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Weasly_Girly_83
Hey Guys!!! I'm back with my second attempt at a fanfic!!!! Stef (Fany_monkey) has been pestering me about it for ages and I finally gave in so yeah...I promise promise promise promise that I'll finish this time...I think I would be murdered in my sleep if I didn't...

So uhm yeah, leave feedback here for The Godmother...Please be brutally honest with what you think about it...Of course I would rather nice stuff, but if it really is terrible let me know cus I want to improve. Okie thanks!

~Kristina
fany_monkey
ohmy.gif I did not force you... ok maybe I did give you a tiny nudge in the right direction. But you'll thank me someday... in a few (50) years.

So your plot is very very interesting! I love the idea of Harry having a godmother somewhere out there! It'd be so great because he'd be able to get info about his mommy and daddy! You character Isabella is pretty interesting! This really is a great start to what I know will be a great fanfic. I will make sure you post ASAP tongue.gif

-Stef
PottyHead
*dances* Krissy posted! Krissy posted!

Yay *eats cookies* I love the name Jared ahaa

Ooh I actually loved it =]
'Twas very moreish, I want to know what happens next. I like the idea of setting it after Harry's defeat of LV but still being about the Marauder era.

Post soon, 'cause this chapter was amazing =]

Kelly
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dumbledoreliveson
Luved ur fanfic, it's hard to find origional ones, so thanx I am thus far intreged (sp?) keep it up and keep 'em coming fast if at all possible cuz all my favorite ones repost like once a month and it's excrutiateingly painful to wait, but if ur 2 busy 2 post often I understand.

HarryPotterNut
Kristina,
This is a great story! I take it Isabella doesn't know that Remus and Sirius are both dead yet?(No cookies to JKR for that!-lol) Please update soon!
HarryPotterNut happy.gif
Me_Hermy:1 of the Same
Sorry Krissy I've been a bit slow to post my feedback, and I'm pretty sure you already know I liked it but oh well tongue.gif

It was a great start, and I agree with dumbledoreliveson that it was very intriguing and more-ish like Kelly said.

I just hope Stef keeps nagging you to post, because you know I would like to read some more, eventually that is tongue.gif

-Katie

P.S trust yourself, don't delete everything you write and start again. Just go with the flow. You're a good writer, I'm sure whatever you've written is good smile.gif
Ginny.Weasley
Aw I'm so ashamed it took me so long to post feedback. But I'm here now. biggrin.gif

I liked this chapter, it captured our attention and made me think. I love this character and I think I like where you're going with this. (I don't know for sure so obviously I'm just guessing. laugh.gif) Isabella Hall is a nice name and I love your setting- the whole after the defeat but still about the Marauders. I'm most definitely interested in how you'll develop this story!

And I agree with Katie, just write whatever pops into your head without thinking about it. I already told you that I don't even re-read what I write before I post, I just write what flows into my head. I love your writing so just work with it! happy.gif

--x Lauren
Weasly_Girly_83
Wow, thanks for all the feedback guys! I feel very loved! Ok, next chapter is up for you all!

fany_monkey: Thanks Stef! Glad you like it. Ok remind me in a few 50 years and I will thank you. Until then you will listen to me whine tongue.gif And thank you thank you thank you for all of your help and letting me steal your name!

PottyHead: hahah Yes Kelly, I posted, I posted. And you should like the name Jared, you picked it. Uhm...I hope that moreish means something positive...It's not really set after Voldies demise though, from this point on there will be very few interuptions from the present. Maybe a chapter or two in there randomly and one at the very end. Sorry to disappoint.

dumbledoreliveson: I'm glad you like it! Thanks so much for the feedback. My goal is to update it at least once a week, and my beta stays on my case about it so I should be able to keep to that promise.

HarryPotterNut: Thanks. At the begining of the story no, she didn't know anything that had happened in the wizard world or England. I was originally going to give details about her finding out but then decided that everybody knows what happened with that and I really wanted to get to the actual story so...*shrugs*

Me_Hermy:1 of the Same: Aw you're forgiven Katie. I'm glad you liked it though I still don't know what more-ish means. And it won't take eventually for me to post...just a few years tongue.gif Thanks for your support. I'll try hard to take the advice.

