Hey Heres my feedback!! Please leave back nice comments!! I'll probably post a new chap tomorrow if I don't I have no idea when!!! Again Please nice feedback.

If you have not read my fic then:
http://www.veritaserum.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=18438

then please leave nice feedback!

First, first to comment. woo-hoo! =]
I like it. A bit of a twist that James is gonna give up on Lily. And then Sirius is different with Courtney adn they're going out. And now James realized his parents said somethign about a muggle-born coming to stay over at his house this summer. Betcha anthing it's Lily Evans. Will this change everythign because Liyl finally admits to liek James? Hmm. A thinker.
Love it. Post soon!

Love your story! Post more soon! I like how James finally gave up on Lily. Haven't seen that a lot. Well, keep writing!!

-Jasmine

Thanks!!! I will add this though. I plan on adding a girl in soon! That is all I am revealing!!
(For right now ) I promise I will post as soon as possible because school is starting early for me but I'm keeping toward my story!!

lagoria


Okay I cave!! Lily is the one that comes over to James house!! But soon look for that girl I just mentioned!!! ( I will also reveal this she is related to Dumbledore!!)
By the way you never heard me me say a thing!

ohh!!! so lily is coming over to james's house? cool!! he needs to ask her out!!! post really soon!!!!

timeturner

hey hunni bunni!! finally read it wooo!!!
lovin it!!! keep it going...ooh and i love your ideas...won't give nothing away... keep going with the great ideas and cant wait to see what you come up with next!!!
love ya,
x-x-x em x-x-x

great chapter!!! you should have lily ask james out!! ooh!! but first she should say it really really quiet and then really really fast and then ask james out with a normal tone and him say yes or somethin like that!! it is just what i think!! you can make up you own ideas though!! well anyways!! still luvin your story!! so post really really soon!

timeturner

Wow. Lily's gone to James's. I hope she doesn't faint with shock that's she's with him for the whole summer because she likes him. But then if James is going to really give up on her, what was with all the flirting? He winked at her and said his bedroom was next door in case she got scared. So what's with that?
Love it. Post soon!

Okay here is the deal. James thought Lily was staring at him so lead into the winking. Then the whole if you get scared thing was that I wanted it to seem James thought Lily liked him!
I plan on a new chap as soon as possible!!!!

lagoria

Ok. Now after reading your last post here I completely get it. Awww. Courtney and Sirius. He was nervous. Awwww. Lily likes him...adorable. Post soon!
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Me No Like Cliffies!! But me hopes she says yes!

Sorry I'll type with real sentences now. You are a really good writer! I enjoy reading your work! I can't wait to read more!

-Jasmine

Ha ha ha! Sirius, what are we going to do with you?? LOL! Oh my gosh, you are an awesome writer! I was laughing at the part with Sirius at the end... cant wait to read more!

Aw. I finally got to reading it. It was adorable and I love it. They got together! So romantic. Can't every guy be like James? I'd love that and fall completely and utterly in love.
Love it. Post soon.

ok, i'm lov'in your story and you hav'nt written more yet! please write more soon, PM me when yuo post the next chapter witha link to the story if you can, thanks!

~Rachel~~

Hey people!!!! Thanks to all of you for leaving nice comments!!!! Ok I mentioned the whole girl coming in.I am cutting that out! If I ever write another fic-which I might do-it will probably end up in that one. Okay I planning on adding today if not I have no idea when because this weekend is Labor Day and I'm gone! My next Chap is called the Party Confessions and Surprises! Lets just say it is sorta fun in my picture!!! Plus me and my beta-gorgeous_granger will be discussing future Chapters! CU soon!

-lagoria

Great chapter, as usual! But a bit short... anyway, that's all I really have to say, except, that was so funny when Sirius was like, That's a bad thing?

Well can't wait for more!!

-Jasmine

Truth or Dare. You have seriously got to love that game. =]]
Hilarious how they were aall like WHOA!!! Haha. They kissed and have fallen in lvoe. ONly thing is, when will they tell each other?
Love it. Post soon.

that was an awesome chapter, i can't wait for the other ones , when are you posting again?Thanks alot for the link and all!

~Rachel~~

*puts on a preppy voice just like James* OH MY GOSH!!! *turns it off* hahah. Love it. They had an amazing time together and then James is like wait when she is going to bed and then he kisses her and syas I love you! Oh my gosh! then he leaves her to process what he said. But she loves him too! Oh my dear gosh. How is she goign to react? Ohh come back here!
Love it. post soon!

Ick Cynthia is gross. Why would she just kiss someone like that when he clearly isn't interested. But Lily kissed him then and said I love you back!! Bad part is, Cynthia heard it all and is probably gonna get revenge somehow...
Lov eit. Post soon.

