I hope you enjoy my story! Please leave your comments below. What did you like? What you didn't like? How I can improve my writing? Suggestions for the story? If you suggest anything and I use it I'll recognize you at the bottom of the post. I'm not the best updater so suggestions may help. PLEASE COMMENT! I'll send you an imaginary cookie or some type of yummy food. So... get commenting!
~Squish <-- this is my nickname

ah yes, i'm first(:
i really like the story so far, but i think it was out of james's character to leave lily, that the only problem i thought of, i love the descriptions you had, especially for the rain and lily crying, can't wait for the next chapter(: keep the good work up!!

Yay! thanx marauderxforever. And you may have some random treat that I promised to give you. Yeah. I didn't like that James left Lily, but James will get in trouble for that later . I already have chapter 2 written and I almost have chapter 3 done. I think I'll post them together because chapter 2 is really annoyingly short. So thanx for the feedback and I'll post as soon as soon as I have chapter 3 ready which will probably be in the next couple of minutes. thanx again for the feedback!
~Squish

great 2 new chapters! i love them! even though i still hate that james left, but his dialogue in these chapters seem almost exactly like i pictured him as. i'm actually shocked that wormtail is still in contact with them, i'm wondering when he goes to the dark side? or maybe he already is, but he's hiding it. is the fiddelus charm already working? and i think you should add a visit with bathilda, in DH it says that her and lily talked and she told stories about dumbledore, but that's just a suggestion, i can't wait for more!(: keep the great work up!!

I really like this fanfic so far! I am excited for more! You have really good adjectives; I felt like I was there! Keep up the amazing work, Lily/JamesForever (Do you want me to call you Squish?)

~Bronwyn

Yay! yes BronOpie i would like you to call me Squish. or whatever u want. its easier to type Squish than Lily/JamesForever. i'm so glad that you all like my story!



Thanx marauderxforever! In the story the fiddelus charm isnt working. It says in PoA that only after a week that the charm was performed the Potters were killed. They arent killed until about a year after Harry was born. Somewhere in the books it says that Wormtail had been working for Voldemort for a year before James and Lily were killed. So that means Wormtail could or could not be working for him now. Thanx for the suggestion! I might use it! I have the next chapter planned so i may use it in a following chapter!

Thanx all of you for liking my story! It makes me feel sooooo happy! I'll post as soon as I can!
~Squish

may i call you squish too?(:
this may be my favorite chapter ever!!! it's amazing, i love the last sentence of the chapter! love it to death!!
"And at that moment, when ever a person would ask Lily when she first truly fell in love with James, she would say that that kiss, started it all."
AHH!
anyways, i love to see lily and the marauders at hogwarts too, and i love that you used alice and mary for lily's best friends. but i thought that there wouldn't only be an office for heads, that there would be separate dorms for them, but that's a minor detail. ha! and it would be such like james to kiss lily out of a handshake, i loved that too. i hope there's more flashbacks coming up with new chapters(: but i love any chapter that you write. (:
i would love to see the day they start going out, and when james hears that lily is pregnant.
i can't wait to read more chapters, this story is going great so far!!(:

and thanks, by the way, for clearing stuff up for me(:

ahhhhhhh feedback... it makes a writer feel so warm and fuzzy inside. yes... of course you can call me Squish. yeah. I sort of suprised myself with the end of the chapter. James wasnt acting as immature as I wanted him to (I think he should build up to being highly mature) so I just randomly came up with the end of the chapter. The reason I didnt add head dorms was b/c I didnt want to split the Maurders up. I also didnt want to split Lily and her friends up either. THANKS!!!!!!!!!!! yeah. I'm thinking about having a lot of flashbacks throughout the story. I dont want to give anything away because this last chapter broke through the dam of writers block. YAY!!!!!!! I'll post soon. Thanks for your postive feedback!
~Squish

aww(:
harry was born(:
sorry i didn't get a chance to read it till just now because i was on vacation, and i didn't have internet for the last 3 days, but i'm home now(:
i loved the descriptions for this one, and i love how james was really happy when lily said that james is harry's middle name, that was sweet(:
and i love how it gets all nice-weather when harry's born,
this chapter was really sweet(: i loved it(:
write more soon please!

