Ok so this is the feedback thread for my new fic...
I hope you guys like it and well any comment is always welcomed! Remember you guys spoiled me with feedback in the last fic soooooo yeah

Thanks!

-Stef

Hahaha, here I am, being your gamma! Go me! Eeee I was right exctied to read this lol

Weeelll that was a great first chapter! That's really great that you've started things sixteen years on ... I was expecting it to be from when she first had the baby but I like this way much better awww she called him James! That's sweet, and I suppose it's a shame for Jay that he looks so much like Sirius; it must bring back some memories but, we know Jay is a string, fiery character so she can get through it all!

Harry Potter is in the Prophet ... hmmm, I wonder if that means he's succeeded in murdering Voldemort yet ... because it is the holidays since James is home, but then Bellatrix said her and Voldemort had the wizarding world in theur grasp. Oooooh it's exciting!

So the Bellababy was born dead but there's someone at Hogwarts who can speak parseltongue, has an unheard of surname, was sorted into Slytherin and can open the chamber of secrets .... woooooo this is gurrrd!!

Great job Stef, keep it coming!

Cheers for letting me be your gamma! Beat that Jesse

~Amy <33

So apparently I'm the delta haha. But Stef I really liked your first chapter, it's a really good beginning.

Jesse and James and Jay. That's a lot of J's. Plus everyone else lives in Aussie aye? That's really cool.

So you're starting somewhere when Voldemort is back, but it seems like you're changing some of the details. Like who's in power. Is it good or is it evil? Hmmm......

Well that's all I have to say, I'm very intrigued. Good work girly!

Lauren

Stef's back Stef's back! *does little dance*

Amy and Lauren, sorry to disappoint you but I win...I IS A CHARACTER! haha yay me! And I is married to AJ...(Stef, remind me later I owe you for that one...shouldn't have said that you'll use it against me but oh well lol)

sheesh stef, couldn't wait at least one chapter before sending in plot twists? hahaha

It was really good, slightly depressing when Jay was looking at old pictures though. I is curious, how does the professor know Sirius? As far as I can tell he never went to Aussie... *thinks* ah well I'm sure there's a reason...

Baby Bella is the me monster! hahaha and she speaks parseltongue, figures. I'm confused though, how does she not know she gave birth to a living kid? I don't get how her sister could have lied about that...but I may be a little slow today (err...everyday...) so yea...

Yay! Feedback!

Nymphadora Lupin: I'll be sure to inform Jess that you beat him to it... though I don't think he'll care too much since right now he's... well busy. I considered starting where I left off but I figured why give you guys sooo many boring details about their life when the good stuff starts 16 years later. Ok so let me explain something, when its winter in the UK its summer in Aussie so that means that its summer break for James and well its before Harry goes to Godric's Hallow. I guess it is painful for Jay to look at her son but she loves him and Sirius... *shakes head* Ok so its good to be back and I'm glad you enjoyed! thanks for the feedback Gamma!

Ginny.Weasley: Delta! I don't really know the greek letters but thats what Amy said so yeah. Ok about your questions this is around Christmas time from DH so it means that Voldy's puppet was in power. I'm actually trying really hard to go with DH but I might not be doing it as I should. I'll try harder!! I'm glad you like it! Thanks for reading!

Weasly_Girly_83: *dances along* so you owe me? *makes mental note* I'll use this against you! I love twists its what I do... oh and I will include how Newport knows Sirius haha I have a good idea for that... Ok let me explain when a person gives birth... well I hear its painful now add happy thought sucking dementors all around... its enough to make anyone doubt if a kid was alive or not. Now I'll explain the Narcissa part later on. So thanks for reading and I'm glad you like Aliham! Oh and tell your kid off hehe he's a little trouble maker!

Ok thanks for the feedback! Working on next chapter

-Stef

Heya

Stef welcome back with a new fic and you start it of with some big twist hey. All your J's had me confused in the start but I figured it out when Jay went into er room to look at the old picture, that was sad that she cried when she looked at the pic. Anyways that was written good.

Now the evil baby is born and I take it your ic is about this dark character Elizabeth Shaville, I like her she sounds dangerous and what is life without a few risks and danger.

I feel bad for Bella that she lost her child but hey that is life.

Great start to a sequel of a bloody good first fic

DW

Back with a sequel Stef? I didn't even know you were writing one! But I'm excited! =]
Very nice start, sixteen years later? Such a large difference since when it last ended.
Jay completely left her life behind her... and James, he's Sirius's son. But Sirius has already excaped from Azkaban... does that mean he'll try to do something? Like find Jay?
Young James has the right to know his father... if only Sirius can explain he's inncoent. Maybe Jay can speak to Harry and everything will be resolved? Ooh... my wish. Nothing can be that simple.
Nice twist with Bellatrix. Her daughter's in Slytherin, the obvious. Parseltongue and we go back to the Chamber of Secrets? Whatever for?
Love it. Post soon.

