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Meggie
I vote that you don't get grounded anymore. I'm coming over right now to have a little talk with your dad about how it's just not a good idea to punish you so much because first of all punishment is not fun and second of all how are you supposed to keep your readers satisified if you can't get on the net!?!?! Hmm... I've never actually been grounded. My mum always prefered to just make me feel really guilty. Plus my dad let me get away with murder because I was a really good student. He also enjoys mixing cocktails in our kitchen and promotes that I try all of them. He's a pretty cool guy. And Flutters - You did horseback riding? Me too, for like eight years. Good times.

Cheers!
Meggie
fjkrs
HEY good news ya'll,
daddy let me off the hook! Said I learned my lesson (i was brooding and moping around the house for like 2 days) soooo YAY now the chap is almost done if your lucky it will be up by tomorrow PROMISE *holds up three fingers* scouts becuz really all I have left is....like 4 paragraphs and BAM all done and plus you all get some facsinating clues revealed for the future of my story biggrin.gif so! IM OFF TO READ OTHER FICS THEN TO FINISH MY OWN!
tchao

fjkrs (who is very happy now and will finish tonight! and celebrate with cookies the celebration food biggrin.gif)
lilredhed
cool, i cant wait, i am so excited to see what happens on the date...waiting with bating breath...
...ashley hope
Meggie
Yay! Finally a new chapter! I'm so glad that your dad let you off the hook. And yes, cookies are the celebration food - although ice cream is pretty awesome, too wink.gif
Anyhow, awesome chapter, mate! I'm so excited that Hermione and Draco finally got to go on their date biggrin.gif It was so romantic. And the first note was from Draco after all. Awww... Hehehe, and then Filch interrupting them. That was absolutely classic. Maybe one of these days they'll get some time alone, sans people bursting in on them all over the place rolleyes.gif

xoxo,
Meg
Flutterflie
Awe, the whole thing was so romantic. *sigh* I could picture the orbs and everything so well... Goodness, I would have loved such a date. smile.gif

The whole kissing. Hm... But now they will have some explaining to do, with the Hinkeys. *giggle*

You did a great job once again with the love scene, and I don't even have to mention Filch. I was on the edge of my seat! Seriously! I actually was gonna go and get me some chocolate, but I was stuck to my chair. Hehe.

Mrs. Norris. Ah, she deserves a kick. wink.gif

I am sure glad you are allowed to go on the internet again, and please stay a good kid, because we all are anxious to read the next chapter. smile.gif

Keep it up, girl! wink.gif

Flutters
Hermione_Resilda
Oo..I just..I don't know what to say except that..

I loved it!! It was so romantic, and you managed to keep Draco in character while still making him sweet. I love and hate reading fics like this because it makes me jealous of Hermione..lol. Hurry, hurry, hurry with the next chapie!
lilredhed
WOW that was amazing..and so romantic... you just made my whole day.. i love how they ran away from filch.l it was great..i was on the edge of my seat... you described ot so good, i knew exactly hoew she felt...amazing..
waiting for more
cheers
lilred
Meggie
Here is how awesome today has been: My French test was super easy and got out almost an hour early; My quantitative reasoning class got out twenty minutes early; I ate some delicious french fries; my mom sent me a package with twizzlers, hershey kisses, and banana bread; and fjkrs updated!!!

Moving on to the chapter... It was short, but good! Ah, Harry just won't leave Hermione alone, will he? And I'm not sure how into Lavender Ron really is. Heehee, he seemed a little troubled that someone else was giving Hermione hickies laugh.gif And Wood doesn't seem all that interested in Alicia, either. Hermione's quite a popular girl wink.gif Eh, Filch with a wand? Very curious. Maybe he just likes to pretend that he can use it, but I definitely think there's something more going on here dry.gif

Cheers,
Meg
pensievethought
wow that was a good chapter, keep up the good work. I loved the date . . . how beautiful and romantic. I loved it . . . . keep up the great work. Can't wait for your noext chapter . . . . omg Wood is bugging me i am like goooo away lol! Anyway, great job, keep writing. dry.gif smile.gif
Flutterflie
*lol*
Yeah, hickeys are really disturbing. dry.gif My advice: just make sure they are in a place nobody else sees them when you're dressed. *giggles*

So what is Filch up to? Hm... huh.gif He is a Death Eater, I know it! Filch is evil! He will take over Hogwarts. wink.gif

Your story always makes me laugh so much, really. tongue.gif What the heck is Harry thinking! He's not supposed to follow Hermy like that. He has Ginny! *complain*
But yes, I know. Without her teeth and the bushy hair, Hermy is quite handsome, of course the guys will go nuts over her. I just hope she gets over wood soon. wink.gif

