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K8Egrrl
Please leave your reviews, questions, comments here. But don't just tell me you hate it!
talie
This seems like a pretty good story.

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Can't wait til tomorrow. Oh yeah, when you say longer, by how much? I really need something to read.
K8Egrrl
talie in response to your question its about twice as long, its up now. biggrin.gif and thank you for liking it! i do too wink.gif i will tryto continue posting every day but theres no guarantee. oh, the stuff in your spoiler box? you will find out but not till later ph34r.gif oh yeah im evil tongue.gif
happy-potter
Since you left me some nice feedback for my story and told you’d been inspired, I thought I’d go check your one out to see what was about it; and I must say that it’s really good! Is it your first one? I know you’ve only posted like two chapters, but I’m excited for more biggrin.gif Wow, in the first chapter you killed Neville sad.gif that made me really, really sad! I love Neville. I assume that Harry is… well Harry’s? The green eyes are not to be mistaken, and would Ginny ever love someone else? tongue.gif I assume you’ll write about the downfall of Voldemort, and can’t wait for more about this story! Post soon biggrin.gif
talie
So I strarted reading chapter 1. I was halfway through the 1st paragraph and i was really confused. I thought Harry (the one you killed) came back to life or something. What a shock to give me when i come back from school!

Well anyway, i passed over "Ginny Weasley turned on the spot and she and her son..." so i was still confused until i came to "Mum, what's going on?"

That explained everything.

Good work. You can take your time writing because I know how much time school takes. (I'm in the second week.) It's not like you have a deadline or anything, which is good for you.


*Now I read your new post. For a second i forgot Voldemort was still alive.

* I hate it how you can't double post. So i read your latest with the dementors and all. Isn't one of them going to cast a potrunus, not sit there and wait? So Harry Jr. won't learn magic? I just thought of this: is Ollivander still alive in your story? You know, he didn't die of natural causes or something yet? Those are all the questions i have for now. Hope the storm rides out!
K8Egrrl
yes there will be patronus-ing, talie, i was just getting to that. i might have to type it tomorrow, though. thanks for reading! biggrin.gif
happy-potter
Ah! And then we’re just left there because of a stupid storm! Grr! I don’t know how I’ve missed ch 2, but I couldn’t understand ch 3 three so I had to go back. Haha. Uh, what are they going to do about the Trace? And will Harry learn magic? biggrin.gif please post soon.
talie
I think i know what happened. well, i have an idea of who the "dark-cloaked figure" is but it could be someone else. but i'm pretty sure i think i know who it is. and if it is who i think it is then i know how he found them. (I don't feel like saying his name for some reason right now)

hope i'm not confusing anyone. I love this story already. Good job and keep writing!
K8Egrrl
happy-potter: magic will not be a problem, but the trace might... you'll have to wait and see.. I've said too much! shutup.gif

talie: be careful for things are not always what they seem... and that's all I'm tellin'! ph34r.gif

Thank you guys for reading Where Your Treasure is, There Your Heart Will be Also! I really appreciate the feedback biggrin.gif Keep reading, my adoring fans! wub.gif
talie
aww. we're your adoring fans... how nice of you to say that.

so, Luna is a DE. i'll try and get used to that. was Harry reading her mind or something? he seems to know a lot for being...eleven, i think. can't really remember. now i'll try not to get ahead of myself when predicting what happenes next.

he's still coming, right?
happy-potter
Argh, argh and ARRGH! How did I miss this much? I don’t get it… Anyways… Luna – Death Eater?!?!?!?! The whole world has turned upside down. Next Voldemort will start handling out sweets! I bet it’s him who has come for Harry! Blimey, he’s so powerful! ARGH! Will you just please post soon so I can read. ! biggrin.gif
talie
I'm trying to let it all sink in at the moment. It's going to be hectic when they find out he's missing. Well, this is just about all i can say right now. Good job! keep it coming.
happy-potter
Wow! I’m trying to understand it all. This is all magic way beyond what we’ve seen before! Harry is taken! And I’m still in shock over Luna being a Death Eater! But the main question is still: What will happen now?! arrgh… Great, but pleasepost soon!
Potterfan7
Let me just say that I love your story but I want to give you two tips. Please don't hate me? unsure.gif

1. As long as their is a witch or wizard in the family(Parent) 11 year olds do not have the trace on them unless Voldemort already had a trace on Ginny which seems impossible because from what I read Luna had been looking for Ginny for a while.

2. You need a link to your feedback thread in every chapter you write like you did with your first chapter so that we won't have to scroll all the way up every time. To make it easier you could also add a link to your signature so that people can have access to both your fanfic and your feedback thread even when you are posting in other forums.

