Interesting story and a good start. I do want to make one sugestion: Some of the charcters are alittle off from cannon. I can't see Hermione wearing a mini-skirt or Draco appologizing for a rude comment much less plotting with another Slytherin as to how to attract a Muggle born. The storys interesting but the charcters might not be familiar to fans. This isn't a criticism, just an observation. I only read, can't write myself, no tallent for it. So take my coments for what their worth..

Thanks for the reviews, yeh I agree to, look out for the next instalment as it will explain a few things about Draco and Hermione. The next chapter will be up soon, I’m working on it. Bye for now.

HermioneWeasley2

Hi,
Good start to the story. I agree with watcher6938 about Draco and Hermione. I look forward to an update soon

Hi, Cool story! It's really good! I can't wait to read more!
Hurry! Hurry! Good Job!!

Hehe. I see, Draco is in love with Hermy.

I love the idea you have Lucius ask Draco to lure her into a trap. So now he really loves her/has a crush on her. That's a twist. *lol*

Only observation I made is that things are going very fast in your story. I think I would enjoy reading it even more if you took some time and slowed down a little, added some more details, you know. That kind of stuff.

But on the whole: good job!

Flutterflie

Thanks for the messages. I’m working on my next chapter now, but I want it to be longer, so it’ll take more time. Can I have a few more replies ‘cause I want to know what you guys think of it, g2g now, bye bye.

HermioneWeasley2.

i like the story plot and the love triangle thingy!
but you do write fast...i think you need to slow it down just like wht flutterflie said.

Hi everyone, if you read my fan fiction, can u please review, because I want 2 know what u think, thx, bye bye.

HermioneWeasley2.

Howdydoody
I really like your story, so please write more! One question...Do the Head Boy and Girl really have their own common room and dorm, bathroom etc? I don't know if that's from the book or not...(I don't think JKR ever mentioned where HB&G actually lived...)
But, I do like the idea of Hermione and Draco living together, though I thought they might want to stay with their friends (they're better company... )
Oh well! Just please keep writing, I like it a lot.
Cheers,
Bella.
PS. I know how you feel when people read but they don't review... ...quite annoying...

Uh, oh... Well, if Ron and Hermione weren't meant to be, what's going to happen next? Lol, fun ending with Malfoy!

You write very, very well, but as some have said before, it wouldn't hurt if you slowed down a little... have more details, and stuff like that.

Not that I should say anything, I can't write at all...

But it's great

Okay, another reply for you. *twinkle*
Know exactly how you feel. I hate when people read and don't comment. So here goes:

I was a little confused that Hermione climbed through a portrait whole with a Naomi picture... I just figured out she had an extra common room when somebody reviewed. Yeah, I mean, I see it now. They have a bathroom to themselves, so why wouldn't they have an extra common room also? I have never been to boarding school, but I can imagine. And I like the idea of Draco and Hermione sharing a common room. *lol* Good one.
But maybe you can emphasize it a little? Like "she was climbing to the portrail whole to the head boy and girl common room" or such? Or did you write it and I missed it out. Sorry, then.

There was something else... hm.. let me recall...
Oh, yes, do I sense some sparks between Malfoy and dear Hermy? Hehe. Sad she split up with Ron... I usually am Ron/Hermione-shipper, you know. *giggle* But I still like reading stories in which she can't make up her mind or falls for somebody else. So there goes. Hehe.

Keep it up!

Flutterflie

Hi again!
Wow! I liked that chapter! But *tear* Hermione and Ron broke up.
And Ron was all angry...but he should have listened to Hermione!! . Again, *tear*.

One more thing, at the end of the chapter when Malfoy got yelled at, I think you mean 'wondered' not 'wandered'; which means to walk slowly etc....(sorry...I have this really annoying habit of paying attention to detail... )

Cheers! And please write more soon!
Bella.

First of all - it's "wonder" not wander.

Other than that: keep it coming!