Ginny.Weasley: Don't be ashamed Lauren...it took me til today to realize you even hand a fanfic on here besides Crazy Shrinks...oopsies...I'm glad you liked this chapter. Like I told Kelly, it's not really after LV's defeat..only kinda sorta ish. I will try try try to take your advice...my problem is I think to much.
HarryPotterNut
Kristina,
You just have it made here at VTM. You're an awesome beta, and a great writer. My only suggestion is that Lilly doesn't seem very fiesty yet. I know she is a first year, so she is probably scared out of her wits. You might think about it.
HarryPotterNut happy.gif
Ginny.Weasley
And so, to make up for my delayed feedback last time, I post right away. biggrin.gif

Nice name-Emma Reid. Haha I thought I recognized it and then I was like "Hey, isn't that the name of a character from Crazy Shrinks?" And then you mentioned it in your author's note. Emma's character in this story is not as nice as the one in ours. She reminds me of the girl who's in it for herself and doesn't care about hurting other people's feelings. In other words, she reminds me of being very blunt. Her remarks about Sirius weren't very nice either.

I liked this chapter, it really set the stage. I remember you saying something about starting first and skipping to sixth or something, but I'm glad you decided to start at first; it just makes the story that much more understandable. (I think I made a new word just there. tongue.gif)

The Marauders remain my favourite characters and I like how you introduced them. Loyal since the very beginning. Speaking of loyal I loved the Hat's thoughts while he was sorting her. I think it's interesting how Lorelei and Isabella are in different houses, it's a nice change from the norm. smile.gif

I really love this story (and the sig is like WOW!) so keep up the amazing work my dear! happy.gif

--x Lauren
PottyHead
YAY

Haha I love the idea of little mini marauders. Yes. They are mini because they are first years. Though first year marauders make me think of midgets *shrugs* yeah I don't know either.

Haha, I loved it. And it seems like Sirius and Isabella are going to be good friends, I like that =]

And I'm not dissapointed =P I meant like I liked how she was retelling the story, how it was set after LVs demise, but that with her telling the story it would take them back to the marauder era.

Yeah I don't make much sense, I know.

Post soon. I really do love it.

(Oh and Moreish = It makes me want to read more tongue.gif)

Kelly
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Weasly_Girly_83
HarryPotterNut: Thanks so much. I don't know if I have it made but I try. You may want to hold the comments about how much you like me until you read some of my upcoming chapters though. I don't think many people are going to like me then tongue.gif As far as Lily not being fiesty, nobody said anything to her that would require a fiesty/sarcastic response. If she's fiesty to people who are being perfectly nice to her then she's just a brat. Thanks for the feedback!

Ginny.Weasley: Haha yeah, I kinda stole your character a bit didn't I Lauren? You should feel honored that I liked the name so much tongue.gif haha I honestly didn't realize it at he time. But yeah you got her characterization right in one go. She'll be your best friend if it's convienent and she'll do anything for you as long as you're her friend...Just don't get on her bad side. I'm really glad you liked the chapter. I don't really know why I decided to have them in different houses...just something that popped into my head and ended up on paper...*shrugs* Thanks for the feedback, and thanks for all the help with this chapter!!!

PottyHead: hahah I love you Kelly. Yes they are mini because they are first years and they are midgets. And you with the inside knowledge of things I've already told you...seems like Sirius and Isabella are going to be good friends pshh I need to stop needing your help on things. Oooh! YAY! I learned what moreish means! *jumps up and down in excitement* hahah. Yes I am a dork but quiet tongue.gif
PottyHead
ohmy.gif Krissy!! You writing genius!

I won't kill you, I loved that chapter.
Although sad, the idea of her cutting made the character seem more real. Like sometimes you read fics and think 'Wow this character is just too perfect' but I liked the idea of her resorting to self harm. It made her seem less like just some witch but more like Isabella, the human.

I can honestly say I resent your talent.

Haha kidding, but seriously that chapter was so amazing. And I like love how there's some tension between Lily and Izzie (haha love it) over her friendship with Sirius, its not something you see in most fics.

