hey, its deja that was a cool fic
remembr to reply to: dejas version of the half-blood prince and vote
great story!good job
Full Version: The Love Of A Wizard **COMPLETED**
Hey there, Snapelover! 
Wow, you've written quite the story here! Forgive me for not leaving a review now; I'm going to print out a hard copy and read it later this evening since it's so long, and I'll be back later to give you my comments. Knowing your writing based on what I've seen outside the fanfic forum, I'm sure that I'm bound to be impressed... which is good, because I've been looking for high-quality fanfic lately. 
Like I mentioned in one of the other review threads, deja, it is NOT appropriate to go into someone else's fanfic thread, give a three or four word comment, and then proceed to advertise your own fanfic. Your signature is your place for advertisements (small ones, bear in mind) -- not other members' topics. I know that it's exciting to start a fanfic and you're probably looking forward to having a readership, but in the meantime, you're just being plain rude. I wouldn't blame Snapelover one bit for being offended by seeing you post a basically useless review and then plug your own story. Please try to break this habit.
Wow, you've written quite the story here! Forgive me for not leaving a review now; I'm going to print out a hard copy and read it later this evening since it's so long, and I'll be back later to give you my comments. Knowing your writing based on what I've seen outside the fanfic forum, I'm sure that I'm bound to be impressed... which is good, because I've been looking for high-quality fanfic lately. Like I mentioned in one of the other review threads, deja, it is NOT appropriate to go into someone else's fanfic thread, give a three or four word comment, and then proceed to advertise your own fanfic. Your signature is your place for advertisements (small ones, bear in mind) -- not other members' topics. I know that it's exciting to start a fanfic and you're probably looking forward to having a readership, but in the meantime, you're just being plain rude. I wouldn't blame Snapelover one bit for being offended by seeing you post a basically useless review and then plug your own story. Please try to break this habit.
Wow! this is a really amazing story! your a truely fantastic writer! keep writing you obviously have a real gift for it! I really have enjoyed your character development and the point fo view your taking with this story (the outsider looking into the magical world).
Wow, I just read your whole story, Snapelover, and it is really brilliant! Your characterization sounds more canon than some recent ... um ... 'official' canon, in my opinion. I've never been really into fanfics involving OCs, but Claudia is incredible. She's very well-developed, and she seems really genuine, really real to me; I think that backstory on her life in Chapter One helps the reader understand her situation a bit. I also love the way you've portrayed Remus, Sirius, and Snape -- especially Remus, you have to love the guy. 
The cliffhanger at the end is great... I can't wait to see what happens next! As much as I hate to leave the classic 'great work, keep it up!' comment that really isn't terribly constructive for fanfic authors, I'm afraid I have to do it here. What can you say about a story that's so close to perfect as this one? It really is very refreshing. I'll be back to read again soon!
I've never been really into fanfics involving OCs, but Claudia is incredible. She's very well-developed, and she seems really genuine, really real to me; I think that backstory on her life in Chapter One helps the reader understand her situation a bit. I also love the way you've portrayed Remus, Sirius, and Snape -- especially Remus, you have to love the guy. The cliffhanger at the end is great... I can't wait to see what happens next! As much as I hate to leave the classic 'great work, keep it up!' comment that really isn't terribly constructive for fanfic authors, I'm afraid I have to do it here. What can you say about a story that's so close to perfect as this one? It really is very refreshing. I'll be back to read again soon!
Oh goodness, this story is taking quite a turn, isn't it?! Claudia and Snape... hmm... interesting... geez, I have no idea who she's going to end up with now! I initially thought it would have to be Lupin... then Sirius... now Snape... nah, it's gotta be Sirius! And Lupin and Tonks!
And who are these Muggles that Voldemort is trying to recruit? This is kind of ironic, seeing that the ultimate anti-Muggle evil force is trying to use Muggles to their advantage... Imperius Curse? Or are the Death Eaters genuinely trying to recruit Muggles? It's all very interesting... I can't wait to read the next update!
And who are these Muggles that Voldemort is trying to recruit? This is kind of ironic, seeing that the ultimate anti-Muggle evil force is trying to use Muggles to their advantage... Imperius Curse? Or are the Death Eaters genuinely trying to recruit Muggles? It's all very interesting... I can't wait to read the next update!
| QUOTE (Anthony Goldstein @ Aug 1 2005, 09:07 PM) |
| Oh goodness, this story is taking quite a turn, isn't it?! Claudia and Snape... hmm... interesting... geez, I have no idea who she's going to end up with now! I initially thought it would have to be Lupin... then Sirius... now Snape... nah, it's gotta be Sirius! And Lupin and Tonks! And who are these Muggles that Voldemort is trying to recruit? This is kind of ironic, seeing that the ultimate anti-Muggle evil force is trying to use Muggles to their advantage... Imperius Curse? Or are the Death Eaters genuinely trying to recruit Muggles? It's all very interesting... I can't wait to read the next update! |
Yes...I thought I would throw a Jk - like curve ball in there. As to Who Claudia ends up with...well I will not tell you.
You have to really read into Claudia's story and some of the things she says to understand who these muggles are. I am going to pull another Jo here and say, Careful readers should be able to figure this out.
Just a note about this fan fic: This is based off of ALL of the books. If you see in the last few chapters, it covered the events of GoF. It's just told from a different point of view. But all of the events of the story are the SAME! I am just filling in some holes for Jo.
And adding my Claudia in the mix to put some spice in the Order's life!More to come...
Your fanfic is turning into daily entertainment for me! 
Last night, I even had a strange dream about the men in the club... which quickly changed into an even stranger dream that was a sort of weird cross between Giorgio de Chirico and 'The Magic School Bus' .... but that's beside the point. Anyway, what I can't figure out is how Claudia recognized men in the bar if she's spent so much of her life in isolation. Where is this bar, anyway? Is it in England? Are we to know where exactly they Apparated to? And what's up with this cottage? Hmm... These really are sort of rhetorical questions since I know you can't tell me the answers as the author (), but you're probably amused by my weird thoughts so I just figure I'll keep it up.
I think this is just brilliant, the way you're fitting this entirely separate universe into the plot of GoF and OotP. It completely explains where Lupin was throughout GoF and where Sirius went after Voldemort's return, among other things. I love how you've managed to work even the smallest details (e.g. the tropical bird) that we know about Sirius's time away from Harry into your plot. I just hope that we'll be seeing more action from Sirius, even though he's living at Grimmauld Place at this point... the way you've developed his character is amazing and I really enjoy reading him. I also have to say now that Claudia just *has* to end up with Sirius! You're making a wonderful Snape who we can trust..... but still.... I'm glad to see that Tonks and Claudia are getting along well. Here, you're providing the build-up for Tonks and Lupin's relationship that JKR completely neglected. I mean, I love the ship, but it was like BAM! So sudden!
Keep up the great work!
Last night, I even had a strange dream about the men in the club... which quickly changed into an even stranger dream that was a sort of weird cross between Giorgio de Chirico and 'The Magic School Bus' .... but that's beside the point. Anyway, what I can't figure out is how Claudia recognized men in the bar if she's spent so much of her life in isolation. Where is this bar, anyway? Is it in England? Are we to know where exactly they Apparated to? And what's up with this cottage? Hmm... These really are sort of rhetorical questions since I know you can't tell me the answers as the author (), but you're probably amused by my weird thoughts so I just figure I'll keep it up. I think this is just brilliant, the way you're fitting this entirely separate universe into the plot of GoF and OotP. It completely explains where Lupin was throughout GoF and where Sirius went after Voldemort's return, among other things. I love how you've managed to work even the smallest details (e.g. the tropical bird) that we know about Sirius's time away from Harry into your plot. I just hope that we'll be seeing more action from Sirius, even though he's living at Grimmauld Place at this point... the way you've developed his character is amazing and I really enjoy reading him. I also have to say now that Claudia just *has* to end up with Sirius! You're making a wonderful Snape who we can trust..... but still....
I'm glad to see that Tonks and Claudia are getting along well. Here, you're providing the build-up for Tonks and Lupin's relationship that JKR completely neglected. I mean, I love the ship, but it was like BAM! So sudden!Keep up the great work!
Oh Allie...so many questions I can't answer...
Actually, I can answer one or two here for you, seeing as though you're my only reader!
As to how Claudia knows those people? Well, she has only lived in isolation for a little over a year. That is a little over a year since her husband's death. That makes Emma around 4-5 yrs old by the way
The bar, I neglcted to say, was in England. Pick a city and that's where it was. The location does not matter so much as the events that happened there. But supposse I should go back and add a bit about where they are going. I just thought it would be so much like Claudia to go wherever Severus took her, with no questions. She is kind of seeing him with rose colored glasses at the moment.
Do you really think, after what you know now, that Claudia and Sirius are meant to be? You have noted that I am indeed filling in Jo's holes as to Tonks and Lupin. I just love them, and couldn't mess with that. I just wanted to see the romance parts blossom. Ok...enough posting chit chat in my own thread. I have workto do...
Actually, I can answer one or two here for you, seeing as though you're my only reader!
As to how Claudia knows those people? Well, she has only lived in isolation for a little over a year. That is a little over a year since her husband's death. That makes Emma around 4-5 yrs old by the way
The bar, I neglcted to say, was in England. Pick a city and that's where it was.
The location does not matter so much as the events that happened there. But supposse I should go back and add a bit about where they are going. I just thought it would be so much like Claudia to go wherever Severus took her, with no questions. She is kind of seeing him with rose colored glasses at the moment. Do you really think, after what you know now, that Claudia and Sirius are meant to be? You have noted that I am indeed filling in Jo's holes as to Tonks and Lupin. I just love them, and couldn't mess with that. I just wanted to see the romance parts blossom.
