Hey.
Grim Affairs is my first fanfic so leave your feedback here. I really want to know whether you think it's any good or if I should carry on =]

It's about my favourite character, Sirius Black, so I hope I do him justice and you think that it's good =]

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That was pretty good to start with.
For once in a while, it's about Sirius and another character. You're doing the characters justie just fine. Explaining who they are and all other characters for the matter. Keep it up.
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Jessica

Hmm....good start. I think that this story will be just as great as the others. Hope you have a good time writing it while I read it!!!

Expect feedback.

<3 darktime93 a.k.a. Giggles

Good start so far, I'm definitely interested. You did a good job setting up the story for whatever is to come. I like how you have it focusing on Sirius and Keira. Are you going to continue with that or switch to L/J? Anyway, love what you have so far!

Hey thanks for leaving feedback
I'm glad people like it

I should have the next chapter up later on... I'm writing it at the moment so it shouldn't be too long.

hp lover<3 L/J will feature in my fic but not much, just like in passing, but as Sirius is my favourite character I'm focusing it on him and Keira.

Thanks for your feedback, I'll try and finish chapter 2 soon.

Kelly
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Okay, Chapter 2 is up now =]

Sorry, it's later than I said it would be but I hope you all like it.

I'm writing chapter 3 at the moment, should hopefully get that up in a few days =]

Kelly
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Hmm.....good post!! Okay, I really like the way Sirius ran into Keira...hahahaha.Awww....I wanted a Lily/James fic...ohh...well....I still love Sirius . Post ASAP!!! Expect feedback from me!!

<3 darktime93 a.k.a. Giggles

I like that you're doing a Sirius/Keira fic. It should be good, and I like how it's different. I feel bad for poor Sirius. He's really beating himself up over pushing Keira over. I'm really curious to know what Keira's true feelings for him are. She seems to be a little messed up and confused about all that just now.

hey! i just read your story and i tins so far so good. its interesting to read about sirius instead of j/l but its definitely working so keep it up! i liked how sirius ran into keira and how she shouted at him. its kind of a reversed kind of thing you have going on because usually james would be running into lily and she would be yelling so its funny thats its happening to sirius. post soon bcause i definitely want to read the next chapter!
-nicky judge aka PrisonerOfAzkaban

Aha!
Sirius likes Kiera a lot and he thinks she hates him.
Keira likes him as a friend, that's bs though, and wishes they were friends.
Explantaions in all the crying? They're in love and think they've lost a chance.\
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Chapter 3 is up now

<3 darktime93, I'm sorry it's not an L/J fic, but I can assure you there will be some in there - but obviously it isn't my main plot line. But i'm not completley disregarding them

JSB 073 - in all honesty the crying was purely for the cheese effect. And because I wanted to show how much they were beating themselves up over everything, How Sirius was just piling all of his feelings up on top of them - not just Keira - so that he just became so frustrated and upset and crying was his way of letting it all out, and Keira was kinda of the same. Teen Angst

Thanks to everyone else for leaving feedback as well I'm glad people are reading and enjoying my fanfic =] Chapter 3 is up now as I said, I know the story is kind of moving on slowly, but don't worry have a big ideas for, not the next chapter but the chapter after - sorry to say that the next one's just going to be introducing things a bit more still - there is some exciting things going to be happening it, and it's not going to be completley boring and dull - but the main, big idea i have at the moment is being saved for chapter 5

Keep reading

Kelly
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Everything seems t be going horrible for them. They're thinking other thoughts than the true ones of what each other feel. Does that even make sense?
Keira really does love Sirius if she has that jealousy within her that wasn't ever there before.
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I liked Chapter 3, like you said it was slow, but effective. It gave more insight into Sirius and Keira's true feelings for each other. Now we know for sure how Keira feels otherwise she wouldn't have gotten jealous with the kiss. I like how you showed why Sirius chooses to act the way he does around girls. I'm not saying it's right, but at least there's reason. I really want to see what Keira does about the kiss...

Hey, thanks for leaving feedback

JSB 073 - But does she really?? And hopefully it wont be going horrible for them in a few chapters - I don't know, haven't made my mind up yet Should I torture them with their feelings or let them be happy? heh (rhetorical question btw if you hadn't guessed )

hp lover<3 It was slow, I'm sorry for that - I have a tendancy to explain things a little too much, but if it was effective thats great I'm glad you thought so. And yes, Sirius actions really aren't right - but I didn't want to make him out to be a cold hearted womaniser either...