YAY!!!!!! Feedback! I'm so glad you like the chapter. I just posted the next one so I hope you enjoy it too! that's ok it took you awhile to read it. As you see I'm going on vaction too. Sorry about that. So keep on replying with feedback. If you have any suggestions or random incite then please post!
~Squish

Really good chapter! I bet James will suspect Snape to be a death eater and I bet James will ask Lily to the Ball. Keep it up, Squish!

~Bronwyn

P.S. Call me Bronwyn or BronOpie.. whichever you prefer!

Thanx! I tell you. Feedback makes writers feel so happy. I dont think I'll b able to post the next chapter until I get back (which will be July 31st). Oh well! I'm planning for some more action in the next couple of chapters. Hopefully it will all work. ANYWAY thanx for the feedback and reading my story!
~Squish

ah! sorry, i was sick, i have too many lame excuses, but today i felt good enough to turn on my computer(:
it was a good chapter, haha, and made me remember the kiss line(: [ i still love it ]
anyways, i always love flashbacks(:
i love the idea of the ball, and my predictions are simular to BronOpie that they're gonna think snape is a death eater, and maybe, possibly, they'll have their first defiance (is that a real word?)
first of three? maybe? hopefully(:
anyways, this is a random thought, for i have a very random thought process(: but call me bridget, it's my name and it's easier then marauderxforever, and i have another lame excuse, i'm going camping in the middle of nowhere, i'm leaving saturday and coming back thrusday, but i think it's the same time you're going on vacation too, so that works out, anyways,
happy writing and have fun on vacation(:

hmmmmmmm... interesting thoughts. I have a random thought process too. lol anyway... I'm not going to post the next chapter until I get back. I tried to sit down and write it yesterday but my friend wanted to read it. By the time he finished reading it I didnt have time to type the next chapter up. He doesnt have an account on Veritaserum but he said it was one of the best stories he's ever read! I like flashbacks too! It helps me think longer on what I should write about when it's real time. Thanx for all of the postive feedback! I promise I'll post the next chapter as soon as I get back from my trip!
~Squish

Hey!! Sorry it took me so long to reply back to you :] I liked your story! I think you portrayed the characters quite well so far. I can't wait for the ball and such! Post soon

WackoJacko

That fanfiction is great! I love reading about Lily and Jame's life in Hogwarts-it's great how you portrayed everything. It's a great idea, having flashbacks and all that. Can't wait for more

ahh! finally! jk(:
it was a pretty good chapter, but i'm hoping the next one is a bit more dramatic, this just seemed like a filler chapter, don't worry, i've got a hectic schedule too (i won't be able to sleep in anyday, other then sunday, until february, it sucks)
i'll be waiting for your next chapter, happy writing(:

Thanks everyone! I've been back from my trip for a while. I've just gotten lazy in my writing I had a writer's block in the middle of the chapter so I tried to just slide through the chapter and make the next one exciting. I can't promise everything so we'll just see how the next chapter comes to me.
Thanks again for the awesome feedback!
~Squish

My, my You have an interesting and funny story <33 Thus far I liked it, but where's chapter 8? ;( I really want to find out how the ball's going to be *yay* I hope James will kiss Lily again! They're so cute <33 And maybe Sirius will have a partner... *hihi*

I like your writing and your ideas <33 But try to make the chapters more longer I feel good reading a lot of the Marauders and Lily


Good luck and I'm waiting (as the rest ) for next chapters

I'm SOOOOO sorry everyone! I haven't been able to get on Veritaserum lately. I finally tried Firefox and now I'm back! I will update by tomorrow I PROMISE!!! I'm very sorry for keeping all of you waiting!
~Squish

It's not bad at all. It seems a little rushed, but that's alright. It's still an interesting read.