Flutters

P.S.: Hope I didn't post too many smileys this time. biggrin.gif
Hermione_Resilda
New chapie! Well, it was awesome, but short, so I hope the next one will be long Aha, finally, something about Filch! When you mentioned him in the date, that he had a wand and shouting spells, I was thinking, 'did fjkrs forget that Filch is a squib?'. So, I'm glad you said something about him. So..is he Rudolphous Lestrange in disguise? And was Mrs.Norris really Lucius Malfoy transformed and he was mad because he didn't get a goodnight kiss from Narcissa?! Guess we'll have to find out.. tongue.gif
HaRRYPoTTeR FReaK
Oh! I am so eager for more! I've read this story so far and I think you are an excellent writer. A few run-on sentences and punctuation mistakes, but other than that, brilliant! I love everything about it! Please update soon!
Cheers,
Amanda
lilredhed
woooow, that was a great chapter.. i cant wait for more...
snuffles
*snuffles*
nope, it still doesnt work for me
grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr mad.gif
harryandginny
omg that was awesome i luv ur stroy but is that it i hope u could right more
good job though i luved it happy.gif
Kit-Kat Katie
harryandginny, please post more. I know I'm not a moderater, but the authers want some meat. They wanna know how to change it, to make it a-lot better so she can have you even more amazed. Sorry I'm telling out and all and I'm not a Moderater, but I think you were told before and just thought I'd remind you... Sorry...

Oh my friggin God! Fjkrs, you told us the impossible! You're getting so much better! I liked how Ron saw the hickey and kept stealing glances and how Harry didn't pay attention to what I call, The Filtch News. The Wand and all seemed very carefully planned and I think there will be some jealousy from Ron to Hermione... But I guess I'll just have to wait won't I?

Keep up the great work!

-Katie!
miridian
Hey jen! Goshkers! Haha I read the new chapter girl wowza. Like I asked you WHATS UP WITH FILCH?! haha You are doing so great and this storyrocks! I finally got a veritaserum name haha WHOO HOO so yeah. Keep up the great work!
cha cha cha CHARMIN muhahaha
Your best buddy!
fjkrs
HEY chickadee!
Yay you have a name on here! How are you liking it? 4 posts tongue.gif thats sad hehe wink.gif thanks for posting biggrin.gif If you need any help miridian just ask me and I see you stole my name (miridian) muhahaha thats ok lol
love ya much woman!
see ya sooooooon
MUAH
fjkrs
HaRRYPoTTeR FReaK
This is getting better and better! I can't wait to read about that competition of yours, fjkrs! And when, pray, is there going to be a Harry/Ginny romance/snog scene, huh? As you know, I am a very avid HO/GW shipper, and I'm not seeing much more than hand holding! Tisk, tisk, fjkrs! *lol* But post more anyway, okay?
Cheers,
Manda
Meggie
You make my day. Seriously. That was the most hilarious thing ever. Ugly Umbridge... Oh my. And Hermione's scarf. And Ron't fabulous storytelling abilities. Wow.
Heehee, I have a story that can compete. It's Harry Potter according to my friends who are not fans:
LAK: So is Katie still mad that she doesn't get to go to Scarf Boy with you?
Me: Who's Scarf Boy?
LAK: Yeah, he always wears that stupid scarf. And they play squidditch. Is that what it's called? Where they try to catch the little ball with wings?
DOM: The Snatch!
LAK: Yes!
Me: No!
LAK: I'll Potter your Harry.
Me: You sound like a rapist.
DOM: We should say that all the time. To people who are huge Harry Potter fans and will try to kill us.
LAK: Why does he wear that scarf, anyways?

Haha
Love always,
Meg
fjkrs
QUOTE
So is Katie still mad that she doesn't get to go to Scarf Boy with you?
Me: Who's Scarf Boy?
LAK: Yeah, he always wears that stupid scarf. And they play squidditch. Is that what it's called? Where they try to catch the little ball with wings?
DOM: The Snatch!
LAK: Yes!
Me: No!
LAK: I'll Potter your Harry.
Me: You sound like a rapist.
DOM: We should say that all the time. To people who are huge Harry Potter fans and will try to kill us.
LAK: Why does he wear that scarf, anyways?



