Okay, please leave feedback for my story here. You can read it updated here. I want to hear what you honestly think, no matter how brutal. I can take it. I will hopefully be updating the chapters every week or so, my earlier. Just depends on how busy I am. The link is also in my sig. Please and thank you!

Kiersten

Oh, I'm the first reviewer-goodie! I really liked your first chapter and I'm interested to find out what happens next. It seems as though Rose isn't that thrilled about being a witch and going off to Hogwarts. I think if Hermione has anything to say about it, Rose will be on her way before she knows it!

Good job, well written. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Lisa

Oh this seems fun! The first chapter was a lot of fun! All the excitement of Rose getting her letter! It makes me so excited! It's a really good start! I look forward to reading further! Update again soon!

-Chelsea

Kiersten, your story caught me! I'm really looking forwards to read more of this story; I love Ron and Hermione's older life and I love to read about their children! What's next?!
I think it's brilliantly written, and I love the way you describe everything.

Rose is so perfectly adolescent in this. So Rose doesn't want to be a witch, really? That is an interesting twist. It is a wonderful little piece of work so far. I look forward to seeing what happens next.

~Kel

I like the story a lot. We don't have a lot of stories with Rose Weasley as the main character. This is going to be interesting. Your writing is truly impressive, with all of the detail and the way you capture everything. I also liked how you made the Weasley family's relationship. Ron really cares about Hermione a lot, because he looked at her nicely when she had a terrified look on her face. And Ron plays with Hugo, and Rose and Hermione talk.

I can't wait to get more of your story, Kiersten!

~alyssa~

Oh, I'm glad you all liked it! Really my reasoning to why Rose reacted the way she did was because there must have been some kind of pressure, but not a lot. I mean, her parents work at the MoM and everything, so she sort of had a hope that maybe she wouldn't have to live up to all that. Plus, her uncle Harry defeated the Dark Lord and her parents, aunt, and their friends helped a lot, so that's sure to make an outcome if anyone finds out at Hogwarts, which they might... You'll just have to wait and see. I'm still working on it a little for Chapter 2. It should be up soon.

Thanks again!

Kiersten

Another great chapter Kiersten. I'm interested in Anika. What kind of girl will she be like? Will they be friends? So many questions your chapter leaves me with! Love how much detail you put in the story. It makes it so much more alive!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

~alyssa~

Anika seems like an interesting character so far. I have the same questions as Alyssa. Everyone seems really hyped up about Rose going to Hogwarts. Is it going to be hard for her to live up to all of the expectations? Wonderful work on another chapter! I can't wait until the actually get to Hogwarts.

~Kel

Yeah, she will be. She's actually very interesting to me too, and she's a fun character to write for because of what she becomes. I want to thank both of you, Alyssa and Kel, for reading my chapter. I should be working on Chapter 3 this weekend, hopefully if I have time, and be getting it up soon. And you'll just have to wait and see what happens. I hate having to hide stuff...

-Kiersten-

Oh this was a fun chapter! I love Diagon Alley! It's so fun! It's so exciting when they go in all the shops and get their school supplies! I feel the same way as everyone else about Anika! She seems very fun and full of energy. I look forward to reading more about her. Haha! I laughed so hard when I read the part where James gave Lily a Fainting Fancy. Haha. Poor Lily. I thought it was nice how the whole family went together. I can't wait until they go to Hogwarts!

-Chelsea

Kiersten, great chapter. It was so much fun! I loved that Rose was reading Hogwarts, A History, just like her mom did. They're such a cute family. I'm looking forward to Rose's interaction with Anika and seeing all the kids go off to Hogwarts.

Good Job,
Lisa

Thanks you guys for reading! I will try to get the chapter up soon. I just have to get a copy of DH(I know, sad that I don't have one, right?) because I want to use the original dialogue from the Epilogue. It was fantastic. Just some of it, of course.

