed

That was a good chapter ..... but I have to admit that was really very very sad!!! I liked Carmel she was a sweet girl... and what's stupid is that Wormtail loved her and he killed her stupid slimeball!! Grrr!! poor James I feel really bad for him he's heart broken again!!! That letter that she wrote him before she died was really sweet and hopefully he can get some comfort from it!! That song was also really sweet and I hope you post again soon!!

-Kelsea

I cant wait for your next post! I want to see the revenge James gives them. But does he find out that Peter was behind It? Well I guess i'll find out soon enough. I am so addicted to this site now every time i get home i check to see if any of the fics i am reading have a new post! I am a terrible writer so its fun to read things like these all the ones i have read have been amazing yours is one of my favorites!
Kaley

Peter Pettigrew is officially the foulest, slimiest, git on the face of the earth! How could he go to the funeral looking all depressed after what he did?! I wish the Marauders (i don't consider him one) could find out. That would make my day. This chapter was very well written. Excellent job, Stef.
post again soon.

aww! i was seriously about to cry. i was | | this close to tears. that's so sad how she risked her life, and how she loves james. even though she knows he loves lily and lily loves james. but the don't really know it. i'm sooo sad. carmel was a sweet girl. no one deserves to die. beautifully written.

Oh no Stef...no no no... I can't accept that Carmel is dead. Why did she have to die? Why do the good ones always leave first? It is not fair...
Now i don't care if James and Lily will be together but i hope that scam that pig will die, i hate him. I hate him, what an ****. Ah
I am so sad...

aaw that chapter was so sad
peter is unbelievably stupid! he killed (or assisted to kill) the girl he loves! HOW THICK CAN HE GET!!!
poor James...he's so upset. I hope lily comes to her senses soon - i can't stand much more of this sadness...
really well written - well done!!

nads

Kelso2010: yeah peter is a pig! and i also hate him! i can't kill him off i'll leave that to jk so yeah james will find a lot of comfort in the letter, and well in his friends (except for peter) thanks for reading:D

DD's-man-through-and-through: awww kaley you're making me blush! nope james doesn't find out peter is behind it but i'll let you in on a secret, this is the reason why James, and lily join DD and the order! don't worry i'm an addict also! thanks for posting!

eagleanimagous: well i'm glad you feel that way AJ! would it make you feel better if the marauders pull a prank of the syltherins and peter just happens to be there? that could be arranged! i'll work on it! thanks for reading?

JSB 073: awww don't cry! i was that close to tears when i wrote it! carmel showed what true love really is, i don't know much about love but i figured a person who really loves another would give their life for them! yeah no one that nice deserves to die but well it happens *sigh* thanks for reading!

alkisti: sorry girl! it was the mood and plus if i let carmel live she would be in a lot of pain! to see lily and james together would have broken her heart! i can't kill him off but i can make something bad happen to them! would that make you feel better? don't be sad! well i'll work on the whole revenge thing! i promise! thanks for posting

miss granger: well peter is really think! i sorta got the idea of him killing her from shakespeare and his story of othelo(sp?) anywho lily will come to her sences and well she'll try to comfort james! i'm sorry nads i didn't mean to make ya sad! thanks for reading!

Very cute. I know you are not talking to me right now. but I think it was very cute well the Valentines braceltett one. I seriously started crying when I read when Carmel died and that song was perfect. I love it. Forever very good song. James the way you make him so loving he just sounds like the perfect guy. Peter is horrible and then he still had the nerve to cry when he wanted her to die. What a loser. I am listening to 'Forever" for like the 5th time now. So once again keep up the good work.

Kaili

Ok. I thought I posted n the new chapter but I didn't. Now.
PETER THAT IS! I'M GOINGT O KILL YOU MYSELF! *walks out the door with a gun*
And. Congrats. You killed Carmel just when I finally like her. Good going!

The song is brilliant~ I now have it on my iPod because it is so sad. The song reminds me of when my friends Uncle died, my grandma died and my friend Liz died of disease. I miss them so much! And poor Carmel. And oh that was beautiful on how Carmel told Lily that he never stopped loving her.

I hope Lily comforts James because this is going to be hard on him.
I'M very sad. This was sad. Hopefully this will become happy again. This is has now taken the role of my fav J/L fic on VTM. Post soon!

And I think I just wrote the longest reply in the history of my posts!

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ok stef my respects, this time you did an amazing job, except the horrible grammer gosh!, you really did get to me, ididn't cry cause you know i only cry in rare cases, but this time you did get to me great going there.

