Hello everybody! This is the feedback thread for my first one-shot about Draco Malfoy, a story about pain and uncertainty, I believe.
If you have some time, I'd love to see your reviews here, it helps a lot! Also, if there are some confusing parts (which I think there are), you can also ask me and I'll answer.
Thank you, and enjoy!
Dessi.-

Yay! First to leave feedback!

I gave you an O. It was really good how you got inside Draco's head...good for someone who is not a big fan...you could have fooled me. So, I liked it. It could have been a little bit longer, I guess, but other than that, I really think you did great. Oh and sorry I haven't been big on feedbacking your other fics, but summer is crazy. Haha, well good job, great story.

P.S. I didn't think it was that confusing. Just at first but when I kept reading my question got answered and you cleared it up. Love the ending, a little unexpected...but interesting.

-Kari

I was thrilled when you asked me to beta another of your stories because you write so well that it is a joy to beta your stories.

This is a very interesting story in its subject manner. We get a peek of what was going through Draco's mind while he was forced to murder Dumbledore, then we get a little surprise at the end when we find out he's talking with his wife Astoria. By the way I must say that love the last phrase about killing not being as easy as the innocent think. That was a really good phrase!

~alyssa~

Hi Dessi,

It was great! I loved the way you inserted dialog from the actual book throughout the story. It made it seem like I was rereading HBP, but with the added bonus of finding out what Draco was thinking. Great job!

Hugs,
Lisa

Yay, three reviews in an afternoon! I had forgot how getting feedback was, since I hadn't posted any stories for a while.

Kari: Thank you! Ah, then I'm glad you could figure out! Yes, I tried to put my feelings aside and take a journey to Draco's mind. Don't worry, you don't have to read all my stories if you're busy! I hope your summer is going well. Thanks for being first!

Alyssa: Haha, I feel really flattered I'm glad that you accepted to be my beta and you did it so quickly! I first thought of writing about how he met his wife, then decided to join the two plots, but with more about Astoria than I actually wrote, and finally came up with this, because I wasn't too sure about how he could have met her and I would have missed the whole point. I thought that repeting Dumbledore's phrase was a good ending, better than giving any other explanation

Lisa: Aw, thank you! I really liked everything Dumbledore says to Draco, and thought that it could add some... colour to the story, because all memories might be dull. I don't remember quite well, but I think they left most of this dialogue out in the movie, which was a shame. I want to watch it again!

Dess and am thrilled that you wrote this. I am surprised that you are self admittedly not a great fan of Draco. I would have never guessed throught your writing. I agree with Lisa in that the dialogue you added from HBP was a brilliant idea, one that I do myself in some stories I write. This was a fantastic story and I enjoyed reading it.

~Amanda

This confused me at first, but then I read on and I loved the way you described Dumbeldore. It was an interesting interpretation, and I think that Draco could of thought of it that way. I really did like it; I don't have much to say to be productive other than I would of loved something longer just because I love reading fanfics.

And too, if I hadn't known better, I would of figured you a Draco fan. I thought the ending was sweet and what Draco said is now stuck in my head... like it's something from the books

-Kiersten-

Thanks for the feedback, Amanda and Kiersten! I really appreciate it.
I feel really flattered with your comments, guys. Haha, well, I guessed I've kidded everybody! I may call my confession a 'sincericide', but it's the truth; I wouldn't write a story about Draco just for the sake of it, but your idea seriously made me take the challenge. In HBP I feel pity of Draco, and I love that he's brilliantly played in the movie, so I tried to direct all my previous dislike to understand the different kind of Malfoy that we can preview in that moment.

Lol, I thought that Draco might be trying to direct his fear to his anger towards Dumbledore. On the other hand, that is what Harry kind of thought at the end of Order of the Phoenix, that Dumbledore just stood there, as he was being torn apart inside. I suppose Dumbledore's attidude might be annoying when you are overstressed and under pressure, isn't it?

Thanks again!

Hey Dessi!

What a great oneshot! I agree with what everyone else has said. I absolutely loved it. It gave me chills when I read the last sentence. Poor Draco. It must have been so hard for him, knowing what he had to do, yet knowing at the same time that there was no way he could do it. I can't imagine having to go through that.

Again, great job! I wish there were going to be more.

Take care, sweetie!
~Dayna