Lisa, I wanted to make her seem a lot like Hermione in her intelligence, and you'll see some of that throughout Chapter 3. Chelsea, I'm glad you liked it. I wanted to bring some of the old gang back into the story just a tad.

This is really getting good! I can't wait to see what will happen at Hogwarts, and the classes. The Sorting Hat was really having an interesting night, wasn't it? I really like your writing style, and the way you portray the characters. Great job!

~Kel

Kiersten, I loved chapter 3! The way you worked in the dialogue from DH was awesome! It was so fun to reread it, but with some new characters and new dialogue sprinkled in! Great job! It's amazing, but I almost forgot that Rose would be going to Hogwarts with Scorpious Malfoy. That could be very fun!

I can't wait to see what that's about and also why Scorpious was so nervous. It's not like a Malfoy to be nervous, but maybe I'm digging too deep here. It's just that I adore those bad boys (as if you didn't already know that!) .

Looking forward to chapter 4!
Lisa

Hey Kiersten!!!

I absolutely love this story!!! Rose is really cool!!! I can't wait to find out what happens next!!! Keep Updating!!!

Cheers

Namra

Kel- Thanks so much! The Hogwarts classes are going to be interesting because there are quite a few new teachers.

Lisa- No, you're not digging to deep. You're right there! It'll all make sense about Rose and Scorpious soon. You just have to wait. Thanks.

Narma- Thanks for reading my story. I'll be updating soon, and I'm glad you like how I portrayed Rose.

Thanks again!

-Kiersten-

Kiersten~ What a sweet story!!! I can't wait to see what happens next. I too am curious about Anika. . . Hopefully she'll be a good friend to Rose. I sense a little love triangle beginning here with Luke, Rose and Scorpius. . .

This part;


made me say awww. . . It was so cute!!!

Great job, I can't wait to read more!

~Dayna

This was a nice chapter that opened up some possibilities. Like I told you before, it's really cool how this story is like a Draco/Hermione story in the next generation. And Rose sounds quite like her mother.

Scorpius seems like a sweet enough kid. But I agree with Dayna about the love triangle. Luke, Rose, and Scorpius.

Your so sweet with putting up with me,
~alyssa~

This is really good so far. Anika and Rose are quite funny together, and it is neat to watch them interact. Of course at the end she starts to get different; more crabby and fearless.

The Potions Professor is insane and intriguing. I wonder how she is going to figure into it. Professor Volans is harsh. I love all of your new teacher you made up! They seem perfect!

Oooh. Scorpius/Rose is blossoming now. I like the last line about the dream.


~Kels

Great chapter, Kiersten and thanks so much for the dark chocolate; I was afraid you'd only have milk chocolate! I love Professor Flitwick (not as much as Sevy of course) and it was so sweet the way he taught them cheering charms because they needed cheering up. I really enjoyed all the new teachers too. The potions professor was my favorite. She reminded me of a cross between McGonagall and Dumbledore; I think she's going to be a great inspiration to Rose.

Oh dear, now there is a new Malfoy to adore...and Scorpious is adorable! Poor kid can't be in Gryffindor because of his dad (maybe Dayna can do something about that )! I'm sure Luke is lovely, but give me a Malfoy anyday!!!

I can't wait to see what happens with Rose, Anika, Luke, Scorpious and all the rest. Great job setting up some really intruiging stuff: new teachers, friends, and Lee's dad being missing, hmm... Oh and I can't wait to see what Ron has to say about Draco in Hermione's next letter! HAHA

Lisa

I loved this chapter!!! Rose, Scorpius & Luke make the cutest love triangle!!! I can't wait to find out what happens next!!! All the parts with Scorpius and Rose were so adorable!!! Keep Updating!!!

Cheers

Namra

So much feedback makes me happy after such a hard day! Hugs to each of you for that.

Dayna: Thanks for reading! A love triangle, huh? Hmm... and yeah, I put that part about the dream in there, and my friend, Emily, helps me while I'm still writing a very rough draft, and she absolutely loved that part, so I decided to keep it in.

