ok so here is the is the feedback thread for my fic! ok so hopefully you can give me an honest opinion and any constructive criticism is welcome!

Hey great story I like it!! I especially like the part when James is like " She wants me" lol that was funny !! Anyway I hope you post again soon!! Can't wait!!

-Kelso

I loved the new chapter! Sorry I haven't reviewed yet. KLily Evans smiling at James Potter? Say it isn't so LOL. I love the story. It is very interesting. Nice job james! That was a good idea hexing that - that - well I don't think saying creature covers it. Please post more soon.

hey i liked this chapter. it was excellent. post more soon. i know Lily likes James. keep up the good work. can't wait to read more

I really like it so far Stef! Hahaha I like when James is all like "I got her right where I want her!" I wonder where that is! lol. Anyways It's really good and I can't wait for more!
~Erin

Hey i can only call her stef hahaha just messin
emm sure it's good but you know as your brother i tend to be a little more critical on youre writing but you're critical on mine too so we're at hand
it's good and don't start asking good not excellent because you know what my answer will be.

yay!...update...lol, aniwayz, great chap, and I liked the whole werewolf, stag, dog, rat scenario. It was great! and...oooh...lily's smiling at james, lol, luved that ending! (very intriguing ) aniwayz, hope you post soon, I'd luv to read more!

that was brill!
haha - go james for hexing snape !
I hope Lily starts to like James he spilled his milk ! how embarrasing!
i love this fan fic! keep writing!
.X.

Wow! I really like this fic so far! Great job! I though that them getting a detention 20 minutes into the train ride was pretty funny but definantly them. Can't wait for your next update!

Hey hey hey! New post! Awesome! It was great. Am I getting the feeling that Rebecca wants James? I have a feeling thats why she suggested the 'make her jealous' idea. But Im just guessin! Great post! Can't wait for more!

P.S. -> I posted a new chapter in Last Chnace at Love

that chapter was really good i hope that james gets better around lily hope you post another chapter soon

hey. great chapter. i like the ending where Sirius is getting ready to pull his prank on Snape. i bet that's how James gets Lily, because he saves Snape or maybe he and Rebecca go out to get Lily jealous, but that's just me. post again soon. i want to know what happens

sure right
i liked it, it's cool nooo noo better yet it's super cool no ultra cool
ok i just said that becaus i wanted to use the icon
just messin
it's good yeah emm cough cough...
hehe anywho yeah it's good hahaha how many times have i said it? oo no written it emmm ok whatever
it's excellent (i upgraded you to excellent instead of good )
ok i'm gone

p.s. if you ask me again if it's excellent not wonderful emm i'll eeemake you wash the bathroom tomorrow ..... right__

hehe, lol, luved the chap. And I liked how u managed to put that whole 'Snape used to like Lily theory' in this fic. lol, It was great...and omg, James is gonna blow when he finds out that sirius told snape....he does, doen't he? lol, aniwayz, you gotta post soon. please.

Ha I love it so far! Very suspensful Fany, nice! i just finished yur first entry! Very excellent work if I might say! Keep adding to it! LOL! oing to keep reading ~Kaili~

I finished it! Oh wow you are a talented writer i cant wait to see what happens next! Wow I hope you add more soon!

OOOHH, this is gonna backfire! This is gonna backfire big time! You never ever pretend to date somebody to make another person jelous! Ohh, post again soon! I wanna see how mad Sirius and Lily get at them!!! Ohh, I've got a feeling about this!!!

This is going to back fire! Lily won't talk to Rebecca. Sirius won't look at James. Shesh. This is going to be ugly. I've seen it happen. It an't so pretty afterwards. What if Lily and Rebecca never become friends again? Oh No! Please post more soon! And Sirius you have the biggest mouth ever!

i knew it. James and Rebecca do go out. i hope it works. GryffindorBabexhott is right. i bet Sirius gets really mad, and i bet Lily gets even madder. post again soon. i can't wait to read more

I finally got the cnahce to (wow I can't type today!) sit down and read what more you wrote and it was really really good! I loved it! Two thumbs WAY up! There you go it's the two thumbs up for your story!