Andy

FredsSweetie14: emmm yeah the bracelet idea i got from a past experiance so yea i love bracelets. james is my idea of a perfect guy, so yeah it was sweet! i'm glad you liked it, thanks for reading

GryffindorBabexhott: noooo lizzie don't commite murder! let jk take care of him! sorry! i thought you didn't like her so i was like ok i could kill naaa it really did hurt me to kill her off but i think it was for the best. yeah the other day at work i heard it and i was like OMG this is perfect! the first time i heard the song i did tear up a little thinking of certain people who aren't with me anymore... trust me lily will comfort james tho they won't be together just yet, other things have to happen first but they will be together soon! lily knows james loves her and james knows lily loves him so it won't take long now! *jumps up and down* you have totally made my day lizzie! thanks so much for your comments! thanks for reading!

cruciatus_andy: yay! andy respects me! oh andy get over the grammer! geeze! well i'm glad i did get to you! i know how hard it is to achieve that so yay! thanks andy it means a lot to me!

i'm working on the next chapter so it should be up tomorrow or monday

I hate you.You are evil.You better make what you told me good.
I hate you.

snaperules: i hope you really don't mean that! next chapter will make you happy, i had to work up to it tori! but next chapter will be all for you!


so new chapters up! hope you enjoy

I miss Carmel! and those chapters was so sad. But i couldnt help but laugh as I read about how James yelled at DD. It reminded me about Harry after Sirius' death sad sad I would like to know what Lucius is up to I want all of those Slytherins to DIE! along with Peter of course. Post soon

I hate Lucuis, the slimy git. He's such abusive jerk of a control freak

*gasps* i would swear loudly at this point, but it's not allowed on this site...so i'll restrain myself... but still...
Lucius is going to ...*voice cracks*... kill Lily?! *sobs* he better not. go get him James.
and James had better get revenge
And James and Lily love each other ohhh happiness, finally... *rolls eyes* they took their time about it !!!
Great chapter Stef, hopefully you'll post soon. ( next week does not count as soon, i want it now! haha ) can't wait for more.
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I still feel sad, but sort of melacholic you know. I really miss Carmel, she was such a great person... Oh man, Stef you will really have me crying. Poor girl, all the good ones pay for our mistakes...
Update soon!

Hey! That was really cute at the end where they both thought if the other loved them! I cant wait for them to get together. I'm glad that he is over Carmel now, because now he wont be moping around the castle.Hehe. I liked her last entry in her diary and how he smelled sunflowers! Oh and thats good, the next chapter will be happy!
I'll hold you to that!! Jk jk.
Kaley
PS Post SOON!

ok, brace yourself...
LUCIUS IS A DARN-RIGHT GENUINE BUM!!!!
you know that was pure torture making me read about carmel's death....god, I literally wanted to sob & give james a big hug!....wahhhh.... you know how much I like her....
ok. ok...moving on....haha, the whole chapter felt like I was reading this scene from OoTP, it was so action-packed! I luved it!
post soon stef & kill Lucius (or peter...I am not picky)....
p.s ooooh....yay, I get more chocolate!

Heyy Stef! Sorry I haven't left feedback in a while, I was so behind on my chapters when I got back that I didn't have time to leave feedback for them. But the last few chapters were amazing. You made me cry! A few times actually. Poor Carmel. What is Lucius gonna do?? Uh-oh! I don't like the sound of it, whatever it is...Once again, amazing chapters, please post again soon!

happy-potter: yeah the whole scene with DD made me think of harry to so i guess i based myself on that! well it is really sad but james will get over it soon thank you so much for posting and emm i can't kill them off, i'll leave that to JK

alexander: i hate him too! i hate all guys that are like that! so thank you for reading! it's always good to have new readers!

amortentia_lover: potty mouth! lol well he isn't going to kill her but he will try such crazy people huh? well don't worry James will get revenge and it's going to be sweet! hahaah all good things take time dea! thanks for posting sophie

alkisti: don't cry! i don't want you to cry! it will be happy i promise! those chapters were written when i was mad! so i'll try to write them happy so they are happy! and it is true others pay for our mistakes! thanks so much for reading



DD's-man-through-and-through: ha sorry kaley not so happy the next chapter but there is some flirting between James and lily so next chapter will be happy i promise thanks for reading! i'm glad you liked it!

ChOco: hahahaha your insults are always so funny jay! i know you liked carmel! i liked carmel too! (hahaha fictional suicide!) so yeah i can't kill them but i will have them get hurt! yeah you get more chocolate *hands big bag of hellven chocolate and cute green eyed wizard along with it* thank you again jay! you rock!

Weasly_Girly_83: don't cry krisitna! well malfoy was up to no good but he will pay for what he did! jerk! *borrows sophie's tea pot* thanks so much for reading kristina

new chapter's up

Oh My God! Stef! Is Lily okay?? Wait, hold on, rewind, Snape saved Lily?? Wow, did not see that one coming. Ew, Snape and Bellatrix snogging. It's gonna take me hours to get that image out of my head! lol. Great chapter, please post soon!

P.s.
Yes, you are a dork. lol. But that's why we love you.

Weasly_Girly_83: well i can't tell you just how much damage it did to lily but i can tell you that james will be so mad! lol i know i almost puked! yes snape saved lily because he loves her! hahaha everyone loves dorks! excpet for mean jocks and cheerleaders! thanks for reading kristina!

oh, lovely way of capturing the suspense stef....and yes you are a dork!
ok, now to the actual chapter...WTF!!! Snape...Lily... god, it's amazing how he saves her now, yet turns in after the prophecy...and *gag*...Snape & Bellla...(i'm getting a horrible mental image)...
wahhh...ok, stef this is your official list of "things to do"...
-Kill Lucius
-Kill Bella
-Kill Peter
-Give me more chocolate!
Post soon stef & bring lily back to life.