So Zabini and Malfoy have a plan to get rid of Hermione, but Draco falls in love with her and doesn't want to sacrifice her, so he somehow helps Hermione... What a twist.
And I like the way Draco was summoning his owl.

Check back later,

Flutterflie

wow!! your story is really good i love it but i wish hermy and ron hadnt have broken up but keep writing cause this is really good!!

Ooh, I like it

Well, that's all for now... Keep writing, it's great!

Somehow, I want Hermione and Draco to get together... I don't know why, but I want it in this fic!

It'll be fun to read what happens next

hi!!
can't wait for the next chapter!!

Hiya guys,

Just wanted to drop a reminder about one liner posts. It still counts as a one liner when you spread it out over two. To be honest, most authors really prefer if you say a little more about their fic anyway. Please elaborate a bit more when posting, thanks

razz

Scary fish. I hope I'm not going to meet that one when I'm out for a swimming trip...

Hermione and Malfoy's working together! It seems like Malfoy's plan is a success... at least if he doesn't fall in love with Hermione. ...as he does

This is great, please write the next chapter soon

Wow! This is really addicting! Please post more soon, I'm really liking this, even though I'm not a Draco/Hermione shipper. (I'm a Ron/Hermione--Harry/Ginny shipper. )

Cheers,
Amanda

Hi, can I have a few more replies please. Thanks. I’m working on Chapter 10, so it’ll be up soon.

HermioneWeasley2.

Hi again,
Please continue your fanfic, it has a good potential. I liked the Sapphire Fish when it shredded the piece of chicken. hehehe, I know that's not supposed to be funny, but I find the strangest things amusing. I know how you feel when people read your fic, but they don't actually respond , so I'm responding! (as you can tell...Lol.) I like reading what people think of my/your story.
Again, I really like this, so please post more soon!

Cheers,
Bella.

wow, this story is really good...i used to be a hermione/ ron shipper, now i am totally for hermy/malfoy-lol

i cant wait to see what yo9u write.. try to make longer chapters, string two or three chapters together, so it is longer..

i love your story

cheers
-ashley hope

I really like it and all (except for the whole hermione and malfoy thing) but Hermione in a black mini skirt that looks like a black belt!?!?!? yea right, like that's ever gonna happen




But i still think that u r doing a REALLY good job

wow, that was great, i cant wait to see the halloween ball, and with those big pumpkins, it sould be great...
waiting for more

-ashey hope

Thanks for the reviews, but can I have some more, because I want to know where I can improve and if you liked it. Also my next Chapter is going to be longer and my birthdays coming up so I’m going to be a bit busy. But I’ll see if I can find time to write.

HermioneWeasley2

Hm... Poor Draco, it's not easy to be him, not now. He must even save Hermione and die himself, or let Hermione die to stay alive... Anyway what he does, it'll end up with death, and he'll never get Hermione!

HermioneWeasley2, you write very well But there is one thing that you could remember, and that's "," and "?".

Whoa! Talk about a change in character, eh? Wow, love can really work wonders... *lol* Anyway, I'm eager to see what you've got in store for Draco and Hermione...... *scratches head*
Cheers,
Amanda

good job, hermioneweasley2, good job. Just one thing . . . . well, a few:
why would draco be a hogwarts, after what happened the last year? Why would snape be a teacher? why would he still be potions if he were? whyt is dd alive?

other than that, i love your story. really interesting. i really dont think you're going too fast at all. i think that too much description can be boring, but too little can be too, and you definitely know how to keep with in the range. I may be not putting enough description in my fan fic, but i am trying. i guess i over analyze it to the point where writing that much would make me bored, but i guess that i have to look outside of that. well, check it out. people like it but they say that it doesn't have enough description, which i think is a major bummer. well, enough of me . . . . god i sound conceited!

well i really think you should continue . . . good story. i am very curious as to what might happen at the halloween ball, somehow i think harry of ron will try to save her, but will not make it, and draco will and then he will be sentenced to death but barely make it to live, and hide away and hermione will find him and little by little like him or whatever . . . . maybe thats just my mind.