well mono... ive got one thing to say to you *drum roll* ....
man you must have one heck of a beta!!!!!
no but seriously mono that was excellent. and no matter what you think it was not dull.... *jerks head up from it drooping in drowsiness* hehe just kidding mono
woah jesse is my son!!! trippy... but on the bright side im married to Kristina
jesse and james are little trouble makers.. *fatherly tone* ill have to have a talk with jesse when he comes back from visiting the mormons
poor Jay though, it must be bad being reminded of sirius everyday. though she loves her son so that's good.
eeeeeewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww Voldemort and Bellatrix had a kid . *blegh* gross
their daughter seems vile... i wonder who you based her character off of
well it was great mono! send me the next chapter so i can beta it soon
i liked how you drew those connections between her and her father though... "never inclined to make true friends" "orphan so the teachers pitied her" you know.. that stuff
sorry this wasnt my longest feedback yet...
hehe im a cyclops

YOU LIED TO ME! YOU'RE A LIAR! You said I was mentioned three times in this chapter but i was only mentioned twice! In the words of Patrick Star.... LIAR LIAR PLANTS FOR HIRE!

So yea i can't wait til next chapter cause I'll actually be in it... and I'm blanking on everything I read because it took me so long and umm... well... er... you heard what happened while I was reading... yea nobody else needs to know... *shudders* I'm scared and my eyes still burn! AHH! But on the bright side I have numchucks and crutchs! SWEET NATION! and the house is finally quiet.... quiet scares me! oh Tom replied hold on.... okay i'm back.. never mind he texted again this may take me a while... okay... now ummm well yea ummm it was good but like i said i can't remember it all because of... stuff.... i guess and yea so i can't wait til the next chapter cause i'll be in it... wait I think i already said that... all well so yea i'm done now!

Erin

yay i finally got around to reading it! great chapter and a good one to start off with. Just one thing though...Jay, AJ, Krissy and Jesse all live on 'the great southern land' (haha sorry just felt like saying that ) AND I DON'T LIVE THERE! WHAT IS THIS?!

I like how you skipped 16 years because like you said you skipped right to the good part

Aww poor Jay she's constantly reminded of Sirius and the life she left behind everyday...poor Jay. But then again James is the best thing that ever happened to Jay.

Elizabeth ay...sounds like the train that the me monster was trapped on is back in town
She sounds evil! Is someone going to kick her butt in the near future because that would be cool

Ooh with the whole Bella baby *cough* Elizabeth *cough* born in azkaban...maybe Narcissa made Bellatrix believe the baby was dead by memory modification! but then who knows

I think I've covered everything now...Great chapter

I'm so spoiled

dewet_pdw88: First off I had no clue you even read any of my fics so your feedback was a bit of a shocker to me. OK so yeah what can I say I'm a sucker for random twist in the plot of a story. Oh and I did notice there were loads of names with a J in the story... I dunno why I guess I've taken a liking to the Js. I figured I needed and evil character so why not combine the two evilest evils in the series and form a little mini evil blob. So ok I'm glad you enjoyed and thanks for reading

JSB 073: Heck yes Jessica is back!! *dances* I've missed your feedbacks! So yeah Sirius did try to find Jay but he didn't know about James. No one did for that matter. The thing is that this story takes place during DH so that means well that Sirius is already dead *sobs* and I cant very well bring him back to life now can I? And don't worry next chapter *cackles* someone from the past will appear... oh and there is a reason why the bella baby is going down to the Chamber of Secrets... you'll see. I'm so glad your back! Thanks for reading

eagleanimagous: AJ we already talked about the ego... so down boy *squirts face* To be honest I do have a great beta... yeah her name is Tahra hahaha. I'm just kidding with you! Your an amazing beta too!! Well dude it appears your son is liking mormon land way too much... he might be turning mormon so... his character will just have to start behaving. Isnt it weird that your son is older than you are? You know I think that Jay actually likes that her son looks like his dad because OMG is Sirius hot hehea (insert cool smiley there). Oh and the bella baby is baised on different evils I know. There are tons of evils in the world you know. I had to connect her and her daddy somehow, it seemed only right. So thanks again for the beta-ing job and I'm glad you left feedback even if you are a cyclops. *hugs* you rock! oh darn ego...

bounce.like.a.tigger: Well I'm sorry for my terrible lie! I'm so going to hell now! *gets in car and drives to hell while screaming "Brandon put down the knife"* Ok ok so yes next chapter you do something that infuriates your niece... which to be honest is pretty easy to do *Beep beep beep* Ohh look a text from Tom! You are a dork Blondie most of your feedback (if not all) is completely random stuff. But boy oh boy had I missed that! Thanks for reading!

Me_Hermy:1 of the Same: After all the baking and the nap you read it! This is my best form of distracting myself. It works tons you should try it! Oh come on Katie they live in Queensland which well isn't as close to you... or is it? Blegh I get confused and plus you weren't even born them (or you were a littlie awww) I'll be sure to get them to visit baby Katie. I guess little Elizabeth is very popular... yeah she's the bad guy of the story... all stories need one right? Well I'm glad you finally got around to reading and that you enjoyed! Thanks so much for reading and chin up!

Ok I'm working on the next chapter which I already have in my notebook but I have to type it up!