I'm about to start writing the next chapter in a bit - I have a bit of work to do beforehand though, but I'm hoping it'll be up by tomorrow

Kelly
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Hey just to let you know chapter 4 is up now.

Finally! sorry it's been so long but I've had a ton of school work to do.

I'm hoping to get chapter 5 up by tomorrow night or sunday to make up for the wait.

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I loved that chapter. It started out well with Sirius telling Claire the truth and stopping the kiss so he wouldn't hurt her more, which was nice. Then we got a little insight on the whole L/J relationship; poor James, if Lilly would only think he's genuine. I can't believe Claire slapped Sirius; she seems to be a bit of a drama queen. I didn't really understand why Sirius was crying. Was he crying because he was sad about Keira? Anyway, their walk to the tree was really cute, and I'm Sirius just went and hugged her. I must admit I thought they were going to kiss then, but I think it would be too soon in the story. She finally knows how she really feels!! Keira can't deny it anymore.

Sirius being the better person stopped kissing Claire before it went too far.
Keira and Sirius were just feeling bad and everyone seems to have the wrong perspective of Sirius. Keira knows him though. I can't believe he was crying, but they went to their "spot" from second grade. And he hugged her. They stared into each other's eyes and jusst sat there. Then Keira couldn't do it and ran. Ran from what? Ran from love....
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hp lover<3 I'd like to leave it up to all of you why Sirius had been crying But I personally think he was crying because he was frustrated, not so much because he was sad, because everyone thinks of him as something he isn't and they all have this false impression of him when he only means well. Like JSB 073 said, they all have the wrong perspective of him and this is his way of dealing with it. Poor Sirius

JSB 073, You seem to have a better insight into this fanfic than I do I'm glad you understand it - I didn't think I was explaining it that well
And yeah, Keira ran from love - and you'll find out why in the next chapter ^^ Though I think some of it will be pretty obvious really..(L/J much? )


Anyway, Chapter 5 is up now.
Hopefully over the next week I can write two better chapters of a better length as well. sorry they've been so short and well, kind of uneventful but i've had loads of school work to do so my fanfics been suffering

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Well Keira finally stated it. She likes Sirius back but is afraid from everything.
Getting hurt, hurting Cassie, and hurting Lily. It's a good thing she keeps her friends close, but what about her heart?
It seems to me that Sirius is hurting and trying to forget, but he's not gonna be able to. He's in love and so is Keira. Yes, Lily and James much.
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I like how concerned Keira is about her friends' feelings. That's really nice to be a good friend to people. I think she's worrying too much about them though. The Cassie thing happened years ago, and Lily doesn't get along with James; not Sirius. She needs to give poor Sirius another chance. I feel so bad for him right now; he can't just keep moping. Hopefully, some fun time with the Mauraders will cheer him up.

Hey thanks for your feedback everyone.

JSB 073, Keira feels like her friends are more important than her heart, and that aslong as she has her friends, she'll have people that she loves and who love her around, but she's naive and doesn't realise that she should give Sirius a chance because its what her heart wants.

hp lover<3, You're right, she is worrying about her friends too much, maybe she'll realise?? I wont tell you though. And as I read your post I was finishing up the next chapter, in which Sirius does have some good old Maruadery fun I'm getting to predicatable

chapter 6 is up now anyway, I hope you all enjoy it, it's a bit more action packed than the last few chapters which is good and the next chapter will be very eventful also

Thanks again for feedback

Kelly
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Hey! I never left feedback for your story before, but I've been reading whenever you posted a new chapter. That last chapter was really good and I can't wait to read more! Post soon.
Kirsten [:

Seems like things between Keira and Sirius are going well. After his apology, it seems like she's fallen head over heels for him- very hard.
It's like they're friends again and they're going to meet.
What's up with Cassie? She just sorta, I don't know.
And full moon can't be good. I think the whatever in the bushes when Keira went to the tree is Remus as a werewolf AND Sirius will save her.
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The prank was cool...too bad Peter messed up and they attacked Keira instead of Snape. Oh well, it gave Sirius the opportunity to get back on Keira's good side. He's been acting really sweet to her, it's very cute. I hope Cassie's going to be okay; that was very unexpected. I want to see what happens by the tree though. I hope everything turns out well

Kirsten, Thanks for leaving me feedback I'm glad you like my story.