Ok...enough posting chit chat in my own thread. I have workto do...
ok this is a great story. I love the way you wrote it with such thrilling texture and detail. I always wondered what happened to Sirius, Lupin and all that after the Prisoner of Askaban. You are a great author
Oooh... this Coagmento Pectus thing is creepy! I am seriously frightened. I've got a really bad feeling about this, since we all know that Claudia really loves Sirius... I'm still trying to figure out exactly what's up with the men in the bar... can't work it out yet... 
This is why I like your story so much, though; it's not just some cheesy romance, because a. the romance isn't cheesy () and b. there's a plot beyond the romance. Keep writing, and thanks for answering some of my questions! I'll post my thoughts here if (key word: if) I ever work out what's going on with Claudia and the Muggles and all...
I'm still trying to figure out exactly what's up with the men in the bar... can't work it out yet... This is why I like your story so much, though; it's not just some cheesy romance, because a. the romance isn't cheesy () and b. there's a plot beyond the romance. Keep writing, and thanks for answering some of my questions! I'll post my thoughts here if (key word: if) I ever work out what's going on with Claudia and the Muggles and all...
WOW!!!! 
this thing is good i swear you have a nack for this kind of thing!!!! well yea keep on writing!!! cxomeon what are you waiting for ( sorry i mite sound bossy but i have to now what happens ) o and i have one question does emma now about the magical world?????? 
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this thing is good i swear you have a nack for this kind of thing!!!! well yea keep on writing!!! cxomeon what are you waiting for ( sorry i mite sound bossy but i have to now what happens ) o and i have one question does emma now about the magical world?????? MOD EDIT: Hi there, and welcome to VTM! I'd like to remind you that netspeak is not allowed on the forums -- '4' should be 'for,' 'r' should be 'are,' '?' should be 'question,' etc. Please review the rules here. Your post has been edited.
I've been reading your story and I think it is amazing. I love how you work in the real books happenings in a different way. I am wondering how you are going to use Sirius' death and the HBP storyline. This is really good, so please keep going!
Allie, you're too funny. I'm on vacation right now too and can't stay away from the computer. Sad really. 
Claudia and company are ex-military, now for hire. They do whatever they choose to do, mostly help find kidnapped people, a few trail and tale of peoples. And yes, on occasion, they do do assasinations.
I am so happy I have someone who reads this! I do appreciate all your comments, and I know my story is long, so thanks for taking the time to read it. Along with your mod duties, it can be a handfull. Oh yeah...are you turning into a serious C/S shipper?!?!?!?!
Claudia and company are ex-military, now for hire. They do whatever they choose to do, mostly help find kidnapped people, a few trail and tale of peoples. And yes, on occasion, they do do assasinations.
I am so happy I have someone who reads this! I do appreciate all your comments, and I know my story is long, so thanks for taking the time to read it. Along with your mod duties, it can be a handfull. Oh yeah...are you turning into a serious C/S shipper?!?!?!?!
| QUOTE (Snapelover @ Aug 9 2005, 11:55 PM) |
| I'm on vacation right now too and can't stay away from the computer. |
Hehe, that makes the both of us then! It's not sad at all... hooray for Harry Potter fans who don't know how to spend time away from VTM!
| QUOTE (Snapelover @ Aug 9 2005, 11:55 PM) |
| I know my story is long, so thanks for taking the time to read it. |
Oh, not at all... the best ones are always long.
Thanks to you for taking the time to write it -- I have such a hard time sticking with writing a fanfic. My sister, on the other hand... during all the time that I've been sitting here on VTM every night, she's been working on her own story. I can't believe that she has so much patience for it!| QUOTE (Snapelover @ Aug 9 2005, 11:55 PM) |
| Oh yeah...are you turning into a serious C/S shipper?!?!?!?! |
Oh yes... I am definitely a big-time Claudia/Sirius shipper. It's the first ship to which I'm fully committing myself, actually... I'm liking it better than some of the canon ones.
As for the latest installment.... so I take it that this is Snape's potion that's protecting Claudia from the spells, huh? This'll definitely give her an advantage when she's fighting against the wizards, if the spells shoot off a Muggle like the way they rebond from Hagrid.
(It's too bad that the potion is going to be destructive, ultimately... because of Claudia's undying love for Sirius. ) And Arthur's pretty good with the fighting -- I like how you're showing him as a very powerful wizard, because I continue to think that readers (like the Ministry) have a tendency to underestimate him because of his obsession with Muggles and his seemingly gentle/fatherly nature. I also like your characterization of Tonks -- it's fun to see her acting a little goofy over Remus after that whole scene at the end of HBP. It's such a good ship, really... the adult ones are much more plausible than these teen romance kinds of things.
Well see, the ships are important because...well..the story is called The LOVE of a Wizard. I really do not want to say anything to burst your bubble about C/S ship. I refuse to call you delusional, so I will just allow you your opinions for the time being.
I just love the adult ships. Actually, if you notice, very little of the kids is even seen in this story, until the ending chapters. I am really wrestling with what to do about the end. Everything thing has been planned and organized, but I have like 3 different endings to decide on.
My delimma is that I need to stick to cannon in order for this story to work. Maybe I will just put it away until book seven comes out... Nah, I will just have to decide FOR Jo what happens next!
Well, Happy reading everyone. I had a 3 hour plane ride and I outlined a few more chapters. They will be written pretty quickly so look out for them!
I just love the adult ships. Actually, if you notice, very little of the kids is even seen in this story, until the ending chapters. I am really wrestling with what to do about the end. Everything thing has been planned and organized, but I have like 3 different endings to decide on.
My delimma is that I need to stick to cannon in order for this story to work. Maybe I will just put it away until book seven comes out... Nah, I will just have to decide FOR Jo what happens next!Well, Happy reading everyone. I had a 3 hour plane ride and I outlined a few more chapters. They will be written pretty quickly so look out for them!
Okay, I have three chapters more to read but no more time now, still I want you to know I have no words to express how I feel about your fanfic.
When I started it I thought it was a little weak and, well, kind of just read over it, but then you got me hooked.
This is sooo much more than just good!
I can't remember when I ever had pictures in my mind reading books. I mean, I was not reading. I was seeing your story. Wow.
The whole Snape-Claudia thing... just... no words... my heart beat really fast... and... wow... just the way you describe anything.
I'm unworthy!
*bow*
I didn't understand why that love-potion had to be, and this is probably because I do have something similar going on in my story... buhu... now it'll look as if I just copied. *sigh*
But I'll probably find out as soon as I get to the last three chapters.
It is a shame, really, that nobody else comments! People are definitely missing something out.
Take another wow!
Flutterflie
When I started it I thought it was a little weak and, well, kind of just read over it, but then you got me hooked.
This is sooo much more than just good!
I can't remember when I ever had pictures in my mind reading books. I mean, I was not reading. I was seeing your story. Wow.
The whole Snape-Claudia thing... just... no words... my heart beat really fast... and... wow... just the way you describe anything.
I'm unworthy!
*bow*
I didn't understand why that love-potion had to be, and this is probably because I do have something similar going on in my story... buhu... now it'll look as if I just copied. *sigh*
But I'll probably find out as soon as I get to the last three chapters.
It is a shame, really, that nobody else comments! People are definitely missing something out.
Take another wow!
Flutterflie
*shivers*
I was gonna turn off the computer, but I just couldn't. Gosh... This is exactly as I picture Sev to behave... wow...
To be honest, the whole army-thing I find weird. But the love story... wow.
So now you I will be checking for a new chapter everytime I get online.
You're doing sooo great!
Wow.
You see, I have no words to say - and that is meaning something.
Flutterflie
I was gonna turn off the computer, but I just couldn't. Gosh... This is exactly as I picture Sev to behave... wow...
To be honest, the whole army-thing I find weird. But the love story... wow.
So now you I will be checking for a new chapter everytime I get online.
You're doing sooo great!
Wow.
You see, I have no words to say - and that is meaning something.
Flutterflie
Thanks Fluterflie! I am most humbled by your copliments!
Yes, Severus and Claudia are hot. But watch out for Allie, (Anthony Goldstein) she is an avid Claudia-Sirius fan.
I know the military angle is weird. But I figured it was so strange, hardly anyone would think to put the two together. We have plenty of romance, gushy, rounchy, puppy-love fanfics out there. I HAD to have romance, bt still, I had to have action. So...Hopefuly, you will enjoy things as they progress. I have to focus on Claudia's military life right now so I can set other things up. But soon...very soon...the wizards will not be taking a back seat anymore. I promise.
Yes, Severus and Claudia are hot. But watch out for Allie, (Anthony Goldstein) she is an avid Claudia-Sirius fan.
I know the military angle is weird. But I figured it was so strange, hardly anyone would think to put the two together. We have plenty of romance, gushy, rounchy, puppy-love fanfics out there. I HAD to have romance, bt still, I had to have action. So...Hopefuly, you will enjoy things as they progress. I have to focus on Claudia's military life right now so I can set other things up. But soon...very soon...the wizards will not be taking a back seat anymore. I promise.
Yeah, well, Snape, Sirius and a girl, that makes a nice triangle...
*whistleandlookintotheair*
Probably both of them deserve some love...
but if I'd have to choose, I'd go for Snape! *lol*
Besides, Sirius is "behind the veil" now... So if he will get the girl in the end (hey, your nick is Snapelover - you wouldn't do that, would you? *lol*), you'd better get him out of there.
