Please leave feedback, comments, questions, concerns, complaints for my new fanfiction here. The story is about Rufus Scrimgeour's daughter, Alyson Scrimgeour, and can be accessed HERE.

Wow! The first thing I see when I come on VTM is that you started a new fic! I'm a constant reader of the Unknown Potter and well I've fallen a bit behind but never the less I'm working on it. This one looks like it's going to be equally good! You have real talent to grasp the attention of the reader as soon as they start! Honestly I'm already liking Aly and her rebel self. The character seems to come to life which is awesome!

Seriously I'm hooked and its the first chapter!

Hope you post soon!

-Stef

Stef: I'm really happy to hear you're still reading the Unknown Potter. It took me almost two entire years, but both the Unknown Potter and the Unknown Potter: Death Eaters' Revenge are now complete. I was having a hard time filling the hours and this story just came to me and I had to get it written down. I'm going to love writing this because Aly is very different from Stephanie and I hope the plot will be different, though with also some pretty obvious similarities (you'll see more about that within the next chapter or two). Thank you, and I hope to post very soon!

Kristin

I agree with fany_monkey. I was so excited when I got your PM about this story. I couldn't wait to read it and as soon as I started I knew I was going to love it. You did a great job on this first chapter. Thoughts and emotions are two things that you convey very well in your characters and I love to watch them develop because you paint pictures for us and they have lives all their own.

Aly reminds me of a friend of mine who likes to go against what other's would expect of her; Aly's a true wizarding world rebel if ever there was one. I like how you define for us both the her that other's see and the her that her best friends know.

Another thing I also liked is how you manage to keep Draco's POV his, it was very in-character. I can't wait to see how things with him and Aly progress and grow from here. Like I said, this is gonna be another great one, and I am positive I'll love it!

Great first chapter,
Post more soon,
Always the eager reader,
Karina

Karina: Thank you very much. I never put much thought into how my writing may come off to others--I just write exactly what I picture in my head. It is always wonderful and helpful to hear what my readers are thinking about and noticing when they are reading the story.

Regarding Aly...I wanted to show you guys the person she truly is and the person as others she her because it will be very important to the storyline later down the road. She can be hard and cruel, but there's also a softer side. And I like to think that she's completely different than Stephanie Potter in every way. It's exciting to be writing about a new character!

One thing I didn't get to do in The Unknown Potter was to develop Draco's character. Because of Aly's involvement, he will change from JKR's/Harry's perception of him in the Deathly Hallows. I am very excited to finally be doing some Draco POVs!!!

I've sent off the next chapter for review, so as soon as I get it from my beta I'll post it!! Thank you for taking the time to leave your thoughts!

Kristin

As soon as I read the words "Death Eater" I was totally absorbed. This was an intense chapter. It was fast paced and exciting. Just when I thought things couldn't get worse for Aly, they did. It was like *phew it's over.* one minute and the next *BAM* "Wow! that came out of nowhere." Once again you had me hooked. At first I was wondering exactly what she was going to do, and then just when I hazarded a guess something completely new happened. Way to go! Can't wait to see what happens next, O queen of cliffhangers.

Update soon!
Karina

Ahhhh... my heroin fix is back! I am so hooked on your writing that I need a new update every so often!

I really like where this story is going, and of course with the Queen 'o the Cliffhangers, Twists and Turns this story could go just about anywhere.

Aly is quite self-centered coupled with a sense of entitlement. Methinks she will have to have a major attitude adjustment to cope with all that lies ahead of her. I am eager to find out what happens when she meets back up with Draco, which is bound to happen soon since she is being taken to LV (isn't that where Draco is, too?) I really like Draco and hope he has a prominent role in this story (but I also hope he's not as soulless as he was in TUP).

Keep up the great writing!

Wow another amazing chapter!

I kind of feel bad for Aly with the whole watching her dad die but honestly I think you used this as a way to set up her character and her feelings. I really do find it amazing how you can use things that happened and fit them in with your storyline.

So is Aly going to hold a grudge towards Harry though he didn't do anything wrong? I'm still not sure if she's going to be with the good guys or the bad guys.

Really wonderful job Kristin! You really leave us wanting more!

-Stef

Karina: You know me...things will get worse before they get better! I had a lot of fun writing this chapter and I can't wait to delve deeper into the Death Eater lifestyle. There is so much promise with where I can take Aly's fate...I'm not sure which direction I'm going quite yet!

Kathleen: Don't worry. Draco will have more play in this story than TUP, but his character may not be less sinister. And I really hope their reunion isn't anticlimactic...but we'll have to see. I have plenty in store for both Aly and Draco. The fun is just beginning!

Stef: You are completely right. I used that exact scenario to set up her character completely. I don't know if the grudge is going to be so much against Harry as the entire world...but, again, we are so early in the story, even I don't know what could happen (exactly, though I do have ideas). Thank you!

