Please leave me your thoughts and ideas to my fanfic. This is the first time I have written a fanfic so any feedback will be greatly appreciated.

you are so mean i was starting to enjoy that and you ended it please post more soon thank you

I like this chapter. But it's so short, and doesn't reveal much. But that's what will keep me reading. Please post again soon.

Hey lolly jar, Please don't hate me! I'm really not trying to critisize your fic but, I found it kinda hard to read because of some simple errors like, they when the word should have been he. I don't read many unprofessionally written works so the mistakes really stuck out to me. If you haven't got one already I would suggest you get a beta to edit and revise your fic. If you don't have a beta already, which isn't likely cause you just started your fic, I would be happy to beta your chapters (you can pm me about it) . Also, a great tip for fanfics is to write them up first on a program such as microsoft word and then copy and paste them to veritaserum. I'm not sure who the mysterious figure is, Because it said that the figure had blue eyes and brown hair. I think it's Harry but, Harry has black hair and Green eyes, though it could still be Harry. Overall, great fic!!! I'm not being sarcastic either, it was like the whole thing was a cliffhinger.

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Hey.
This chapter was great. A little short though, but it really caught my attention. It was very well written.
Post again soon. i can't wait to read more.

Thank you to everyone who posted feedback. I wasn't sure if I would get any.
Gemecour7 I do appreciate your criticism, but I do already have a beta and I was going for a bit of mystery by not reveiling the identity of the person until later in the chapter. However I am only new to this and I will get better with more experience.
I have now posted a new chapter which is in two parts. I will post the 2nd part later today.

thanks everyone

I like this post. How you have Harry struggling with his decision to break up with Ginny and how Hermione is persistant in her attempts to try and get Harry to go back to Hogwarts. I can't wait to read the next part. Post again soon.

congratulations on a briliant first two chapters. i am gald to see u have decided to write a fic and will be extremely happy to read it to the end.
I was surprised when dudley used magic but it was really good, i think it would be awesome if he went to school with harry, that way he could see how powerful harry is and how many friends he has.

post again soon

hey good chapter hope you post again soon your story is excellent i wounder if dudley did anything with harry's wand ? or did harry get to the death eaters ?

Anyway hope you post again soon

Hey.
Great chapter. I hope Harry get's out alright. I was half expecting Dudley to try something with the wand, or sparks to fly out of the wand when he got angry. Oh well.
Post again soon. Once again this chapter was great. You are a very good writer.

Yay!!! good chapter, this one I can read. So... recap: Hermione is very persistent in getting Harry back to school, Harry decides to humor her, deatheaters arrive, Dudley either dies or or is stunned or cursed, yep, that makes a great chapter! Sorry for the critisism earlier, but it's what I do best. - I bet that makes me sound really arrogant.
Becca

like what every one else here said this chapter is good i realy cant wait till the second part is posted keep it up

it is really good

I can't wait to know what happening next

hope you post it soon

and hope it is longer next time

Thanks for all the feedback everyone. It is nice to know that I am not doing such a bad job after all.
Gamecour7:It is ok that you give your honest opinion. It gives the writer a chance to have another point of view to their work. Keep it up. But it is also great to hear good comments too!!
eagleanimagous: Thanks for the comments. They are much appreciated. I hope that you like what happens in the next chapter.
apbwd:I was glad to hear that you were anticipating the next chapter. I hope you like what happens.

Thankyou also to everyone else who posted feedback. The next chapter has now been posted. It is only short but I am working on the next chapter being a lot longer. Since everyone has been asking for it to be longer.

Bye for now

Whoa! Dudley's a wizard. I didn't see that coming. I wonder what he'll do now. i like the Dursley's reactions, very in character. especially with Vernon's line with Harry "infecting" Dudley. this was very good. post again soon

wow Dudley is a wizard

I was shocked , but it's a great idea "expect the unexpected"

I think it was the confrontation with the death eaters that made his abilities appear

it was a very good chapter

Hi everyone,

I have just posted the 4th chapter. I didn't get much feedback this time. If there is anything that you don't like, please tell me. I hope that you like this chapter. It is alot longer than before.