-Stef

yay new chapter
Poor James he knows nothing about his father, who apart from being a player is actually a really great guy, and Jay still doesn't know that it wasn't Sirius who murdered James and Lily.
AJ as a father a figure!
I'm glad Erin finally told Jay what she needed to hear, good on Erin. I think the message will really hit home and Jay will realize that Erin was right.
hahaha finally I'm going to come into this story ...when AJ, Krissy, Jesse and James go to *cough* the best city in Australia.
where is Jay when I need her to back me up?!
muahaha I bet Jay is a little ticked off seeing her old pal again

Great chapter Stef, I liked it. Post soon hopefully!

Alright I have a story about me reading your story... hahaha i think that sounds funny!

Anyway while I was reading I got to the part where I was about to go off and do something and I wanted to find out what it was but I had to go to a freaking study session for the AP test. So i had to sit in a classroom for 2 hours wondering what i was going to do... which is a really weird feeling when it's in this context. Not like oh crap what am i going to do because you screwed up major but what am i going to do next like anticipation and excitement to know... does that makes sense? I think you know what I mean. But then I come home and i read it and I don't even find out what the heck I did! You suck Stefany! hahaha

Anyway yea I'm amazing... WOOHOO I am so right and Jay should listen to me! BAM! There is a frist time fro everything! hahaha Now one question... who all am i related to... I'm Jay's aunt right? worng? blondie your an idiot? probably one of the first two and the last one.... hahaha wow I'm really hyper haha it's the chocolate man... putting it back in my system after 46 days let me tell you it's doing stuff to me. Like I killed my friend while we were playing bubblegum. Cause she said voldemort so we spelled out Voldemort and she got out so I was all AVADA KADAVRA! yea and she died... wow I'm a dork.. hehe oh well this is off topic so I won't post it now but remind me to tell you about what Alex and I did in Chinese. hehehe we're dorks. But that's okay!

So yea i can't wait for more... and who was that guy... please tell me he's like uber hot and sexy... like... say Edward Cullen! hahaha I would love you forever if you did that! hahaha Wow I need to eat less chocolate my hands are shaking and I'm bouncing hehehe it's FUN!... f is for friends who do stuff together... I know your thinkg gosh your weird Blondie and this has nothing to do with my story but it does in a strange way.... see I am the most amazing character in your story and I'm being myself so thus I'm on topic in a strange but true way! WOOHOO! hahahaha

Guess what... 128 days 3 hours 22 minutes and ah screw the senconds until... BREAKING DAWN! *squeals hyperventilates and falls off chair* yea that's right I went there. OUCH! I got a sunburn today... stupid PE i didn't know we'd be outside so I burned and then I'm gonna peel than I'm gonna be white again! GAH! why can't i tan... grrr...

oh right that was off topic... so I can't wait for more update ASAP! Or tell me what you're going to do. Like Alex did with the book she's reading I know what will happen in the last chapter of the series! hahaha so when it's famous I'll be like I know what happens and when stuff happens i know what happens next and yea i just know stuff and it's amazing. and then we're gonna make sure that when it's made into a movie all the male actors will be flippin GORGEOUS!

Yeah I'm done now it was great! hahaha this was my longest and my most random review yet... I'm teling you man it's the chocolate! hahaha
~Erin

ps now it's 14 minutes until Breaking dawn! hehehe

Stef! You didn't tell me you posted again, now I can't be gamma!! I guess that makes me ... *counts on fingers* ummmm the one after delta. Haha.

Awww I loved that chapter, it was great! It's nice that James and Jay have such a close bond, like a nice family ... minus the dad Aww she still doesn't know he's innocent, and she thinks he's still alive!!!! Aww man, you just had to keep it in canon!

I liked Erin's little rant, that was cool. Good to know that she's finally let Jay know what's right to do!!! And unless I'm much mistaken .... could Remus be paying a little visit to Down Under? Ooooh what a twist! I'm loving it! But we know he's going to die ... I hope he and Jay don't become too attatched though but then again, Jay might teach Remus to love Nymphadora since she managed to move on herself ... passing on wisdom or something

Hehee I have a tendancy to harp on about rubbish theories that turn out to be completely off the mark 9 times out of 10

Great chapter Stef, post soon pleeeeeeease! Must know what happens after the cliffy!

~Amy <3333

Aww. Poor James. Jay really needs to swallow it all and just tell him about her past. He had the right to know as her son, so why not?
I love the whole thing of flying over the ocean. I'd honestly enjoy that very much. Nice addtive.
Erin just wants what's best for both Jay and James, I see where she's coming from. Sending James away and getting Remus. Finding everything out. I think Remus will tell Jay that Sirius was innocent, but was murdered... I didn't know when it was all takign place, but it certainly clicking now... and it's quite sad.
Love it. Post soon.

What a nice chapter. You told us a lot thank you! Well for me anyway. I'm intrigued as to where this is going...suspense kills me. Keep up the great work!

--x Lauren

PS; I can't help it...I have nothing else to say It's brilliant!

Wow this thread was on the 3rd page!