I just PMed you...
Cheers, Flutterflie
*whistleandlookintotheair*
Probably both of them deserve some love...
but if I'd have to choose, I'd go for Snape! *lol*
Besides, Sirius is "behind the veil" now... So if he will get the girl in the end (hey, your nick is Snapelover - you wouldn't do that, would you? *lol*), you'd better get him out of there.
I just PMed you...
Cheers, Flutterflie
Whoops, I forgot that Sirius had to die! So much for that romance then, eh?! Ah well, I'll hold out for Lupin and Tonks then.... and maybe Snape... though I still have a serious trust problem so far as he goes, I have to admit... Good thing I'm not given to extreme emotional reactions, or else I might have had to attack over the lack of a Claudia/Sirius relationship! I felt so sorry for Lupin, though... again, praise my non-emotionality, or I'd be crying at this particular moment.
I'm finding Dumbledore's reactions a little difficult to read at this point, I have to say... he doesn't seem to be giving completely positive or completely negative responses to the depth of Claudia and Snape's relationship, does he? True, love is a very powerful magic... but I still maintain you're leading us down a path to show us some of the bad effects of this potion. Or else you're going to leave us with one heck of a horrible cliffhanger!
I can't wait to see what you do with Snape during the HBP time frame... if you're still trying to create a trustworthy character (which, based on your username and the 'I still trust Severus' in your sig, methinks you are), this ought to be really interesting. I wonder if he'll tell Claudia when he makes the unbreakable vow... and when he has to kill Dumbledore... mmm... this could be very good indeed!
I look forward to reading more -- your updates are always so timely! Just when I'm starting to drop off around midnight every day.... I spot a new chapter.
So much for that romance then, eh?! Ah well, I'll hold out for Lupin and Tonks then.... and maybe Snape... though I still have a serious trust problem so far as he goes, I have to admit... Good thing I'm not given to extreme emotional reactions, or else I might have had to attack over the lack of a Claudia/Sirius relationship! I felt so sorry for Lupin, though... again, praise my non-emotionality, or I'd be crying at this particular moment. I'm finding Dumbledore's reactions a little difficult to read at this point, I have to say... he doesn't seem to be giving completely positive or completely negative responses to the depth of Claudia and Snape's relationship, does he? True, love is a very powerful magic... but I still maintain you're leading us down a path to show us some of the bad effects of this potion. Or else you're going to leave us with one heck of a horrible cliffhanger!
I can't wait to see what you do with Snape during the HBP time frame... if you're still trying to create a trustworthy character (which, based on your username and the 'I still trust Severus' in your sig, methinks you are), this ought to be really interesting. I wonder if he'll tell Claudia when he makes the unbreakable vow... and when he has to kill Dumbledore... mmm... this could be very good indeed!
I look forward to reading more -- your updates are always so timely! Just when I'm starting to drop off around midnight every day.... I spot a new chapter.
Hey there Allie, How in God's name could you have forgotten that Sirius died? But...this is MY story and I COULD bring him back you know...
Dumbledore is a tough character to write. well, tough in the sense that you want to keep the characters as true as you possibly can. I just wouldn't feel right if I wrote Dumbledore turning into matchmaker. He is interested, but is waiting to see what happens himself. He can NOT perform any magic on Claudia, this includes Legilimens or Occlumency. So...he really doesn't know.
Though I am a Snapelover through and through, I have my moments of doubt about Severus. So when I was outlining the last bit of this book, I decided which way he would go. Also, what way Claudia wold go too.......*elbows Allie in the ribs* There is something for you to ponder while I write more and beg others to read...
Dumbledore is a tough character to write. well, tough in the sense that you want to keep the characters as true as you possibly can. I just wouldn't feel right if I wrote Dumbledore turning into matchmaker. He is interested, but is waiting to see what happens himself. He can NOT perform any magic on Claudia, this includes Legilimens or Occlumency. So...he really doesn't know.
Though I am a Snapelover through and through, I have my moments of doubt about Severus. So when I was outlining the last bit of this book, I decided which way he would go. Also, what way Claudia wold go too.......*elbows Allie in the ribs* There is something for you to ponder while I write more and beg others to read...
Hey... don't give away too much! *twinkle*
Glad Sev and Claudi made up. But I find it weird that Dumbles attacks Claudi to get Sev. I mean, they could communicate in a different way, like using Fawkes or so.
I just thought it.. well... it worked... but it was a cruel thing to do...
Sorry, just being honest with you. I always am - even though it does get me into trouble once in a while.
I imagined Claudia would go after Volders now, but I doubt Muggles could really harm wizards. I mean, Uncle Algie let Neville fall of the window and he bounced down the street. Hagrid stated that Lily and James could never have died in a car crash. How could a common fire (bomb) harm wizards?
But I'm still not done laughing picturing Snape and an US-Army-Muggle being in love. *lol*
Hope they'll be able to work it out - but you kind of sound like they will split up and... you made an emphasis on the things that can go horribly wrong with the potion... So now I fear for poor Snapeys life.... *sigh*
Whatever happenes, it always makes me fell more sorry for him...
So I'm hoping for a happy end now. *lol*
Cheers, Flutty
Glad Sev and Claudi made up. But I find it weird that Dumbles attacks Claudi to get Sev. I mean, they could communicate in a different way, like using Fawkes or so.
I just thought it.. well... it worked... but it was a cruel thing to do...
Sorry, just being honest with you. I always am - even though it does get me into trouble once in a while.
I imagined Claudia would go after Volders now, but I doubt Muggles could really harm wizards. I mean, Uncle Algie let Neville fall of the window and he bounced down the street. Hagrid stated that Lily and James could never have died in a car crash. How could a common fire (bomb) harm wizards?
But I'm still not done laughing picturing Snape and an US-Army-Muggle being in love. *lol*
Hope they'll be able to work it out - but you kind of sound like they will split up and... you made an emphasis on the things that can go horribly wrong with the potion... So now I fear for poor Snapeys life.... *sigh*
Whatever happenes, it always makes me fell more sorry for him...
So I'm hoping for a happy end now. *lol*
Cheers, Flutty
Okay, I got it now. *lol*
I was wrong, I thought the army-people were actually going after the wizards... ouch... Hehe.
I like this chapter better than the last two. *nodd*
And I really wonder where you are going to take it, because... well, we know what happens next. Oh boy...
Just one last question: where do you get all this time to sit down and write this fantastic story? I mean, that was... what.. 3 chapters in 24 hours or so. And it's not just somehow throwing something together. I mean, you really think about it and everything makes sense. Man...!
Two thumbs up!
Flutterflie
.oO(I hope you don't mind if I bounce in after every single chapter. It's just such fun to read...*lol*)
I was wrong, I thought the army-people were actually going after the wizards... ouch... Hehe.
I like this chapter better than the last two. *nodd*
And I really wonder where you are going to take it, because... well, we know what happens next. Oh boy...
Just one last question: where do you get all this time to sit down and write this fantastic story? I mean, that was... what.. 3 chapters in 24 hours or so. And it's not just somehow throwing something together. I mean, you really think about it and everything makes sense. Man...!
Two thumbs up!
Flutterflie
.oO(I hope you don't mind if I bounce in after every single chapter. It's just such fun to read...*lol*)
Yes I'm sorry to bore you with the Claudia-military stuff. Most of that is out of my system actually. You, the reader, just needed to understand what Claudia really is and what they (muggles) are capable of.
So...Thank you for saying you liked this better. I am surprised...no thoughts on what Claudia said about Sirius???? Hmmm.
I was wondering if you thought they were going after wizards. No no no. They were only after the muggle terrorists, so to speak. They had to settle old stuff too with them. Now that that is over, back to the wizards and what is to come. What will Claudia do???
Oh and I have everything written actually. Notes and outlines. This last chapter was suppossed to be pretty short. But I got carried away with Claudia and Tonks. Then Molly and Fleur thing. Couldn't pass it up. Since the outline is done, I can just write it up. Beta it and send it in. *shrugs* It's not perfect, I just like to see what people think about it. So thanks for the reading. Looking for more of your too...
So...Thank you for saying you liked this better.
I am surprised...no thoughts on what Claudia said about Sirius???? Hmmm. I was wondering if you thought they were going after wizards. No no no. They were only after the muggle terrorists, so to speak. They had to settle old stuff too with them. Now that that is over, back to the wizards and what is to come. What will Claudia do???
Oh and I have everything written actually. Notes and outlines. This last chapter was suppossed to be pretty short. But I got carried away with Claudia and Tonks. Then Molly and Fleur thing. Couldn't pass it up.
Since the outline is done, I can just write it up. Beta it and send it in. *shrugs* It's not perfect, I just like to see what people think about it. So thanks for the reading. Looking for more of your too...
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Ahahaha... I've definitely got thoughts on what Claudia said about Sirius! I still believe there's hope! I wonder what happens so far as the potion goes if Claudia realizes that she is really in love with someone who has subsequently gone 'beyond the veil' ... same nasty side effects, perhaps?
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Oh my gosh, I never even entertained the possibility of Claudia going evil alongside Snape in my mind!
No... that would be horrible... I'll tell you what's going to happen. Claudia is going to find out that Snape really is evil, she's going to realize that she's been chasing the wrong guy all along, she'll go retrieve Sirius from behind the veil, Lupin and Tonks will get back together, and all of them will Apparate off into the happy sunset! (Except Snape, whom Claudia's henchmen will viciously murder.) The bit with Fleur in there was great... she is way too amusing a character to go to waste.
