Hello again! This is the feedback thread for my one-shot contest entry "Harry Potter is Real?!" Please leave our thoughts, concerns, and criticism here. Thanks a bunch!

--x Lauren

Awww Lauren I love the way you portray Alice... she is an annoying little person like Edward said in the book. Dude that huge jet thing was slightly... well it could be taken the wrong way! You know what though I bet Emmett and George would be super good friends!
Hahaha I love your title! Really good job Lauren! You really are way too hard on yourself!
Keep the stories coming!!!

-Stef

Thanks Stef. You're right, Emmett and George probably would be best buddies. Maybe they'll meet up in the future or something haha. Yeah the jumbo jet could be taken the wrong way, but only if you think like that. You're too nice to me my dear.

--x Lauren

Lauren, that was great! I just love when Bella realizes that they are from the books. Haha! It is too funny. But, it was really well written and I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing!

How awesome that you decided to blend Twilight and HP. Twilight is so hot right now. I agree that you captured Alice as the lovable, annoying "sister". The title is ingenius, I mean, because Bella is not immortal or magical, she is just another muggle who has read the stories like us. Brilliant.

I was a little let down by the ending having it be a hoax and then not really finding out why Lucius needed to speak to the Minister of Magic. I supposed I just expected a very climactic ending.

I hope to read more of you one shots in the future.
~Amanda

Hey Lauren!

I just read this one shot and I thought it was pretty good (and humorous!). Seeing as I have not read Twilight, I'm not sure how well you portrayed the characters. But I absolutely loved when you had George call Lucius a "tricky little devil." You had me chuckling to myself on that one.

However, I do agree that it was a little anticlimactic. I was all excited to see a battle go down, and then it wasn't really explained why Lucius needed to talk to the Ministry. And how was Lucius able to send that image to Harry?

All in all it was a pretty good and entertaining story. I absolutely love reading your works! You are a very talented writer, Lauren. Keep up the great work!

Kristin

Thank you for the feedback! I agree with all of you that the ending was terrible, I really dislike it. The only explanation I can offer to that is that I truly had no idea how to end something like that and I was tired of writing it. Therefore I just wrote the first thing that came to mind. I probably should've waited to post it until I could think of something good, but it's too late now. Thank you for all the wonderful feedback!

--x Lauren