this is my first time to write a one-shot and the first thing to be posted at all
I know my English is not perfect but I'm trying to improve it, and I hope you would like my fic
any comments or Criticism is welcome

I think it's good that you summarized their duel in a couple of sentences and got it out of the way. Those duels are usually all the same, anyway.

I thought the whole conversation between Lucius and Draco was pretty boring. And I don't understand how the Felix Felicis facilitated it. It made Draco lucky, but it can't change his father's beliefs.

The ending was cute.

You say that English isn't your first language, but that's all the more reason to get a native English-speaking beta reader to go over your work for you before posting it. Your fic is full of small errors. Nothing terrible, it's all very understandable, but I would definitely suggest getting a beta reader for your next fic (or even to still fix up this one).

Draco was afraid that his father might stick to his ideas and believes and needed something to make him feel that he is going to succeed in his trial, that's the point isn't it?
I've always thought that Felix Felicis doesn't make a person lucky but give the self-confidence to do the things he or she wants (whether it was true or not, I find it more acceptable that way)

I know it was kind of boring I actually read it several times to make it less boring but obviously it was useless

thank you for liking the ending, it is my favorite part

maybe if I decided to write more stories I can count on a beta before posting
I'm glad to know that it was only small errors, although they are still errors and I hope I could avoid those errors next time


and thanks for your honest feedback, I really appreciate it

Hey, I've just read your fic, I quite liked it!

It was nice to see Draco trying to convince his father that muggles and muggle-borns are good people, that had no choice about who they were born as. I also agree with you about Felix Felicis - I don't think it makes you overly lucky, just combines a little bit of luck with the self-confidence to pull it off.

The conversation between Lucius and Draco was a little boring, but I think once you're a little more confident with written English and maybe with a beta, too, you're writing will improve. You've got the core ideas, and as SwissMiss said, you only had minor errors.

I hope you do well in the contest!

~Rebecca

thanks for these sweet words
I'm glad you liked it
as I said before I tried to make the conversation a little boring but was unsuccessful
I'm glad you read it
and I hope my coming fics are better