Any ways I can't wait for moer (What is wrong with my fingers today?!?!) So update soon!

jeeze! talk about a love square sweet you know when the people form a square and then ... well... ok i understand myself so don't bother on trying to understand the way my mind thinks
it's not going to backfie, it's brilliant!

ok peace!

ps it's excellent not fabulous (you haven't reached the supreme level, suprise me stef, suprise me!)

oh thank you all for your feedback! lol i like to read your opinion! so yeah james and becca are a bit silly and maybe it'll backfire maybe it wouldn't lol i don't know yet
so thanks for posting!

haha! lol, brilliant chapter stef, haha, (so; i am now gonna ask, what everyones' been thinking) DOES it backfire??? And omg, I can only wonder what lily & sirius' reactions will be. lol, i guess i'll just have to wait and find out. And lol, I luved how you made Sirius slip everything out, while pretending to be clumsy. haha, so i'm guessing that snape goes out and about and yea...gets himself into yet, another sticky situation. lol, please please please please please please please please please please please please please (ok, I'll shutup) post soon!

LOL excellent chapter i love it when sirius or james hex snape he deserves it so much i wounder what lily and sirius will do when the find out that james and Rebbecca are going out hope you post the next chapter soon i cant wait to read what happens

haha, Lily and sirius are jealous. haha, its' working, alright. lol, great chap. I luved it, especially the whole lily & sirius talking to themselves thing; that was funny. So...I wonder if james and bec can keep this up, without tripping over. or...omg, what if lily and sirius pretend to go out with each other? lol, hope you post really soon, this is going great!!!

Great Chapter! Please Please Please post soon! I wanna see if it backfires!

NEW CHAPTER! YEAH! oK. So james and Beccas plans are working. Why do I have a bad feeling that this is going to get evry ugly? This is soo gonna backfrie. Please post more soon!

hey. great chapter. James and Rebecca's plan is working but their friends are definately going to give them the cold shoulder... or maybe they really start to like eachother that would be bad. post again soon. i can't wait to see what happens

haha, lol!!! brillant chap, omg I LUVED IT!!! yay, so its' working then; lily and sirius are both getting jealous. haha, and lol, I luved that bit where snape was like 'are you actucally showing concern for me, bella?' poor james, I hope his scratches go away soon haha, and ooooooh, Lily Evans visited James Potter in the hospital wing???? mmmm...should be interesting to see how long this charade can go on. lol,hope you post soon stef, lol, I'd luv to read more!

Ok so their plan is seriously gonnabackfire, but it's quite clever!!!
Aww Lily visited James cute cute cute!!!! He must be really happy! I bet he'll ruin it now, ( probably with Becca actually ).
Please write soon i can't wait!!!
.X.

Awwww...Lily came to visit James in the hospital. That's so sweet! And Lily and Sirius are definitley getting mad at James and Becca, the plan is going to backfire, I just know it. That sort of thing never works. This last chapter was really really good. Please post again soon.

Sirius was so stupid. I know this will back fire. Awww Lily went to visit James. And she was worried. How sweet! Sirius and Lily are definitly getting mad at Becca and James. Post soon!

hahaha! That was great I really liked it. Hmmm.. so far it appears that thier plan is working. Both Lily and Sirius are getting jealous. I still think it'd be funny if it backfires! Just so you know! Oh yeah and that was soooo sweet how Lily came ot visit James! SO sweet! Any ways I can't wait for more!

Lily was worried about James. the plan is working! haha. except Lily is getting mad at Rebecca and Sirius is getting mad at James. well at least we know Sirius doesn't want James dead, he did rescue him from Moony. post again soon. i want to read more.

emmm right yeah it was cool, i really liked the part where you used my phrase

over all it's ok

but it's not wonderful hasn't reached that point yet.

ok gotta go

ps don't hit me please

how sweet lily went a seen james while he was in the hospital wing I wish james never knew about snape going to see moony that way sanpe would be gone harry would still have his parents

Anyway hope you post again soon cant wait for the next chapter

hey.
great chapter. i like Lily's mom and how she just tells Rebecca to keep the plan going for a little bit. haha. hopefully James, Sirius, Lily, and Rebecca chill over the summer. that way James and Lily could get together and Sirius and Rebecca get together.