I am so sorry you all!!!!! I am probably be awhile before I post a next chap!!! But next chap is the feast and the famous head dorm!!!! YAY!!! Anyway anout Cynthia I thought her all by myself...don't hate me. Anyway I hope you forgive me of my long delay!! Plzz forgive me!!! I hope you enjoyed everything...except for Cynthia. I hope I will post more soon! See u

-Miley

Cute. Head dorm is amazing as usual. And her room is different than most. It sounds pretty and is totally different then usual, but that's good. Hah, they were snogging.
Lvoe it. Post soon.

awww..how sweet! james loves lily, lily loves james and lots of love! i loved your latest chapters, cynthia sounds like a problem to me..hmmm, watch out lily! can't wait for the next chapters!
Keep up the awsome writting!
check out my story in my sig!

~Rachel~~Miss.Marauder07 ♥

Feedback make the world go around(next to harry potter, lol)

Loved your last chapter! james and lily are perfect for eachother! the last chapter was soo sweet! sirius is funny, lol. I'm posting the next chapter for my story proboly tomorrow. Luv ur story!

Can't wait!

~Rachel

Aw. James is officially the sweetest person in the world. He and Lily are such a cute couple. Cute chapter.
Love it. Post soon.

Wow, that was a cute chapter Keep going with it You're really good at writing plots. Well I loved it!

Lauren

Yeah that is most definitely not good. They embarrassed Crystal, which was nice, but there will be hell to pay. uh-oh. and James is sweet. Room of Requirement is a must for all dates to end perfectly.
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Aww! James is sooooo sweet! but, oh boy! Cynthia sounds really scary! Update soon, story's great, going a bit fast the last chapter i think but other then that, it's absolutley positivly GRRRRRRRRREAT! lol! The plot is awsome and (again) cynthia sounds scary and hell is going to be payed..*looks scared*

scribble, scribble...AWAY!

~Rachel~~

Hugg!

Aw. Hilarious parts. Pretty darn funny.
But what happened to Lily. Why are there so many cliff hangers today?
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I like the chapter, just a teensy bit short in my opinion but I think that's just because I want to know what happened. Well keep going, it's really good and you know, Cynthia really does scare me now. Keep up the great work!

Lauren

IT
Was
CYNTHIA!

Wasn't it? I mean, if it wasn't that slimeball, it must be her... ha ha, Sirius is a dork. "My hair looks crappy..." that's awesome.

But I must ask: WHAT THE HECK HAPPENED TO LILY?!?!?!?! Post soon and tell us all!!!!!

-Jasmine

Okay people! Tomorrow is my B-day! YAY!!!! Anywayz the person that attacked Lily is....not telling! Plus thanx 2 gorgeous_granger, Miss.Marauder07, JSB 073, Ginny.Weasley, and No.1_HarryPotterFan for leaving nice comments! Anywayz I don't know when I will put up another post seein as I will have a sleepover 2morrow!! Again thanx for leaving comments when there was a horrible ending twice! I wish there was no school 2morrow! Anywayz have a happy early weekend! Finally glad for a Friday! If you have a qs (which is questions) pm me and I will try to answer them. Hope you enjoyed everything!!!!

-miley

She's okay. Yay!
busy, sorry. Must go.
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Wow. Siry? And it WAS Cynthia! I knew it! Yay, me!!!

Ahem. Sorry.

But I thought that chapter was funny. It was very good... can't wait for more!

-Jasmine

Yay! Lily's ok! Siry? I knew it was Cynthia! she will pay!*dun dun dun* jk Sorry, i'm hyper, lol. Great chapter! Sirius has a big mouth.

Post soon!

~Rachel

I'm back!!Ha ha!

Heyy miley!

I just fely like posting! So, how you doing? well..ttyl!

That was really short and odd, lol. I gtg , i'm going to my friends soon, bye!

~Rachel

Okay people!!! I feel so bad for not posting!!!!! But I went on vacation from Thurs to Sat. Anywayz I will possibly be posting soon!!!! Hope you had a good weekend! Hope you enjoy!
Miss.Marauder07 and gorgeous_granger scribblez back soon!!!!

-miley

P.S: Miss.Marauder07? It's such a surprise that you sent a short message! I know...lol...typical me! Anywayz love yas!

A break up over something stupid? Wow. But they got back together all in one! yay!! And I honestly don't wana knwo what happened that night.
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heyy miley!

Like i said, here is my feedback.
Yay! They're back together! I'm so happy about you mention me, i am awsome are'nt i!(so are u!!awsomest to the max!) The chapter was great! Going a bit fast and maybe more details for the dance, but that's all!
Post again soon!!