This is really different, but in a reeeally good way. I have to admit that its one of my favourites, I love how the characters seem so real and how good the writing is, as well as the amazingness of the idea.

Post soon! Or I shall umm... what can I threaten you with. Ooh post soon or I'll lock AJ in a cupboard. And no, you won't be in it. smile.gif

Kelly
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HarryPotterNut
I actually really liked this chapter alot. (Don't kill me please!) Even though the most important figure in Isabella's life was killed, I have a feeling that it will be very important to the storyline. I am glad that you got Lilly and Sirius in the story too. Update soon Please!!!

~HarryPotterNut~ happy.gif
Ginny.Weasley
How could you ever think I'd hate you over this? Dear it was magnifico (if that's a word) and truth be told it wasn't what I was expecting. It was a pleasant surprise for me. At first I thought it would be a super dark chapter, and it did have its moments, but there were some happy things as well.

Isa (I shall call her that from now on because its shorter hehe) has some issues, and she's dealing the best way she knows how. I mean imagine finding a message like that written in your sister's blood. That would make me pretty frightened. Using bracelets to cover her scars is a good idea, but over time I'm sure someone will figure it out.

The friendship between Sirius and Isa is something special, something that we don't often find in real life. I can totally understand her frustration at why Emma and everyone else thinks that they are together. I have enough problems with that in my own life haha.

Lily and Isa seem like good friends, but they have squables like real friends. It's not all "oh my gosh I support you 100% forever and we'll never fight", it's very real. Sometimes friends just disagree with each other and it can't be helped. And I'm sure the Marauders is a touchy subject for Lily.

Lauren O'Connell is my favourite character. Haha I'm totally kidding! But she seems like a girl that I would like to be friends with. I don't think you based her on me besides the first name and the description, but I wish I was like her! Gosh at least she knows when to speak up so she doesn't seem like a snob. But anyway...moving on. laugh.gif

I would love to tell Emma to get her fake bum out of here. Could you do me a favour and kill her off sometime? I know we love killing characters!

Lorelei's death as I said didn't surprise me-I take it as inevitable. And I already talked about her and the message in blood. unsure.gif

Well then I think that's it! Good luck writing the next one, and I really hope you stick with this story. It's got a good plot. smile.gif

--x Lauren
dumbledoreliveson
Wow I hate Emma!! It's interesting that she's "Izzie's" friend yet she still drives her nuts, it's just an interesting relationship. And poor "Izzie" I toatally feel 4 her and with her, her pain is totally believable, I just want 2 scream at her cutting urself isn't the solution honey. Does Sirius know what she's doing? Will he find out if he doesn't already know? What will he do about it if he does find out? I'm still intrigued with this story keep it up.
Weasly_Girly_83
Hey guys! Next chapter is up!!! Yaay!

PottyHead: Hey Kelly, I'm glad you like it. That was kind of the point with Izzie, I didn't want her to be perfect, so I'm glad that worked. Self harm was kind of on my mind when I was working on this chapter so...it just sort of ended up there, but I'm actually glad it did. I put the tension in there because I wanted her to be somebody I could be friends with, my friends and I don't always agree on everything, I don't know anybody that can say they do and not be lying, so it made sense that my characters would argue about things as well. No locking AJ in a cupboard without me or...I won't go in any with you. ha! biggrin.gif Plus, he's my new beta, so if you lock him up I'll never get another post up tongue.gif

HarryPotterNut: Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it. Why would I kill you for liking my chapter? :S Her being dead doesn't really matter much to the story, she was important to Izzie but her character didn't have much of a part in the story. However, the effects of her death are extremely important.