I'll come back in pursuit of updates later this evening.......
OK my readership..all 2 of you...
I am taking a day or so to outline a very difficult part of this story, and I am having serious issues with it. It just doesn't flow. So I am stepping away from it in order to gain some prospective. Just a few days. I won't be gone long...promise!
I am also wrestling with a dilemma in the story line. Grrrrr
So...send good thoughts my way and I will hopefully return in a few days with a strong idea as to..well...I really can't tell you that. Ahhhhh! I have no one to confide in!
*sighs*
*Waits for Flutterflie to send her chapter...*
I am taking a day or so to outline a very difficult part of this story, and I am having serious issues with it. It just doesn't flow. So I am stepping away from it in order to gain some prospective. Just a few days. I won't be gone long...promise!
I am also wrestling with a dilemma in the story line. Grrrrr
So...send good thoughts my way and I will hopefully return in a few days with a strong idea as to..well...I really can't tell you that. Ahhhhh! I have no one to confide in!*sighs*
*Waits for Flutterflie to send her chapter...*
Buhu... I can see where this is going.
YES, I did think about Sirius quite a lot after the last chapter and I am afraid he will get the girl in the end. *sigh*
As for poor Severus, he probably knows what is going to happen, he knows where his place is... and it is not with Claudia.
He is just so used to his bitter life... poor guy.
I think Claudia will leave him after he XXX...(HBP-spoilers!) So unlike Finja who forgave him and would never turn her back on her family... but then she has been knowing Sev forever and Claudia hasn't.
.oO(Am I allowed to speak about different fanfics in this thread? If not, my apologies)
Btw. Did you mention "HBP-Spoilers" in the topic? Because you should now...
And as for you waiting for the next SaB-chapter: yes, I am waiting, too. I hope I'll be able to bring it online tonight. However, my appartment looks a mess and I didn't come up with a proper spell (yet?)...
So see you,
Flutterflie
YES, I did think about Sirius quite a lot after the last chapter and I am afraid he will get the girl in the end. *sigh*
As for poor Severus, he probably knows what is going to happen, he knows where his place is... and it is not with Claudia.
He is just so used to his bitter life... poor guy.
I think Claudia will leave him after he XXX...(HBP-spoilers!) So unlike Finja who forgave him and would never turn her back on her family... but then she has been knowing Sev forever and Claudia hasn't.
.oO(Am I allowed to speak about different fanfics in this thread? If not, my apologies)
Btw. Did you mention "HBP-Spoilers" in the topic? Because you should now...
And as for you waiting for the next SaB-chapter: yes, I am waiting, too. I hope I'll be able to bring it online tonight. However, my appartment looks a mess and I didn't come up with a proper spell (yet?)...
So see you,
Flutterflie
*Sends inspiring thoughts Melissa's way*
Well, I'll be here waiting for the updates whenever you work out those issues!
Even though I am STILL a very serious Sirius/Claudia shipper, I have to say that I felt sorry for poor Snape in this chapter. He definitely is starting to recognize that he can't stay with Claudia if he's going to be able to do all his missions for Dumbledore. On the other hand, I'm now wondering whether Claudia's supposedly 'unconditional love' will hold when she finds out that Snape kills Dumbledore...
To answer your question, Flutterflie... yes, you're allowed to write about other fanfics as long as it isn't blatant advertising, which yours isn't. (If you would like to see a prime example of blatant advertising, check out deja jamie potter's post on the first page of this thread.)
Well, I'll be here waiting for the updates whenever you work out those issues!
Even though I am STILL a very serious Sirius/Claudia shipper, I have to say that I felt sorry for poor Snape in this chapter. He definitely is starting to recognize that he can't stay with Claudia if he's going to be able to do all his missions for Dumbledore.
On the other hand, I'm now wondering whether Claudia's supposedly 'unconditional love' will hold when she finds out that Snape kills Dumbledore...To answer your question, Flutterflie... yes, you're allowed to write about other fanfics as long as it isn't blatant advertising, which yours isn't. (If you would like to see a prime example of blatant advertising, check out deja jamie potter's post on the first page of this thread.
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Oh good, I was hoping for another update soon... and I was worried that it was going to take much longer than this! Well done with the quick turnaround!
Ah... so we're starting to get into HBP territory. I like the way you're filling in the development of the Lupin/Tonks romance; I feel so sorry for her in this scene. And glad that she's snapping at Claudia to exert some control over her boyfriend! I can't believe that Claudia doesn't seem to get how Snape treats all of the other Order members! It's also good to see Emma returning... though like Claudia said, it'll be hard to tell her that Sirius is gone. Maybe Sirius will return from behind the veil and come get back together with Claudia before Emma even needs to find out. YES... I am once more a fully-fledged Claudia/Sirius shipper... I had some moments of doubt when I remembered that Sirius died (), but now I'm a supporter once more...
Keep it up!
Ah... so we're starting to get into HBP territory. I like the way you're filling in the development of the Lupin/Tonks romance; I feel so sorry for her in this scene. And glad that she's snapping at Claudia to exert some control over her boyfriend!
I can't believe that Claudia doesn't seem to get how Snape treats all of the other Order members! It's also good to see Emma returning... though like Claudia said, it'll be hard to tell her that Sirius is gone. Maybe Sirius will return from behind the veil and come get back together with Claudia before Emma even needs to find out. YES... I am once more a fully-fledged Claudia/Sirius shipper... I had some moments of doubt when I remembered that Sirius died (), but now I'm a supporter once more... Keep it up!
Well, here is another installement. I would really like to hear what anyone has to say about this fic so far.
On another note...so far in this fic, I have tried very hard to keep things true to the original story. But now we are post HBP waters and I am forced to take liberties. So, from now on, it is my imaginaion. I am ending the series the way I wish JK would. So...here is my attempt at the last and final book in the series. Your thoughts and comments are always welcome and I look forward to them. Thanks to all who read...and welcome any new readers. I will try and do the story justice.
On another note...so far in this fic, I have tried very hard to keep things true to the original story. But now we are post HBP waters and I am forced to take liberties. So, from now on, it is my imaginaion. I am ending the series the way I wish JK would. So...here is my attempt at the last and final book in the series. Your thoughts and comments are always welcome and I look forward to them. Thanks to all who read...and welcome any new readers. I will try and do the story justice.
Hi there Snapelover,
I finally found the time to read the last chapters and I'm glad I read them in a row, to be honest, because it is just sooo exciting!
I feel somehow it is a mistake that Claudia showed the neclace, and also that she is going to show the vial. But maybe inside there is some kind of memory and everybody will know that Snape is really innocent? *sigh*
Who knows?
You do. *lol*
So keep up your good work. You said you only had a few chapters left... so I'm hoping now that everything turns out to be a big mistake and that she will get back with Sev.
Too bad, two readers, one is Sirius/Claudia-shipper, the other one is Severus/Claudia-shipper. No way to satisfy both of us. *lol*
But whichever end you chose, your story is extremely good to read and exiting and... just great. *lol*
Cya, Flutters
I finally found the time to read the last chapters and I'm glad I read them in a row, to be honest, because it is just sooo exciting!
I feel somehow it is a mistake that Claudia showed the neclace, and also that she is going to show the vial. But maybe inside there is some kind of memory and everybody will know that Snape is really innocent? *sigh*
Who knows?
You do. *lol*
So keep up your good work. You said you only had a few chapters left... so I'm hoping now that everything turns out to be a big mistake and that she will get back with Sev.
Too bad, two readers, one is Sirius/Claudia-shipper, the other one is Severus/Claudia-shipper. No way to satisfy both of us. *lol*
But whichever end you chose, your story is extremely good to read and exiting and... just great. *lol*
Cya, Flutters
This story is amazing. I love Severus and Claudia together. Keep going! I am so curious as to what's going to happen.
OMG, I can't believe that I didn't get to read any of your updates yesterday of all days! (Sorry I wasn't reviewing, by the way... my dad was using the phone line for his work...) Okay, before these latest chapters this fanfic was vying among my favorite five or six, but now this is THE top drama/angst story I've read. I'm seriously getting a little obsessed with new chapters. Since I haven't reviewed for a couple days, I'm going to try to keep this sorta kinda brief so that one, you don't have to listen to all my ramblings, and two, I get to do any mod'ing tonight ()... because I literally could comment on these last few chapters for the rest of time.
The part where Claudia asks Lupin to modify her memory... you couldn't have asked for a better time to go onto a new page of the thread. I was getting really, really, really anxious the whole time I was waiting for the next page to load so I could find out whether Lupin actually did it. Even though I knew he wouldn't! That's how convincing it was. And there are these moments all over the place that just make me shiver (even though I am in a relatively warm place right now!)... like the 'until the time was right' and when I realized that was a memory that Snape had left for her. The depiction of the child characters was terrific (I absolutely loved Hermione... makes me feel like I've got pre-HBP canon Hermione back again... and Harry... *shivers again*), and you're doing a brilliant job answering some of the questions we all want to have answered in Book Seven (R.A.B., new secret keeper for the Order, the degree of Ron and Hermione's involvement in the search for the Horcruxes, etc.). The bit with Snape appearing in the house was SO scary... I felt sure that he was going to attack Emma or somebody else. You're doing a great job keeping his loyalties ambiguous -- I still am rooting for Claudia to kill him, personally -- but you're keeping the question up in the air for a really long time; I'm impressed.
In short: you are AMAZING! The suspense is seriously killing me... pleeeeease post more updates soon! (I'll be out of here in fifteen minutes, so hurry or else I'll be back here this time tomorrow.) Major, major, major compliments to you!