Me_Hermy:1 of the Same: Aww Jay sorry but I miss that old girl! Well dear I hear that being a player runs in the family like its a part of the DNA or something hahaha. And hey Aj can be a father figure when he wants to be hahaha. Oh and ironically the character you're waiting for is from the UK. Crazy stuff huh? Well I'm glad you liked! Thanks for reading!

bounce.like.a.tigger: at times I wonder why oh why I'm friends with you if you're so scary! I'm kidding! who's my favorite blonde? Come on who is it? *whispers* its lauren so ok that was an interesting post! I'm glad I left you intrigued and naaa you didn't mess up but you were kind of a pain in the butt to poor Jay. Oh and I'm stoked about Breaking Dawn too but shhh that's another topic! So I'm glad you liked! Toodles

Nymphadora Lupin: you just had to guess it all didn't you Amy? Gosh! What am I going to do with you? I should trade you for a camel instead of Katie Kidding! So yes most of what you guessed was correct! So you hit the mark! I am like the one out of your ten! I think either you and I have been talking too much or your a mind reader . Well I'm glad you enjoyed and I'll let you know tomorrow first thing that I posted but I dunno you are busy studying and all. Thanks for reading!

JSB 073: Well I always thought, if I had a flying broom I'd fly over the ocean just to feel the breeze on my face. So Jessica dear you guess correctly about it being Remus but he didn't say a word about Sirius . I want her to find out a different way. All of this is taking place during DH (note that is why I added the whole Daily Prophet thing). So yeah Remus is going to die soon because I'm keeping everything in canon as Amy said. I'm glad you liked and that you left feedback! Thanks for reading

Ginny.Weasley: inspired words Lauren dear. Hahaha well you kinda already know what is going to happen so I doubt you're very intrigued . I'm glad you enjoyed and that you're still taking the time to read my work even though its not up to scratch

So thanks all for your feedback! Honestly you feed my writing abilites!

Toodles

-Stef

Hey Stef!

Okay, first I have to apologize. I had no idea what you'd written a sequel! And I'm so sorry for first catching up now. I'm so mad at myself! I'll go through the chapters one by one.

Okay, first chapter: I was very confused at the beginning, but when his names was called; James Andrew Black my mind was like '..... OH MY GOD! OH MY GOD! OH MY GOD!' haha. Jay has done a great job with hiding her feelings so far, but it's not healthy. As James points out; she doesn't show emotions. She should stop doung that. And if she'd read the Prophet, she'd probably know by now that Sirius is in fact dead. I'm really sad that he did not get to know he had a son. Oh and another thing, that girl, Elizabeth Shaville... is she the brood of Voldemort??? I am not feeling very good at that thought. It - is - disturbing! AHH!!! But despise that really disgusting thing (EW, EW, EW), it's my favourite.

Second chapter: James are really smart I must say. Also in the last chapter he knew something was going on with Jay, but now it's about his father too. Wow. But I think it was a good thing that Jau got to see the Prophet. I think Harry touched something inside of her and started the avalance. I got a hope already there that she somehow would meet him. and I still have that I actually intended to go to bed after this chapter, but then you left a cliffie! which leads me to third chapter.

I had decided not to read the chapter because it's getting late, but even before I had decided to actually read more than the first few lines of the chapter I wanted to know who it was, but when I saw it was Remus I couldn't stop reading. Stef, you've got some sort of gift making me stuck to the screen. Ih, Death Eaters! They should just killed them I thought. And finally all of Jay's past catches fully up on her. Alice, Mad-Eye. Sad, sad. But it bugs me Remus just doesn't hit the table and say, 'Jay now you listen! Sirius is dead and he was innocent!' I'd love for him to do so. Then Jay'd not believe him, but hen would and then she'd break down. And james would get to know his father! So that's what I expecct from you the next chapter haha. And now when Remus is there, James HAS to get an answer. I know he will.

All in all: I think you know by now that you've gotten me hocked. I love this, and I love how it's different because well, it's Sirius' son and eks, PLUS the place it's all. I lke how you show just the way they all talks that it's not England. And I love the people you've brought into this fic. They make me laugh over and over again. Furthermore I love James. He's Sirius but with the touch of 'Noodles'-and-stuff-like-that Haha.

So yeah, waiting for your next update... still waiting... still waiting...still waiting... okay, I see. Maybe I'll just go to bed as it's getting pretty late where I live. Please update soon! I love this!

oh stef.... Guess who is back with another random;y crazy review when she should be studying for her chinese final... ME!!! Yay! so that was pretty flipping sweet... but I was like totally serious... which was sweet and i got knocked out... I've always wondered what it feels like to get knocked out... not that i want to some one else could just tell me and i'd be satisfied but i really do wonder... hmmm... So when does blondie get some uber hot guy? seriously i need to get hooked up with an uber hot guy no joke seriously that would be amazing.. you know what else is amazing 3 more days of school! yea baby! but what's sad is Camille will be gone all summer! It's so sad!

Now back to the story... can you have me wake back up and have some like uber sexy i don't know lifegaurd standing over me. With like a totally toned body and stuff something along the lines of emmett cullen? Yes i can i really can and you can make that happen! lol But it was good... gosh Jay is so stubborn she really should know by noe that Erin knows bestest! Yea that's right foos I know bestest!

