Okay, this is the feedback section for my fanfic 'The Tales of Evil'.
Say what you want to say, but keep it polite and please abide to the rules (one-liners etc.). I hope you guys like the story, but if not, keep your critique constructive, will you?
Thanks for reading!
~DoubleD

First of all...YAY! Finally you're posting your story!

Secondly...yay a dedication to me! I feel so special!

I'm not sure what to wish...the story is going to be awesome, I'm sure about it! I've only read the first three chapters you've sent me, so I can't wait to read more! There's no bad comments this time, hehe. I really want to read more about Voldemort. I know some parts are made up, but I have the tendency to integrate them into the actual story.

Have a great start with it...and don't keep us waiting long, okay?

~Alkisti

PS: First comment. Woo Hoo!

Poor Merope. I always feel so sorry for her..I wonder if she had lived, how would both of their lives have been? Would have Tom stayed Tom? What was really the crucial factor that made him evil? His need to outshine and leave behind his humiliating past? His need to prove worthy of his anchestry? Poor guy. I know he was a murderer but you can't blame him for coming out of a crazy family.

Oh, how many times have I wished I could do the thing with my eyes? To just stare at someone and make them pay for making you feel lousy. Oh yes! Okay, Tom went a little too far later on, but who hasn't wished for super powers to make them stand out and break free from everything? Whatever. I feel miserable.

Nice chapter! Post more!

Sorry for not leaving feedback to your wonderful story before now. I love how detailed your story is; there is never a time when we are wondering what you mean or anything.

I like how in your fanfic, you put Tom in the situation where he isn't really using his powers intentionally, it's all just an accident that he doesn't know he's causing.

I think the story is very promising as to what is to come.

Can't wait!

~alyssa~

We want more...we want more!

You know, I sympathize with Tom. There were times when I wanted to get back at people but no matter how angry I was, I just couldn't do anything "magical". He was an outcast, so yeah, this kind of justifies why he used his powers this way. But the problem is that he kept doing this all his life.

Anyways, I was thinking today...wasn't he really lucky that he didn't end up being a Squib? What a horrible fate for him! Or maybe not?

PS: I think I made it in one-piece out of my exams too. Not so sure though. I have the vague feeling there's something missing.

PS2: Oh yes. That would be my brain.

~Alkisti

Hmm, it seems I need a mod for my own to control all this massive writing here.
I don't know if there are any things unclear to you (two), but it seems like you know Harry Potter well enough.
Thanks, you're both way too nice!!!
Alkisti, I think, or at least that's what my story sounds like, that Tom would have been different if Merope had survived, because she would have loved him. And I think his experiences in the orphanage did leave a lasting imprint on him. Oh, and I think you'll not like him for long, because things will soon get nasty.
Maybe someone disagrees and says that Tom would have been evil even if he had been raised by a loving family, but I don't think so. We'll never know, unless... JKR, what do you think? Now we only have to wait for her answer...

I've tried to stick to the story as much as possible, which is easier in the beginning, because we have some information from HBP, but when Tom enters Hogwarts, things get a bit more ... unclear. But you'll see when it 's time for the second part of the story...
Anyway, thanks for leaving only positive comments!
More to come!

Huh. That was interesting. I would have expected for a snake to attack the kids, but this might come later on, right? Plus, I don't think there are many snakes in London.

For a moment, I thought he had discovered Diagon Alley, but it's too soon for that too.

Post more! He is such an intriguing personality...I don't know how to explain this, but it's amazing the way he thinks. He was a genious. An evil one, but still a genious. I can not help but "admire" how far he went despite being an orphan. Don't take it the wrong way! He was wicked but this doesn't erase the fact that he managed to stand out and be someone everyone would know.

No, poor bunny.
Why couldn't he strangle Billy something less fluffy and cute like a spider? He would have made this world a better place. *sigh*

Post more. No pressure on you, but I'd really like to read more on his life.

Poor Tom. I know what it feels like to be an outcast. He has absolutely no one to turn to that will understand him, or even try to understand him. He has a hard life to live. Billy is one of those people who tries to be mean to those lesser than him in any way. It's heartbreaking to watch Tom be bullied by such a person as Billy.

Keep up the excellent writing!

~alyssa~

Alkisti: the dog was referring to what Tom said in HBP, that he could control animals without training them. But you're right, soon there will be snakes, too.
You don't have to explain or excuse for admiring him, at least he had a goal and did everything to achieve it. Unfortunately he did wrong things too.
Yeah, but strangling Billy would have been harder I guess, because Tom wouldn't have been able to control him (see the animal-thing again). And maybe the people in the orphanage would have made a tiny little bit more fuss about a dead child, wouldn't they?