Please leave feedback

WOW dudley is a wizard shocking but not unbelievable what did he do to the death eaters??? did dud kill them or what?? whats with those visions of Harry's parents ? i have many questions but i wont bore you with them just hope that harry will get back together with ginny because that would make them both very happy and thats what harry needs the most at this point

Anyway please post again soon cant wait

OMG! I just read through your fic and it is bril. POor Ginny, I feel bad for her. I love the visions. I hope harry finds the book. I wonder what will be in it! Dudley a wizard. No way! Thats coll but uunexpected. I wonder if he wll be asked to come to Hogwarts. This is a briliant story. Post again soon!

Hey.
Great chapter. I wonder what happens with Harry's visions. I bet he's having them because Lily left that book with Petunia or something and she hasn't given it to Harry. But I could be completely wrong. I hope Harry and Ginny get together. It sounds as though Hermione and Ron are getting pretty cozy with eachother.
post again soon.

hey...interesting idea..Dudley becoming a wizard...I like your ideas; you seem to be trying to think things through. Good job! I look forward to reading your future chapters.

great chapter , it is very interesting

that visions that harry had is really exciting
wonder what he is going to do about it

good job , waiting for the rest

Wow! When I read the section about Dudley being allowed into Hogwarts all I could say or think is 'Oh My Gosh!'. I wonder if her goes. Im half hoping that he will because it would be interesting to see what house he goes into (i say Slytherin but you never know). If he does though harry will have to deal with him more. Poor Harry. Plus, Dudley could become friends with Pansy Parkinson, that would be bad. plain old BAD. Its Harry Hunting all over again. If he doesnt Dudley wont fit in. Post again soon. I really liked the story!

Hi everyone,

I have posted the next chapter to my story. I hope you like it. Keep the feedback coming.
I promise you will all know more about Harry visions soon.

cheers for now

Ha! i was righ (kinda), Harry needs to get the diary. this was a good chapter. finally Harry is getting out of Number 4! I wonder whether Dudley goes to Hogwarts or not. and i can't wait to read about the wedding. post again soon.

Hi everyone,
I have just posted the 6th chapter. I am really enjoying writing this fanfic.I hope you are enjoying reading it. Please leave me your feedback, good or bad I don't mind.

Finally Harry is out of Privet Drive and finally Ron and Hermione get together. I hope Ginny will talk to Harry soon, or that Hermione will let them talk anyway. This story is really good so far. I can't wait to read more. Post again soon.

great chapter


I enjoyed it very much although I'm sad because Ginny is miserable

I fell sorry for aunt petunia I don't really hate her and I think she gave harry all that bad time only because she was jealous of her sister

keep going I like the story

WINKY! What did Winkydo know and why is she here? I hope Harry and Ginny talk soon or at least Hermione lets them talk. Hermione and Ron are together awwww. Loved the new chapter. So is Dud;ey going to Hogwarts. I hope so. It would be soo cool. Post soon!

Hi to everyone who is enjoying my story. I have just posted the next chapter. I hope you enjoy it.

I probably wont be posting the next chapter for a couple of days as I have other work I should be doing

Please leave feedback, as I don't seem to be getting a lot.

Thankyou

OH MY GOSH! OMG! I loved that! That is so sweet that Harrys mum came to him in his dream (i think?) to talk o him. OMG! I bet harry loved seeing his mum. Im guessing Harry will survive because Lily said the diary is the key to your succes. Which means that since Harry knows where the diray is..he will find it and then have the key! The present from Ginny put me in ae. How sweet. I wish they would get back together. You are so talented at writing. I wish I was as good as you. I dont believe people who say Im a good writer unless I hear it from an amzing writer! You are truly amazing at this! Post soon!

Great chapter. I liked it a lot. I'm glad that Mrs. Weasley has a house elf now, even if she only has two kids at the house now. haha. The "meeting" i guess you could call it, with Lily was a great idea. I wonder whats in the diary. i'll be checking for new posts. keep up the good work

it's very beautiful

my god I cried when harry had seen lily
very touching part

but I'm glad he is having a good start for his birthday


waiting for the rest

I have just posted the next chapter.
GryffindorBabexhott:Thankyou so much for your compliments. It is very appreciated. I am glad you liked the part with Harry's mum.The next chapter has more with Ginny and Harry, but they haven't gotten together. sorry.
eagleanimagus:I also liked the idea of Mrs Weasley having a house elf. The idea just came to me. I hope you enjoy the next chapter.
Beater: Thankyou for your continuing feedback. I appreciate it very much. I thought that Harry needed to see Lily again. To help him move forward.