Ginny.Weasley: Loving the new word Lauren, I'm glad you liked it. I didn't want it to be to dark because I don't want people to go hurt themselves after reading. Isa, I like that...I may steal it at some point tongue.gif I came up with the bracelets idea because somebody accused me of cutting and using the bracelets that I always wear to hide it. I wasn't, I just like bracelets, but *shrugs* I'm glad you liked the way I did Lily and Izzie's friendship, like I told Kelly, I fight with my best friend sometimes so it would make sense that my characters do as well. Hahah I would bet Lauren is your favorite, considering she's based on you...kind of. I kind of combined your two personalities, the way at school and places you're shy and quiet (or so you say) and then the way that around us you're insane and hyper. and *waves hands in magic sort of gesture* tada! Ah you know me to well... I do love killing people...but that actually isn't my plan for this one biggrin.gif Thanks again for the feedback, I'm glad you like it.

dumbledoreliveson: Thanks for the feedback. From what I can tell theres always that one girl who nobody really likes but they all put up with, that's Emma in this case. She does have her good qualities as you'll see later, but she can be a pain too. Don't scream at Izzie though, cutting is never the answer but right now it's the only onese knows. Sirius doesn't know yet, as I said in the story she hides the scars with braceletes. Plus, people don't see what they don't want to see. I'm glad you like it! Thanks again for the review.
HarryPotterNut
I liked it alot! It was a little on the short side, but it was still great! Will there be more of Sirius in the upcoming chapters? The relationship between him and Isbella and how it makes Lilly act is really funny.
PottyHead
Izzie is a ****! Okie she really isn't haha. But James too.. I kind of like the fact that they're really close friends, a brother/sister kind of bond. Most people don't have that with OCs but I like the way it works with this. I love how you give us all the background on the characters too, but you don't do it in a way that makes me think 'get back to the story now...' You keep it short, but interesting and giving us enough insight to learn more, and connect more with the characters.

Okies, AJ can come out of the cupboard... *sulks* I have nothing to threaten you with now tongue.gif

Post soooon =] I love this so much haha. I've said it before, but you're too good at writing lol.
Prongs1193
i thought it was relle good =]. i didnt get a chance to read all of it, but ill let u kno when i finish it
megan elise smith
Okay so i feel like i'm going to dampen the mood. But this comment is not an insult!!! as they say, art comes from art. Its the only way. It's just your fic reminds me of several things in pop culture. First, i think you like gilmore girls, (lol idk if you do, but the name and the relationship you described) And have you read a great and terrible beauty? Emma sounds like felicity. Really i'm not saying your copying because, those dynamics often appear in all kinds of settings. And maybe a bit of the Office? idk, maybe i'm imagining things.

The only thing i can comment on is the pace. It seems a little fast yet jolted, and lily's character still doesn't seem very fiesty...
Ginny.Weasley
My, what a tangled web they weave. *cough* Okay sorry about that, I love the saying. Anyway, Isa is a purely awesome person. I love how her character is friends with both the guys and the girls. It adds a new perspective to the story, how the guys aren't always the bad ones.

She and James eh? wink.gif Haha, well I'm glad they're so close and even though it didn't work out for them, I hope she finds a happy relationship. Though with you, I don't know about that... ph34r.gif

James can tell what she's feeling and even when he tells her that they'll be there, she doesn't believe it. Thank gosh. I mean really, if our best friend promised to always be there for us, would we believe it when we're so used to feeling like no one truly cares? I know I probably wouldn't trust it. So she had a realistic reaction, not all "oh well now that you mention it..." I mean, I hope she does come to tell them eventually, but for that moment it would have really wrecked the scene.

Great job Kris, you never cease to amaze me. smile.gif

--x Lauren
Weasly_Girly_83
Hey guys, good news, next chapter is up, bad news, it's a bit on the short side. Hope you enjoy!

HarryPotterNut: Thanks for the feedback, I'm glad you liked it! Yes there will be more Sirius in the upcoming chapters, unless I change the plot line that I have planned out right now he is very very important. The reaction that he causes in Lily is slightly based off of me with my best friend, she has a habit of dating guys I don't like and my over protectiveness of her comes out a bit in Lily's character.

PottyHead: hahah Kelly I have way to many guesses for what those astrics' could have possibly stood for, I'll have to remember to ask you about them on msn some time tongue.gif I'm glad you like the background on the characters, their relationships with each other are important, I think, and other than spending a few chapters giving background on the most important relationships I couldn't figure out a good way to stress that. YAAAY *singsong voice* my boyfriend got freed from the cupboard my boyfriend got freed from the cupboard biggrin.gif hahaha you could always threaten with NOT going into the cupboard yourself tongue.gif Thanks again darling, I'm glad you liked it.