So is Claudia going to go see the memory for herself now?
)... because I literally could comment on these last few chapters for the rest of time.The part where Claudia asks Lupin to modify her memory... you couldn't have asked for a better time to go onto a new page of the thread. I was getting really, really, really anxious the whole time I was waiting for the next page to load so I could find out whether Lupin actually did it. Even though I knew he wouldn't! That's how convincing it was. And there are these moments all over the place that just make me shiver (even though I am in a relatively warm place right now!)... like the 'until the time was right' and when I realized that was a memory that Snape had left for her. The depiction of the child characters was terrific (I absolutely loved Hermione... makes me feel like I've got pre-HBP canon Hermione back again... and Harry... *shivers again*), and you're doing a brilliant job answering some of the questions we all want to have answered in Book Seven (R.A.B., new secret keeper for the Order, the degree of Ron and Hermione's involvement in the search for the Horcruxes, etc.). The bit with Snape appearing in the house was SO scary... I felt sure that he was going to attack Emma or somebody else. You're doing a great job keeping his loyalties ambiguous -- I still am rooting for Claudia to kill him, personally -- but you're keeping the question up in the air for a really long time; I'm impressed.
In short: you are AMAZING! The suspense is seriously killing me... pleeeeease post more updates soon! (I'll be out of here in fifteen minutes, so hurry or else I'll be back here this time tomorrow.
) Major, major, major compliments to you! So is Claudia going to go see the memory for herself now?
Hi there,
I read one chapter before I went to bad last night, but I was too tired to answer, so sorry about that.
The other one I read this morning and I took my time to think about it because... well, I wasn't quite happy with Snape. *sigh*
The chapters still were great, extremely exciting and everything. But Snape... *sigh* I just feel that... well, since he loves Claudia passionately I wonder how in the world he could be like that. I mean, hey, threatening my child is just the thing to re-gain my trust after murdering a friend of mine...
He knows that she still loves him. He is blue about the whole thing. Why does he frighten her, why does he mock her, why, why, why?
He's bound to have a heart inside... *sigh*
So now she can't share the memory. And they will track him with the neclace. Godness, I hope they find out that he really is good BEFORE they kill him. *sigh*
This is just killing me, I need to know how the story end!!!
I'm glad you write your chapters that fast. I'd be dying for the next chapter if it you took you as long as it takes me to upload a new installment. *sigh*
Oh, and the emailaddress worked this time, I have no clue what went wrong yesterday...
So talk to you later,
Flutterflie
I read one chapter before I went to bad last night, but I was too tired to answer, so sorry about that.
The other one I read this morning and I took my time to think about it because... well, I wasn't quite happy with Snape. *sigh*
The chapters still were great, extremely exciting and everything. But Snape... *sigh* I just feel that... well, since he loves Claudia passionately I wonder how in the world he could be like that. I mean, hey, threatening my child is just the thing to re-gain my trust after murdering a friend of mine...
He knows that she still loves him. He is blue about the whole thing. Why does he frighten her, why does he mock her, why, why, why?
He's bound to have a heart inside... *sigh*
So now she can't share the memory. And they will track him with the neclace. Godness, I hope they find out that he really is good BEFORE they kill him. *sigh*
This is just killing me, I need to know how the story end!!!
I'm glad you write your chapters that fast. I'd be dying for the next chapter if it you took you as long as it takes me to upload a new installment. *sigh*
Oh, and the emailaddress worked this time, I have no clue what went wrong yesterday...
So talk to you later,
Flutterflie
Thanks to Jaime, Allie and Flutters for all your comments and thoughts.
Jaime: Thanks for reading it! I know it's long, but I hope it's entertaining!
Allie: hehehehe I knew you, of all people, would enjoy these chapters. But just wait, you haven't seen anything yet
Flutters: Yes my friend, we have all asked ourselves why why why why when it comes to Snape. How true to the story would I be if he all of a sudden was easy to read? And mind you, he did not directly threaten Emma. He just had to make Claudia quiet. And he has a heart. Anymore and I start to give stuff away. So...
Oh and I LOVED writing Hermione. She is fun to write! Well...it will be later today that I have the next chapter up. This one is a doozy! Thanks for reading all!
Jaime: Thanks for reading it! I know it's long, but I hope it's entertaining!
Allie: hehehehe I knew you, of all people, would enjoy these chapters. But just wait, you haven't seen anything yet
Flutters: Yes my friend, we have all asked ourselves why why why why when it comes to Snape. How true to the story would I be if he all of a sudden was easy to read? And mind you, he did not directly threaten Emma. He just had to make Claudia quiet. And he has a heart. Anymore and I start to give stuff away. So...
Oh and I LOVED writing Hermione. She is fun to write! Well...it will be later today that I have the next chapter up. This one is a doozy! Thanks for reading all!
Are you sure Claudia is not pregnant? Because she does vomit a lot lately...
More questions? No...
I think Sev is still on the good side and Claudia made an effort to show him... well, that she forgives him and wants him still. Least, that is my interpretation.
Pretty brave that was, facing Volders there. *shivers*
So if you keep up your pace, I won't have to wait ages for the next chapter, right? Please, please...
Flutterflie
More questions? No...
I think Sev is still on the good side and Claudia made an effort to show him... well, that she forgives him and wants him still. Least, that is my interpretation.
Pretty brave that was, facing Volders there. *shivers*
So if you keep up your pace, I won't have to wait ages for the next chapter, right? Please, please...
Flutterflie
Oh no Flutter! She is not pregnant! That is so funny you said that because I was re-reading it today, from beginning to end and realized I put a lot of vomiting in there. She is NOT pregnant. The first time, she was really drunk and was shocked by bad news.
The second time she was nervous and had just faced Voldemort, 12 DE and Severus. She had a right to blow chunks after that one!
I just know I vomit when nervous and really distraught. I just thought Claudia might too. hehehehe
As for your assumptions about Claudia and Severus...hmmm. I can not find anything either way that I can say without revieling too much.
As for more chapters...I am outlining the rest as I write this so, no...it won't be long.
Thanks for the replys!
Flutters...did you get my email?
Hehehe, I find Claudia's vomiting issue perfectly understandable! I definitely cannot tell you about being drunk or pregnant, but I also would get sick after facing Voldemort and twelve Death Eaters, for sure.
I really like the super-long chapter... I was waiting for the update all day (or most of the day, at least.... when I wasn't at the beach), so I was very excited to see the length. Unlike Flutter, however... I still believe that Snape is GUILTY! You've got two opposing readers here, I notice! I actually think that I'm probably wrong, but I'm in a bit of a Snape-hating mindset right now and I am determined to dislike him. (You will probably be relieved to know that I have given up on Claudia/Sirius, though -- now I think that Claudia will end up single.)
I definitely cannot tell you about being drunk or pregnant, but I also would get sick after facing Voldemort and twelve Death Eaters, for sure. I really like the super-long chapter... I was waiting for the update all day (or most of the day, at least.... when I wasn't at the beach
), so I was very excited to see the length. Unlike Flutter, however... I still believe that Snape is GUILTY! You've got two opposing readers here, I notice! I actually think that I'm probably wrong, but I'm in a bit of a Snape-hating mindset right now and I am determined to dislike him. (You will probably be relieved to know that I have given up on Claudia/Sirius, though -- now I think that Claudia will end up single.)| QUOTE |
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Haha, you're definitely starting to get to know your audience! I continue to await updates -- I feel a dramatic climax coming on.... Are you planning to write another fanfic when this one's complete? You really should, even if it's not about Claudia or whatever. Your story is incredibly well-plotted; you've got quite a gift for writing.
Weasley's Wedgies??! ROFL, your sense of humor rivals JKR's!! And I thought I had heard the best with U-No-Poo!
So I gather that Harry, Ron, and Hermione have managed to destroy one of the Horcruxes.... is that plot somehow going to merge with the whole thing between Claudia and Snape? No, you can't answer that. But I still wonder.
Yay, Lupin and Tonks are finally engaged! About time, too! Poor Claudia, though... still has no-one for the time being (until she looks at the memory, which definitely is the one that either proves Snape's guilt or innocence... continue having trouble determining which... grrrrr ). And poor Nick, feeling that his friend doesn't trust him.
Aha! I just figured it out! Claudia has to end up with Nick! I have solved the eternal 'who will Claudia's boyfriend be?' mystery!
(I told you I have no sense for romance! I'm afraid you're going to be subjected to these sorts of childish comments, though, if you choose to share your story with a teenage audience. )
I anxiously await further updates.
And I thought I had heard the best with U-No-Poo! So I gather that Harry, Ron, and Hermione have managed to destroy one of the Horcruxes.... is that plot somehow going to merge with the whole thing between Claudia and Snape? No, you can't answer that. But I still wonder.
Yay, Lupin and Tonks are finally engaged! About time, too!
Poor Claudia, though... still has no-one for the time being (until she looks at the memory, which definitely is the one that either proves Snape's guilt or innocence... continue having trouble determining which... grrrrr ). And poor Nick, feeling that his friend doesn't trust him. Aha! I just figured it out! Claudia has to end up with Nick! I have solved the eternal 'who will Claudia's boyfriend be?' mystery!
(I told you I have no sense for romance!
I'm afraid you're going to be subjected to these sorts of childish comments, though, if you choose to share your story with a teenage audience. )I anxiously await further updates.
Hey Allie,
I thought the same thing. *lol* With Claudia and Nick, hehe.