I must say that the story is very interesting! I am confused about what Voldemort say about Harry not being the right one?? When was Harry Jr's birthday?? I am pretty sure Harry Sr. defied Voldemort more than three times?? I am sure you will explain all these questions as the story goes on but it goes to show you that you have captivated my attention and that I am looking forward to reading your next post. biggrin.gif biggrin.gif

K8Egrrl
Hello, all, I'm back and so is the next chappie! biggrin.gif So read it or DIE!!!! mad.gif Haha, just kidding. laugh.gif

happy_potter and talie: Thanks for all the comments! Loyal Fanbase of Adoring Worshippers: 2! That's two more than before! (no offense to anyone else who reads my fic! tongue.gif If you want to join, read my story and comment often!)

Potterfan7: Yeah, you're right about the Trace, but as you can see, Harry has a "gift" with magic and magic like his Patronus (lion, Griffindor, yah-huh! rolleyes.gif ) would be checked out, adult or not. Ginny knew he was good, even if she didn't know he could do that. And I added a link to my post but don't really know how to add to my siggy...

If anyone has any questions feel free to PM me, or just ask here! Thank you to all who check my fic regularly! Enjoy! biggrin.gif
talie
I read it so i'm not dying

I come on here and check your fic everyday! More like 3-5 times a day! crazy, i know. it just shows how bored i am and have nothing better to do than come on here and wait for a single fanfic to be updated. wow.

i have to let this sink in a little too. actually, i'm not sure if the one before it really did. i'm going to reread the whole thing now, let it all in. (it's okay, you can call me weird. i already do that.)
Potterfan7
Hum.......WOW! I can't believe you just did that. Leaving us all excited and expectantly. I can see that you can capture a reader's attention extremely well. I can't wait for your next post as the story has turned very dramatic and I can't wait to see Harry Jr's fate.
happy-potter
Haha! I won’t kill you! biggrin.gif and really, it wasn’t that similar. If you hadn’t said it, I probably wouldn’t have noticed it. Well, maybe I would have. But it was good! I was sure it was Draco Malfoy the same second you described him biggrin.gif but it really was good! Love it. Keep up!
K8Egrrl
I added more to the last chapter so read it! byeeee!
talie
I had no clue it was Draco. They're going to escape together now. cool. Harry was really being sarcastic, right? How are they getting out with no cloak or wand or map? I hope i read it right. if you didn't post on here saying you updated your last post, i would've passed over it when you updated; or i might've noticed when i look at the post above to refresh my memory before i read the new chapter. hope it makes sense

*You're welcome for helping for the idea of chapter 11. If I wrote how that chapter went, I'd suck at it. I wouldn't even think of the Deluminator, or what Ginny would do. Great work! But now i have no idea as to what's happening next.

*I use the edit button way too much. and here're some questions that i just thought of:

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Are we going to get anything else from the Voldemort/Luna perspective?

um...i had one but i can't remember it. oh yeah, what about Draco and Harry jr escaping? How are they doing it? Will ginny and the others end up getting them out?
K8Egrrl
Thank you for sticking with me, talie! biggrin.gif And you are allowed to post again! I think... ph34r.gif
I answered all your questions in your PM, but I'll put them up for anyone who still cares. sad.gif *sniffle*

From your spoiler box- the answer is: Possibly, but not in the same way as the book.

I am not thinking there will be a Luna/Voldemort perspective again (the slash does not mean they are one person!) but I have things planned for both characters.

Draco and Harry do indeed have an escape plan, which will be executed in the next chapter or one after.

Read my fanfic! Please? mellow.gif

Chapter 13 is up!!! Enjoy! smile.gif

And 14!!! Enjoy that too! tongue.gif
talie
yay, i get to post again!

Now i'm confused.What happened to everything Harry Sr has been told about the prophecy and all that? Am I missing something or is it going to be cleared up later on?

next chapter's the breakout. woo! is it full of action? i guess we'll see
Potterfan7
Wow, uhm...Interesting twist. In my opinion though I thought that Harry been told he had a son should have been a little more dramatic. I love the stoy and you might have inspired me to write a story from that point of view myself. I wanted to run it by you first because I think this story is the one of the top stories I have read so far and believe me I have read quite a few. I can't wait for your next chapter as you stated is the breakout chapter. I am expecting non stop action.! biggrin.gif Please hurry and post soon.
happy-potter
Okay first: sorry I’ve not left feedback for a while (I think?) But I’ve been busy.
Secondly: AW! Harry’s alive! Well, not alive, but a ghost! But he’s there!
One question though, why weren’t he more surprised? I’d have fainted if it was me. But now they’re going to rescue Harry jr! YEAH! Go everyone except Voldy and Luna!
Oh, a question more: Is Luna under the imperious curse? I just still can’t believe she’s with Voldy! Grr!
Post soon! biggrin.gif
K8Egrrl
Hello and thank you for coming back! Haven't seen any of you except talie for quite a while now...