Prongs1193: Thanks for the feedback, I'm glad you like it and hope you enjoy the rest biggrin.gif

megan elise smith: Well you're half right on 1 of the 3 counts. I did get the name Lorelei from Gilmore Girls, the first time I watched that show I fell in love with that name. *hangs head in shame* However, I don't think that their relationship is at all similar to Lorelei's and Rory's other than that they both have a very close bond. However I've never read A Great and Terrible Beauty (I've been meaning to for a while now but I haven't gotten around to it.) and I've never seen The Office. Although now I think I'm going to have to give both a try so I can find the resemblances. As for Lily's character, you haven't really gotten a good look at her with people she doesn't like yet. The only situations you've seen are her and James, and Izzie has interrupted them before anything bad can happen. She has no reason to be like that with her friends, and if she was they wouldn't be her friends for much longer.

Ginny.Weasley: Ah Lauren, you haven't seen tangled yet. Just you wait, Kelly has been giving me advice for my next few chapters and it seems to have gone to heart, let the drama begin *wicked smile* Anyways...I'm glad you like Izzie's character, that was kind of my idea to show their better side. A lot of people show Lily hating James and then suddenly falling for him, but there has to be something there to fall for to begin with so I wanted to show that. As for Izzie and James, I kind of just put that there without thinking about it, I wanted right away to clear up that they would never have that sort of relationship and...And hey! I am capable of a happily ever after...did you not read the prologue where she is happily married and living in an American muggle community? tongue.gif The scene with James is kind of a lot like me...I don't trust people to understand and I feel like telling them is a burden to them, even my best friends. Thanks so much Lauren.
PottyHead
Yayyy I love it

It was short, but sweet lol. I love the realness of Izzies character. I know I always say that but it's rare that you find a character that you can relate to so well. And that's what Izzie is. She's someone people can relate to, can emphathise with. I just want to give her a hug like she gave Lily at the end, I want to tell her it'll be alright even if it hurts right now.

And I can't threaten you with not going in the cupboard, aj's already said we're not allowed *sulks*

Post soon, and I WILL think of something to threaten you with tongue.gif

Kelly
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Ginny.Weasley
A short, sweet, to the point chapter. Very nice. smile.gif

Izzie is definitely a real character as Kelly said, and she reacts the way a normal person would. I've probably already said it, many times, but I love the realism of the story. It gives me a warm and fuzzy feeling inside. ...Well not those sentiments because its not a happy story, but it makes for a good read.

And you did say she ends up in a Muggle community. But that's sad! It means she doesn't end up with who I wanted her to grrr. Haha oh well.

Nice work, Lily makes me laugh, and enjoy your vacation!

--x Lauren
dumbledoreliveson
Vacation 10 days??!!!! Aw I don't think I can wait that long for the next chapter!!! Oh well I guess I'lll have 2. Izzie's is a good person I am so impressed that she can hold in all that pain yet still help Lily with her's that is really uncommon and takes a really good person 2 accomplish so I luv Izzie 4 it but her pain is heartbreaking, I hope she can b happy again, her faking happiness totally reminds me of Bella but she's alot better at faking it than Bella was. But I'm totally rooting for Izzie and I hope she heals.
Weasly_Girly_83
Hey guys, next chappy is up AAAAND I'm early so thats how much I love you all tongue.gif

PottyHead: Hey Kell, lad you loved it and you aren't annoyed with Izzie yet. Feel free to hug all you want deary tongue.gif And AJ said we were allowed for my birthday present so we're good on that count biggrin.gif

Ginny.Weasley: Thanks Lauren, I'm glad youre all warm and fuzzy-ish. And I know it's sad but it's happy first and I'm mean. And who do you want her with? Cus she might hook up with him for a little bit if we're thinking of the same person biggrin.gif
A short, sweet, to the point chapter. Very nice. smile.gif

dumbledoreliveson: Aw thanks. I'm glad you're impressed with Izzie because she's based off of somebody very close to me. I think you'd be surprised about the number of people out there who are bearly holding it in but still helping their friends if you took the time to find out their storys...thats my opinion anyways. She'll be happy for a little bit but no promises biggrin.gif Thanks again for the feedback!

