Hi this is a fanfiction for the March contest. please read it and leave feedback
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When I start reading a fic and the first thing I see is "Voldermort", I know I'm in trouble. I won't go into further detail, but suffice it to say that you would definitely benefit from having someone beta read your fic for grammar, spelling, and punctuation issues before you post it.

The duel was pretty standard and boring. Just a bunch of shouting spells at each other. It was nice that you had Harry give the Felix Felicis to Ron, but it doesn't make sense that Malfoy would just kind of stand there and watch while Harry did that and conjured a stretcher for Ron. He would have attacked him or somehow interfered. It was also kind of random how Voldemort just showed up out of nowhere and didn't even say anything. That is out of character for him. He always makes speeches before attacking Harry.

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