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Alastorlet_and_Proud!
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Nasuada
Alastorlet_and_Proud!, this is a great start! I love reading fics and every time I see a new one posted I try to read it. I'm really interested in knowing what happens with this one. smile.gif I have one suggestion, maybe when it changes from who's talking you could put a space in between lines to make it easier to read. Other than that, this is a really good start! Let me know when you update!

Chelsea♥
Alastorlet_and_Proud!
Just to say that my new installment is up now!!!!
Nasuada
I am such a dope! I only just realized that Bella was Bellatrix Lestrange! Oh my goodness! rolleyes.gif I can be a little slow sometimes. Sorry!

I like how you keep switching from different characters point of view. It makes things very interesting. I like hearing their different accounts.

Oh my goodness! The last chapter, Druella really freaked me out! It was very dark at the end. A very cliff hangerish ending and I really want to know what happens! Please post again soon!

Chelsea♥

P.S. I hope Draco's ok. biggrin.gif
Nasuada
Your fic is coming along great. There were a lot of surprises in your latest chapters. Dear me, the ending was scary! I'm very curious to see what happens. Post again soon!

Chelsea
snape_rox_my_socks
AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hurry up and post !!! biggrin.gif

Lottie
snape_rox_my_socks
the endings relly good, i like the way you end on a dark cliffhanger. i cant wiat for you to update again!

Lottie
snape_rox_my_socks
i love it! i especially like the way you make bella and druella so similar. also the fact that bella says that there going to bring back Voldemort is really clever and a good place to end on. pls post again soon, i'm dying to know what happens.

Lottie
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snape_rox_my_socks
i love it. just a bit confused. i swear lucius isn't meant to be able to see bella because she came out of the ring and can only be seen by druella or is she back from the dead? really like the ending, but what do they want with the voldemort's portrait? pls update soon and tell me when you do!

lottie
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Rhani
Wow you're story is so good!! And i agree with Chelsea about how I like that you keep changing from different peoples' points of view it keeps the story much more interesting than it is in most books. So Congradulations on an awesome story.
snape_rox_my_socks
really like the bit at the beginning where you have draco's thoughts going through his head. lol, so funny. don't know what else to say. tell me when your next post is up, cause i'm dying to know what happens.

lottie
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Alastorlet_and_Proud!
DO NOT WORRY!

I have been reading all the feedback that you give me, but it only just occurred to me to, you know, thank you ph34r.gif

Nasuada
: Thanks so much for all your feedback. It's great to feel appreciated!

snape_rox_my_socks: biggrin.gif . Thanks for sharing your thoughts! YAY!

Rhani: Thanks for the feedback! Like I said, it's nice to know that there are people out there who like what I'm writing!

Thanks again, and keep reading! Anyone else just kind of randomly looking at this thread after reading my story, please give me even the measliest scrap of feedback because it's just such a great feeling to know that people like my stuff!

Ellie
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P.S. Soory about being a bit slow updating, it's all a bit of a rush at the moment, but, hey, it's CHRISTMAS soon, which means LONG BLISSFUL hours with NO SCHOOL, just lazing around doing NOTHING but staring at my Dad's laptop and writing crazy little Harry Potter fanfics!!!
snape_rox_my_socks
On a beach in St. Lucia. [dark mutterings under breath]. Will go and read update now. biggrin.gif

Lottie
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ChannelingGinny
I just found your fic today and really like it. The different POVs are great and you capture each of the characters just right. Druella is down-right frightening and I can only hope that in the end good will prevail!

smile.gif Kathleen
Alastorlet_and_Proud!
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I can only hope that in the end good will prevail!


Fingers crossed!

Sorry for the HUGE delay everyone, the teachers at my school are trying to bury us under a mountain of homework. Be payient, because there should be an update soon!

Ellie
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snape_rox_my_socks
TELL ME ABOUT IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SO MUCH HOMEWORK!!!!!! ARE THEY TRYING TO KILLL US WITH IT????????????????????

anyway, love the update. especially the way Cissy just does what Bella says and doesn't argue. i'm assuming the portrait moves. really want to know how they get him back though. please up date when you have a break

Lottie
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snape_rox_my_socks
Oh My God! so good! please please please try to update soon! i dont know how ill survive. really like the way Harry has dreams of Voldemort even when Voldemorts just a portrait.

Lottie
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snape_rox_my_socks
sorry to seem insistent, but just been rereading the story (you know me- old habits die hard) and think it's so good that i don't know how i'll live without an update (perhaps a tad melodramatic, but still)

Lottie
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Death Eater
Its really good. I love the way it comes from all the characters points of view and I found some of it quite funny (I have a twisted sense of humor). I really enjoyed reading it.
BronOpie
Oh, I love this! I love Draco's point of view it's so funny. Poor, poor Malfoys. They do have it hard..
And Druella is... just... AMAZING! She's so clever and cunning and evil! Keep writing please or I might die. blink.gif
Alastorlet_and_Proud!
Ok, I'm doing an update as we speak so there should be one up very soon.

snape_rox_my_socks - biggrin.gif Melodramatic is good!

Death Eater
- I'm so glad you liked it. I have a really twisted sense of humour too, so that may be why you found some of it funny.

BronOpie
- Thanks so much for your feedback. I feel sorry for the Malfoys too sad.gif . Druella is rather evil; Bellatrix and Voldemort is not a good combination. I really don't want you to die so I'll write as soon as I can!

Ellie
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snape_rox_my_socks
that was so good! you've left it on such a big cliff hanger, and i cant see what harrys flaw is! i love druella, and voldemort, and the way lucius and draco are now (i never thought id say that!)
please update soon!

Lottie
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snape_rox_my_socks
hey, loved it!!!!!!! actually loved it. Cissy's in a bit of a pickle now, isn't she? Can't wait to find out what happens.

Lottie
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