~Kristina
HarryPotterNut
Sorry that it took me this long to respond to the last two chapters Kristina. I was on vacation for about a week and had no computer access. Anyway, keep up the great work!!!!! biggrin.gif
PottyHead
K-k-k-krissaayyyy!

I loved it =]
I'm going to say the same thing that I always say, but it's so true so I have to.
I love the realness of the story. How Izzie is like any other person and who you can really relate to. I feel so bad for her, going through all of this on her own, I just want to jump into your fic and help her out, give her a shoulder as such.

James will never get a clue will he? I feel bad for him though because you can tell he really like Lily, but he's just going about it the entire wrong way. I want to jump into your fic and help him out as well and give him a big hug, and then hit Lily and tell her she has to go out with him so that they can have the love making and make Harry. smile.gif

I love the idea of a halloween ball, perfect place for all kinds of drama to happen tongue.gif

Post soon =] I have nothing to threaten you with.. but I won't give you any cookies.. ever again
hahahahaha.

Kelly
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Weasly_Girly_83
Hey guys! Next chapter is FINALLY posted, I am soo soo sorry about the delay. I really don't have a good excuse other than school starting and I got a job and got busy...I promise to try and be better.

HarryPotterNut: Thanks for the feedback, I'm glad you still enjoy it.

Pottyhead: K-k-k-kellaaayyy! (why did we do that? tongue.gif) I'm glad you still love it dear, I feel like I'm getting repetative tongue.gif And I'll make a mental note to have your shoulder appear in a later chapter lol. James will never get a clue...he's James Potter after all. But I think that Izzie's words work better than smacking Lily. wink.gif Thanks again for your help with the new chappy and feedback and for donating our daughter tongue.gif

~Kristina
PottyHead
K-k-k-kriiiisayyyy
I don't know why we do it but you have to admit.. it is fun happy.gif

So you already know I loved this chapter. I thought the emotion in it was absolutely great and I felt so bad for Izzie, the fact that she's trying to help everyone else but no one's helping her.

Even though they don't know there's anything to help they have to notice how much she's changed. I mean no one can just ignore that. And the way she just breaks down at the end had me almost in tears. I mean we all think those kinds of things at some point and the way you wrote it was almost as if you were describing the way I feel sometimes and it was like 'woah.... she's too good at this'

No need to thank me though, I was glad to be of help happy.gif Not that you need help, you is too amazing as it is lol.

Post soon or I shall hit you, I wanna see what happens next.
Oooh and I can't believe she showed Lily the cuts, that must have taken so much to do that.
But it was so sad sad.gif

Kelly
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HarryPotterNut
That last chapter was very good Kristina. I like what you did with the relationship between both Sirius and Isabella, and Lily and Isabella. Please update soon. (With whatever time school allows you- lol!)
Ginny.Weasley
Holy crow. Kristina dahling I love it. smile.gif Well I guess the smiley face is a little bit innapropriate considering what's going on but still. It turns out I only missed 2 chapters after all.

But I'm skipping to this most recent one because it has the most drama. But I did like the chapter with the dream, good work with it. biggrin.gif

But this chapter..wow. I loved the emotion that went into and how everything just sort of bottled up until she couldn't take it anymore. The anger at everyone and how she blew up at Lily was great. Ah I can't even describe how amazing it was..I'm speechless. The ending as well with her cutting the words into her skin was very powerful and the blacking out really adds a cliffie to it in a way. Like, "who is going to be there when she wakes up?

It was an excellent chapter! Eee I love this story. happy.gif

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Ginny.Weasley: Thanks Lauren, I'm glad youre all warm and fuzzy-ish. And I know it's sad but it's happy first and I'm mean. And who do you want her with? Cus she might hook up with him for a little bit if we're thinking of the same person


Well the person I'm thinking of starts with an S and loves her very much, but is being a real jerk now with Kristellina Depralvson (by the way nice name combo. Is it just you and Kel that created this one? tongue.gif).