JSB 073, The things with Cassie are kind of explained a little more in the next chapter but I promise you'll find out everything in the next few chapters. I haven't completley decided what it's going to be so all of you can leave me feedback and give me ideas if you like . And you may be right about Sirius and Remus

[b]hp lover<3[b], thanks for leaving feedback Yeah its unexpected, but like I said above, things with Cassie will be explained soon, maybe not as soon as people would like but soon I promise =]

Thanks all of you for leaving me feedback. I like reading what you all think of it
Chapter 7 is up now, I hope everyone likes it, I wasn't too happy with the start but I hope you all are... meh leave me feedback and tell me what you think

Kelly
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Wow that was an intense chapter. Remus was so close to hurting Keira. Luckily, James and Sirius saved the day! I'm glad everything turned out alright. I'm especially happy that Keira doesn't really remember anything and that she's happy with Sirius. I just feel bad for him, because she doesn't give him a chance. I can't wait until they get together

Oh wow. Thank gosh everybody is safe and sound. Sirius was so worried.. how sweet? And typical James and Lily. WHta else would you expect?
Cassie. What's up wiht her? I really do have no guesses. You haven;t given us a lot to foreshadow on.
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Thanks for the feedback guys.

And sorry I haven't posted anything in a while, It's been an odd few weeks, I haven't really been too great but I finally wrote something, It's not great but I hope it'll do until I finish the next chapter, which I'm writing at the moment and I'll try and get that up tomorrow sometime to make up the sheer rubbishness of the latest chapter which is up now.

JSB 073 - I promise you everything about Cassie will be explained in the coming chapter - I've finally decided what happened. I kind of hint at it in the latest one, but I don't think it's that obvious really.

hp lover<3 - I'm glad you thought it was an intense chapter - I hated it because I've never really been an action writer, I was hoping I would pull it off and luckily it seems I have ^^ And yeah, Keira's kind of irrational - I always was taught to write what you know, so I based some of her characteristics and isms on myself, so she came out to be irrational and someone who doesn't give people much of a chance - but I always end up trusting people eventually so who knows, maybe she will give Sirius a chance soon?

Thanks for leaving feedback - I've been kind of down that I don't get much, but it's always nice to read yours

Again, Chapter 8's up now - hope you like it, I promise you the next chapter will be so much better!!

Kelly
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Page 394. I laughed out loud at that part, I don't know why though. I was just reminiscing I suppose...
Keira knows what happened and tries to make Sirius tell her the truth. Horrible liar. He can't lie even through his teeth. So she blows him off and he's left to feel terrible about himself.
Keira does it to Lily too? Not good. But also..
Cassie. Now there's a subjct to speak about. Keira will be fine, but I'd like to say otherwise about Cassie. You're now giving good hints at all and it's eally frustrating! AH!
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I really like this fic but, I'm rubbish at leaving feedback 'cause I never know what to say, if I don't like a story then I stop reading it - I'm not a good critic. But. your fic is obviously good 'cause I'm still here.

im-loveli-rli

Hey, really good chapter! I agree with what JSB 073 said about the page 394, it made me laugh. Anyway, really good chapter and I wouldn't worry about not getting that much feedback. I thinkt that a lot of people are reading, but they just don't know what to say when they leave feedback. That's what I used to do and I'm still not good at it. So don't worry
Post again soon!
Kirsten [:

I feel bad for Keira. She can't remember a thing. Remus should feel guilty. But then again, he didn't know at the time who she was so... I guess I can feel bad for him too. Anyway, please more! I can't wait.... Hopefully I can...

-Miley

Heh, to everyone who mentioned that they found page 394 funny - I'm so glad you did, I'm not too good with jokes and comedy but I was hoping for that effect

Thanks everyone for leaving feedback

I would say more - but I don't have much time, but thankyou so much

Anyway chapter 9 is up now, it's in 2 parts but mainly focuses on the Keira part because I finally explained the whole Cassie situation. The next chapter will have more SiriusxKeira action and hopefully a little L/J in there too. I'm not quite sure though - I haven't planned it yet. I wont be able to get chapter 10 up as quickly as I did with this one because I have yet again even more work to do I hate school.

But I really enjoyed writing this chapter - I think the soundtrack thing really made more enjoyable for me I have the indpendent-ish song for Keira and I have the cute adorable one for Sirius to show how he really feels about Keira. But yeah I really enjoyed writing it so I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it

Kelly
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First. I love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love Boys like Girls! Amazing band. Thunder is one of my favorite songs so I was ecstatic you told me to listen to it. Just another reason to listen to it. =]
I'm happy Cassie is back and alive... but about her parents. That could be the death of her. It's horrible, parents as Aurors and you aren't safe? Scary horrible.
Hogsmeade was nice. Sirius and Keira don't have awkward silences, I really like that. They just need each other's company. Too bad Sirius was left while Keira had to go to Cassie, understanding though?
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Really, really good chapter! I really liked how Kiera met Sirius in Hogsmeade it was really cute! I can't wait to see what happens, please post again soon!
Kirsten[:

Okay first off, I am soooooo sorry I haven't updated in almost a month. But I've literally had 5 essays to do for school, and exams are coming up so the workload is getting heavier and heavier now

JSB 073 - I love that song too it's so amazing and I was listening to it and it fit perfectly with how Sirius feels about Keira. I'm glad you liked the last chapter

DEMENTORSKiSS XOXO - I didn't think it was that good a chapter but I'm glad you liked it.