Lmfao nice lol scarf boy hahaha oi the snatch lol oh my...dear that was wonderful thanks for sharing lol well thanks ya'll rock biggrin.gif
ill post more later bye Meg and Manda!
lots of loooove *heart*
fjkrs
bellatrixlestrange
Hi there,
Well, that was a funny chapter! tongue.gif I was giggling when Harry suggested that someone shoudl write a book about the trio's adventures. Aww, it was so nice of them to be all together as The Trio again!
So, yay! Good chapter, apart from grammatical errors. Do you have a beta? They might be able to skim over and spot any tiny errors you might make by accident. smile.gif
And, I found Meggie's little story funny. Hehehe. I laughed even harder in shock at this:
QUOTE
LAK: I'll Potter your Harry.
Me: You sound like a rapist.

Hilarious. laugh.gif

Anyway, fjkrs, please post more soon! I always check this thread for updates.
Cheers,
Bella. cool.gif
lilredhed
Meggie... i laughed so hard...
o, yea, the chapter... it was brilliant...very funny...very original
waiting for the next chapter
cheers
lilred ph34r.gif
I Love Dan Radcliffe
Great story... I read through it and I couldn't stop... It was too good! Please write more... I'm begging you!

I Love Dan Radcliffe - It's my name, but it's true.
HaRRYPoTTeR FReaK
Oh, I absolutely loved that chapter! Really heated, mate, I loved it! As to who Ginny sees, I have NO IDEA! When are you planning on posting more? And may I suggest Harry's bed for their new snogging place? *lol* Too bad you didn't write juicier stuff... *sigh* Oh well. Moving on...
Cheers,
Manda
P.S. Harry has "jet-black" hair, not "chocolate-brown".
fjkrs
Yep I will post the next part in about 5 minutes I wanna see who Meggie thinks it is wink.gif MUAHAHHAHA
k so IN FIVE EVERYBODY!
hehe
fjkrs
Meggie
ohmy.gif You were watching me read!?!? I feel so violated! Ha, just kidding laugh.gif I do that to people on my fic sometimes... Anyways, I think it's Draco and Hermione and they're not really fighting, Ginny just thinks they are 'cause she doesn't know about them yet tongue.gif Haha, I really have no idea. And may I suggest the Room of Requirement? I've found it quite useful in my past couple chapters... No one's supposed to be able to come in if you don't want them too wink.gif

Cheers!
Meg
HaRRYPoTTeR FReaK
Okay, Meggie's submitted a review. Now can we please MOVE IT ALONG?!?! *lol*
fjkrs
ITS UP! yay!!! I moved it along heck yes heheheh ok so read and review tell me what ya'll think biggrin.gif And also...im wondering if i should move the rating on this story up by adding as amanda would say "a juicy" part should i? i dont know.....
bye
fjkrs
HaRRYPoTTeR FReaK
Whoops. *sheepish grin* Looks like you posted it about half a second before I did! *lol* But Oliver Wood?! And what does he want the camera for?! And Ron thought that Wood was forcing Creevy to do ... other things, eh? Just like the Ron we know and love! *lol* But gosh, I've got to find out what two-faced Wood is up to! This story certainly taken a turn!
Cheers,
Manderz
bellatrixlestrange
Hi again,
Pheww! *waveshandatsideofface* it's getting HOT in here! That was so sweet with Harry and Ginny. wub.gif But lol with Colin. hehehe "close your eyes Colin!". tongue.gif
As to who is fighting, it could be anyone but I think that one could be Draco. Okay, well, I have 3 people in mind and either one could be fighting each other:
Draco
Hermione
Ron

Am I right? Probably not. I'm just guessing.
Anyway, please post more soon! I can't wait to see Slytherin asking for help! laugh.gif
Cheers,
Bella. cool.gif
bellatrixlestrange
Hi again,
Sorry but I was whisked away to do some chores before I finished my last post and I left the page up. Therefore, when the post went up it was like half an hour after I originally thought of the message. But, then *yay* you posted more. So I didn't realise till now that my last message doesn't make any sense. wink.gif smile.gif

OKAY- now for the right comments.
Wow! ohmy.gif I guess I was totally wrong with my guesses of who was fighting. Lol. I never thought Wood would be a bad guy. Hmm, maybe you're just tricking us...
But, what would he want to take pictures of? And why couldn't he just use magic to get Colin's camera or couldn't he even have asked nicely without being violent? So many questions and I need to know the answers!
So, please post more soon *offers you cupcakes as an incentive*.
Great chapter as usual. biggrin.gif
Cheers,
Bella. cool.gif
HaRRYPoTTeR FReaK
OH NO! How could you do that?!?!?! Harry - ! NO!!!!!!! Oh, no, fjkrs, why, why?! Harry belongs with Ginny, and Hermione belongs with Ron - err, I mean - Draco!! OH NO!!!! TAKE IT BACK!