Haha I just read my last review and it cracked me up... i remember killing Julia good times... and there will be more good times when we make a video of us supergluing change to the sidewalk it's gonna be flippin sweet! Oh my goodness I'm like totally slap happy right now! hahahaha I'm so tired cause i was a dumb a-butt (whoops) and stayed up til 1 am finishing the book Pants on Fire... Tommy Sullivan sounds uber hot ... oh can i have him no wait... I want Prince Caspian! I saw that movie on saturday omg so amazing! But no i'll take Tommy sullivan... and Prince caspian.... and Emmett... and Edward... and Jesper... and dang i'm gonna be BUSY! lol Just kidding actually no not really i'm so boy crazy! hahaha In chinese this one girl was like would you rather be blind or deaf and I was like I'm just gonna hope like hell that neither of those happen cause without sight i wouldn't be able to drool over hot and sexy guys and without my ability to hear i would never know what their sexy voices would sound like! Gosh I would die! Then she just stared at me and was like you are way too boy crazy and I was like I know so it's a good thing there aren't that many hot guys at our school... i wouldn't get anything done! Thank goodness no hot wait a hot guy sits in front of me ine AP Euro... so yea i love boys! yet i hate them at the same time! lol Wow this is way far off from where i started.

Shoot it's 8:15 I better study for my finals that i have tomorrow! Update ASAP!
~Erin

PS: keep all those sexy beasts i mentioned in mind for blondie!

wow this fanfic is awesome! i read "Friends and Maybe More" and i loved it so once i saw this i read it right away. It's really good. Things that are happening in the actual books are happening in the story and everything makes sense and fits together. And it has some cool twists. Voldemort has offspring? i didn't even know that was possible! And Jay doesn't even know about Sirius... that's sad.
Keep writing and post soon!!

Okay, in fact I'm off to my train in half an hour, but when I saw you had updated, I had to read!

Okay, so I absolutely adore the parts with Elizabeth. I think it's because of her personality... she's calm and collected, yet have a very dark side (at least I see her like that). And I love her little encounter with Neville, you portrayed him very well. Great!

Also, I love how you slowly let James get to know about Sirius. I can't wait for him to talk to Jay about it. Or try. It's getting complicated in my head. haha. But I really love how you portrayed Jesse and James and the relationship between the two. Professor Newport is cool, I think it's because he helped James that I think so. haha.

Great chapter, Stef. It was worth the wait!

Why is it that everybody else gets credit but I don't get credit for wanting to trade Jesse for a camel? *sigh* *mutters about Stef always ripping me off and never citing me*

ANYWAYS! that chapter was amazing...I loved the flash to whats going on at Hogwarts, I was starting to think you'd forgotten about our dear Lizzie. And I loved the bit with Neville running off screaming about the DA.

So I can't decide if the headmaster is stupid or not...If he knew Sirius Black and remembered him so clearly how did he not realize that a kid who looked just like him with the last name Black was related? He acts as though he didn't have a clue...well duh they are related.

ooooh! Jay is gonna be upset when he gets home with all these questions about daddy dearest...*gasp* unless he goes to England to find daddy!!! except daddy is now dead...BUT HE COULD MEET OTHER PEOPLE!!!!!!! ok Kristinas going into a mad state...be back later...

once again it was amazing!

I hadn't even realized that you'd posted another chapter for this one. Might I say that I am very confused because I read each chapter so late? I forget what happened before so then I have to backtrack haha.

I love it though, I love how James will finally figure out things about his family. Elizabeth is a bit odd though with her dazzling self. Reminds me of our Edward. Neville reminded me a little bit of a freaky child. You know the ones who just randomly pop out with words and then runs away.

And gosh darn I forget who Carmel was. I'm pretty sure she died though no? Meh..I'll figure it out what's going on and then I will leave longer feedbacks muahaha.

--x Lauren

I'm sorryyyyyyy Stef I haven't been on VTM for ages

Should have read it earlier but whatever
Haha I can't believe I was right after my last post, it proper never happens hehe

That was a really good 2 chapters, but I wish it wasn't canon! For one thing I want Sirius to come back, but then I want Remus to be with Jay again, but then I think of Tonks and I want him to be with Tonks, then Jay again and its so bloody confusing!!!

Oooh I can't wait til James asks Jay about his dad and stuff, I suspect a lot of screaming and stuff

And the name taboo thing, I like how you slipped that in because it seems like Jay is starting to know more and more by the minute, and it (ready for another theory?!) gives me the impression she's going to get more involved with the war in England and I reckon she's going to go over there. But thats probably a loads of balls

Keep posting, I notice its been over 3 weeks since your last post!! Post soon though, I'm likeing it

~Amy <33

Oh and another thing, has this 'Elizabeth' been named after someone who not many people seem to like?! haha

Finally some answers. Hehe. I still think the thought of Bellatrix and Voldy are very, very, very disturbing and revolting. Gaa! And I just can't believe you made Elizabeth kills both Fred and Tonks. Those deaths were hard enough as it is! And now it's because of some little stupid girl! Grr!

I'm glad that James's finally gotten some answers, but I'm still mad that none of them knows that Sirius is in fact innocent!! But… I really didn't quite feel Jay when she was telling James the story of Sirius. I think you could have given that a little more emotions, Stef But I'm feeling sorry for them all, because the think Sirius's bad. Such emotions aren't good to go around with. I want Sirius to be good again!!

Good chapter, Stef, glad we got some of the things straightened out. Interesting what'll happen now. Will James go seek up Harry? What, what, what will happen?