Alyssa: Thank you for being my beta, darling. And a love triangle does seem interesting, as I said before. I had thought about something along those lines, but I haven't decided yet. Of course, you'll be one of the first to know. And I'll put up with most people, haha.

Kel: Oh, so you like Professor Lynx? I wanted a very interesting character that will play a role in the story, so I decided to combine a couple of my own teachers' personalities and that's what I came up with. And yes, for some reason, Professor Volans acts a little squeamish around Rose and such. I wonder why.......

Lisa: Your welcome for the chocolate. Yes, Professor Lynx... I thought a little of Dumbeldore might stay with the school. After all, I terribly miss him. *sighs* I'm glad you like Malfoy, and maybe... Dayna, what do you think? Hehe. I feel excited for you all to read the letter! It'll be interesting.

Namra: I'm glad you are reading my story, and I'm glad you're pleased with my writing. Scorpious and Rose might be even more adorable.


Just to let you all know, I will be busy for the next 2 or 3 weeks with deadlines all around each other. Eek! So, It might be a while before I get the next chapter posted up. Plus, I seem to be getting a tad bit of writer's block. But if you have any serious suggestions that you feel might help me with my story, feel free to PM me. I will be most likely checking my email every couple days.

Talk to you soon,

Kiersten

We are seeing some love action now. Luke and Rose kissed and James and Anika are going out. It sounds like Anika was mad at Rose so she is only getting back at her by dating her friend. Cat fight!

Luke had a big secret there. That changes a lot! I think it's really cool how you are creating something new to add. It makes it more of your own world. I love it!

I can't wait to get the next chapter, which I know, without a doubt, will be absolutely brilliant!

~alyssa~

Alyssa, thanks! And yes, your right that Anika is trying to get back at Rose, but we'll see how that works out. And I wanted to create something new that way it wasn't just a repeat from what we already know that JKR wrote.

Just a heads-up, there are a couple previous characters, 2 that I have so far, that are coming back. They were last heard of in DH. I'm not saying anymore.

-Kiersten-

We learn a lot of interesting history in this chapter. The letter from her mum is fascinating. Draco is still being evil somehow?

Luke being a feorer is interesting. That should play out further later, but it is very cool. And then, they kissed. I was not expecting that. And Anika and James. Did Rose turn into a zombie or something, missing all that?

Great work, and I can't wait to read more!

~Kel

Wow!!! A lot happened in this chapter!!! First the whole Draco still being evil!!! Then we found out about Luke being a Feorer!!! Luke & Rose then kiss!!! Woohoo!!! Then the big surprise James and Anika are going out!!! Keep updating!!! I want to know more!!!

Cheers

Namra (Nimzie)

Great chapter, Kiersten! Sorry it took me so long to get to it; I was on vacation. That letter from home was so intriuging! Wow, Draco and Ron were friends, then Draco turned on him! I'm looking forward to learning the whole story.

The part about Luke being a Feorer was great! Did you make that word up? I've never heard of it before, but you gave so much history about it, that I am now well informed! Rose and Luke's kiss was a big surprise! I like that Rose and Scorpious are secret friends and that Rose wants it to develop into more. Oh, I do hope she gets her way!

Lisa

p.s. Whether or not Anika is dating James out of spite or because she likes him, I still think they would look cute together!

Kel, no Rose didn't turn into a zombie. I just thought I was taking things a little slow, and there wasn't much happening, so I sort of sped it up. Anika was mad at her anyway, so Rose wouldn't of really cared. She was too busy with studying, Scorpius, and Luke.

Namra, well, Draco was evil. The next chapter will hopefully explain a lot. It may be a tad confusing at first, but I don't want to try to fit everything into one chapter, so I can still have you all come back and read my stories!