So...I probably should have waited to start this story until after my new big changes are over with...but I just couldn't help myself. July is going to be an extremely busy month (what with a trip to Chicago and moving), so I will probably only have one more update this month. It sucks, I know, but things should slow down again in August!! So, please bear with me as I struggle to find time even to sleep, let alone write!

Kristin

Ohmigosh! Yet another action-packed chappie, I cannot believe that it took me this long to give you feedback for it. Wow. Of course you are the Cliffy Queen! That ending...I can't even find the word to describe it. But you did awesome. I really like how you moved smoothly from one scene to the next.

Although I must admit that at first I was beside myself with worrying about what the heck was happening to Aly? I was thinking 'Where is she? Is she okay?' then of course I felt sort of guilty for not giving the other characters my attention. But there's just something about your main characters that makes them instantly my favorites. It's so easy to take a certain liking to them. And as I said, Aly does remind me of a friend of mine.

But I really like what you did with this chapter. Once again I will apologize for taking so long to give you some feedback but it's been so crazy that it actually took me a while to notice that you had posted an update!

Update soon! Let me know when you do (if you can).
Can't wait to read your next installment! 'Til then,
-Karina

Karina: Most of my brilliant ideas come while I am on long road trips (when I lived in Milwaukee, I always had plenty of time to think due to the 6 hour drives home). Good news (and kind of bad news)! I am going on a nice long road trip this weekend, so I should have plenty of time to think about what is going to happen to the characters, though I am slowly getting a clearer picture of which direction this story will lead.

Thank you, once again. It really makes me feel good to know that you really like the character. I am really looking forward to developing her character, and I can tell you that I am going to have some fun with this next chapter. The bad news is that it is going to be a couple weeks before the next chapter is posted, so I apologize for keeping you waiting.

I will definitely let you know when I've posted. Thanks for taking the time to leave feedback, and no worries that it has taken so long. We all know how long it takes me to leave feedback for your story! (Which, I apologize, but I won't have time to read your latest chapter until I get back from Chicago...and probably later due to the move 1 1/2 days after I get back...but I WILL get to it!!).

Have a great rest of July and enjoy your summer!

Kristin

Sorry for not feedbacking sooner, but I just read your PM today. Once again, you have managed to keep me on the edge of my seat. I loved every word of this chapter. I must again tell you that you are amazing at characterizations.

Your POV's are always so clear and...fitting. I almost felt like I had invaded the cozy privacy of Aly's mind; and you managed to make me like her character even more now...which deserves congratulating, because I didn't think that would be possible. Draco's POV, of course was also quite refreshing.

And all of it was very Draco.

And Voldemort...wow! I was so freaked out, it's almost like I could hear his voice in my head. Great job! You are an amazing author. Keep the new chapters coming, you know I will be reading them.

Let me know when you update,
Karina

I'm back again! I like how ChannelingGinny put it; a heroin fix. That's kind of how your writing is for me haha. Like I've said before, you so talented and you make all your characters come to life. I'm only four chapters behind in this one, rather than the whole story haha, so this feedback won't be quite as long as the one I left for Stephanie's story.

Chapter One; Aly is definitely a different character than Stephanie and I like it. She has a strong point of view about her father, and I'm interested to see where he relationship with Draco goes. As for his POV, he too has a strong mind frame and is determined to prove himself. I wonder where their paths will cross.

Chapter Two; I wonder what Aly did to merit her being sent away to the USA... Scrimgeour's death scene was very good. I'm surprised that he didn't give away Harry's whereabouts, even with Aly in trouble. Surely this will negative ramifications in the future? Hmm. Yaxley is quite evil.

Chapter Three; I've always wondered what happened at the Burrow after the wedding, and I truly enjoyed the events that took place as you wrote them. Writing it in Ginny's POV and having her be the one they tortured was a great idea; after all she is the only Weasley girl and all of them would protect her given the chance. I AM surprised that Bellatrix didn't kill her anyway, just to spite them all.

Chapter Four; Voldemort is quite cunning. I knew he would find Alyson useful, though to what extent I'm interested to find out. I'll admit that I love the scenes with evil characters. I'm truly intrigued to read about the first time Draco and Aly talk to one another and have a chance to ask why the other abandoned them.

As always, this story is simply brilliant! I'll be following this one for sure.

--x Lauren

Very impressive. I never thought I'd find such quality literature within a fanfiction. This story is incredibly well written. You make the story come to life, you give the characters a certain personality that makes them unique. I am so impressed by your writing.

Your character Aly seems so real. She gives out a sense of strength and yet I'm sure there's a part of her that feels very weak. It's like what Rowling does with Snape, she gave him quite a bit of depth. You are doing the same with Aly.