But I wouldn't like it, since I'm still Claudia/Severus-shipper.
However, I did gave up on Sirius returning. So if you're in for another Sirius/other charakter-ship, you'd better read some... *cough*... different story, too. *laugh*
And Snapelover,
yes, I did get your email. I was gonna answer you last night, but then I got caught up in a chat.. and, well... you guess what happened. So thank you. I did make the grammar changes and smoothened some other parts out, as you may already have noticed. The new chapter is up, but it's way down now... Don't post on Friday nights, I guess... *sigh*
In terms of capitalisation: I checked it and it's just the way Rowling uses it in the books, so I guess I'm not wrong after all...
Okay, and - finally - a comment to your story.
It seems Harry does overcome his grudge at Claudia, good. Locket destroyed, also good.
And yes, I figured she did find out about Snapes feelings the night before. So I'm still I hopeing for a happy ending. It is called "the love of a wizard", and not "the silly Muggle who was in love with two wizards and then ran off with a soldier" after all *lol*
Did I mention that I liked that "Sexy Severus Snape" part. Hehe. I could imagine his eyes at this point.
Okay, bye for now,
Flutterflie
I thought the same thing. *lol* With Claudia and Nick, hehe.
But I wouldn't like it, since I'm still Claudia/Severus-shipper.
However, I did gave up on Sirius returning. So if you're in for another Sirius/other charakter-ship, you'd better read some... *cough*... different story, too. *laugh*
And Snapelover,
yes, I did get your email. I was gonna answer you last night, but then I got caught up in a chat.. and, well... you guess what happened. So thank you. I did make the grammar changes and smoothened some other parts out, as you may already have noticed. The new chapter is up, but it's way down now... Don't post on Friday nights, I guess... *sigh*
In terms of capitalisation: I checked it and it's just the way Rowling uses it in the books, so I guess I'm not wrong after all...
Okay, and - finally - a comment to your story.
It seems Harry does overcome his grudge at Claudia, good. Locket destroyed, also good.
And yes, I figured she did find out about Snapes feelings the night before. So I'm still I hopeing for a happy ending. It is called "the love of a wizard", and not "the silly Muggle who was in love with two wizards and then ran off with a soldier" after all *lol*
Did I mention that I liked that "Sexy Severus Snape" part. Hehe. I could imagine his eyes at this point.
Okay, bye for now,
Flutterflie
I am loving these last few chapters. It is so great to see Severus happy and in love. Oh and I laughed out loud when I read that Harry, Ron, and Hermione had come in. Don't they knock? I can just imagine the looks on their faces when they saw Snape. Anyways, your story is amazing. Update soon!
Claudia and Severus back together. YAY! YAY! YAY!
Okay, the pensive is already there... Let's think... The kids aren't gonna hurt Sev... not really really. Harry is just incapable of killing, I'd say. So they'd probably rather force Sev to show them the memory... Hermione will persuade the others that Sev is good. Hehe.
Funny, I have a chapter with Harry running into Fin and Sev comming up. *lol* Next time we should write a fic together.
But there will be a final showdown... right? So they'd not be likely knowing he's good already? Well, I don't know. I will when I read the next chapters. *lol*
Cheers, Flutterflie
OMG, so many updates! Again, great chapters -- especially the last two, in my opinion. Now that I'm home again, I finally have time for long, proper reviews.... so here we go.
Chapter Thirty-Five
This is my favorite chapter thus far, in terms of description. The first paragraph really is very JKR-like (reminds me of a weird mix of the Yule Ball and Dumbledore's funeral, actually!), the bits with the 'fairies mingled into the flower arrangements' and the 'crimson and white flowers that were everywhere a person was not,' for example. Between that opening and the next paragraph about the portkey, the beginning of the chapter has a nice, light tone. The third paragraph (geez, all of this sounds really canon, when I'm thinking about it), reminds me vaguely of Harry's initial impression of the merpeople and his feelings while he was walking into Gringotts for the first time; you've done a good job capturing the 'outsider's perspective' on the wizarding world, if you will. The perspective is probably what makes the chapter most interesting for me -- like how Harry says that every year he finds himself making fewer and fewer ignorant statements about the wizarding world (when he's talking to Ron about giants in GoF), Claudia seems to be gaining quite a bit of familiarity with the society. Even though this scene is not exactly action-packed (and I tend to be a rather action-oriented reader), it's a nice little interlude between the fight scenes... and I expect that the wedding will be as such in Book Seven. I agree with a lot of the Book Seven theories that you seem to be interweaving into your plot, incidentally.
Chapter Thirty-Six
This chapter is getting a little bit more into the action/scary scenes that I like. I was creeped out when Claudia heard someone saying her name in her ear, for example, and when I get creeped out while reading a story, it's a good sign. I actually had to turn on nearly all the lights in my house while I was reading the 'Horcruxes' chapter of HBP because I was reading it at night and I got scared... and that wasn't even the really scary climax! Anyway.... enough of my rambling about my idiosyncracies.... I wonder what these dreams are all about? Is she having prophetic dreams or something like Harry does? 'Shapes of people reaching out to her....' I'm going to keep thinking on it, because I've got a nasty feeling that you're dropping 'anvil-sized hints' right and left and I'm just not picking up on all of them. Oh wow, I'm re-reading this chapter now as I'm writing the review, and I totally forgot that Claudia had agreed to join Voldemort! I think I missed commenting on that with Chapter Thirty-Four... hmm.... well, to borrow Lucius Malfoy's words, I think she's either very brave or very foolish. Not a risk that I would be keen to take, anyway! Ooh... I like the whole bit with Lily Potter that you've added in here! Makes Snape look almost like a good guy, trying to save someone who he sorta kinda hated because he admired her... or maybe he didn't hate her... or maybe I'm just confusing myself...
Chapter Thirty-Seven
Okay, this is officially the chapter during which I started getting that really climactic feeling. Happened in the 'Sectumsempra' chapter in HBP.... grrrr... I hope we're not getting too close to the end here! Starts out relaxed, though... good beginning for a tension-inducing chapter (particularly since I got left with that awful cliffhanger... I read the bit where Harry, Ron, and Hermione burst into the house with their wands out before you put up Chapter Thirty-Eight). Nice romance scene for Claudia and Snape... I'm sort of catching onto this ship a teensy bit, though I still think that Claudia lost a golden opportunity with Sirius. And I am not turning ship-traitor, even though I have an idea that Claudia's not going to run off with any other guy at this point! Actually... I think the story is going to end with Snape's death. That would be sort of morbid, after all the building-up of his character. Anyway.... I like seeing Claudia try to reason with Snape -- courageous move, if you ask me, because he strikes me as a pretty inflexible person -- but it seems that Snape is sort of listening.... yeah, he's definitely a good guy in this story. Although I remain confident that he's guilty in HBP. Now I just want to see what's in that memory... it'll be the one that proves his innocence, I'm sure of it.
Chapter Thirty-Eight
Aha! The brilliant chapter of this set! (This one was my favorite chapter of the four, if you haven't noticed.) So much backstory, great characterization of Harry and Hermione in particular... reminds me of the chapter 'The Cave' in HBP. I can't believe that Harry is making motions to trust Snape -- maybe he's decided to go along with Dumbledore's instincts or something? I still don't understand why Snape acts so hostile towards the trio, though, since he's about to show them the memory that proves they're on the same side. All the same, we're finally reaching the Great Merge between all of the suplots -- Claudia and Snape, Harry and the Horcruxes, Draco, Narcissa, Lily, etc. Is the Final Battle going to take place in your story? And on whose side will Claudia fight, if she and Snape are now both acting as spies for the Order? Okay, so now it's time for me to make my theories about this memory (since I haven't done any theories in a while)... so I'm sure that it's going to prove that Dumbledore asked Snape to kill him or something. A conversation between Snape and Dumbledore, perhaps? Or something between Snape and Voldemort? Another question -- how old is this memory? Are we going to see a reason why Dumbledore trusts Snape that's not as lame as the whole business with the prophecy in HBP? Now I seriously need more updates! Keep it up!
P.S. I'm going to read your fanfic tonight, Flutterflie! I hope you'll forgive me if I don't do a chapter-by-chapter review of the whole thing thus far, though... this one took me forty-five minutes, so I'd probably be working for hours, hehe. Once I've read the beginning, I'll be able to do lengthier comments.
Chapter Thirty-Five
This is my favorite chapter thus far, in terms of description. The first paragraph really is very JKR-like (reminds me of a weird mix of the Yule Ball and Dumbledore's funeral, actually!), the bits with the 'fairies mingled into the flower arrangements' and the 'crimson and white flowers that were everywhere a person was not,' for example. Between that opening and the next paragraph about the portkey, the beginning of the chapter has a nice, light tone. The third paragraph (geez, all of this sounds really canon, when I'm thinking about it), reminds me vaguely of Harry's initial impression of the merpeople and his feelings while he was walking into Gringotts for the first time; you've done a good job capturing the 'outsider's perspective' on the wizarding world, if you will. The perspective is probably what makes the chapter most interesting for me -- like how Harry says that every year he finds himself making fewer and fewer ignorant statements about the wizarding world (when he's talking to Ron about giants in GoF), Claudia seems to be gaining quite a bit of familiarity with the society. Even though this scene is not exactly action-packed (and I tend to be a rather action-oriented reader), it's a nice little interlude between the fight scenes... and I expect that the wedding will be as such in Book Seven. I agree with a lot of the Book Seven theories that you seem to be interweaving into your plot, incidentally.