Lisa, like I said to Namra, a lot will be learned in Chapter 6. I hope you had fun on your vacation! And yes, I made up the word feorer. See, I was working on one of my one-shots at the same time, which is now posted (go to the link in my sig!), and it talks about auror in there, and I think it sort of developed from that. And I wanted to include some kind of romance in their just because, well, why not!?


You'll find out soon!


Thanks all for the feedback!

-Kiersten-

Just for updating reasons, I have not abandoned this story. I am participating in our regional social studies fair and must have my project finished and what not by a week from today. Plus, I have just a tad bit of writer's block, again. So, I'll be working on a chapter, but it may be a while before I actually get it posted, so maybe another week or two.

Talk to you soon!

Kiersten, wow, Professor Volans is Regulus Black! I never saw it coming; it's very intriguing though. It sounds like someone (maybe a feorer) saved his life at some point. I'm interested to find out more about it.

I really enjoyed Regulus' "chat" with Sirius. The way they still didn't get along seemed very probable; brothers!! It was great to read about one of the "old gang" again.

Great Chapter!
Lisa

Wow! I was not expecting Professor Volans to be Regulus! Very good twist. Does anyone know who he his, or if he is alive? Will he tell anybody?

And Rose and Luke are still in their trances. I dunno, but Rose always seems sort of zoned out since learning all that stuff about feorers. Did Luke hypnotize her?

Regulus and Sirius act so real. I enjoy their 'brotherly love' you portray. Great chapter! Keep writing.

~Kel

Another awesome chapter!!! Wow!!! Professer Volans is actually Regulus Black!!! I'm loving it!!! I hope we have more little Sirius & Regulus chats!!! That would be awesome to read!!! Brotherly arguments are so funny!!! Keep Updating!!!

Cheers

Namra (Nimzie)

Okay... So many good guesses and stuff, but, yes, I put Regulus in there because I like creating new characters but then some of the characters, such as him, that JKR introduces and then just sort of throws out the window are so tempting to write with. And I thought that bringing Sirius back might be fun just because I miss him, and I truly believe that's he not really dead, but just sort of his soul is behind the veil and that there is an after-life in the wizarding world besides becoming a ghost.

Lisa, good guess, but nope, a feorer didn't save his life. That's good, though. And there will be more soon to come. I've given up on trying to write it "chapter by chapter". Now, I'm just sort of writing as it comes, and I'll organize it later.

Kel, as of now, nobody knows he's alive except Sirius, therefore nobody knows he's Regulus Black. I was so tempted to have him using Polyjuice Potion, but decided against it just because it seemed sort of repetitive from GoF. And he might, eventually...

And Rose and Luke still seemed in their trances? Well, they definitely weren't meant to be, haha. Maybe the next part will make it more clear. And, no, Luke didn't hypnotize her, hahaha.

Nimzie, ha, there most likely will still be contact between them just because Sirius still cares and Regulus wouldn't throw away the book.

Thanks so much you guys!

-Kiersten-

Wow, chapter 7 was huge! Where do I start? First of all, I loved that Hagrid made an appearance and that you described him as having gray hair. I liked the way you aged him, but kept his personality the same. Oh and the Gwinkies were so funny!

I just adore Rose and Scorpius together. The way he was playing with her hair made me go, "aww!" Scorpius' jealousy of Luke is so cute. I hope there will be a romance soon.

It's nice that Rose and Anika made up, and I liked the two new Gryffindor girls. Then, you found a way to fit singing and Sweeney Todd into a fic...you crack me up, Kiersten! Also, kudos to including "To Kill a Mockingbird". I love that book.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter and finding out more about Rose and Scorpius, as well as Luke and Professor Volans!

Lisa

Haha, thanks Lisa! I really haven't set out a story line yet so anything can happen, and you all might be influential if you give me any ideas I really like. The only problem I have with any big romance is because they're 11... and that's really young for anything serious, you know? If I had only aged them a bit.. But Gwinkies were actually a creature I made up randomly, then got into describing in the LALA thread, so you can go there for a full description of them if you like.