I've enjoyed reading this very much and it makes me want to read your other stories. I will certainly work on that as soon as possible.

MK

Karina: Your feedback truly made me smile, so thank you for that! I am working very diligently to stay true to Draco's character while trying to add my own vision of how he is. It is so much fun to be able to explore his mind, and I can tell you that he is/will be an integral part of this story. I try very hard to stick to the characters JKR developed, and I'm impressed/happy (though it sounds kind of morbid) that I was able to freak you out a little. Thanks again!

Lauren: Wow. I had almost lost hope that you would finish The Unknown Potter and never even imagined you'd start the new one. I really like delving deeper into the situations that JKR only mentions, but doesn't describe. The Burrow scene after the wedding was one (just as the Azkaban breakout was important in The Unknown Potter). It just adds so much. I still don't know how I'm going to deal with Hogwarts, but I'm sure it'll come to me soon. One thing is for certain...it will definitely be different than TUP.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this one (and finishing the last one!)!!!

firewhiskeyboy: A new reader! That really makes me happy. Thank you so very much for your comments. Aly is definitely a strong character. What you see with her is definitely what you get. She wears her heart on her sleeve. I am starting to really bond with her and I can't wait to see how she develops (as I know just about as much as you all at this point about which path this story is taking.). Thanks again!

Kristin

P.S. I really, really, HOPE to have the next chapter to my beta by Sunday evening. No promises, but that's my goal.

Okay, so I lied in my previous post. I had a little accident in my new home (I wasn't injured, but it could have been bad), and I spent all day on Sunday fixing what broke. The good news is, I think I am going to incorporate this accident into the story, hence the reason why I am not disclosing details. However...this week has been extremely stressful and just plain terrible (and it's only Tuesday). If things get better, I'll try to write some later this week. My goal is to get the next chapter posted next week sometime. If I don't..feel free to pester me!

Sorry for the delay you guys, but I'd rather take my time with the story then rush it and have the quality slip. I hope you can understand!

Kristin

Oh Neville. That boy always rises to the occasion, as I'm sure he will do this time. Since he's not returning to Hogwarts I can see that this story will take a turn from canon DH, which I like. I wonder what Ginny will do. Maybe her and Luna will find some way to save the world haha. I have many theories! Another great chapter, and good luck with the re-programming and the kitten.

Lauren

Well, since Aly is my favorite character, I was a little sorry to see that she was mentioned only fleetingly. However, cookie points for another update! So Neville won't be returning to Hogwarts eh? You did well on the characterizations, I must say, your ability to make Ginny be so Ginny and Neville be so...well you get the picture. Anyway, like Lauren, I have a couple theories. Can't wait for more...update soon. I will try to be patient. I mean, I'll try.

-Karina

Lauren: I must say, it's great to have you back!! I have some serious plans for Neville, though they aren't very well defined quite yet. As pointed out by my beta, Neville and Ginny were probably closer in the series than I've portrayed them. I think it will give me something to develop. But I'm excited to stray just a little from the DH. Thanks for taking the time to leave your feedback!

Kariina: Aly should have a POV in the next chapter...Draco may too, though I'm not quite sure. It is easier than I think, and it comes very naturally, to have the characters be like JKR's.

(P.S. as I write, my mother is cuddling with my four-week old kitten named Butters.) I just had to write that!

Kristin

As you stated, me being your beta, I felt Ginny and Neville had been closer in the HP series, HOWEVER, I am quite interested to see where this will go for Neville. I loved how you wrote him in your last two stories and have a feeling you have a soft spot for him! I think there are great things in store for Mr. Longbottom

I, too, am interested to see more of Aly and Draco and was glad to see a little more info divulged to us by Ginny and Neville's conversation/thoughts.

(and I'm jealous that you have a new kitten... with a mother and a husband both allergic I'm afraid I'll have to be an old widow before I can get another cat!)

Kathleen

I loved it! I know I've said this a lot, but I just love Aly's character. She's so fiery...responding so quickly and defensively to Narcissa's cattiness, telling Draco off so easily (as we all know is not something a lot of people dare to do). Her POV was very fun to read. Of course your characterization of Draco didn't fall flat. You do a wonderful job on keeping your character's true to the way that JKR wrote...another thing I am sure I have also mentioned often. The interactions between Draco and Aly are quite a spectacle as well. Their endless bickering and Aly's feistyness...hilarious! This chapter was really quite entertaining. But still, like Aly, I can't help but wonder what will happen with her and Draco.

Post soon!
-Karina

Oh my goodness. Kathleen, I thought I had responded to your feedback. I am so sorry!!! I do have some great things in store for Neville and I have a super soft spot for him. I don't think his character is given nearly enough credit in the books. Though Harry was an amazing "Chosen One," Neville would have done well too. It'd be interesting to see what would have happened if Neville was the "Chosen One" instead of Harry...interesting thought...