Heyy! Great chapter! Really interesting with Petunia though...I've never actually seen it done where Petunia likes Lily. Can't wait to see where you go with that one! However, I have to disagree with Lily's mom...I've seen people try this before...and it generally backfires...I don't see it ending well! But it's your fic...so I'm just gonna shut up now! Post again soon!

thanks guys for your feedback
so yeah i do have a point with the whole petunia thing
and well Weasly_Girly_83 lilys mom knows her the best maybe she knows it's going to backfire and wants that to happen so that her daughter would wake up i don't know lol it is my fic and i really don't know what's going to happen so thanks again for reading!

Very nice. This must kill Rebecca. Lilys crying over James and she cant admit she like him. I hope James and Lily get together soon! Im surprised that Lily and Petunia get along so wll. I thought Petunia thought Lily was a 'freak'. Oh weel. Post again soon!

haha. great chap stef...oooh...Lily is mad...and omg, she cried!!!!.... haha, and I luved that 'stuffed monkey' thing, for some reason. haha....ahhh...lily's mom knows about the plan then, eh? mmm...should be interesting to see how the rest of their holidays are gonna go. oh, and about that whole petunia thing...I have a feeling it has something to do with vernon coming over...but o well, guess i'll just have to wait. lol, hope you post soon!!!

Holy... O.O I didn't know you had so much posted already... I also didn't know you have this amount of feedback either.

I read the first half of the first post, which I think is the first chapter. It's a really good story with an overall good use of language. However, some sections may be at risk for moving too slowly, spending too much time focusing on something that may not be of great importance in the overall story. Just be careful of that and you'll do fine.

When I find a little more time, like over Spring Break, I'll read the rest.

~Dianne

Since i just read the story so far, i will express my opinion for all of it. The first couple of chapters were more informative and less litterary. But i liked it when the story just started to flow. This fanfic has something special about it, while reading it i feel like i am watching a series on tv. It is about teenagers and how they deal with their life. That's what i like most about your fic; how representative it is. I will certainly keep reading it, you have something really great here. My only point is that the story would be read more easily if you could differentiate the different parts, like when Snape appears. It is easier for our eyes to realise that the topic changes and to send that signal to the brain. But that is just a detail. I like your story, keep it up and update soon!

Alkisti xxx

well i know what you're going to do! hahaha but i'm not saying cause you'll punch me and i already told you what i think about the chap, so correct that stuff and it will be great alright?

ok so i'll go back and watch something corporate videos

jeeze mcmahon is great pfff

ps i wish my mom was like lily pfff

so here is the new chapter i hope you guys liked it! and yeah jay you were right it had something to do with vernon lol
darn you figured it out

ILMAO lily kicked the **** out of Vernon LOL i wounder when will james and lily get together ??? and will sirius get his chance with Rebbecca??

Anyway please post again soon cant wait to read the next chapter

*GAG* oh my....I...woah...~speechless~ HE KISSED HER!!!! filthy womanizer...arggh...omg, luved the chapter...I wish my mom was as nice as Lily's *sigh* lol. ARGH!!! I OFFICIALLY HATE VERNON DURSLEY!!! (wow, sorry you had to endure that)...ha! at least she managed to kick the cr*p out of him. lol, great chap, please post soon, you can't just leave me like this.

Oh my God! That little....can't think of an appropriate name for him...I'll get back to you! I can't believe he did that! No wonder Petunia hates Lily! Oh my God! Well, at least she got a nice blow at him! Poor Petunia though! Great chapter, can't wait to read more, post again soon!

Eww ! Vernon likes Lily . It was a great twist, but the thought is kind of disgusting . I liked that you made Lily and Rebecca friends again I just hope that Lily admit that she likes James , and that Rebecca and Sirius get together . I’m waiting for next chapter , so post soon

It's really great!
gggggrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr! THAT LITTLE *********************
i can't believe vernon kissed her!
that would explain a lot about why petunia hates lily though...shame lily didn't revial her feelings for james, even to herself.
oh well
can't wait for the next chapter

nads

ps are we going to hear about james and sirius' holiday?

well stef i never thought you had such thoughts in your head jeeze pufff...

anyway i suppose it's ok but you should've been more descriptive hahahaha just messin

it's cool nice little twist and don't go jumpig from subject to subject like that i'll explain to you later cause i have to go to school...


that's dumbledore

ok whatever peace