Here's the feedback thingy for my latest one shot. It's kinda strange, but I like it. I'll let y'all talk about it before I do my usual analysis bit. It's kinda my usual style, but not quite. Hence why I thought I should show it off.

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~Aeryn~

I felt like I was in Anatomy 101 in college. The descriptions of love and unity and wholeness in comparison with the human body is fantastic. I really do love your style of writing and the way your words seem to flow across a page. It really does draw me in.

My only concern with this piece is that I was being drawn in but the end result was empty. I didn't have a sense of who your characters were as they related to Harry Potter. I only have my imagination as the only two people I pictured were Snape and Lily and I have no idea if that is who you intended the audience to imagine as they read. Am I close or way off base? Let me know.

amanda~

I liked this, a lot. It was really... prettily written (And who sounds like a five year old? *raises hand*). But, I agree with nevillesgirl, I wasn't sure who the two people were. I couldn't guess... Who? Haha.
Well done!
-Jasmine

I heart you poster people! You posted and made me feel loveds! Yays! And yes my dear love,you were close to it, very, but think more in the sense of "Princess Bride" kinda love, that perfect.
I feel all cool and awesome and like, and hence I also feel like leaving clues. Mostly cause being all out there and obvious is not my style. Well, there's the time and love are not so intricitly wound bit, which kinda leans to the whole concept of how their love transcends across time (I so deliberately did steal that one), and the being the same yet different (which is kinda something I see in my own eyes I suppose) and there's a feeling of perfection to their love, something pure that even time cannot distort.
Those were the feelings that I had going in to this. I don't have much time, but I'll come back and go through chapter by chapter once y'all get closer or I feel like I have enough time to do so thuroughly. And yes, I am so canon. Though RonxHermione still scares me deep down.

~Aeryn~