And don't be too jealous of the kitten! He is an absolute menace, that's for sure. But I am told that his biting is just a phase and he will outgrow it (with some "teaching" along the way)...

Karina: I know that you are very busy, so thank you for taking the time to leave me your thoughts. To be honest, I wasn't sure if anyone was reading anymore. And I appologize for the long delay (and for not reading the most recent chapter(s) in your story)! Life has been crazy with my kitten and then I was sick for about a week. My goal is to get a chapter written between now and Tuesday...I will work VERY hard on this!

You know, I like how this story allows me to portray Draco in a decent light. I finally get the chance to write in his POV and show the vulnerabilities he has. If he had grown up in a non-evil home, he would have been an all right kid. Anyway, thanks again for leaving feedback and I hope to have the next chapter posted later this week!

Again, I apologize for the delay in posting chapters!

Kristin

Just finished reading your new chappie....for the second time today! I'll be honest; the first time I read it, I skipped to Draco's POV and just skimmed through the first part. Then I felt bad and re-read the whole thing again! It's been a while since your last update, but I have been sort of neglecting my own fic...so, I forgive you. It helps that this was another great chapter.

First off let me just say that I love how well this fits into the book. Your hard work pays off. It's just like Ginny to eavesdrop on the Order when she is supposed to be in her room sleeping. Of course she will try anything to get to Hogwarts and will definately succeed. So, Neville's got big plans? Could they possibly have something to do with the reinstatement of Dumbledore's Army? I agree with ChannelingGinny I do believe you've got a bit of a soft-spot for Neville.

Speaking of Draco's POV. I quite enjoyed reading that; it portrays a side of Draco that we don't know in the books. Loved the flashbacks, again, everything fits into the books so well. I do love Aly, yet by reading Draco's side, I felt pity for the poor left-behind, broken-hearted boy. I really liked how you ended this chapter! Soul Mates...oooh mysterious. It makes me wonder if Aly will ever know about these feelings?

Update soon!
-Karina

So, Aly is quite evil... at least that's the feeling I got after reading she would be the one to kill Harry! Didn't see that one coming. I think I'm most intrigued by the Draco/Aly storyline, especially since you keep adding more and more twists.

Given that there is little written about Ginny's 6th/Neville's 7th year at Hogwarts other than the final battle and the glimpse that Dean gave while on the run I can see you have many options for those two. I can't wait for more!

(Happy Thanksgiving!)

Karina: Hey, Hey, Hey!! I actually updated fairly close to my last post! It's incredible!! I also plan to have another chapter done this weekend. I have always had a soft spot for Neville, though I'll admit that it got much softer once I his character was developed in the movies. He will always do great things in my stories!

I've also got a huge soft spot for Draco. I work in the child protection field and I always feel for the children that I work with. I would probably never work with a family like Draco's (minus the magical world), but he is definitely an emotionally abused child. There are too high expectations for him that are impossible to reach. I feel for him and I KNOW he would have been different if he had been raised by someone on the good side.

Kathleen: I really like how I portrayed Ginny's/Neville's year at Hogwarts during the Unknown Potter. However, I know that this is a different story, and I have different plans. we'll just have to see exactly how it develops!

Kristin

First of all, I want to say that I am sorry to the highest power for not leaving feedback as soon as I read your new chappie a long time ago. I just read it again for the third time.

I knew that Ginny was going to find a way to get to Hogwarts, I liked that George wanted to help her. I was a little excited to read about Fred and George arguing because they hardly ever disagree. It will be interesting to see where Ginny and George go from here.

Breakfast at Malfoy Manor certainly becomes funny when you add the Dark Lord and a few death eaters to the mix. And the bent spoon was a nice touch. I could see it quite clearly in my head.

Aly is going to Hogwarts--conditionally, of course, but I am glad that LV is letting her go back. I can't wait to see how that turns out. From what I know about Aly, though, I am sure that she will find a way to get around Snape's watch.

Post soon!
-Karina

Karina: Thank you so much for leaving that feedback! I have some exciting things planned for Aly, Draco, Ginny, and the others! Hope you continue to read the story!

No problem.

Of course I'm still reading. I actually wanted to leave feedy for your other chapter too but I didn't want to post right after myself. The scene in the train was very vivid. I actually felt a little sorry for Ginny. It was very in-character for her to stand up to the death eaters. Like Neville said, though that was a bit stupid. I see that Neville has already begun to hatch a plan to get DA back together. That will be interesting.

Draco was so mean to Aly. I felt bad for her all alone and shunned in that compartment. I can't help but think that you've got great things in store for those two...particularly Aly. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Don't keep me in suspense too long,
-Karina