Please leave me some positive and negative feedback for my new fic 'The Vanquisher'...
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ok you have a good style but I have to say HOW DARE YOU!!!!!! How could you degrade J.K.R's work like that? There was an interview on tonight about the last book and young adults in the audince were allowed to ask her qeustions and on girl asked if there was at all a possibility of Harry's children turning on him and she said " No, because Voldemort has ultimatley been defeated they will grow up in a world of love which will bring up the new Hogwarts staff but as good of a suggestion as that is for maybe another seris I have written this last chaper as way of closing the story for good." I don't mean to be mean but please try to be a little more cautius about what you write next time.
P.S.like I said you do have a definate style you could probabely write a great James/Lilly story.
P.S.like I said you do have a definate style you could probabely write a great James/Lilly story.
Okay...
Firstly this is not a canon fanfic, so i'm free to suggest that anything might happen. I hardly think i am degrading her work by writing a fanfic about Harry's son becoming evil. I don't really know what to say, if you don't like the idea then you don't like it, i hardly need to be more 'cautious' with what i write, because i cannot forsee anyones else taking issue with this...
Firstly this is not a canon fanfic, so i'm free to suggest that anything might happen. I hardly think i am degrading her work by writing a fanfic about Harry's son becoming evil. I don't really know what to say, if you don't like the idea then you don't like it, i hardly need to be more 'cautious' with what i write, because i cannot forsee anyones else taking issue with this...
Great fic NIckHilton. I am a bit confused, but it is the first chapter so... it might explain more next chapter. But is it Cormac Maclaggen? What department is Hermione in? what does she do? who is the headmaster? I don't really like the idea of LV coming back, but
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Hey Cobra...
A few things...LV isn't coming back, it's a New Dark Lord.
Yes it is Cormac MacLaggen.
Hermione is head of the department for Magical Law Enforcement. She is currently invistigating at Hogwarts, doing tests and stuff.
The new headmaster will be revealed later.
A few things...LV isn't coming back, it's a New Dark Lord.
Yes it is Cormac MacLaggen.
Hermione is head of the department for Magical Law Enforcement. She is currently invistigating at Hogwarts, doing tests and stuff.
The new headmaster will be revealed later.
I really like this actually. Pretty mysterious, and you write very well. i like it and i can't wait to see what happens next.
keep writing.
keep writing.
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'James!' Harry said as he greeted Justin, Ron nodded politely as well.
'Hugo, Remus! What brings you to these parts?' Said Justin as he beckoned them to sit.
'Hugo, Remus! What brings you to these parts?' Said Justin as he beckoned them to sit.
That is from you fanfiction. I didn't understandit. why did Harry call Justin James and why did Justin call them Hugo and Remus.
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The Rising Darkness- Glad you liked it! 
Cobra- In case Hades hears them they are substituting their real names for names that begin with the same letter...
Justin- James
Harry- Hugo
Ron- Remus
Sorry for the confusion and thanks for reading!
Cobra- In case Hades hears them they are substituting their real names for names that begin with the same letter...
Justin- James
Harry- Hugo
Ron- Remus
Sorry for the confusion and thanks for reading!
I had a feeling it was a code but I wasn't sure, thanks for clearing it up. I am really enjoying it. I wonder why Hermione was with Hades though. Keep writing! I can't wait for another update!
I like it. It's different since I've been reading all these Hermione and Snape things. [just for the record, I find that completely disturbing..yet I can't stop reading them] So I'm getting all of the Hermione's confused and mixed up.
But I really do like it. There's not much negative I can say. I do wonder what Kingsley meant by
Also, the idea of Albus being evil, not sure I like it, lol, but it'll be interesting. What was Hermione doing though with Hades. Guess I'll find that out later too.
Oh, and what was Maclaggen doing? Did I miss that?
Anyways... Post soon!
But I really do like it. There's not much negative I can say. I do wonder what Kingsley meant by
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"It was simple for Kingsley. Much as the thought filled him with regret and deepest sorrow, Acheron Hades needed to be taken out, and that would mean taking Hermione Granger with him."
though. Guess I'll find out in the next chapter.Also, the idea of Albus being evil, not sure I like it, lol, but it'll be interesting. What was Hermione doing though with Hades. Guess I'll find that out later too.
Oh, and what was Maclaggen doing? Did I miss that?