Haha I've been evil and left it on a cliff hanger now *evil laugh* mainly to motivate me to write the next chapter sooner. And this time I really promise you it'll be way more exciting. I know I've said that before and it hasn't been exciting in the slightest because I just wanted to get a chapter up.

Anyways, Chapter 10's up now, and I promise I wont leave it so long to post again this time
Enjoy

Kelly
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*Edit - Okay so I've completley figured out where the story's going, what's going to happen, exactly how it's going to end and everything so hopefully that also means that I can get chapters up a lot quicker now that I know what direction it's going in.
But don't worry - it's not going to be ending in a hurry.

You come back with a cliffhanger? Not cool man. haha. Just kidding.
Seems like things between Keira and Sirius are going well... what I can't believe is what Sirius was reading! Pride and Prejudice... nice lying about what it was about. It's only one of the most known romance novels ever... Haha.
Hopefully Keira will learn the truth about that night sometime soon.
And the whole note thing and him frustrated... completely confused.
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Hey chapter 11's up now, I've put anyone who was annoyed at the cliff hanger out of their misery. It's all been explained.

I know it's depressing, I'm sorry. I promise to bring some more light hearted stuff back next time.

JSB - Thanks for leaving me feedback Its always appreciated. Haha, I loved the idea of him reading Pride and Prejudice. In all honesty I needed him to be reading something and that just happened to be near me And yeah, he had to act all manly for Keira. Couldn't seem a wimp
And you don''t have to be completley confused any more, the next chapters up and tells all.

So yeah, everyone go read chapter 11 and leave me feedback

Kelly
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Oh my gosh. Wow. Just-just wow. I don't know what to say. I wanted to cry, but I didn't because I'm not up to that right now. I had a bad day and blah blah blah.... but the emotions were well put. The only family left is gone forever... and that is all the melancholy in the world.
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I loved the whole thing. I think your such a great writer, you have a certain way of putting things, I just love it, haha.
Thought that chapter 11 was really sad, and it takes a lot to make me emotional, so well done!

Keep em coming

that was a really great chapter. i was really quite upset because sirius was upset since he is usually such a cheerful guy. i love how you got james to be with him and understanding him but i feel reaallyyy bad for sirius. keep the posts coming!
-nicky judge

Mod Edit: Excessive Characters are not permitted. I have edited your post to make 'really' a decent length. If you wish to discuss this further feel free to PM me.

Thanks everyone for feedback I'm glad I got emotional responses.

I don't have time to thank you all individually sorry but thankyou soooo much for your feedback everyone, it means the world to me that people actually like my story, and are sticking with it.

Okay so new chapter up. Its a bit boring, not what I wanted but I couldn't just dive straight into what I wanted to do, so this one is kinda setting it all up ready for what I wanted to do in this chapter.

Thanks a bunch again

Kelly
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**Edit - I've written the last chapter of this fic now aswell. It wont come for a while, I have a lot to do but atleast now I have something to work towards. Even if I don't get feedback

This is the beginning of a beautiful and developing relationship between Keira and Sirius. She was there for him and made him finally feel which is wonderful. I love how they are able to connect and how she will just be there. Sirius needs people to fall back on and to help him live on, but never forget.
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I wanna say thankyou to JSB seeing as you always give me feedback, and a lot of the time you're the only one to. *looks sad*

Anyway, I know I haven't posted a new chapter in a while, but at the moment I'm working on one and should hopefully have that up within the week.

I also found the very last chapter, I had forgotten I wrote that out ages ago. So I'm gonna work on posting more often in order to get to that last chapter that I wrote.

*pulls puppy dog eyes* However I'm not too sure I should carry this fic on, due to a lack of feedback, well I'll post the next chapter up bedore the end of the week and see what feedback I get for that and decide from there I guess.

Thanks again to JSB, I'm glad you liked that last few chapters. I wasn't too pleased with them because I didn't think I was able to get an emotional response or anything. But I'm glad you liked.