Yeah, Alyssa, I guess you're right. Now Tom is still just taking revenge for what others did to him, but lateron (about chapter 10 I think) we'll see that he kind of overreacts. Can't tell you too much...
I suppose, at least he won't be bullied anymore then...

What a tiny detail. Tsk. He would make them forget about it, cause he's a powerful wizard and can do whatever he wants.

Actually...shouldn't the Ministry have interfered to stop him? I know he is too young and he doesn't know he is a wizard. However, if the Ministry can detect magic, especially magic that turns against Muggles, they should have taken him away. Shouldn't they?
Just wondering..


For now...Accio food!

~Alkisti

Not sure why, but I liked this phrase. I think it's probably the only time Voldemort would feel something positive for his family, as in being grateful for inheriting his skills from them. Poor kid though, he expected so much more from the Gaunts, not to mention the Riddles!

Post more soon!

~Alkisti

Why wasn't he angry at those other kids too? I know that Dennis and the girl are the intruders, but shoudln't he feel like harming the others as well for telling on him? Tsk tsk...Tom...you're not thinkng straight. If you're going to harm someone, harm the ones who are coward enough to tell on you and send someone else to find their stuff.

~Alkisti

Oh man, Alkisti, you're way too smart for me!

This would be a good point for me to come up with some good ideas to explain all this, wouldn't it?
Well, let me think...


None of this may sound convincing, but I'll try anyway.
I believe the ministry didn't catch Tom because as you said, he didn't know he was a wizard then. What he did may not have been considered as severe violations against the wizarding laws. You remember, Snape wasn't told off when he let that stick fall down on Petunia.
And it's not (yet) like he's using his magic consciously. Unfortunately this will change soo and then I'll need another explanation.

You're right, Tom did not punish the other children, but why? Fact is, I simply didn't think about that, but maybe he did not want to punish them because he could not collect any more trophies from them? Or because he realized that they were already too scared to enter hi room? Maybe he did put them under some more pressure afterwards and we just don't know (because I didn't write it). Maybe he had just decided to punish those that were brave enough to stand up against him, like he did later when he was powerful. He only killed those that were messing up his plans (like Charity Burbage), in whichever way.
Does that sound convincing? I hope so...

Sorry Kai, I know I'm asking questions only JKR could or should answer! I'll take any of your explanations as convincing.

Poor kids, they don't know who they're messing with. I think that the Ministry should have interfered sooner. This doesn't compare to letting a stick fall on someone's head, or to letting a snake go wild. Hurting people consciously is a whole different matter. If only they had dealt with it sooner..

I don't think Voldemort ever wondered if he would be inferior to his classmates. I believe he just took it for granted that he would be the best student, the most special and unique one. That's why he excelled in everything and managed to form a circle of followers. Because of his confidence in his powers, and then, because of his actual magical skills.

I like how he thought that his mother wouldn't be a witch because she died. Maybe that's how the whole being immortal thing was formed. If you're a wizard, you might as well take advantage of it, and live forever.

Hm, I really believe that Tom was a bit unsure at first.
I mean, Tom never knew what other wizards could do, and Dumbledore did not react in a way that made him think he was that special. At least in my opinion he did not tell Tom "Wow, you're special, no one else has done what you did". Thus Tom must think that what he had done so far was just normal for wizards.

Tom will not think for long that he's inferior, of course. I think Tom might be compared to Harry, when they arrive at Hogwarts for the first time. Both are unsure what to do, both don't know how good they are and in the beginning, both are so impressed by the whole magical world that they naturally think they might not be good enough for it (though I will allow Tom to wander around in Diagon Alley for some time before coming to Hogwarts).
Yet, as I said, Harry is not an outstanding pupil, unlike Tom, who will very soon realize that he is and he'll gather the first group of followers during the first year.

Awwwww, young Arthur!
Was he really so old? I always believed he was a lot younger than Voldemort.

I'm pretty sure Tom will go straight to the dark side of the Diagon Alley, if it existed back then anyways. Post more soon!

~Alkisti

That's what hotforharry and I have been talking about too. How old was Arthur?
Well, Tom went to school roughly between 1939 and 1945. At least somewhere around then, because in GoF it says that the Riddle-murders had been committed (about) half a century ago, that would mean 1943-45. Tom was in his fifth year then.
And when Bill is already working in Egypt in PS, he would be about twenty, I think, so taking into account that Arthur was at least 18 years old when becoming Bill's father, Arthur went to school shortly after Tom did. Therefore at the time in which my story takes place, he would have to be a small child.
Does that sound logical? At all? I believe I saw a page with a chronology somewhere in the internet, but I just guessed it would have been around that time...