Well this is my one shot for the contest. Tell me what you think and please be brutal , I've never ever written a fic or a one shot about Harry so this was a double first for me

Hi Stef!
I came by and saw your fic! Really nice work!

I loved it how you portrayed Harry's usual awkwardness towards the world, how he felt alone and then, he was rescued, by his loved ones, who proved to be loyal to him once again. It was really sweet how he managed to fight because of the new life he had to take care of, and it was really funny what Ron told him. I love how you handle the characters and make them act and say things they most probably would have. (Ron would probably make a comment like that one in the end! I just loved it!)

Great work Stef! You're a great writer! Keep up the good work! (So I guess there's no need to say I just love your Sirius fic, right? Hahaha!)

Oh my, Stefany, that was such a sweet one-shot. I think you’ve written Harry and Teddy so well! Good work!

I love stories that pay attention to the atmosphere and inner feelings of the characters. Just the way you do in the story. What really made this story for me is:

I think this is the most natural reaction Harry could have had. His feelings of loneliness and desperation must be, of course, multiplied by the sheer fact that it is Christmas and witches and wizards are with their loved ones, the ones Harry has lost.

I’m really glad you’ve included this little contemplation. I’ve always had a feeling that despite the many deaths Ms. Rowling presents to her readers, she doesn’t spend an appropriate time on mourning them. Right after the battle, Harry goes to bed, looking forward to a sandwich, and then he marries Ginny and lives happily ever-after. But I think life is not as simple as that and the dead ones need to be mourned properly. I’m convinced the deaths in Harry’s life must have affected him in a great way, and I’m so happy you’ve allowed us a little glimpse of what he really might have felt like.

Though Harry is eighteen and has gone through so much, you are right in emphasizing this side of him:

Again, it is so natural that he would like to hide in Lily’s arms.

In other words, with Harry’s portrayal you strike an amazing balance between what he is like in the books and what he should have experienced as a real human being capable of feelings and emotions. Well-done!

I haven’t met Hagrid much in fanfic, but I must say that you portray him so well. Hogwarts is not complete without him and when you write,

it’s Hagrid all over again and with him Hogwarts is simply the way it should be.

And I love the tiny little detail of Teddy changing his hair. That was very sweet.

I must say, well-done! Keep up the good work!

~Jana

That was sweet. Harry is not alone! So far, you are the only contest fic I read that had Teddy in it. It was nice how, when Harry held Teddy, he remembered he was not alone.