The answers to your questions(or, at least some answers)

talie:there will be clearing-upping on the whole prophecy thing. prophecy is about harry jr. (if you hadnt figured that out) and therefore he must defeat Voldy. Dumbledore said there is no doubt it was Harry sr., but Dumbledore cant see the future!

potterfan7:Harry's finding out was less dramatic because at this point so much had happened things couldnt really surprise him anymore, if that makes sense. He's not just overlooking it though, he trying to stay calm and not explode.

happy-potter:your first question, see above. and ron's the fainting one. tongue.gif And Luna, no, not the Imperious curse. It wasn't too clear, I realize, but in Chapter 5 Voldemort mentions breaking into her mind. He sees all her fears and weaknesses and convinces her somehow to "join the dark side". Dun dun dun dun da dun dun da dun... (star wars) oh, but I have things planned for Luna. Secret things. You'll have to read Chapter... oh, no, you won't trick me!!!

Thank you all for reading! Chapter 15 will be up soon!

Potterfan7
Awesome what a treat. Back to back chapters within a short period of time. I thought that the part with Harry and Draco was really funny. I wonder how Harry Jr. is going to react when he sees his father. Thanks for answering our questions it cleared up a few things. You are a great writer and have me totally hooked biggrin.gif biggrin.gif
talie
Do you think you could please leave another feedback link in there since there hasn't been any for a while? Are they all going to be locked in a cell? Maybe seperate cells because, as the Sorting hat once said "Strong as we are united" or something. Great story! keep it going! I didn't notice they were actually playing out their plan until "He's got a wand!" or something like that. I can't quote it directly because i'm kinda in a hurry for school. Did I mention that this is the only fanfic i'm reading and keeping track of?

*is it over? That was way too fast, if it really is. Aparently, I refuse to believe it! Please tell me it's not over!

"he suddenly stopped being the frightening overlord that controlled the wizarding world and became a frightened old man." funny
K8Egrrl
Guys, talie alerted me to the fact that it appears this fanfic is over. sad.gif It may seem that way, but it is NOT!!! biggrin.gif Trust me, it still has a ways to go. I'd say it's more than half done, but not nearing the end, really. That chapter was written to show that the tables have turned, and also to put emphasis on the unity of the characters. Merlin, I sound like my English teacher! blink.gif And also, if you see any new fanfics by K8Egrrl, it doesn't mean I'm done with this either! smile.gif Ooopsies... shutup.gif

Ah, yes, and talie, Voldemort is pushing seventy at this point, so he is an old man... but that is a funny mental picture, isn't it? laugh.gif
talie
I've been thinking, did he die? The snake, Nagini, is she still alive because you never said she died unless i missed it. A little less than half to go - What will be going on?

*the lightbulb lit up. I was reading ch. 17 thinking he was still alive for some unknown reason then went back the last part of ch. 16. the last two lines cleared it up. One blast and he's gone! But he had a (family) reunion. Bella must be so happy to see him again!
K8Egrrl
Yes, Chapter 17 is up, so READ IT!!! biggrin.gif

I just went in and named all the chapters, basically because I felt like it and came up with a really good title for Chapter 19. So go back through, and tell me what you think! biggrin.gif Do you wub.gif or mad.gif them? Ok, I should be arrested for excessive use of smileys. laugh.gif

P.S. Yes, Bella is very happy to see Voldemort. tongue.gif

talie
Just wondering, do you type the story in Word then copy and paste to your post or just sit there and type it in your post? oh yeah, i like the chapter titles that start with Darkness... They made me laugh because there were three of them right after another. And i kinda want to know what Ch. 19s is. please post soon!

P.S. I don't think you should be arrested because then you wouldn't be able to finish your story
K8Egrrl
Sorry, all, but I'm afraid I'll be taking a short break from writing this fic. Don't worry, I will return. I'm not sure how long I'll be gone, but not too long, hopefully. Thing is, I've hit a bit of a bump in the road with my fanfic. I can't think of anything, and I'd REALLY like to start working on my other fanfic. So please, bear with me, and give my other fic a try!
talie
You said more in the actual fic. And there was a couple smileys. Oh well. I just had a thought, is there a reason why it's titled "Where Your Treasure Is..." because books usually have a connection to it. Like you find out why it's titled that. Unless we find out later.

But anyways, I can wait. Just hope I don't, um, forget about it.
K8Egrrl
Umm... I named the story what I did because I loved that quote, and it seemed to fit the general mood of the story... mellow.gif
Lily/JamesForever
That was awsome! Sad about it all. Please write more!! I need to leave this sad part! Write! Write! More! More! PLEASE!
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