for some weird twisted reason i think that voldemort wants to capture hermione to lure harry in, or something . . . hmm i am just brainstorming for my own sake. well, anyway, keep going, i can't wait to read more

Thanks for the replies, i made the characters still be at Hogwarts because i had my own idea of what i could do and i've changed them a bit to suit my style of writing, but i can see why you were wondering why they are still there. Next chapter coming up soon. Its taking me ages because i'm so busy, but it's half-term now so i'll be writing more. Anyway chapter 11 will be up soon, so look out for it, bye bye.

HermioneWeasley2.

Howdy again,
I thought I'd post to say that I really like your fic! (Even though I've already told you so) . I know how annoying it is when people don't tell you how much they like/dislike your story, (but at least they're reading it) so here I am .

I like the current plotline: Draco must save Hermione, but he will die in the process. How sad yet sweet! I personally am a HUGE Draco/Hermione shipper and am in love (more like lust) with Draco myself....evil is soooo sexy. Very nice work, I really like the fic and I check back here often to see if you've written any more.

There is one slight suggestion that I have for you. Perhaps you could check some of your punctuation and grammar. I just noticed a few "there"s when they should be "they're" or "their". And also a few commas were missing where they were appropriate.
But, apart from those tiny things, you have a lot of potential with this very interesting fic.

Good job, I'm looking forward to your next installment.
Cheers,
Bella.

Hey HermioneWeasly2 I read your fanfic as promised and whoaw what can I say.

It was soooo good. You have a really good style of writting. The connection between Draco and Hermione is great. Poor Won Won how will he ever fix his broken heart? There wasnt much action from Harry which was unusual but good. For once Harryisnt the main attraction

Keep up the good work I want to know what Ron says about seeing Granger and Malfoy holding hands.

I have a few comments myself...and here they are:

1) I agree with the other readers, it is really good(and I mean it), but you really should pay a lot more attention to random grammar and punctuation. Like, when it's a question, you put a "?", and stuff like that. If you're not sure, maybe you could get someone to proofread it for you, but I'm not really sure if that's allowed...but anyway, that's my first piece of advice.

2) I feel like you're missing some really important things in your story. Not about the plot, of course, I don't have any say in that, only you do. It just doesn't have the earnestness(is that a word? XD)as some of the other fanfics I've read. I don't know how, but I think it's because of the dialogue. Not the dialogue itself, that's fine, but the way it's put in the story. It's sort of a push-and-pull conversation. You should put more detail in between the dialogue. Like, if Hermione is nervous, you should write something like, "Hermione twisted her fingers together in her nervousness and said timidly--" blah, blah, blah.
Do you get what I'm saying?

3) And another thing is that it lacks feeling. Sure, Hermione's crying and all that, and yes, that counts as feeling. But you don't actually describe how she's feeling. Agh, how should I explain this...
OK, put it this way. When you describe one's emotions, you put something like, "She felt like she had a huge stone stuck in her throat," or "She felt like her insides were being squeezed by a giant hand." Not just "She felt really sad and she cried." That's just not efficient detailing.

Sure, you don't put in soo much detail that your chapter is three-quarters detail and one quarter action and dialogue. No, no, no. I know everybody can't stand that kind of thing. Just put in enough so that your readers know exactly how that person's feeling.

I know some of the other readers might not agree with me, but that's just how I feel.

Keep up the good work!

[COLOR=blue]Wow! I just realized I have no life but that's okay because that means I can read this awesome story!!!! But seriously it's a great story. Keep it up!!!!

Sammy!