Chapter Thirty-Six
This chapter is getting a little bit more into the action/scary scenes that I like. I was creeped out when Claudia heard someone saying her name in her ear, for example, and when I get creeped out while reading a story, it's a good sign. I actually had to turn on nearly all the lights in my house while I was reading the 'Horcruxes' chapter of HBP because I was reading it at night and I got scared... and that wasn't even the really scary climax! Anyway.... enough of my rambling about my idiosyncracies....
I wonder what these dreams are all about? Is she having prophetic dreams or something like Harry does? 'Shapes of people reaching out to her....' I'm going to keep thinking on it, because I've got a nasty feeling that you're dropping 'anvil-sized hints' right and left and I'm just not picking up on all of them. Oh wow, I'm re-reading this chapter now as I'm writing the review, and I totally forgot that Claudia had agreed to join Voldemort! I think I missed commenting on that with Chapter Thirty-Four... hmm.... well, to borrow Lucius Malfoy's words, I think she's either very brave or very foolish. Not a risk that I would be keen to take, anyway! Ooh... I like the whole bit with Lily Potter that you've added in here! Makes Snape look almost like a good guy, trying to save someone who he sorta kinda hated because he admired her... or maybe he didn't hate her... or maybe I'm just confusing myself...Chapter Thirty-Seven
Okay, this is officially the chapter during which I started getting that really climactic feeling. Happened in the 'Sectumsempra' chapter in HBP.... grrrr... I hope we're not getting too close to the end here! Starts out relaxed, though... good beginning for a tension-inducing chapter (particularly since I got left with that awful cliffhanger... I read the bit where Harry, Ron, and Hermione burst into the house with their wands out before you put up Chapter Thirty-Eight
). Nice romance scene for Claudia and Snape... I'm sort of catching onto this ship a teensy bit, though I still think that Claudia lost a golden opportunity with Sirius. And I am not turning ship-traitor, even though I have an idea that Claudia's not going to run off with any other guy at this point! Actually... I think the story is going to end with Snape's death. That would be sort of morbid, after all the building-up of his character. Anyway.... I like seeing Claudia try to reason with Snape -- courageous move, if you ask me, because he strikes me as a pretty inflexible person -- but it seems that Snape is sort of listening.... yeah, he's definitely a good guy in this story. Although I remain confident that he's guilty in HBP. Now I just want to see what's in that memory... it'll be the one that proves his innocence, I'm sure of it. Chapter Thirty-Eight
Aha! The brilliant chapter of this set! (This one was my favorite chapter of the four, if you haven't noticed.
) So much backstory, great characterization of Harry and Hermione in particular... reminds me of the chapter 'The Cave' in HBP. I can't believe that Harry is making motions to trust Snape -- maybe he's decided to go along with Dumbledore's instincts or something? I still don't understand why Snape acts so hostile towards the trio, though, since he's about to show them the memory that proves they're on the same side. All the same, we're finally reaching the Great Merge between all of the suplots -- Claudia and Snape, Harry and the Horcruxes, Draco, Narcissa, Lily, etc. Is the Final Battle going to take place in your story? And on whose side will Claudia fight, if she and Snape are now both acting as spies for the Order? Okay, so now it's time for me to make my theories about this memory (since I haven't done any theories in a while)... so I'm sure that it's going to prove that Dumbledore asked Snape to kill him or something. A conversation between Snape and Dumbledore, perhaps? Or something between Snape and Voldemort? Another question -- how old is this memory? Are we going to see a reason why Dumbledore trusts Snape that's not as lame as the whole business with the prophecy in HBP? Now I seriously need more updates! Keep it up!P.S. I'm going to read your fanfic tonight, Flutterflie! I hope you'll forgive me if I don't do a chapter-by-chapter review of the whole thing thus far, though... this one took me forty-five minutes, so I'd probably be working for hours, hehe.
Once I've read the beginning, I'll be able to do lengthier comments.
Seriously Allie, you are too good to me. I can't believe you wrote al that! here are SOME answers to SOME of your questions/thoughts etc.
Chapter 35
Thank you for liking this chapter. I really was rather bored writing it, and I felt it came across. OOpps. But..hey...if you liked it...
Chapter 36
Perhaps I ma leaving anvil sized hints?!? No...maybe not anvil sized, but perhaps hints?? I know...not a lot about Claudia "offering" Voldemort her services. She does it to be with Severus by the way. Just to answer MY personal feelings about the Lily thing: He did not love her. Not like narcissa or Clauida. In the REAL HP, I believe he had a thing for her, but was more interested in competing with James than actually loving Lily. My opinion.
Chapter 37
I love teh romance scenes between them. They are both people who have lost so much. Both lived alone and isolated for a long time and they see a bit of themselves in each other. She is a strong woman, which I would expect no less from Severus Snape. And vice versa for Claudia. She can reason with him becuse she knows she can. he does listen to her and he trusts her.
Chapter 38
He is nasty to them because he simply doesn't like them. Actually, I feel he may like hermione had she picked different friends. She has the qualities he respects. Hense, his comment about her being the only one who could undestand anyway. Which...is true. It has been very dificult to merge the cannon plots/sub-plots with my plots. What a tangled web we weave... Yes, the final battle will take place in this story. You will have to wait to see the memory for the next installment. Which...is written already and I am Beta-ing it right now. Adding a few other details I missed and I will post it asap.
I am a little upset that no one, as of yet, has commented on the fact that gryback is dead and the whole beheading thing...I thought it was nice and gruesome!
So...thanks agian Allie for taking the time to review in such a fantastic manner. really...I am touched you care so much to put so much effort inton my little story here. I hope I don't let you down!
I can't believe you wrote al that! here are SOME answers to SOME of your questions/thoughts etc.Chapter 35
Thank you for liking this chapter. I really was rather bored writing it, and I felt it came across. OOpps. But..hey...if you liked it...
Chapter 36
Perhaps I ma leaving anvil sized hints?!? No...maybe not anvil sized, but perhaps hints?? I know...not a lot about Claudia "offering" Voldemort her services. She does it to be with Severus by the way. Just to answer MY personal feelings about the Lily thing: He did not love her. Not like narcissa or Clauida. In the REAL HP, I believe he had a thing for her, but was more interested in competing with James than actually loving Lily. My opinion.
Chapter 37
I love teh romance scenes between them. They are both people who have lost so much. Both lived alone and isolated for a long time and they see a bit of themselves in each other. She is a strong woman, which I would expect no less from Severus Snape. And vice versa for Claudia. She can reason with him becuse she knows she can. he does listen to her and he trusts her.
Chapter 38
He is nasty to them because he simply doesn't like them. Actually, I feel he may like hermione had she picked different friends. She has the qualities he respects. Hense, his comment about her being the only one who could undestand anyway. Which...is true. It has been very dificult to merge the cannon plots/sub-plots with my plots. What a tangled web we weave... Yes, the final battle will take place in this story. You will have to wait to see the memory for the next installment. Which...is written already and I am Beta-ing it right now. Adding a few other details I missed and I will post it asap.
I am a little upset that no one, as of yet, has commented on the fact that gryback is dead and the whole beheading thing...I thought it was nice and gruesome!
So...thanks agian Allie for taking the time to review in such a fantastic manner. really...I am touched you care so much to put so much effort inton my little story here. I hope I don't let you down!
Good... I'm glad you didn't leave us with a cliffhanger today. *lol*
I really liked that you picked the conversation Hagrid overheard as a memory.
So now Harry has to trust Snape, doesn't he? Hm.. we're close to the end, I guess. Time for the final showdown! Yes!
Somehow I share Allie's feelings that Snape has to die in the end - although he deserves better.
edit: Don't ask me why, but while I stood at the stove, fixing lunch for my daughter, I suddenly remembered that I didn't write about Draco yet. Hehe. Cool, you suggest Snape is his dad.
He doesn't look like him, though. Funny thing is I've heard other people discussing the Narcissa-Severus-realtionship before. I never quite agreed, but hey, who knows? *lol* And Volders forcing Narcissa in a marriage with Lucius... wow... would he really do that to his faithful servant Snape? Probably...
Okay, let me get back to my pasta real quick...
Allie: you did a great job reviewing the last chapters. I wish I could do it like that. Just I don't have the time - my little one is at home today, she is ill. *sigh*
So you believe Snape is really really evil in "the real book"?
I'm glad you finally want to check out my fic, though. But it's - not yet - action-packed like this one. I definitely can't keep up with the tension Snapelover creates. *laugh*
Snapelover: we'll get some more people to read your fic, I already did a little advertising. *lol* I think it's not that people don't read it - just check the clicks you already have. Probably it is too long for most of the readers, and then they are lazy, too. Leaving a comment just seem to be a bother. *lol*
I liked what somebody else did: I'll only post the next chapter if you leave three comments. *lol*
Also, I think most kids want to read love stories about Hermione and company. *lol*
So we're probably writing the wrong stuff, hehe.
Don't worry... *hug*
Your fic is great and people will take the time to read it once they are hooked like Allie and me.
Cheers, Flutters
I really liked that you picked the conversation Hagrid overheard as a memory.
So now Harry has to trust Snape, doesn't he? Hm.. we're close to the end, I guess. Time for the final showdown! Yes!
Somehow I share Allie's feelings that Snape has to die in the end - although he deserves better.
edit: Don't ask me why, but while I stood at the stove, fixing lunch for my daughter, I suddenly remembered that I didn't write about Draco yet. Hehe. Cool, you suggest Snape is his dad.