Ops! I haaven't replied in a while! Bad Stef!

happy-potter: Well I thought I had informed you! But I guess I didn't! I'm evil I'm sorry! Well yeah I know Jay is still a stubborn bum but thats why we love her and oh yes James is awesome! He's like his dad with a touch of his aunt hahaha I think that might be why James is like that because he grew around a woman like Erin and because his mom is a bit odd too . Oh I will confess that Elizabeth is my favorite evils, she's so cold an calculated that I love it! I'm sorry about the lack of sleep but I'm really glad you've enjoyed it so far!

bounce.like.a.tigger: I love how your review is like two lines about the story and a billion of random! Hahaha it always makes me laugh Erin dear. So ummm I dunno what I was going to say... oh yes I'll get you a sexy guy I have to think about a sexy old guy because you must remember you aren't young in this one

turqwose_tiger18: Oh yay! Well yeah Voldy was a sick demented jerk but he still a guy so he can have babies. Doesn't mean he'll love them more like he is capable of getting a girl preggy . Yeah I'm staying with the story as much as I can like this last chapter was straight out of DH . I'm glad you like it and thanks for reading!

happy-potter: Well I hope I didn't make you late but I'm glad you read! Yes like I said before, Elizabeth is like pure evil which is what makes her so cool. Oh and Jesse and James are almost like brothers, their relationship is like Sirius' and James I suppose. Jesse is also a wicked character full of laughter and idiotic things hahaha he's based of my friend Jesse . Oh yes I hope you like the bit where James finds out everything. Poor kid. Well thanks so much for reading! I really love your feedback!

Weasly_Girly_83: you don't get credit because that was my phrase! I wanted to trade Katie for a camel first! So there! *sticks out tongue* Hahaha yeah well let me explain, Professor Newport is an idiot. He has a terrible memory for names and can never remember them except when Stef wants him too hahaha. Oh yes I have no forgotten about people at Hogwarts how could I? James loves him mommy a lot he'd never go without talking to her first about his dad. Later he might go but shhhh. So thanks for reading and I hoped you enjoyed!

Ginny.Weasley: well I'm sorry I confuzzled you Carmel was a girl that dated James... but she got killed by Peter and Snape . Hahaha well you don't need to be a vampire to dazzle people! You can do that with a pretty face is all! And yes you are right Neville is random but we love him for it! I'm sorry I'm making it confusing! I'll try to explain things a bit more! Thanks for reading and for everything dear!

Nymphadora Lupin: Hahaha it's ok Amy I still love ya! so yeah you were right but don't worry it won't happen again kidding. Well Remus is going to die and JAy won't be with him so yeah sorry bout that! And I hate to burst your bubble but she also doesn't go back during the war. Her fear of it all is just too much for her to handle. But she will go back and things will happen! Hahaha yeah she's name after her but I also just like the name!

So thanks all for the feedback chapter 5 is up!

-Stef

Hahaha I remember Carmel! Silly me how could I forget.

This chapter was great! Finally some answers to my confusing questions. Is it possible that Elizabeth could be more evil than Bellatrix? Dun dun dun.... That's a big question right there.

I loved the scene between Bellatrix and Narcissa. It made Cissy seem like the person I always thought she would be like in the books. Not truly evil to the core and always doting on Draco.

James and Jesse are two peas in a pod and I'm glad they're going to London. Haha it seemed like James wanted to surf to England but I sure hope he's smarter than that! He'd never make it unless he magicked a way to get a motor on the surfboard and motored across oceans hahaha. But then he might get eaten by a shark or something and that'd be sad.

Great work Stef as always and you aren't a dorky writer. And don't argue with that! I must say that this was one of my favourite chapters I've read by you. Probably because it explained a lot.

--x Lauren

Stef you legend!!! An orphanage in Newcastle Wooooo! Hahaha please tell me it's Newcastle England, not Newcastle Australia hehe

Anyways, thats probably been my favourite chapter so far! We got answers on both halfs of the story since Elizabeth found out who her mother is and James found out who his father is. Too bad he's dead. . I think he had a right to know what was happening, but if I was Jay I would never let him go out on the pull after him, hearing that. I have a really bad feeling about this


I like how you had the brief summary of Jay's life and friends and stuff, it was a nice reminder of what happened in her school life ... not in a good way of course, but you know

Well sorry but I'd usually leave longer feedback but I is tired Another great chapter though, keep posting!

~Amy <33

Stef (D****)-

Just caught up with your sequel. I know, you told me I'm supposed to be working on my own fanfic but I couldn't help it.

Another fabulous job if I must say so. I can honestly say that I didn't feel terrible for Jay; just pretty bad for her. I now, however, feel bad for James But your writing style and the way you connected Professor newport to Jay is fabulous. Great job!!


-Nick (G****)
HJP


P.S.- Don't blush

Stef that chapter was great! Ok...long list...

1. I am shocked at you. I know I already pointed this out but I am still slightly in shock. Even though I get why it was important, I've never seen you let your personal opinion of a character get into your writting the way you did about Ginny. I mean, I get that you were showing what Elizabeth thinks of love and you did a great job...it just really surprised me.