Yeah, so I have this huge notebook and it has my original drafts of all the chapters for this fanfics. I took it everywhere with me during school and would write in it randomly. Well, Sweeny Todd came in there because of the obsession of some people on here, and then I needed a well-known book, so I used "To Kill a Mockingbird". But it's not like I've actually been able to get through the book, myself. But thank you for reading and listening to my ramblings. Hopefully, I can get the next chapter up as soon as I write it, haha.

-Kiersten-

Chapter 8 was great! There was so much information in it. I loved, loved, loved Rose and Scorpious and the way that they admitted that they liked each other. They are soooo cute! And Albus is such a good cousin. It's sweet the way he and Rose interact. This sentence cracked me up:

Now I'm really curious to know what's up with Luke, Professor Volans and the other feorers. I'm beginning to think that Regulus is a feorer himself, but I'm not sure if that makes sense. I'm also wondering if feorers aren't such a good thing. Maybe Luke is the only truly good one. That dream Rose had has really got me pondering all sorts of things!

Great job.
Hugs,
Lisa

I'm so sorry for reading only the first chapter and never again! This story is really lovely, and your writing style is very good, so I can't see why I didn't read more before, except procrastination issues.
So, I'm about to start chapter 4, because chapter 3 was quite long, but I've got to say you managed to give us detailed information about wands, descriptions and such, and to find replacements for the teachers (rest in peace, all of them). I like how you stuck to the Epilogue
I can see something going on between Rosie and Luke, but I still can't figure out what's with Kim. I wonder if Albus will find love as well...
Will Rose stay at Hogwarts for Christmas or will it be a big Weasley-Potter-Granger meeting? That'd be awesome!
Well, that's all I've got to say, I'm fully caught by this now.
Keep writing!

Thanks for reading you two! (And I hope you actually enjoyed it and weren't just finding a reason to post )

Lisa, I'm glad you liked the Scorpius and Rose interaction. They admitted it, but I don't think that Rose realizes it quite too much yet. Poor thing has too much on her mind. And I'd never thought of Regulus being a feorer, but he's not. It's a good theory, though The Blacks were too big of Blood Purists for him to have any kind of creature descent in his blood line.


Keep this in mind

Dess, no problem, haha. I'm just glad to have people enjoying my writing. And thanks And I'm not quite sure about Albus yet. I already have my epilogue planned out (yet my ending and story line is quite vague ) I'm thinking of doing something about him, but I'm not quite sure yet.. Hmm. And Kim.. I want all the feoerers to end up having kind of a significance. Lee's already got his with being a HP fanatic and being Lee Jordan's son. But I'll get back to that; thanks for reminding me, haha.



She's not staying at Hogwarts.. and I'm trying to bring Christmas closer without ending the story.. agh. I'll try, haha, but it's what I have planned. The next chapter might have to be reaaaaaaally short to do so.

And I hope to be finished with the next chapter sooner this time, I promise I have inspritaion.. and my laptop back, haha.

-Kiersten-

Good work! I like this fic a lot. It is very well thought out and so... suspenseful and GREAT! Keep writing!

~Bronwyn

Aww, Bronwyn, thanks! Just to let you know, I just write as I go, so it's not thought out, but at least it looks like it, haha. I'm glad you find it suspenseful, and I'm also so excited to have another reader. I should have a new chapter up soon!

Thanks again!

-Kiersten

i loved it, one of the best fanfictions i've read. i loved how it was written, i can't wait to see what happens next

Hermione is my favorite character and i love reading fanfics about her

Aww, well thank you. I'm going to try and include more of Hermione in the, not next chapter, but the one after that, I think, because it'll be Christmas break. I plan on having them going back to the Burrow. It'll be interesting.. but you'll just have to wait and see. I don't want to give anything away.

Thanks for reading

-Kiersten

I just read it all and i think It's great! I like the way you build up the suspence at the end of every chapter.
I love reading fanfics of future generations, especially the ones about Rose. I can't wait for the next chapter