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Veritaserum14
This fic is my first attempt at a Romione fan-fic as stated by the title of the thread. This story takes place during their 6th year at Hogwarts after Ron kisses Lavender Brown. It will contain letters, mild language (PG-13) and a whole lot of other things that pertain to the events that may have led to Ron and Hermione ending up together. You know what to do~Post away.
~Veritaserum14~



Professor Nutbutter
lol, 'Romione'. Pretty good so far, can't think of any other R/Hr/LB fics out there from Hermione's pov, and I like how you're including Krum in this, will definitely add a new dimension to it .. make the next chapter longer please!

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Veritaserum14
Professor Nutbutter: Thanks; glad you like it so far, and I will try to make the chapters as long as possible. I might not post very often and when I do the posts will be a while apart; as I am also working on another fanfic Head over Heels about Scorpius. So I will have to ask you guys to bear with me. Thanks again for leaving your thoughts.
~Veritaserum14~
FastfanHPg
Hola! I'm checking this fic out. Let's see what we got here. Lovestruck Herminone, Oblivous Ron, and Defending Harry. Oh! I wondeer what will happen in the fic when DD dies. That will be interesting.
The Writing on the Wall
Looks good, keep posting, this could develop into something very good. Even from that, I can tell thaat you write well. Good luck with it
Nymphadora Lupin
Aw yes!!! I love R/Hr fics! Or 'Romione' as you say, haha I quite like that!! But it's looking good! I'm looking forward to more chapters, providing you keep writing! No R/Hr fic seems to get finished on here!!! It annoyes me, because I love reading them!

I love how she's asking for Victor's advice - it's strange because Ron's always harping on about how Hermione's always writing to 'Vicky' when she's actually writing for relationship advice to get with Ron ... ironic, and sweet!

I hope you keep writing! It's looking promising! It's odd 'cause I actually started a fic like this (R/Hr, 6th year but I've changed it) a couple of weeks ago but I want to finish the whole thing before I actually post it! Weird I know dry.gif

Post soon!

~Amy <3

EDIT Just read the new chapter!! Haha it made me laugh - if I hadn't already read HBP 17 ttime I would never have had Hermione down as a user hehe. Well it looks like her plan is going well, and although it's similar to the book (with Cormac), I like your idea because it still has a bit of a difference wink.gif

I liked the bit about the Weasley sweater too - nice touch thumbsup.gif

Post again soon!

~Amy <3
Veritaserum14
Nymphadora Lupin: Thanks for the great review; I'm glad you like the way it's going and I can tell you now there's no need for you to worry, it will get completed.

Fastfanhpg: Glad you like the fic so far and I hope to incorparate the whole DD deal; but we'll cross that bridge when we come to it.

Proffesor Nutbutter: I hope this chapter was a satisfying length.

TheWritingontheWall: I'm glad you like my writing style.

Thanks to all of you for the great feedback!

~Veritaserum14~
Veritaserum14
I know I haven't been updating my fics as much as I should but I will once again ask that you please bear with me; the most current chapter is up, and I would really enjoy some more feedback.

At the moment, I am trying to finish up my other fic, Head Over Heels, so that when I get that one done you may rest assured that the updates for Lost in your Eyes will be many and more common.

Once again thanks for the patience with my updating, reading my fic, and the great feedback that you have posted. You have all been very helpful. More than you know.

~Veritaserum14~
Nasuada
I really like this story. It's so nice! You have a great style of writing.

I think it's so sweet how she's asking Victor for advice. Normally, I can't stand Victor Krum, but the way you describe him I'm actually fond of him. He's so nice to Hermione. biggrin.gif

Let me know when you update! I really want to see what happens. thumbsup.gif

Chelsea♥
Veritaserum14
I have finally updated my fic. Yay! Sorry that the update took me so long to post. Ok I know that I promised you guys 2 chapters not one but I've been a little busy with school so bare with me. I will hopefully have another chapter up soon. Thanks for your patience.

~Veritaserum14~
DeSs
Weee, I told you I wanted to read it and I've just finished it!
Romione! I love that! Well, as everybody here knows how crazy I'm about them, what can I say? Your story really liked me; it's like you've given Hermione a different kind of behaviour for a change, and made a braver Ron too. I like the participation you gave Krum as Hermione's adviser, it's simply lovely.
There's just one thing: I feel pity for Harry eeek.gif Poor Harry, before the Quidditch won game he was alone, and taken as insane by his own friends!
And the timing is very proper too. I always thought something might have happened after Ron's breaking up with Lavender --I made a fic since that spot ages ago, but as it's pretty-too-much fluffy, I never continued it.
Are you going to continue this fic, right? Just asking, because as it's the first time I come over here ... Hope you can be posting soon!
Nasuada
Awww, Hermione is so happy it makes me happy! biggrin.gif It was so funny when Harry came in. Haha! Victor was so nice to her. That's cute that he likes a girl too. Oh dear! I know what's coming next! ohmy.gif He's going with Dumbledore! Oh dear! Please update soon! I want to read what happens next. So in all your two new chapters are great! biggrin.gif Keep posting!

Chelsea♥
DeSs
Great chappie! A shame that it had to be that short eeek.gif, but I loved that letter from Vicktor's, it's so great he's happy too!
And I'm glad for Hermione and Ron, it's very cute they are together!
I'll be waiting for the new chapter, can't imagine what're you going to tell us there ohmy.gif
DeSs
OMG, Veritaserum, I can't believe you are done with your fic!
Well, let me say that I really like the part of the funeral, how you described Hermione's feelings.
It was very odd to be writing again what Harry and Dumbledore did, and those kind of confusing bits about the battle ... hum, I wouldn't do that, and I'd had extended the part of the battle in regards with Ron and Hermione: what were they doing, how did they feel, and all that.
But it's still really good, and I felt happy for them in the end happy.gif
I hope you keep on writing, you're very good! wink.gif
Veritaserum14
Thanks to all my faithful readers; and yes I agree that although the rewrites were confusing, it was not my intent to try to confuse you. I'm glad that you enjoyed the fic. And I hope that I can write more about Romione soon, but not right now. Once again thanks.

~Veritaserum14~

EDIT

I am currently working on a sequel to this fic. It will be called 'Safe in Your Arms' , in keeping with the theme. Sorry if the wait is a long one, but I am currently trying to work on only one fic at a time and I will try to get the sequel's first chappie up sometime soon. Thanks for reading; and by all means, keep leaving feedback.
Veritaserum14
The sequel has been posted!: Currently on Chapter 1 read it here and leave some feedback.
It will be nice to see what you guys think of it so far.
Hoping to read your thoughts soon,
-Karina
MoonFighter
I finished this last night and today I finished your sequel <3 I had to comment in both of the stories since I really liked them wub.gif
You've done a great job and I'm glad I came upon your story ^^ I was so happy to see Ron and Hermione kiss <333 And I liked the letters between Viktor and Hermione <33 They were so cute! And Hermione's worries...aww, they were very cute and fun to read <33 (as we never see her like this in the books laugh.gif )

Congratulations on the story hug.gif
Veritaserum14
I'm glad you came across my story too. New feedy is always a pleasure to read. Viktor and Hermione; yeah, I tried to have them keep in touch since there was a vague mention of a letter from Viktor in the books and I worked off of that. I am happy that you enjoyed this story. I know it wasn't my best work. But, it's nice that you wanted to leave feedback for both stories.

-Karina
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