2. So Bellatrix doesn't kill Fred...hmm interesting but I likey.

3. Yay Mommy dearest and the evil spawn are reunited...why do I have a feeling that Daddy won't be as excited about it as they both assume he will be? Or will he not find out cus Bellatrix gets killed by Mrs. Weasley...? hmm I is very curious.

4. My son will NEVER be a priest. He can follow his daddy's religion and be a Rabbi if he wants to but seeing as I am quitting my religion he is not allowed to follow it . Jew or Atheist. Those are his options. Take or leave. (No offense to anybody else who reads this...it is a joke promise)

5. KABOOM! hahah I love Erin.

6. Aww...the Friends and Maybe More flashback had me near tears. I loved that fic. Also, loved James response to all of that, I know you compare him to Sirius a lot, but I saw a lot of Jay in him in this chapter too. His anger and wanting to get back at the person who caused so much pain to somebody important to him was definitly Jay.

7. YAAAY ROADTRIP!!!!! hmm...that'll be interesting when he gets there and finds Sirius is dead and everybody in Europe liked him...and uhmm...whats with the China thing?

Ok probably a million more comments but I'll stop rambling. It was amazing, I loved it and I'm soooo glad you're back in the writting buisness.

~Kristina

Ok, so I've finally caught up! Good stuff Stef! Your story really is amazing. I love it!

I'm so glad that Remus finally got to explain things to Jay. I hated it when they were no longer speaking. But now he can rest in peace. RIP Lupin!

Elizabeth Sheville, I love her character! I must admit though, the thought of Voldemort reproducing disgusted me! But now that I see the product, it was a great idea after all. Bella and Voldy have created the next generation of evilness and she's so beautiful and intelligent too. Aww, and look at Bella acting so motherly. I wonder though if Voldemort ever found out that he had a child....

Lil James and Jesse, what a troublesome duo. I finally understand the trading Jesse for a camel thing. Haha, hilarious! I hope that Lil James meets Harry one day. That would be so awesome like Sirius and James reincarnated! But poor Lil James and Jay don't know how incredible of a guy Sirius really was. That snake Peter! If only Jay would have let Remus explain....But ooh, I look so forward to reading more! Don't keep me waiting!

-Free-

Hey Stef

I have never left you some feedback on this fic and I really owe you some.

This fic is cool I like the way that you are potraying James and Jesse and the young James Potter and Sirius Black and Fred and George Weasley, it is fun to read. It has got alot of drama and that is what makes this fic so great. I loved your last chapter and I can't wait to read more about the Auror training and living with Harry and Ginny. Everyone is going to be in for a rude-awakening when the truth comes out.

Keep up the good work and I don't want to pressure you but I can't wait to read the next chapter.

DW

Steffy, nice chapter

I know what you mean when you say you liked that chapter, it's probably been my favourite so far it's a nice touch to have it as a crossover now, and I think things are really going to start falling into place now. There seems to be so much for them all to find out about each other! I mean, Sirius being the dad, him and Remus being dead, Harry not knowing that he's living with his parents' best friends' son ... or his godfather's son, whichever way you see it

I hope the longness of the chapter doesn't mean you aren't posting for a while! I really want to read the next chapter, even more than I did for all the other chapters you've posted already, cos like I say things are starting to take off. Loving it

Post again soon!

~Amy <33

Woah, Amy I never realised that was you

Haha anyway back on topic,
I loved that chapter! I have to agree with Amy and say that has been my favourite so far.
I think it will take Harry, and the others a while to work out Sirius is actually James' father because James won't admit to it because he thinks Sirius was a murderer.

I don't know why, but I love fictional Jesse. He's adorable, and he's such a good friend to James. Actual Jesse so doesn't like red heads

Like Amy said, this fic is really starting to take off now. I'm really excited about what's coming next and can't wait for you to post again!!

Katie.

Haha Katie, yep, tis me, and me is posting more feedback

Well, now James knows, but theres no-one I feel sorry for more than Jay. All the pain she's suffered all those years, thinking he's been alive, killing, betraying and hurting innocent people, when all he's done was find his godson, try to get on with his life and ... erm ... die. Yep, that sounds about right

Ooooh Lizzie is so awful! She's really conniving; and the way she treated Narcissa! I've never been a fan of the Malfoys but that is awful. I wonder what Lucius would have though if he came home to Narcissa lying there in a pool of blood with loads of bones and a tongue lying around her?? Hehe, I just made myself laugh in a sick, twisted way. That's a rather funny image: a random tongue lying on the ground

Anyway, I liked that chapter, and thank god you didn't take ages to post

Luff you (I'll luff you more if you post soon )

~Amy <33

Great chapter! I'm glad James now knows the truth. It's good that he knows some things about Sirius at Hogwarts so he can share those stories with Harry.

I had forgotten about Elizabeth... what an evil little character you have created! She is quite scary and I have to say her complete "evilness" worries me when it comes to the new class of aurors. I am sure someone is going to die, but I hope James can avenge his father's death by killing the daughter of Bellatrix!

Kathleen

YAY! A new chapter! I loved Dotty's story (and it helped bring me back up to speed!). Looking forward to the evil chapters!

I can understand all about being a grown-up and having responsibilities! I'll take your story whenever you have the chance to post!

