Hi Caitlin in Australia
I'm also from Australia (I live in Brisbane) so... erm...yay for us! I think your story has a lot of potential but it was a little confusing because (not to criticise you or anything!) you didn't give the reader enough general background (ie 'it was a warm summer's day') and you were a little verbose (wordy) when describing Hermione- 'long, bushy, brown hair'. Just make things a little slower and simpler to begin with and then you can go crazy and make it as fast as you want. But apart from that, it's a great idea and I really like it! You don't need to take advice that you're given so if you think I'm being harsh, that's cool, it's your fanfic and you can do what you want with it.
from My Monkey ate a Fizzing Whizzbee

Thanks for the feed back! I should put the next chapter on in the next week. I'm north of Sydney. Keep reading when I write more.

This is good! So ... Ron and Hermione are together, and Ginny and Harry are together? And Harry and Ron work for Lavender? I can't waith till you fill in the gaps! Oh, this is absolutely delicious! Keep going, good job!
Cheers,
Amanda

Pretty good! I like the whole work thing! I love that Harry and Ginny are together! hehe I like them together! I can't wait to see what happens with Hermione and Ron, and I love the Lavender and Ron dilemma!! But yeah thank you for reviewing on my story! I think I might enter it into the contest, why? Well keep writing!

Hey!
I really like the second chapter too. My only problem is that Matthew Morgan Potter. I know that Morgan is a unisex name, but I'm disappointed that there aren't enough girl Morgans, like me ( ), in the world. Oh well, it's your fanfic... so keep up the good work!

My Monkey ate a Fizzing Whizzbee. ie. Morgan.

That was good, please write more soon! *thumbs up*

HI all

I have a problem at the moment with writting. If you want to help, please post or PM me the answer. What is the potion Hermione puts in her hair at the Yule Ball? (GoF) I can't find my Goblet of Fire book so I don't know the answer. The potion is needed in chapter three.

Thanks ,
~Caitlin~

Hi!
I like your story! I sort of agree with Morgan...there should be more girl Morgans in the world...but this story is different! So do what you want...

Keep writing!
love bellatrixlestrange.

Hi Caitlin!
Yes, yes, yes, yes! I'd like it if there was a girl Morgan in your fanfic! But it's your fanfic, so you don't really have to...That's if your offer was a serious one...

Keep writing, it's pretty good! It's better than some other ones I've read...*cough* "Love or Obsession" *cough*...(My friend wrote it...so I can insult it! lol. )...

Anyway...
bye!

Thanks, for complimenting it. I am serious about putting a female Morgan in but they might just be mentioned as someone's friends.

Do you have a GoF book wiht you so you can answer my question?

Thanks,
~Caitlin~

P.S. Don't worry, I got a GoF book and got the answer so I can post again soon!

Yay! I can't wait!
You know how to write, girl!lol. And don't wory it was only that part that confused me. Other than that its greeaat!

Hi
Sorry I haven't updateted in days but I typed it up this morning, saved it to my computer and my computer crashed from the heat. I if it a little cooler here tomorrow I should update. As you may have notieced I am not on my computer I'm on my parents. Sorry!

Hi!
I really liked the 3rd chapter. It was nice of Ginny (is she Hermione's sister-in-law?) to do her make-up and hair...I hope you write the next chapter soon, I'd like to know what the cliffhanger is...is it something to do with Hermione and Ron? I don't want to tell you my guess in case it's actually right...
Cheers,
My monkey ate a Fizzing Whizzbee.

Hi! I had tried to post yesterday, but my computer was being stubborn!
Anyways awesome chapter! Can't wait to read what happens next!!!
Please huurrry!!

Thanks for the reviews. Yes, Ginny and Hermione are sister-in-laws. And Ron and Harry are brother-in-laws.

I don't know when I will update soon because I am going to a wedding tomorrow and then staying in the town of the wedding for tomorrow night. When I get back I have a few days to do an assingment and then school holidays finsh so I will be busy again.

If you want to have any guess about the next cliff hanger just PM me. I will hopefully be able to read them!

~Caitlin~

Awesome chapter
wow keep it on
it was really great
hurry up and write mooooore

Hiya Dark Lord...again please elaborate more in your posts...short responses are not allowed anywhere on the VTM forums..if you have any problems please contact me or one of the other prefects and or mods and we will help you...but really you have been around here long enough to know what the rules are

Sorry I haven't posted, I've been a bit busy. Anyway, that was a wonderful chapter, I hope to hear more of you really soon! I like how Ginny is helping Hermione with her "make-over"!

Please post more ASAP, that was great!
Cheers,
Amanda

Please review! I, apart from being busy, am suffering from writting block. I know the plot and waht the 'crack' was but I just don't know how to put it. Sorry!

~Caitlin~

P.S. Is this chapter ok?