~Rachel
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P.S. I know! Short messagesARE SO UNLIKE ME! haha, lol. Longer messages now!

P.P.S. I might get a kitten! "^'_'^"

Whoa. wait, what? Cliffhanger there and I'm not happy.
Christmas time is here again adn teh perfect gifts. They're amazing too, very cute.
I cannot believe ou just killed them. Stupid Severus, please confess and make Lily hate you. This will be the WORST Christmas for Lily... aw. So sad.
<333 Post soon.

ohhh..I liked that chapter, bit sad though... I can't wait for your next chapter...Post soon!!

~Rachel

P.S. Stupid Severus eve though that was my idea(lol)

P.P.S. Short message again! I know, I'm disappointed in myself too...

Heyy I just decided to post!

Yay! for your story you have two pages!! Post again soon!

Totally Random..LOL

<3 Rachel

I know tis sad.... but don't worry the second part will be up 2morrow. And Rachel... We should all hang our head in shame for your mistake... Yep that's me! Yep it is so lol! Anyway I want thank everyone who wrote good comments and to Rach for helping. I hope you like the story, and will stick to it til the end.

Long live Harry Potter ( Even though J.K stopped writing it.)

Miley

OMG!!!! OMG!!!! Harry Potter and the Order of the Pheonix is coming out on the 11th!!!! Well, at least for me it is. Okay my lame excuse for not posting sooner is 1) I lost the rest of the chapter. (I wrote it down.) and 2)I couldn't post last week is because my mom dragged me down to this meeting that she was going to. Then we went to her school play. Very busy night. Please you all forgive me!.... Anywayz Rachel scribblez back soon!

-Miley

That was very interesting. It was good. A little too lovey dovey snoggy rated R ie for me. It was still a good story.

That was one of your best chapters I have to say. I have to feel kinda bad for Severus, but only a little.Lolz! I forgot the traditionnal "Scribblez back soon!" in my last message to you! But don't worry, I'll put it twice in the next one, lol.
Great story, Keep Posting!

Love ya lots! (Friend way! For those people who have twisted minds...Again, lolz. I am WAY too hyper ^^)

Because of your last message on here which I only just read about 10 seconds ago..*hanging head in shame but trying not to burst out laughing*

And for the user Lily/JamesForever, how is this story rated R??!! I have to diagree...

Scribblez back soon Miley!!!!

Rachel <3

Everything's wonderful and nice and then BAM. Britney has to leave because she isn't safe. Horrible, losing a friend like that. How will they cope?
James told Lily about Remus and them? Wow... she thought it was sweet though!
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I'm Back!!
Hello everyone! You can all scream later after I'm done with feedback

So, GREAT chapters! Some were sad, some were funny and some were exciting, great combo! Why did Britany have to go? She was ultra-cool , but I guess we all have to make sacrafices for the good of the story... Anywho, keep posting and maybe add more detail to the important parts.

Thats all for today folks!
I'll be back...
<3

Scribblez away!

Rachel

(feel free to scream now)

brilliant chapter! the girls dresses sound absolutely stunning and fabulous!! the new girl seems pretty cool and it was funny that she wasnt accepted at first...well not funny but definitely different. all the dresses sound great and of course james's jaw will drop because of lilys lowcut-ish dress. but enough about the dresses!
sirius always cracks me up since he is just oh so great. his prank was cool too. i wish i could do things like that but 1. im not a witch(as much as i want to be) and 2. my parents would kill me if i did something bad because it wouldnt be the first time they were called for something bad i did...
keep on posting and i cant wait for the next chapter.
-nicky judge

whoa its been awhile since i posted feedback! i didnt realize that i hadnt left some.
ALL OF THEM ARE GETTING MARRIED!!!! woo hoo sounds great but there will probably be some sort of dilemna(sp?).i liked that lily and james were interrupted while james was proposing by sirius and courtney sinceits very original not to mention sort od awkward...
it was funny that lily was freaking that she might not be asked by james...i just found it funny since she usually doesnt seem like a freak out girl(for some odd reason freak out girl reminds me of fall out boy...random i know)...hahhah.
POST SOON! its terrible that you havent had any feedback and ill try to post more often.
-nicky

oops...i know i said i would try to post moreoftern but i didnt...oh well, i am now.
i really enjoyed this chapter but am kind of sad that their seventh year is over and done with...i am wondering what the marauders last prank will be and wondering if it has anything to do with the slythrins...im thinking it will but im not one to gamble so im not going to say anything else.
i loved the part about male models since it reminded me of zoolander(great movie) and the part about sirius having a son. but when sirius said he was going to teach his son everythig he knew or something like that it kind of made me upset since he doesnt get a son and he only gets to be a fatherlike figure to james son
great chapter and please post soon!
-nicky judge