Manderz
HermioneWeasley2
That was fab, imagine if Wood had a picture of that as well as Ron and Hermione, i wonder what Malfoy will think, lol, but i do agree with HaRRYPoTTeR FReaK Harry belongs to Ginny. Please update soon, i like reading this fanfiction. Can't wait to read about the interhouse tournement, should be good.

tongue.gif HermioneWeasley2. tongue.gif
Meggie
fjkrs, you are a crazy girl. I am amazed at everything you come up with... Hehe, Wood is evil - and taking pictures of Ron and Hermione? - and Harry kissed Hermione. Oh my. Well, I was definitely wrong about who was fighting, wasn't I? That's okay, I like this way better. Anyways, good chappies!

Cheers!
Meg
Meggie
laugh.gif Heehee, I was definitely laughing the entire time. Wow, camouflage and spy names - How thrilling! I love that Ron just lets Ginny push him around, it's excellent tongue.gif Hmm... I want to know what's up with the picture of Luna and why Wood's taking all the pictures anyways. Way to leave us with a cliffy!

xoxo,
Meggie
HermioneWeasley2
Oh wow, i liked that chapter, very James Bond. it made me laugh at the Hot Mamma Eagle bit, lol, that was funny, whats Wood up to though when hes taking pictures. Please update soon, i want to know what happens next, but will anything happen with Ron and one of Ginny's friends and what was Luna pointing to?

tongue.gif HermioneWeasley2. tongue.gif
Flutterflie
Awe, fjkrs, you'll need to PM me, so I don't keep missing your installments any longer! I feel so bad, I laughed all the time! *lol*
Ginny has most definitely been at the movie theatre too often. *giggles* But who'd blame her? She has her father's genes, right? I loved that whole James Bond stuff and Hot Mama Eagle, yeah!

I really wonder what's up with Wood, though. I just can't believe he's bad. I've been wondering whether there's something going on involving Polyjuice Potion. I mean, come on, Filch is using a wand.. yeah, right, and Volders is wearing purple undies! *giggle*

I have never heard about Home Ec classes, but I guess we had something similar at school. There was this class we learnt how to knit and sew and all that stuff, and we also had cooking classes. *lol*

Bye the way, I really enjoy reading your Ginny/Harry pieces. I was a little upset Hermy and Harry kissed, though, I am Ron/Hermy and Harry/Ginny shippper. But whatever? In your fic, everybody kisses everybody... which reminds me... you never told what happend when Lavender was alone with Professor Severus 'Sexy' Snape. *lol*

I'm glad you got back to writing, I really missed it! Keep it up, girl!

Flutters
I Love Dan Radcliffe
Hey,

Great story... could you please continue on with the Oliver Wood story with Hermione/Draco, Ron/Lavender, Harry/Ginny and Harry/Hermione. That'd be great... Anyway, I better go! Bye and keep writing!

I Love Dan Radcliffe - My name, but it's true
HaRRYPoTTeR FReaK
WHOA!!!! That was ... special ... You have GOT to post more soon, I want to see what they do on Monday, if you catch my drift...
~Manderz

EDIT: When you say, "Unexpected Love" you really mean it, don't you? Wow... I am totally speechless....
~Manderz

P.S.
snuffles
I'm so glad they're back! *lol* I can't get enough of it! tongue.gif
snuffles
snuffles
snuffles
*lol* I need psychiactric help...
Flutterflie
*giggles*
I am peeing my pants now, I can't stop laughing. Hilarious!
I was already in tears when I read "every student Snape had ever had"... *giggles*
Bad Nadja, a dirty mind you have. *lol*

Off to bed with me and my smutty thoughts. wink.gif

Flutters
bellatrixlestrange
Hey again,
Hm, well thanks for answering my questions, I suppose they were pretty stupid to ask. unsure.gif

Did you enjoy your cupcakes? Lol.

Well, I just read all of the chapters that you posted since yesterday and they were all really good. biggrin.gif When I read the second one I was thinking "How can they not understand why Wood has the camera?". I thought it might have been a bit more obvious than that. Hmm, maybe they're just a bit slow on the uptake.