And I've had a total reaization with your hint there. (If we're talking about the same person.)

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I had left the wizarding world years ago, nobody had bothered to find me, there was nobody left who cared. Well, there was one person left, one person who I had hoped might come looking for me, but he was hurting too. He too had lost everybody who he had on his side, and he had his own problems to deal with. God knows, he had so much on his plate at the time. To this day I felt guilty for leaving him, but I pushed those thoughts out of my mind, telling myself that he hadn't cared to find me so why should I find him.


Aha! Please tell me this is the same person I want her to hook-up with. biggrin.gif

--x Lauren
fany_monkey
Wow Krissy I read this through breakfast. I was eating breaky and reading and my mom was like "why do you have that worried look on your face?" I laughed.

It was such a sad chapter. I really liked those last chapters because you put so much emotion to it. You made me see what Izzie was feeling.

Hahahaha the girl that Sirius was with... what an odd ball tongue.gif and no she is not my daughter! But still that was really random but funny. So wait wait Sirius is jealous so he goes and gets a girl... thats smart.

Now what Izzie did by showing Lils the scars must have taken a lot of courage. It's hard to let people know how vulnerable you really are. But I'm glad she did it because that means she can get some help.

Jason... I get the feeling something bad is going to happen there... or maybe its just the name. But anyway I don't like him tongue.gif

Great chapter dear

-Stef
Me_Hermy:1 of the Same
Ahh sorry Krissy! I've been slack and not keeping up, but I'm here now and wow. That last chapter was T-E-N-S-E! I loved it! I think I was literally sitting there with my mouth open!

It was just so powerful and emotional and just wow. I really feel sorry for Izzie though, I feel bad for her because it got that bad and no one even noticed sad.gif Like Stef said, it would have taken a lot of courage for Izzie to finally reveal to someone her cutting, which really was letting someone else in and letting them see her at her worst. That would have been extremely tough, but then again Lorelei said Izzie was strong.

What she said to Lily was harsh, but it needed to be said otherwise Lily would never have noticed. I think you portray everyone a little differently to everyone else and that's what I like about your story.

I agree with Stef again, Jason is trouble. I think he's going to hurt poor Izzie. Izzie should just stick with Sirius I think tongue.gif

Ooh, will Izzie show her ALONE scars to Harry and Ginny? If I was them and I heard this story I'd want to see them. Aww doesn't everyone just want to give Izzie a big hug?!

I hope Sirius dumps that Kristellina Depralvson, even though I bet she's a totally babe tongue.gif, I hope he dumps her and so he and Izzie can stop being all stupid and just get together already.

I hope everyone is there for Izzie when she becomes concious again. If they are all there it will show that they made a mistake and neglected their friend, but they're there now and are sorry they were too self absorbed not to notice.

Great chapter Krissy, post soon!

Katie.
dewet_pdw88
wow this is a great story!
please put up another chapter.
i wanna know who finds her

Great keep it up!

Niki wub.gif
eagleanimagous
I readed!!! Woot! tongue.gif
It was amazing (no duh). Update soon!! biggrin.gif
Awwww Lily is so rough on James. hehe but we all know what happens in the end (they do the dirty and Harry is born)
And Isabella is so in love with Sirius it's ridiculous wub.gif
ohmy.gif How could you leave it at that!! Too suspenseful!!! I want to know what happens to Isabella after she wrote ALONE in her arm.
Update soon please biggrin.gif
americanprincess19
Ah this is just such a good story!!!

I love how deep it is with the whole abuse thing ... i feel SO bad for her sad.gif

Lily has to give into James soon, we know this ... she just needs to stop being so stubborn and Sirius needs to start paying more attention to Izzy!!!

Please update sooon ... it's been far too long!!!
firewhiskeyboy
I keep asking myself why people stop writing things which are so full of potential. I started reading your story and I have to admit I was a bit put off by the subject of cutting. I've never understood why anyone would do that but then I realized that everyone has their own way of venting their issues.

Over all you write it like if you have a great understanding of the subject and that's what makes you keep reading the story. I hope that you write again because I'm curious to understand more about why people vent this way.

MK
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