Aww! Draco asked Hermy to the ball! I never thought he was capable of being nice to a "filthy Mudblood like Granger" but you really proved me wrong! Great going. Post more asap.
Cheers,
Amanda

wow, dont worry, i have no life either.. but i cant wait for the ball, it is going to be great.
i totally love how malfoy is trying to protect her.. you should leave a huge cliffhanger to what happens at the ball.. everyone loves a cliffhanger..

cheers
lilred

I'm going to update soon, so can i please have a few more comments about what you guys think, that would be great, thanks.

HermioneWeasley2.

I like your new chapter . . . . i was wondering if you were going to continue, and i'm glad you did. I am wondering what will happen at the ball, and since Harry is going to watch over . . . i feel safer. In a way, i mean. Maybe the death eaters will just grab him instead of Hermione . . . and that would suck, but yeah. I know Ron will be upset . . . . hehe . . . . but oh well. Ron is Ron, and he will always be the jealous type. Ron's funny though. Anyway, i can't wait for your new installment.

well, im still waiting...i cant wait to hear what the ball looks like...i hope you put it up quickly...
waiting for more
cheerd
lilred

Sorry about this guys, its just i haven't got much time to write, i'm a bit busy. But i will update soon, bye for now.

HermioneWeasley2.

its okay...we all know exactly how you feel...take your time..and hurry at the same time
cheers
lilred

I can't believe that Draco asked Hermione to the ball! But even if I wouldn't have dared it, doesn't mean no-one else dares... I'm glad he asked, and that Hermione said yes I agree with those comments that have been added here, with comments and grammair. There are a few mistakes, but I'm not perfect either! And if you have english as second-language (is it that it's called?) and don't speak it in your country, it's impressing Really impressing.

Please, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, I'm always waiting!

Hey,
I just read the whole story and I like it, it is really good can't wait til the next chapter!

XxRachxX

By the way Caoo i am actually English, but i'm not very good at punctuation and stuff like that, i will try to improve it and the next chapter will be up soon, i am working on it today, so it might be up later. Thank you for all the reviews good and bad. It helps to know how to improve my story.

HermioneWeasley2.

Hey,
Awesome chapter! I like it, post the next one soon!!
XxRachxX

Hi there,
*sniff!* That made me sad. . Poor Hermy. Stupid Ron, more like it. . Why did he have to make such a scene? If he still loves Hermy then he shouldn't go about getting her back like that. It's just plain stupid, do you hear me Ronnie? *shakeslaptopscreen*.
But, it's sort of good that he cares cause then at least he'll look out for her at the Halloween Ball. But then again, Draco will die. Oh why, why did you have to make this fic so sad? *raiseshandstothesky* Yet, so good...and addictive.
But, anyway, very good chapter as usual. I haven't been on VTM for days, so I only just realised you had updated. In fact, I shouldn't be on here now: I have too much work to do.
Okay then- great job and post more as soon as you get the chance. I'm going now - byebye!
Cheers,
Bella.
PS. Draco seemed a little too sweet for my liking; perhaps he could be a bit more evil? It's ten x more sexy.

They love eachother! Wow... isn't it a little early? I mean, they've only been dating like... what is it? Not long, anyway... but it doesn't matter, I like your fanfic no matter what

Keep up the good work, HermioneWeasley2!

Awwwwwww sweet! I really love the plot too. Whats Draco going to do about his Dad? Oh i went to the premiere and it was FABULOUS! my friend and I waited for 6 hours in the rain!! I didnt get any autographs because we were standing on the wrong side of the square! Rupert Grint on of the Weasly twins and Hagrid waved at me though . I'm definatly going next year (early) and I will get a good place and hopefully get some autographs Dan looked VeRy hot!! BUT ALAN RICKMAN WASNT THERE!!!!! *cries*

That was cute! I thought Ronnie's reaction would be something along those lines.... *lol* I didn't see him agreeing with the idea. But this is good. I just hope he doesn't overreact when he sees them snogging at the Ball.... (Will he?) This is great, HermioneWeasley2, keep it up!
Cheers,
Amanda
P.S.
Are Harry and Ginny together? If so, GREAT! If not, they should be! *lol*