Anyway, very nice as usual! And yes, I did almost pee my pants with the 007 Weasley, camouflage thing. Hehehe and when Ginny made Ron sing a theme song. laugh.gif And Ron is loved by the girls! I suppose I wouldn't mind if he took his shirt off in front of me, though. biggrin.gif

Post more soon! *I've run out of cupcakes but I have brownies!* tongue.gif
Now you may eat my delicious brownies as you write up more. hehehe.
Cheers,
Bella. cool.gif
fjkrs
BROWNIES!!!!!! *falls out of chair from excitment!* MUHAHAHA
Bella:
QUOTE
Hmm, maybe they're just a bit slow on the uptake.
LMFAO oh my! Hahaha *giggles* Well i suppose they know what he will do with the camera just not WHY haha oh dear I'll be sure to include that when Hermione does figure out what happens wink.gif you'll see. Now! Im making the next chapter as we speak AND EAT BROWNIES so it should be up before I go to bed....well maybe....*holds out hand* FIRST YOU MUST BRIBE ME WITH MORE BROWNIES lol jk

now im off! with these here brownies! muhahahaha i wub.gif brownies hehe

ok well now that im off.......
BYE
fjkrs
wow i totaly effed up this color like 8 times lol
HermioneWeasley2
That was beautiful in a bad way. The beautiful bit was the way Hermione said all that stuff to Draco, you wrote that really really well, but the bad part was that Draco stuffed up, Hermione poored out her heart to him and he turned her away. I hope they get back together though. It would be great if they did and Harry doesn't mean a thing to Hermione, only as a friend, Draco should be able to realise this, but it may take him some time. But i'm wondering what's going to happen if Draco tells anyone about Hermione and Harry, will Ginny find out, what will happen to their relationship. They should stay together, my mind is wondering now, so i'll settle on telling you this, it was a great chapter, please update soon.

tongue.gif HermioneWeasley2. tongue.gif
Meggie
Good lord, you update more than anyone I know! Where does it all come from? Anyways, excellent chapters, although the bit about Lav and Snape was a bit... interesting. Not quite sure what to think about that. I thought you did a fabulous job on the last one, though. You really captured the idea that Hermione was genuinely sorry and Draco just wasn't responding. Aww, I hope everything works out.

xoxo,
Meg
I Love Dan Radcliffe
Great. But I'd like you to write more this is really going somewhere. There's so much tension and suspense for me I can't stand it!! Please hurry witht he next chapter!

I Love Dan Radcliffe - My name, but it's true

bellatrixlestrange
Hey again,
*bawls uncontrollably* waaaah! *snif* that was so sad! You have made me very sad! sad.gif I felt like crying so much! Poor Hermy! It was so sad when she was watching the stars and thinking of Draco, rocking back and forth.
And it was so sweet of Hermione to express exactly how she felt (finally). But it was heartbreaking (not only for Hermione) that Draco didn't say anything in return. sad.gif

But it was so passionate on the sofa. wub.gif I had to loosen my collar, it was getting a bit hot in here. (Well, not really, I'm not wearing a collared shirt, but you get what I mean.)

Great chapter as usual (and as usual I tell you that again)! biggrin.gif
I don't think I have anything to bribe you with. Well, at least I've eaten all the brownies. How about toffees? I have lots of toffee lollies! *waves the toffees under your nose* Come on, write another chapter, you know you want to..... tongue.gif

Cheers,
Bella. cool.gif
fjkrs
FYI hehe
Ill be posting next chapter tonight hehehehehe Very revealing chappie well...sorta...foreshadowing chap so pay attn hehehehe
well anyways
bye now!
fjkrs
Flutterflie
Missed two chapters again and then you'll update tonight. Oh my, where do you get all the time? Wish I could take my time sitting down writing, I have tons of ideas, but four loads of laundry need to be ironed, not to mention my man's birthday party wants to be prepared... awe...

Meggie, hehe, the Snape/Lavender chapter was for ME only. wink.gif *giggle*

Okay, review... erm... it seems Hermione finally learns how it is to really feel love - with all ups and downs you get. I am sure glad she told Draco about the kiss - definitely something I'd have done, too.

You know, I didn't get that camera part, I guess you'll have to hit me. Not that I have blonde roots or anything, but - sorry - I just didn't get it. Is wood the fotographer of the "Playmates 2006" calender? Maybe I am stupid... hm...

I don't really know what to tell you about the last two installments. Besides I hope that Hermy and Draco will make up somehow. Hm... and another hair orgasm, maybe? *giggles*

Glad you'll bring the next part online tonight, maybe I can take a break from ironing then...

Flutters
cloe101
You said tonight well we're waiting.*Taps her foot and looks at her watch.*And waiting.*Looks at her watch again*.hurry i cant stant to wait for something that i know will be good. I love this story.I have been reading it sence the start i just never replyed.I have been working on my ff and never really had the time.Where do you come up with this stuff, it's great. cool.gif Keep up the good work.Your fan always.hehe biggrin.gif
I Love Dan Radcliffe
I agree *lol*, but don't worry I'll wait. Hurry with it thought i want to see what happens this is so juicy *lol*! please hurry!

I Love Dan Radcliffe - My name, but it's true
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