He doesn't look like him, though. Funny thing is I've heard other people discussing the Narcissa-Severus-realtionship before. I never quite agreed, but hey, who knows? *lol* And Volders forcing Narcissa in a marriage with Lucius... wow... would he really do that to his faithful servant Snape? Probably...
Okay, let me get back to my pasta real quick...
Allie: you did a great job reviewing the last chapters.
I wish I could do it like that. Just I don't have the time - my little one is at home today, she is ill. *sigh*So you believe Snape is really really evil in "the real book"?
I'm glad you finally want to check out my fic, though. But it's - not yet - action-packed like this one. I definitely can't keep up with the tension Snapelover creates. *laugh*
Snapelover: we'll get some more people to read your fic, I already did a little advertising. *lol* I think it's not that people don't read it - just check the clicks you already have. Probably it is too long for most of the readers, and then they are lazy, too. Leaving a comment just seem to be a bother. *lol*
I liked what somebody else did: I'll only post the next chapter if you leave three comments. *lol*
Also, I think most kids want to read love stories about Hermione and company. *lol*
So we're probably writing the wrong stuff, hehe.
Don't worry... *hug*
Your fic is great and people will take the time to read it once they are hooked like Allie and me.
Cheers, Flutters
YAY!
I was gonna post tomorrow, but I just read over it and like it so much I need to reply right now. YAY Pettigrew to kill Nagini, hehe. Whose side is Snape really on, hehe? The good one, yes!
Severus is having a lot of sex lately...
Okay, you've got five horcruxes taken care of, more or less. So now I really wonder... well, if the both of us think alike and you will take the direction with the sixth horcrux I will... I guess you'll have your chapters up before I do - as always, hehe. But still, it will be interesting for me.
But I bet you have the same idea. *lol*
Oh, I love the way you described Wormtail and the way Sev treats him. Serves him right!
I think this one was one of my favourite chapters. Yes, definitely.
Cheers, Flutters
I was gonna post tomorrow, but I just read over it and like it so much I need to reply right now. YAY Pettigrew to kill Nagini, hehe. Whose side is Snape really on, hehe? The good one, yes!
Severus is having a lot of sex lately...
Okay, you've got five horcruxes taken care of, more or less. So now I really wonder... well, if the both of us think alike and you will take the direction with the sixth horcrux I will... I guess you'll have your chapters up before I do - as always, hehe. But still, it will be interesting for me.
But I bet you have the same idea. *lol*
Oh, I love the way you described Wormtail and the way Sev treats him. Serves him right!
I think this one was one of my favourite chapters. Yes, definitely.
Cheers, Flutters
Hey, we've finally seen the memory! I've had a feeling that Snape was going to turn out to be innocent as of late... or as innocent as murderers come, anyway. It's good to see the proof, though. And I'm pleased that Harry is starting to act more accepting of Snape, because that remained the major barrier that the pair of them would have to overcome. It sounds as though Snape's acting a little more respectful towards Harry, too... though I continue to fear that such an outcome will never come to pass in canon. Draco will come around, maybe (you seem to be capturing his guilt, I think) ... although the similarities between Snape and Voldemort are so uncanny that they almost seem like the same person. But I digress.
Claudia's actually been reminding me of Dumbledore a bit.... strikes me as a very trusting person, I like her. She reminds me of someone else, too, but I just can't put my finger on it... don't even know if the person I'm thinking from comes from canon or fanfic... but someone else who made some sort of weird sacrifice for someone they loved, the way Claudia "joined" Voldemort's side...
So now Wormtail's out to kill Nagini? This is an interesting turn... and Dumbledore's told Snape about the Horcruxes... hmm. That would be really ironic if it happened in canon - if Harry (and Ron and Hermione) and Snape were the only people who knew about the Horcruxes. Especially if Snape really were on Voldemort's side, so Snape was working to protect the Horcruxes while the trio were trying to get rid of them.
What else.....?
Oh yeah, the debt! Snape says that Draco is indebted to him, and he hopes he never has to call on the debt. I wonder how powerful debt is in the wizarding world... I gather that it's relatively powerful (in this story, at least), if Wormtail is trying to pass information to Lupin to repay Harry. Maybe Snape will have to call on the debt... which would definitely put the Malfoy family in a strange position, if Draco wound up destroying a Horcrux or something on Snape's orders. Maybe the debt is coming back... or maybe it isn't... or maybe I'm overthinking things entirely.
Overall, very good updates - some of my favorite chapters in this story. I'm looking forward to the climactic ending!
And I sent Chapter Two back to you earlier this evening, by the way...
It's good to see the proof, though. And I'm pleased that Harry is starting to act more accepting of Snape, because that remained the major barrier that the pair of them would have to overcome. It sounds as though Snape's acting a little more respectful towards Harry, too... though I continue to fear that such an outcome will never come to pass in canon. Draco will come around, maybe (you seem to be capturing his guilt, I think) ... although the similarities between Snape and Voldemort are so uncanny that they almost seem like the same person. But I digress. Claudia's actually been reminding me of Dumbledore a bit.... strikes me as a very trusting person, I like her. She reminds me of someone else, too, but I just can't put my finger on it... don't even know if the person I'm thinking from comes from canon or fanfic... but someone else who made some sort of weird sacrifice for someone they loved, the way Claudia "joined" Voldemort's side...
So now Wormtail's out to kill Nagini? This is an interesting turn... and Dumbledore's told Snape about the Horcruxes... hmm. That would be really ironic if it happened in canon - if Harry (and Ron and Hermione) and Snape were the only people who knew about the Horcruxes. Especially if Snape really were on Voldemort's side, so Snape was working to protect the Horcruxes while the trio were trying to get rid of them.
What else.....?
Oh yeah, the debt! Snape says that Draco is indebted to him, and he hopes he never has to call on the debt. I wonder how powerful debt is in the wizarding world... I gather that it's relatively powerful (in this story, at least), if Wormtail is trying to pass information to Lupin to repay Harry. Maybe Snape will have to call on the debt... which would definitely put the Malfoy family in a strange position, if Draco wound up destroying a Horcrux or something on Snape's orders.
Maybe the debt is coming back... or maybe it isn't... or maybe I'm overthinking things entirely. Overall, very good updates - some of my favorite chapters in this story. I'm looking forward to the climactic ending!
And I sent Chapter Two back to you earlier this evening, by the way...
You are too good to me Allie! Thanks also to Flutters...always so good with the theories you are..... And yeah, you and I write a lot alike, different tone though. But our minds think alike. pretty neat! We will probably end our stories so close to the same way, people will read them and think we colaborated!
Oh...what a good idea....
And yeah, you and I write a lot alike, different tone though. But our minds think alike. pretty neat! We will probably end our stories so close to the same way, people will read them and think we colaborated!Oh...what a good idea....
Hiya Snapelover!
I've made a start and read the first three chapters today and I have to say I'm very impressed with your writing style! It's very smoothe and elegant, very easy to read! The story so far looks like it will shape up into an interesting plot, so I'm looking forward to getting further into it. It's just time for me these days, but I will definately make the effort! Well done Snapelover!!
I've made a start and read the first three chapters today and I have to say I'm very impressed with your writing style! It's very smoothe and elegant, very easy to read! The story so far looks like it will shape up into an interesting plot, so I'm looking forward to getting further into it.
It's just time for me these days, but I will definately make the effort! Well done Snapelover!!
Eek, there's a twist in the plot... DIE, RON, DIE!!! Okay... ignore my... erm... strange behavior. I've just spent fifteen minutes getting to this page (I've got nine VTM windows open in my browser ) and I'm going slightly nutty trying to get to the updates. Anyway....
If Ron was injured while searching for the Horcruxes, how are the people at St. Mungo's going to know how to cure him? I mean, if the Horcruxes are protected by very dangerous Dark magic... will the Healers be familiar with that sort of thing, considering the scope of Voldemort's powers? I don't think so... I think Snape is going to have to come around and save the day - thus proving that he's on the right side. And I feel pretty sure that Harry and Hermione are going to be okay - though of course, it's possible that you're about to throw another gigantic curveball and my confidence is misplaced.
I just noticed how I have a tendency to concentrate my attention on the back half of the chapters when I review. So to give comments on the beginning of this update... I wonder whether Tonks and Mrs. Weasley are starting to get suspicious about Claudia's secretly ongoing relationship with Snape. Tonks is definitely picking up on her moods well enough - if Claudia were my friend, I'd definitely think that something was up right about now. Or, maybe I only say that because I know that something is up.
We shall see.... I am sooooo excited to read the end... now that you've promised you'll write another fanfic!!
) and I'm going slightly nutty trying to get to the updates. Anyway....If Ron was injured while searching for the Horcruxes, how are the people at St. Mungo's going to know how to cure him? I mean, if the Horcruxes are protected by very dangerous Dark magic... will the Healers be familiar with that sort of thing, considering the scope of Voldemort's powers? I don't think so... I think Snape is going to have to come around and save the day - thus proving that he's on the right side.
And I feel pretty sure that Harry and Hermione are going to be okay - though of course, it's possible that you're about to throw another gigantic curveball and my confidence is misplaced. I just noticed how I have a tendency to concentrate my attention on the back half of the chapters when I review.
So to give comments on the beginning of this update... I wonder whether Tonks and Mrs. Weasley are starting to get suspicious about Claudia's secretly ongoing relationship with Snape. Tonks is definitely picking up on her moods well enough - if Claudia were my friend, I'd definitely think that something was up right about now. Or, maybe I only say that because I know that something is up. We shall see.... I am sooooo excited to read the end... now that you've promised you'll write another fanfic!!
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