Kelly
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Smelly Kelly! Guess who just read your fanfic? Yeah you got it Oz did ... ok no it was me.
So I was looking for a way to distract myself from writing and I said to myself, lets check the smelly persons fic out and so I did and now its almost 2am and I haven't gotten any work done and I should be sleeping but I couldn't stop reading. So ok your first few chapters were a bit slow on action but these last ones were AMAZING!. You portay a very different Sirius. From chapter one you portay him as a sensitive guy who really does care instead of the egocentric womanizer who doesn't care about anything but shagging. I like the contrast from the Sirius I'm used to seeing (and writing to be honest). Now where oh where have I seen a girl with a side fringe and hazel eyes... hmmmm who also happens to have a cat (evils *kicks*) named Oz? Not fair that you're writing yourself with Sirius... remember he is mine after all!
So I'm loving your fic... I'm going to have to make sure you write a new chapter... ohh I know I'll take Oz until you do! *cackles*
Good work Smelly Kelly! Post soon!

-Stef

Oh my god Kelly!!! You're amazing!! why didn't you tell me you were so amazing?! I absolutely loved it. So, should I start calling you Kiera now? I noticed you named her cat after your cat so I can only assume that Kiera = Kelly. I loved the music selection for chapter nine...well part 2 anyways, not much of a hilary duff fan...I love the part when Kiera is comforting sirius after he finds out about his uncle, it's so sweet. ok lemme know when you post again, i love ya deary!
one of the two mothers of your daughter!
~Kristina

Two months later.
I finally updated my fic!
I know it's a really short chapter, but go read chapter 13!

Stef - Keira is not me! haha no, she really isn't Thankies for the feedback though! Can I have Oz back now? I'm glad you like my fic Yeah, I thought I'd write a more sensitive Sirius, who was still a womanizer, but doesn't really enjoy it, and just does it because he can, because he wants to find someone who can make him feel, but noone so far has. So he moves on and ends up being called a player So many people portray him being yucky and mean and a womanizer. But I wanted to change that stereotype =P

Krissy - haha, I know I'm amazing! Haha I'm not really, I just pretend to be Thankyou anyway, tis a nice ego booster! And once more, Kelly is not Keira! haha. She's just based on me, but isn't me. haha =] Thankies muchly for the feedback though, and I'm letting you know now that I've posted again!
p.s Hilary Duff rocks! haha, she's so bad that she's good.
I love our child =]

Kelly
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Hey Keira Kelly!

Ok fine *hands Oz back* but if you don't post again soon I'm going to have to take him back again! So I loved the display of fireworks. And Sirius is about the sexiest character! I guess its a good thing that you went against the stereotype of players being heart less! I get the whole him having to be with other girls to try to fill the hole! It gives your character a lot more depth!

Really your fic is amazing but I want more so I'm going to be annoying til I get more *pouts* please? With a cherry on top? Post again soon or else...

Love it!

-Stef

That chapter was great Kelly! A little short but super cute. Just for the record when I kick the bucket I expect you to be there with that fireworks display ...You owe little Amellina that much The scene at the end with Sirius and kelly kiera was adorable. It really supported the way you've characterized Sirius, to show him that sensitive over his uncle but at the same time recognizing the people who helped him and thanking them...not just being completely self-absorbed. All in all I loved it, post again soon dear!

love ya! (only occasionally in the lesbian way )

Kristina

Another new chapter!!
How amazing am I.
Go read it, and I hope more people leave feed back!

And can I just say
I AM NOT KEIRA haha.

Stef - Thankyou for giving Oz back =] I'm so glad you like my fic. As I said you're like the writing master of all of us, so it's a huge head sweller that you read, and like, my fic =] It makes me feel special lol. It's a huge ego boost that a great writer like you would say my characters have depth Now stop pouting because there's another chapter for you to read lol. Anddd It's long

Krissy!! - Of course you'll get a fireworks display when you kick the bucket. But you're not allowed to kick the bucket. Or I'll bring you back and kill you myself *puts halo back on* Haha, no seriously, you're not allowed to die my friend
And it also makes my head bigger that you like my fic too =] haha Thankies m'dear lol.

Okies, so I probably wont ever post again as quick as I did this time. But I promise to update more regularly now. I'm out of school in like two weeks aswell so I'll be posting more regularly then hopefully.
But also, I have the last chapter written up. And there's probably not long to go until it finishes. I need to decide if I'm going to make it a shortish fic or drag it out a bit longer and have more stuff happen between the characters.

Kelly
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