Hey
Well, that was fairly good. I liked what happened but I felt that it was rather strange that Hermione had never been kissed, especially if Ron and her were supposed to have been going out previously. Also it went a bit fast, perhaps you could have said they had conversations, etc, set the mood, you know. It also seemed strange that they 'went to bed' straight away because of 1. Ron didn't say anything ie "Really? You will marry me? Yay.." etc and 2. Hermione had never been kissed and they had just gotten engaged (Ron might have waited...).
But apart from that, it was awesome! I especially like the cliffhanger *bum bum bum*
If I seem harsh, ignore me completely! I just have this really annoying habit of paying attention to detail...sorry!
And I know how you feel about writer's block...(I get that with my fanfic, too.)

Cheers! And write more soon!
Bella.

Thanks,
I was thinking about the mood and stuff when I posted it but I really didn't want to change it because it was already posted.

I know it is strange that Hermione has never kissed anyone before even if her and Ron had been together before. They haven't been together for a long time. I don't want to give much away about the rest and other relationships.

not bad at all, mate! i like the way this thing is going. this could turno out to be really swell...I'm just not exactly sure where it is heading but I have an idea... this could be very good! keep it up!

Wow, mate, that was alright! I really like your style - straight to the point, but in a relaxed sort of way. Really good, as always. Please post more as soon as you can.
Cheers,
Amanda

Hi guys,
I don't know when I will post because on Tuesday I go back to school and am suffering major writting block. If anyone wants to help, feel free to PM me. I have the plot but just need help putting it in words.

I can't believe how well my first fic has gone so far.

Thanks ,

~Caitlin~

oooooooo did lavendar make the letter go away? is she trying to break ron and hermione up? oooooooooooo
write soon...screw homework-lol

-ashley Losurdo

This is getting really good! I don't think Hermione is going to like Ron leaving her - especially for Lavender! oh, I can hardly stand the suspense! Update SOON!!
Cheers,
Amanda

Wow! You've got some good stuff going here! I love the idea of Harry and Ginny sharing the housework, while Ron makes his mum do it! I'm not totally sure about Lavender and Seamus together, but it could turn out interesting. I wonder if there will be any romance for Neville...? The line about Won-Won cracked me up! How ironic that Hermione would start calling him the same as Lavender used to!
Great job, post more soon!

-Roxy

Hi everyone,

I don't know when I will update next because I have pulled a mustlle in my right shoulder and I am right handed. Poor me! I also have an english assignment due in two days and I have to draw in it because it is a picture book and am having trouble using my arm. I will be in so much trouble if its not done!
I am still thinking whether Neville will fall in love but I have an idea that might work with the next chapter, where Seamus gets publicity!

~Caitlin~

Hello anyone there? *yells at computer* I was wondering what people thought of the latest chapter. Please review soon.

~Caitlin~

P.S. Anyone there???

Hi there,
That was really good, I must say. Quite professional, though there were some tiny mistakes which I probably can't even remember now...
I liked it when there was only a block of chocolate missing. Perhaps Ron just went for a walk and thought he'd pack some chocolate in case he got hungry.

Good job, post more soon.
Thanks, MMAAFW.

Hi,
I read your last chapter and I liked it! It was good how you kept tension. It was sort of eerie when Ron was missing and the only other thing missing was.....(DUHN DUHN DUHN!)....a bar of chocolate! That was cool. But, aww! You left me hanging at the end! *givesyouasternlookandwagsfinger* Nasty, evil girl! ...I'm just joking. Good job. I hope Ginny never stops screaming. Okay. okay, I'm joking again. I didn't mean it. I hope you write the next chapter soon, that's what I hope.
Anyway, I'm a little high and I can't think of why. Hey, and I'm rhyming! Hehehe.
Okay, I'm going now.
Bye bye,
Bella.
PS. Did I mention that the last chapter was good and that you should post more soon?

Thankyou Bella and My Monkey ate a Fizzing Wizzbee for the reviews. I won't tell you why Ginny screamed for another two chapters because next chapter will be on Ron and what he is up to. I will write soon!

~Caitlin~

Woah! Sweet FanFic girl! I'm really liking it as your adding more and more suspense. I can't wait to find out what Ginny saw and who the headless person is!! Please post more soon! I really like this and I thought the last two chapters were the best. I like how Ginny and Harry and together... it just makes me giggle. *Tee Hee*. Well anyways, I hope for you two write the next two chapters REALLY REALLY soon because I REALLY REALLY want to find out what happens next!

(I know I'm just repeating myself, but it's really good!)

-Loony_Luna


P.S.
Are you going to do anything more about Luna? She's my favourite character and I love when people write about her.

