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happy-potter
Hey!

Please leave your comments, and such for my one-shot, Elevator, here! All comments are welcome! biggrin.gif
- Vicki
Alonnet
WOW!!! Vicky that was great! i loved how you mixed ur take with what would really have been going on in the book! once again you astound me with your amazing writing talents, but i would say this would make a great new fic *wink wink*
alohomora
Wow... I'm amazed at your fabulous writing skills!! So jealous! THis was amazing, I love the way you kind of made it come together in the end for when Harry uses the Resurrection Stone. I liked the unique elevator to heaven type of thing, it's an interesting way of thinking about it. Write some more!! I have practically all of you fanfics bookmarked under "Favorite HP fanfics". (Not meaning to sound stalkerish or anything....Sorry if I scare you.)
Lulu-lolo
What an original idea. I haven't seen Grey's anatomy, so I won't know what you are talking about, but I loved this one-shot. There ain't a lot of action, but the way it is so reflective and profound really astounds me. I really like the way you deliberately don't say James, Sirius, Remus, Peter, but instead you use their nicknames, the names they would have used themselves. It makes it more trustworthy. I think it is a great setting you've made, so simple and still you manage to get so much history and so many feelings in that tiny space. It's brilliant. But I'd like to hear what happens next, unfortunately you've made this a one-shot. Maybe you could make it a mini-series of one-shots? wink.gif

- Louise
alkisti
I probably haven't watched the episode you mentioned either, but I do know that the elevator in Grey's Anatomy is like a place of meeting and talking and clearing things. Anyways, that was a very very good one-shot. At first, I couldn't understand what was going on, since elevators only existed in the MoM, but then...what a brilliant concept of death! It sort of comforts me that this could be true, waiting for your friends to come and going to a happy place. Plus, I loved the line "No sarcasm in the Elevator. The Elevator is a happy place." (I want to use that quote tongue.gif ) And of course the ending was very clever. Well done!
HarryPotterIsLife
blink.gif Oh wow. Wow, wow, wow!

In all honesty - I had no idea what this was going to be about - I don't watch Grey's, but I'm really glad I found myself here, reading this. It was exellent and I love the Mauderers, and this was such a tear jerker honestly, but I'm speachless, really.

I love the concept of this, and I love how you kept the trio in character, even in death. And just, the ending was so good, I didn't expect that at all. I just expected them to maybe sigh, and keep going up in the Elevator, and then it ended. But you fit it in with the last book.

I really, really enjoyed reading this! Good job, really!


Sam
happy-potter
Hey everyone!

Alonnet: Thanks a lot! It always warm to hear such lovely words from a reader. biggrin.gif I like mixing wink.gif Hmm... in fact, after some concideration, I've decided I want to give this a shot as a fic, though I'll still let this part stand as a one-shot. See in the end of the post. Thanks for your amazing review!

alohomora: And thanks to you too!! Well, it was either that ending, or one with Wormtail, Anita helped me deciding this one, but I see now it was the only right thing with Harry. Well, as my own stalker (I've always wanted to say that even though it's not true. I think tongue.gif), you will know I like to write about things which are a bit different. A Heaven Elevator clearly is. And thanks for bookmarking my stories. It means a lot to me. And as written above, there might come more. Look at the end. Thanks for the lovely review!

Lulu-lolo: Original as always wink.gif I agree about the action thing, but it would never have suited, and the story would have been completely different and not nearly as great (at least I see it so). Well, as I started to write when James first appeared, his name simply didn't suit. The nicknames were the only way, and yes, it gives it kind of a different and more personal edge tongue.gif Again, I'm able to give it that emotional stage because it's all quiet and without action and spells. It's different, yes. Look at the end for my note on further chapters. Thanks for the review! smile.gif

alkisti: Well, the episode was one with only Mark and Derek in the elevator, talking really deeply about stuff I don't remember now. And then it came to me tongue.gif Yeah, the beginnign must have been a little strange. But I guess most of my things are. Haha. And well, now elevators are to heaven as well biggrin.gif Yeah, and notice it's friends, not lovers. That wouldn't have been fun, it's also because I believe in friends more than love. Tough, but true. You pointed out my absolute favourite quote! That and then the one with anger. Basically there's no dark emotions in the Elevator tongue.gif Thanks for the amazing review!

HarryPotterIsLife: You sound astounded. I'm glad to hear tongue.gif Well, you don't have to watch Grey's Anatomy to read this. That was just where I got the idea for it. Keeping characters in, well, character, is important to me. If they're not one won't read and it's not the same. Well, the ending was kind of tough really, but only because I had another one I considered, but in the end, I can see this was the only one. Thanks for the amazing review! Hope you've gotten your voice back tongue.gif

EVERYONE: So after some have said here, and a lot on fanfiction.net, I've decided I want to give this a shot as a story. I'll try to write a story entirely of the Marauders in heaven, meeting different kind of persons, both historical and ancestors of their own. Every chapter will be a little story in itself, which can be read separately, but also as a whole. I'm a bit busy at the moment, so it might take some time, but to anyone who reads this, I want to ask. Do you have an idea? Please let me know through PM or here. I'm open to listen to your ideas. It could be both persons, but also maybe different plots. Let me know! It's your chance to be a part of a story of mine (and of course you'll get credit for helping me)!
EDIT 10/2: So I said I've give this a shot. I tried, but after weeks, I have to admit I don't think I can do it. I'm sorry, I really wanted this to work out, but I have other things which I actually can write, and this doesn't seem to want to be written. I'm sorry.

Hope to hear from you!

- Vicki happy.gif
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