Anyways... Post soon!
krazy4kreacher- Glad you liked it!
MacLaggen and Hermione were investigating at Hogwarts. We'll find out more about that in later chapters, it is important.
New Chapter will be up sometime today.
Well, the new chapter is up now...
Sorry i didn't get it up very rapidly, i was pretty exhausted last night
MacLaggen and Hermione were investigating at Hogwarts. We'll find out more about that in later chapters, it is important.
New Chapter will be up sometime today.
Well, the new chapter is up now...
Sorry i didn't get it up very rapidly, i was pretty exhausted last night
I like how In Charge Harry was. It was cool. And I really like the way this is written. I don't have anything negative to say even though I don't like the idea of Albus being the new Dark Lord, it seems like you know what you're doing so I'll keep reading. I hope Hermione's in the next chapter or we find out more about what's going on and how the prophecy and Hades are related.
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But as Harry lay awake he wondered if even the Contingency could stop Acheron Hades?
I don't think I understand Hades. I mean, if Harry can stop Voldemort, sure he can stop Hades.. Oh well, Guess I'll find out. Post soon!
Hey!
There's alot more to Hades powers thatn meets the eye... Remember that Harry stopped Voldemort through a carefully constructed plan. If they had met as two mortals in a duel, Harry wouldn't have been in big trouble...
There's alot more to Hades powers thatn meets the eye... Remember that Harry stopped Voldemort through a carefully constructed plan. If they had met as two mortals in a duel, Harry wouldn't have been in big trouble...
I really like the style...and it seems to tie in fairly nicely with the post DH world. The only thing I find confusing is when you talk about James (as Harry's son) alongside Sirius. It just...wierds me out a little I guess.
Keep writing!
Keep writing!
Thanks for reading AleksHum, i guess that's JKR's doing....naming the son James...
Anyhow i will most likely try and put up the next chapter this evening, at some time....
Anyhow i will most likely try and put up the next chapter this evening, at some time....
I love how accurate everything is. With Dobby, and the last time Hermione was in the forest, and Harry feeling like he was in the summer going into 2nd year again. I don't know why, but I like when fanfictions are accurate. And this one really is. It makes sense.
Except I thought Florean was a woman. And I'm glad you said something about what/how George is doing.
Anyways, he caught Hades!! Now, I'm really surprised. What happend to Hades being really powerful? I'm guessing he's going to escape from Harry. Agghh, I can't wait to find out more about Albus and how it's rellated to Hades. And what is Hermione doing!
Well, post soon.
Except I thought Florean was a woman. And I'm glad you said something about what/how George is doing.
Anyways, he caught Hades!! Now, I'm really surprised. What happend to Hades being really powerful? I'm guessing he's going to escape from Harry. Agghh, I can't wait to find out more about Albus and how it's rellated to Hades. And what is Hermione doing!
Well, post soon.
I am very glad you mentioned George.
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Very interesting. Hermione is working with Hades, not undercover. Well, as far as I know. Asp and Albus. Interesting I didn't even notice that! I knew he would escape. Justin died 
I hope not!
I hope not!
Oh man.. Justin. I hope he somehow gets saved. And that's interesting about ASP actually being a snake. I read it earlier and I'm trying to remember more of it except I can't. OHHH yes, I'm wondering if Hades was just trying to bother Harry by saying all that stuff about Hermione. That was one of the big things. Well.. can you answer that?? I'm guessing I have to wait for the story to continue. Post soon!!
There are certain things about Hades which are not normal, like the fact he can do magic despite the fact he had no wand. Whether any of what he said was true will transpire later, but he is a very manipulative and cheating man, so you can choose not to believe him, if you want
Thanks for reading.
Thanks for reading.
The lastest chapter. Seven, i think?
I found it hard to understand. There were kind of a lot of typos. I'm not sure I actually got it all. I think that's just because I wasn't paying enough attention to it. But was the ending of it Harry and Ginny going to Hagrid's to get 'Witherwings' so he can make sure Justin wasn't still alive? Sorry.. I just. I got confused.
I found it hard to understand. There were kind of a lot of typos. I'm not sure I actually got it all. I think that's just because I wasn't paying enough attention to it. But was the ending of it Harry and Ginny going to Hagrid's to get 'Witherwings' so he can make sure Justin wasn't still alive? Sorry.. I just. I got confused.
