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The Happy Dementor
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Thankyousies for leaving me feedback you make me so happy look I am popping with joy...

On a slightly less desperate note...this thread if for feedback to my fanifc The Last Milestone, if you haven't read it check it out. Crits and comments are welcome only don't be mean or I won't hug you...if your not a hugging sort of person then I will! Ha! laugh.gif

You rock,

Thanks again,

Must sleep now gotta go on holiday tomorrow,

Em
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The Happy Dementor
...okaaaay....busy readers. I am back from my holiday and have updated chapter 2 if anyone is actually reading this. If not then when/if you do chapter two is up for you. happy.gif
HarryPotterNut
Yay! First to reply! Chapter 1 was great Emma. I loved it when Malfoy attacked Pansy. I also love Scorpius' character too! Keep it up!
The Happy Dementor
WOOP Go you! hug.gif Hugs all round!

Thanks for your comments they are greatly appreciated. I have updated it again because I feel like I'm on a bit of a roll at the moment and I want to get some up before school because school means homework and coursework and that means less time to waste. tongue.gif
Sister to the Dark Lord
Wa-hoo ..... this is great! I luvs it! I really do hope that Scorpius doesn't get pulled into the We-Hate-Gryffindors club, I'd hate to have him, Rose, and Albus's friendship go down the drain at some stupid stereotype .....

Can't wait to see the next chapter; you're an awesome author!

Luvs ya,
Ty
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The Happy Dementor
I know it has only been three days but guess what? I have time on my hands and so I put up this next chapter. I think this one is the best so far and I hope you enjoy it. The song I chose fits the first half of it whilst Scorpius is conscious than the second half where he unfortunatly is not. Please comment, crits will be accepted with open arms I don't care as long as its constructive. happy.gif
Sister to the Dark Lord
Hmm, so let me make sure I know what happened. Rose and Albus came to see Scorpius, they all decided to stay friends, and they go to Hagrid's. Scorpius passes out, and meets a girl who looks like Rose will in a few years. Then he wakes up, they leave Hagrid's and come across a bunch of werewolves and Inferi. Is that it? Did I get it right?

Oh, and for some odd reason, this song reminds me of Iris by Goo Goo Dolls - the song you dedicated to Chapter Four.
The Happy Dementor
ahhh kind of not really. Darn it how could I have not been clear enough. Ok. They go to Hagrids and Ros esays she n albus will give their friendship a shot then he passes out and experiences the rest of the chapter unconciouse. The future Rose the infiri the werewolves and all that are in his dream. Poo. Was that not clear? sad.gif
zwillo
Em! That was such an incredible ride! And it was clear to me that Scorpius had passed out and was dreaming.

I'm sorry I didn't read this sooner because it's really great. That last little bit there had me leaning towards my computer and I was all tense, and then BAM!!! It was over, but I don't want it to be over. *bites fingernails nervously, waiting to find out what happens.*

And I'm guessing that 'Hen' is that Henrietta girl that Scorpius met in chapter 2???

Ooohhh... I can't wait to read more. *runs to KFC for Emma* biggrin.gif


loads of love,
~Dayna hug.gif

The Happy Dementor
Thanks so much Dyana! It means alot since your fics are some of the best. I do love KFC wub.gif . Ugh, I just put up a one-shot so I'm not updating tonight cause its late and I really need to sleep but I will hopefully update tomorrow.

Yeah that is the right Hen. ^^ Yay! and thank god it was clear he was dreaming cause it was pretty important. You will get more finger nibbling action as they day goes on...well not literally cause the day is almost over but you know what I mean.

Thanks again.
Luvs ya all. hug.gif
Em
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Sister to the Dark Lord
Nah, trust me Em, it's not your writing, it's me being me.

Again.

Darn.

Oh well. But that makes perfect sense now that you explained it out. How I missed that, I will never know ..... wink.gif

Luvs ya too. hug.gif

Cheers,
Ty
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The Happy Dementor
Yaaaaay I updated! Are you excited? No? Thats ok I have enough excitement for eeeeeeeveryone!!!! Yaaaaaaay! Excitement! Too bad the excitement is about something else. ¬¬

HUG FEST!

*hug hug hug hug hug hug HUG HUG HUG HUUUUUUUUUUUG!!!* hug.gif

he he he

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Em
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Sister to the Dark Lord
Well, nobody needs to spontaneously combust, but someone does need to get Sam back. That was a low and cowardly thing to do, even for a Slytherin. (Yes, that means I insulted myself too, peoples.) Good story, I love it, can't wait to see the reason behind breaking the story into parts.

I hope people start to accept the 'Silver Trio', as I've started calling them.

Aww, little Scorpius has a crush on Rosie! That is so sweet!

*joins in hug fest*

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The Happy Dementor
Thanks Tay. happy.gif
Sorry if this next chapter is a little long and has a couple of mistake but I am in a rush and didn't proof it properly. wink.gif Sorry. Kay, wow I am on a roll, no really i gotta go now.

Bye
Em
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Sister to the Dark Lord
I didn't see any mistakes. smile.gif

Very good. I'm glad to see that Scorpius is finally getting some confidence. I do hope that Albus and Rose visit Malfoy Manor for the holiday. That would be all kinds of awesome.

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Scorpius dropped the parchment like it was on fire. Oh pants. What in the name of dugbog was he going to do? His face remained a mask of fear and panic even as he mentally shunned his pitiful cuss vocabulary.
That reminded me so much of you! It sounds exactly like something you'd say when you're hyper. Well, more hyper than usual. happy.gif

And why can't I shake the feeling that someone charmed the snitch so Scorpius couldn't/at-least-make-it-harder-for-him-to catch it?
The Happy Dementor
Hey, my rabid readers tongue.gif

okay not so much XD

anywho I have updated it woopdidoo! This is like my third day off school and i am gonna fall behind and my spanish oral is going down the drain. :S anywaysies, thanks for leaving feedback.

Thanks Sister. <3, I know some of that stuff was kinda lame but at least I laughed instead of cried. That was also lame. Ignore me I am going to get more soup now.

em
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Sister to the Dark Lord
Nope, sorry, Emma darling, I'm not going to ignore you! I think I'd die without my doses of TLM. A great chapter, and I was able to pick out the dream and the reality, without getting mixed up! Yay! I wonder ..... does Scorpius have Seer blood? And Rose really shouldn't get mad at him. He's only trying to be nice to everyone. Of course, that's been proven impossible time and time again. (Trust me, I know from experience wacko.gif) But I disgress. Awesome chapter, and I hope you get better soon!

Cheers, love, and chicken soup (it's supposed to help you get better),
Ty
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