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That's the fic. Hope you like it, I'll try involve as many adults as I can (I know Lucius is much older than James & Lily but I so wanted his character invoved!)
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I like it.
I got a little confused at the end when Sirius and Lucius were dueling, but I figured it all out. So, the notorious marauders are going to fight Lucius Malfoy...that should be interesting.
Yeah, Lucius is older that everyone...five years...so the four of them would be fighting a sixth year!
Psh, Lily, muggle dueling, is that why Lily hates James...or are you going to have another reason?
Anyways, keep writing.
-Layla-
First to reply. yay!
I got a little confused at the end when Sirius and Lucius were dueling, but I figured it all out. So, the notorious marauders are going to fight Lucius Malfoy...that should be interesting.
Yeah, Lucius is older that everyone...five years...so the four of them would be fighting a sixth year!
Psh, Lily, muggle dueling, is that why Lily hates James...or are you going to have another reason?
Anyways, keep writing.
-Layla-
First to reply. yay!
whoa. i thought i replied but when i looked back it wasn't there.
but like i like it. it's pretty good.
but i'm sorta confused on why they were dueling, you're not aloud to perform magic outside of school.
and you didn't tell about all the characters. obviously the little red-headed girl is lily, but you could have said somethign about it.
and did you copy off of my signature? i have had the mirror of erised in mine for a long time. and suddenly you have it.
but like i like it. it's pretty good.
but i'm sorta confused on why they were dueling, you're not aloud to perform magic outside of school.
and you didn't tell about all the characters. obviously the little red-headed girl is lily, but you could have said somethign about it.
and did you copy off of my signature? i have had the mirror of erised in mine for a long time. and suddenly you have it.
I got the idea of my signature from yours. Lily will hate James for more things. Right now it's a confusing stage and I don't want the reader to know much.
They're aloud to do magic on the Hogwarts' express for a certain length of the journey.
They're aloud to do magic on the Hogwarts' express for a certain length of the journey.
haha. not even to hogwarts and they already hate snape. that's great.
and yay! so early, they already have their group name. the name really works out perfectly.
and now this is only the begining of a very long year.
and yay! so early, they already have their group name. the name really works out perfectly.
and now this is only the begining of a very long year.
Hey, yea i'm slightly confused, but i'm sure as the fic continues it will get more easy to follow, so i will keep reading. yay the mauraders are together!!!
Piglet
Piglet
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Hey, yea i'm slightly confused, but i'm sure as the fic continues it will get more easy to follow, so i will keep reading. yay the mauraders are together!!!
Piglet
What part are you confused about
Edit; Sorry for the one-liner! I'll add some more!
If you like this style of writing in my signature you can find a fan fic about Book 7 I've done
sorry i haven't posted. but you're going smoothly. barely to hogwarts and james already is starting to like lily.
yay! ALL the Maurauders are in Gryffindor.
well i already knew that. haha.
yay! ALL the Maurauders are in Gryffindor.
well i already knew that. haha.
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