Well I hope to get the 9th chapter posted in a day or two.

Cheers

I think this was the best chapter so far. It was very well written, it was long, and everyone was characterized very well. Like with Ron getting disappointed when Harry said he didn't know who he would take to the Quidditch game and when Ginny yelled at Harry. It was great, I think Ginny is right; Harry needs to stop being stupid and go out with her.
I like the part with Dumbledore's watch. I forgot about that, people usually have him leave Harry the pensieve.
post again soon.

I liked the chapter very much

it is full of emotions

hope Ginny will get over it soon because I fell sad for her

But it was nice that everybody came to attend the birthday party ,it must have been the best birthday harry ever had


waiting for the rest , don't make us wait too long

Aww. Poor Harry. But Ginny has a pint. This is very good writing, it definitely proves her stubborness and how stupid Harry is being. That was nice of them to throw harry a party. The gifts were really nice. Post again soon!

Thank you to everyone's good comments on the last chapter. You will probably hate me for the new one I just posted, as it is very long.I hope you don't fall asleep. Please let me know what you think. I hope to get into a bit of action in following chapters.

Happy Reading

Don't be upset if your chapters are long, that is a good thing. this was another brilliant chapter. the wedding scene was very good. I hope Harry and Ginny get together soon. Ginny still likes Harry, she was looking at him at the wedding, and Harry still likes Ginny. post again soon.

AWWWWWWWW! The wedding was beautiful. I loved the idea of a castle. harry has feelings for Ginny. I wish they would just get together again. Its so sad having them apart. Please post soon.

wow they got married at last


the wedding was beautiful .


and I'm glad that harry revealed his visions to his friends

they are his real treasure


keep on posting

Just to let you know I have now posted chapter 10. It is not as long as I wanted it to be, but it has taken a different path to the one I orignally wanted. Funny when that happens.
thankyou to my three loyal readers Beater, eagleanimagous and Gryffindor Babexhott I always look forward to your feedback.
Keep them coming

cheers for now

HA! Harry and Ginny are together! Finally! (sorry i'm a bit excited). haha. That was perfect how they got together. i like Harry's line:

Ron and Hermione seem happy.
Harry found out where the locket is! I like how you had him figure it out while he was dreaming.
post again soon.

Bril writing as usual! Harry and Ginny are finally together! (angels singing) Rona nd Hermione do seem happy. That was great on how Harry found out about the locket. Post soon! Im hooked on this fic!

that was a great chapter , I like it when Harry and Ginny are together

I'm very happy for them



and he could know the place of the horcrux too , it's a very joyful chapter


hope they could retrieve it and destroy it


can't wait for the rest , keep on posting

Hey I just read your story and i love it Yeah! Ginny and Harry are back together. And Harry's found a horcrux I seriously can't wait for more soo post the next chapter fast!!
harry_potter_5678

PS- yeah i made your feedback thread 4 pgs haha

Hey. Great chapter. I like how you had Harry tell Mrs. Weasley that he felt like she was the mother he never had.

haha. that part was great.
i wonder what they'll find at Grimmauld Place.
post again soon.

I loved that chap. I agree with eagleanimagous. That line was funny. Im still wondering whether harry will go back to school or not. Professor McGonagall as secret kepper was a wise choice. Post soon!

wow that was great

I like it very much , specially the part harry talked to Mrs Weasely I almost cried

I hope that the Weaselys are happy forever

the way you write is very touching , it is really a gift


keep on posting

OH BOY! That picture was a portkey. Was this a trick of Voldys/ But it couldnbt. He doesn t kno w about Grimmauld Place or for all we know.Where did Harry end up? You have me in supense! That was nice that harry got to see Ginny again soo soon. Post aain soon! I love your fic!