Hey dude, Nice chaps! haha I totally forgot I started reading this fic! I was surprised to see my review! But yeah whoa! I totally forgot about Harry and Hermione being sibs, WEEEIIRRDD!! So yeah I like where this is going! What's gonna happen next? How old are they? But yeah, hey, thanks for reviewing on my fics! Man I know what you mean by writing blocks hey?! I have 4 to work on. See, I don't think I'm the greatest writer and I do it for fun but so many people love me work (Not to sound cocky or anything) but they're all like "Update soon!" I LOVE IT, but I don't know what to write haha! Man! But yeah I love your story! The Plot is great! AWWWEE! Ron and Hermione are getting Married! YES! I'm excited! You gotta write a chapter about the wedding! So that was Hermione's first kiss ever? They were together and they never kissed before? WEeeeiirdd, but yeah it's like 3:30 in the morning, I'm dead! So yeah I'll talk to you later! Love you lots! Cyz!


Love:
Krystal~*


P.S. This is the longest comment/review I've ever written! You're Special!! haha Bye!

Hi everyone,

I have written half of the chapter but am suffering from writting block and school work! Thankyou for the review Daniels_girl, I feel special that I got the longest review. I will update as soon as possible but I need feedback to tell me what I could do better.

~Caitlin~

P.S. Luna will be in it more and have a bigger part as the story goes on.

Hey Caitlin,
Yay! I love Luna. She cracks me up. Well anyways, thanks for letting me know about my question I hope something big happens to her! Write more soon!

Thanks!!!

Byeee

Hi everyone,

I have almost finished the chapter but I have a lot of school work I am supossed to do so I don't know when it will be up.

Loony_Luna, something big wil happen to Luna and two other people with her. They will play a role and one already does.

Daniels_girl, thankyou for not forgetting about my only fanfic!

bellatrixlestrange, Ginny will stop screaming and find a big surprise to why she was screaming.

My monkey ate a Fizzing Whizzbee, thankyou for saying it was proffesional because I am a horrible writter wiht horrible spelling and ideas.

Thankyou all for the feedback. The next chapter will be up as soon as possible!

~Caitlin~

P.S. The next chapter will be up on Tuesday or Wednsday!

Hello anyone there? *yells at screen and starts to look* No there is noone here to tell me how bad my chapter is! Someone please review.

~Caitlin~

Hey Caitlin! Hmm... interesting chapter... Ron is going to be in a lot of truble with Hermione! I thought it was a bit rushed, and you could of made it a bit longer but other I thought it was pretty good. I wonder what Hermione is going to say when she hears that Ron slept with Lavander and got her pregnet?!?! She is going to be furious!! I can't wait to read what Seamus says... the next chapter shouldbe good....

Well, good chapter!

Thankyou Loony_Luna!! I know it was short but I am suffering writters block so didn't know what to write. Ron will be in trouble and Seamus won't be happy...I don't want to spoil anything.

~Caitlin~

Oh no! Hold on a sec... So're you saying that Lavender is pregnant with Ron's baby? And I got that Hermy was pregnant with Ron's kid, but... I really hope that Lavender doesn't succeed in tearing up Ron and Hermy's relationship, because she's really giving it a go, isn't she? On, this makes me MAD, I really don't like Lavender! Post more, Caitlin, I can't wait to see what happens next!
Cheers,
Manda

Thanks for the feedback! I myself don't even know how it will end because I just write one chapter after another. I don't know when I will update. Lavender is BAD!!! but GOOD!!! I can't make up my mind.

~Caitlin~

Hm. I say... BAD ALL THE WAY! She's evil, taking advantage of our Ronnie - or should I say, "Hermione's Ronnie" - like that! She's EVIL! She - she ... she manipulated the Sorting Hat into putting her into Gryffindor instead of where she really belonged - SLYTHERIN! EVIL, EVIL, EVIL! *lol* But since you're the author, I'll let you decide, eh?
Cheers,
Manda

OK I agree she is bad! She will continue with her plan against Hermione and in divorce against Seamus. Eventually it will work for someone.

~Caitlin~

Hey Caitlin,
Well, I'm unsure if I posted to this chapter already, but here goes anyway.
I HATE LAVENDER. SHE IS AN EVIL, TWISTED WOMAN WHO SHOULD SEE WHAT SHE IS DOING TO RONNIE AND HERMY IS POSITIVELY WRONG. I agree with HarryPotterFreak: she belonged in SLYTHERIN!

*takesadeepbreath* Pheww. Okay, I think I've vented enough now. But, yeah, great chapter as usual! I really hope that Lavender really isn't pregnant with Ron's baby. He should only have a baby with beautiful, not-conceited, Hermione. I think Lavender shouldn't have *gotten around* as much as she did, cause she turned into a life-ruining meanie.

Anyway, post more soon,
Cheers,
Bella.

Hi all

Thanks for the reviews! I have started the next chapter and don't know when it will be up.

Is this good so far?

Should Lavender be bad or good?

Caitlin

Bad all the way! (Of course, you know I've already voiced my opinion on the matter. I feel the same way as bellatrixlestrange.) But it's totally up o you, Caity, since you're the author!
Cheers,
Manderz

I have decied what Lavender is but I'm not going to tell anyone becasue it will ruin it. Thankyou for the opinion Amanda.

Caitlin

P.S. Will Friend fic ever be updated?

(I am not being rude)