Kathleen

OK, I know I said I'd be happy whenever you got a chance to post, but now I'm just plain nagging you! I miss your fic(s)! I realize that "life" has to take precedent, but just wanted you to know that you're missed!

Kathleen

YAY! A new chapter! Thank you for continuing the story, as I've really missed it.

You've caught us up and now (hopefully) Jay will be able to be a part of wherever your story is headed. I have lots of theories but will (patiently) wait and see what happens.

So, does Elizabeth have Jesse under her spell? Is Janey important? Will James et al find out soon that Jay is in the UK?

Again, thanks for continuing!

Kathleen

Well I haven't written here I know I've gotten behind on the feedback but honestly guys like my schedual is super insane and stuff but I'm here! I want to finish this fic because I honestly like it! It's like I dunno hahaha

Kathleen please do share your theories I'm curious to know what you think is going to happen.Oh and no Jesse is not under a spell he's just being a guy hahaha no wait well Elizabeth is like really pretty and in her own way sexy and very different from the girls Jesse has dated so he's intrigued and baffled by her. Thanks for always leaving feedback! Honestly it means the world to me

-Stef

OK, my theories are out the window as I have a new one now... since Jay has the resurrection stone and Harry has the Invisibility Cloak, all Elizabeth has to do is get the wand, and BAM she's all powerful.

I really do like this story and am glad you're able to weave all the characters into it, as well as bring back your original characters. Drawing a blank on "Thumbalina's" real name, but am thinking she'll play more into this story somehow.

Glad you updated! Keep the chapters coming. I really did like this one, and I'm not saying that just because you think I'm wicked cool!

Kathleen

STEF I am going to give you MSN beatings After all these conversations we've had, the amount of times we've been chatting and you never thought to mention that you've posted more chapters!!! How could you

Anyway, those last 3 chapters were amazing. Seriously, amazing. I was almost crying, the way you write seems so real, it's brilliant. And there's like, 3 or 4 things going on at the same time, I love it

And woah Kathleen that is a seriously good theory ... I never thought about the whole 'reuniting the hallows' thing, that's good! But isn't Harry the master of the Elder Wand, so Lizzie would have to kill/disarm Harry to get it

I hope Jay gets Sirius back with the resurrection stone, it would be nice for them to have a make-up, however 'dead' it may be. It's so sad! But amazing!

Keep writing Stef, I'm loving it. And next time TELL ME!

Loov yoo!
~Amy

Kathleen: you're right about Lizzie wanting to be powerful but she's not going to go about it the way her dad did. She's actually all obsesed with her dad. She's going to do something completely unexpected. I like my old characters and Janey is going to play a big part in the story specially for our aussie friends thanks so much to reading!

Amy: I thought I told you dear because I'm sure I told Krissy and you were in the same chat! Well I'll be sure to tell you about the new chapter as soon as I see you online again. Lizzie is going to try to do Harry in but not for his wand hehe your wish came true she saw him and it made me sad, thanks for reading Amy dear

New chapter is up!

-Stef

Well considering I'm actually talking to you right now there's not really any point in telling you I cried at this chapter, but there you go, I just did anyway.

It was really deep, and yeah it was short but who cares? Quality, not quantity, remember. And I thought it was great, it's really nice that you dedicated it to him. It's hard, but expressing things into words is always good.

But yeah, loved the chapter, but I still wish Sirius was alive ahaha, would have made things a hell of a lot easier

Keep posting, it's brilliant

~Amy <3

OH! I had the tissues out for this chapter... so heartfelt, and now I understand why.

You certainly have a gift for writing and I'm glad you're sharing it with us! As always, looking forward to the next chapter. Can't wait to see what you have in store for Voldy's evil daughter!

Stef, you told me not to read the new chapter because it would be depressing, but I had to.
You were right, it was depressing.
Which was the desired effect, so great writing.
I get the feeling that some of Sirus's lines in that chapter weren't fiction...they sound Chris-like. I miss him.
But I'm sure he wouldn't want us to be sad.
Anyway, it was a great chapter.

Katie

i am in complete love with your fanfics!(:
you're an amazing writer, and that last chapter really touched my heart, it made me tear up! and that accomplishing a lot because usually i don't cry when i'm reading, keep up the amazingness(:

You are a fabulous author. I started reading your first fanfic a couple of days ago and i have become attached so i continued to this one. Don't stop writing, you are amazing.

Chapters like this last one are only a confirmation of the talent that you have as an author. I think this is why I enjoy your writing so much, you put yourself in it. These feelings are real. Even though you don't have a resurrection stone, it would seem like if you've had this conversation with your friend. I can't begin to explain the way this last chapter made me feel. You are great at mixing humor with drama which makes things far more interesting.

What I find rather amusing is the fact that your female characters are always so strong. They are stubborn and feisty but with this last chapter you just showed that behind that tough exterior there is still a woman who needs to be helped from time to time. Doesn't make you less of a feminist my friend.

I'm enjoying this story almost as much as I enjoyed Once Upon a Dream and Friends and Maybe More. Please continue with it because I assume there's more action and sorrow still left in it.

MK

What a good fanfic. I wish I had your imagination within my own. We should've done a collaborative fanfic....oh well. Umm, so yeah just a great fanfic and I'll have a more in depth review come next chapter.


-Nick