Hey krazy4kreacher....Basically it's in three parts, the first part is James Potter telling Harry Potter that Justin is presumably dead...the second part is from the eyes of the snake...the final part is Harry and Ginny going to Hagrids because he wants to borrow Buckbeak for some unknown test to see whether Justin's body can be recovered....
Sorry if there are loads of typos, i'll go back through and try and ween them out This was probably my most liberal chapter, i broke my own formula a bit, so maybe things will come back on track soon
Thanks for continuing to read
Sorry if there are loads of typos, i'll go back through and try and ween them out
This was probably my most liberal chapter, i broke my own formula a bit, so maybe things will come back on track soon Thanks for continuing to read
Ohh okay. I guess I just didn't understand that it was an "unknown" test. I thought I just didn't get it. Sorry. I guess that was the point now wasn't it. With that being understood, I like it! Post again soon!
That's okay, i probably wasn't clear enough I'll go back and change that... 
Thanks for reading,
Nick
I'll go back and change that... Thanks for reading,
Nick
OMG! you are amazing i cant beleve you wrote that...well its nice to know that im not the only one making my own Harry Potter Book....your title is much more better then mine tho,
mine is Harry Potter and THE BIRTH OF A NEW BIRTH...but the Vanquisher sounds much more better to me. you know how to use your words and you have wonderful vocabulary.
I started writing my own HP book as soon as i finished the last book. Have you finished the last book ? Ill be sending you a personal message. Your story plot is way better than what i came up with. I wanted to know if you wouldnt mind helping me write my HP book. You seriously have style and i love it.i wish i knew you personally but i guess not.Lke you i love to read Harry Potter books alot.but i got pretty disappointed at the fact that JKR wont write no more books. From the begining i knew that there was only going to 7 books because in the the first one i think she explains that theres only 7 years of Hogwarts school so that had to of meant that there was only 7 books.When i first started the last book i was so excited, accept for the part of all those poor deaths. But when i finished the book i was so mad because i wanted more but there was no more and i got upset. i hope someone out there could inspire JKR to countinue here her HP novel. But i heard that she was gonna start some kind of mystery series i think im gonna give it try since her HP books are so good maybe this one will be too. BUT NOTHING TO ME OF COURSE WILL BA AS GOOD AS HARRY POTTER.!!!maybe you could persuade JKR to do so if maybe you send in your HP story to her and maybe itll put a spark in her to start again...just a thought.OH!i came up with a whole bunch of crazy titles for my HP book, i came up with (The Prodigy of Harry Potter) before i finished reading the book, and also Harry Potter and the DESTRUCTION OF THE MINISTRY OF MAGIC, Harry Potter and the DAWN OF A NEW MAGICAL ERA well im sorry for writing so much but your story just hit me so much I LOVED IT
mine is Harry Potter and THE BIRTH OF A NEW BIRTH...but the Vanquisher sounds much more better to me. you know how to use your words and you have wonderful vocabulary.
I started writing my own HP book as soon as i finished the last book. Have you finished the last book ? Ill be sending you a personal message. Your story plot is way better than what i came up with. I wanted to know if you wouldnt mind helping me write my HP book. You seriously have style and i love it.i wish i knew you personally but i guess not.Lke you i love to read Harry Potter books alot.but i got pretty disappointed at the fact that JKR wont write no more books. From the begining i knew that there was only going to 7 books because in the the first one i think she explains that theres only 7 years of Hogwarts school so that had to of meant that there was only 7 books.When i first started the last book i was so excited, accept for the part of all those poor deaths. But when i finished the book i was so mad because i wanted more but there was no more and i got upset. i hope someone out there could inspire JKR to countinue here her HP novel. But i heard that she was gonna start some kind of mystery series i think im gonna give it try since her HP books are so good maybe this one will be too. BUT NOTHING TO ME OF COURSE WILL BA AS GOOD AS HARRY POTTER.!!!maybe you could persuade JKR to do so if maybe you send in your HP story to her and maybe itll put a spark in her to start again...just a thought.OH!i came up with a whole bunch of crazy titles for my HP book, i came up with (The Prodigy of Harry Potter) before i finished reading the book, and also Harry Potter and the DESTRUCTION OF THE MINISTRY OF MAGIC, Harry Potter and the DAWN OF A NEW MAGICAL ERA well im sorry for writing so much but your story just hit me so much I LOVED IT
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