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Buckbeak rules
Sorry i've been gone for so long but i'm back and its all your fault wink.gif in a good way thou!

Marvelous work on this, brilliant really! and YAY they are back together! the greenleaf detention was hilarious!!! awesome work once again! cant wait for more!

*BR*
fjkrs
Hey guys thanks so very much for the reviews. I'm pleased to see the chapters are enjoyable. <3
So this is just a quick whoop de whoop update about the progress of the next installment.
It's coming a long fine. It's funny because this fic could have gone eight different ways (all dramatic of course) what with amnesia and more black mailing and secret sisters but I think the way it's gone is quite good too. It's a bit repetitive...themeatically because there have several allusions along the way pointing at this particular direction. But blah. Anyways...I'm chock full of ideas and the next chapter should be up any day now. biggrin.gif

So thank you all. :lovelovelovelove:
Okay I'm done blathering. I actually have to go see Panic at the Disco now. xD haha! Yay I'm super excited... >.>;
fjkrs
lisasnape
Hi, I just read An Unexpected Love and I loved it. It took about 3 days because I had to read it in increments, but I was on pins and needle waiting to see what happened. I really like your take on the Hermione/Draco relationship-lots of tension and emotion. Your so creative and I really like the long chapters and appreciate all the work that must go into them. Of course I especially like the steamy chapters with H/D. And also the pictures are great. Please keep writing!
fjkrs
Quick update. I did not fall ill with some illness I've just been on the fence about whether or not to post what I've written. Basically I'm in a bit of a fix here because every different take on the next chapter I write leads to a huge amount of ramifications (plot and length wise). I'm trying to work it out so that this fic doesn't drag on but I've decided I cannot compromise my ideas so I will be posting what I originally wanted.
I haven't forgotten or avoided, I've actually been working super hard to work it all out but you know being a senior has been taking some of my free time. I'm at school right now as a matter of fact..yes two hours after the bell....heh, I'm rambling. D:
ANYWAYS: I can't update tonight because I have a night class and I won't be home until much later but sometime tomorrow or Saturday there will indeed be a new installment.
I want to thank all my readers, new and old, for sticking with me. You guys are the BEST EVER.

Okay. Well just a little bit of info in case anyone was wondering.
Hopefully this is good news to you but if that didn't do the trick here is some undeniably better news: Planning a sequel. Yay.
fjkrs
Updated!

I found this really great icon that fits the story so well that I added it to the first post!
IPB Image
I'm still reformatting and not nearly done, I have a LOT of editing to still do so it'll be messed up for a while.

Anyways hope you guys liked the update!

Okay bye
fjkrs
ChannelingGinny
Yea! You're back! This was a great chapter and I'm really looking forward to what Greenleaf has in store for Skeeter! Please don't leave us hanging as long!

smile.gif CG
lisasnape
"Snog, snog, snoggity, snogging! We like to snog. Snog all day, snog all night.”

Oh, I loved that chapter! It was so unbelievably funny; my quotation of your writing says it all.

This relationship is really growing now that there is another person(Prof. Greenleaf) that knows about it and Hermione and Draco are confronted with the idea that they will have to go "public" eventually if they really want to give this a go.

I'm avidly awaiting the play. I get the feeling spark are going to fly!

Great, great job! laugh.gif

Lisa
meganx
I NEED MORE THIS IS AMAZING I NEVER USED TO LIKE FANFICS UNTILL I REED THIS ONE DRACO MALFOYY IS SO HOT wub.gif heart.gif

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Buckbeak rules
Great work!!! Love it! absolutely hilarious, i can't wait for the play, wonderful idea! Your fic is the only reason i come here anymore. So post more soon!!! Pretty please with a cherry on top!!! biggrin.gif
fjkrs
Oh gosh.
Thank you so much for the feedback. <3

Basically I am having the absolute craziest week of my life, okay, that's a slight exaggeration, and it's only crazier tomorrow so I will be unable to post until Saturday night.
I'm sorry. D:

But Saturday night it will be!!!

Thanks for hanging in there.
fjkrs
Updated.

Gtg to bed right now but I'll edit this later to say more.
Quick pic of theater:
Here

Hope you all enjoy!

Okay bye,
fjkrs
Buckbeak rules
Ah great work!!! Poor Hermione! Can't wait for some more!
hot-for-harry
Oh I can't wait for the next installment! I loved how you had Draco and Hermione say lines to each other that sounded like Shakespeare but weren't meant for the play. You are such a good writer!
The Happy Dementor
I havent been reading it after every installment. I read the first chapter and kind of got hooked on it. Since I have managed to read all 3 pages. (Quite proud about that) and I think it is......undescribable. WHICH IS A GOOD THIONG! laugh.gif Too good for words. keep it up you have to write again soon you HAVE to!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
lisasnape
Great Chapter! I can't stand that Umbridge, but I'm stiil holding out hope that Hermione gets to play Juliet through some twist of fate. Draco was soooo sweet in this chapter- what a cutie helping Hermione with her lines and that adorable gesture just before she tried out:

Again he communicated without words and simply pointed to his heart and then pointed to her.


I love the picture you included of the stage-really beautiful. Keep up the good work. I'm waiting for the next chapter on tenterhooks!

Lisa
meganx
totally agreeeee moooooooooooooooooooooooooore biggrin.gif biggrin.gif biggrin.gif biggrin.gif biggrin.gif biggrin.gif biggrin.gif biggrin.gif
hot-for-harry
Does anybody know when she's going to post more of the story? I'm dying to know what's going to happen!
The Happy Dementor
I don't know but if i did I would tell you. I understand your need. You can't just leave it like that! I bet she kills Lavender...not that i have anything against Lavender but then she would get to be Juliet. biggrin.gif OK I don't know but I want to know so....write more!
...ok that probably looks wierd but so what.
The story is incredibly good. You are an amazing writer so write more! Share with us your vision of...whatever!

...ok...I'm a bit wierd and hyper so i apologise biggrin.gif laugh.gif
Keep it up you have me on the edge of my seat.

THD
hot-for-harry
I have some extremely good news! I PMed fjkrs to find out about the next installment, and she said that it would be up about today! She said she was putting some finishing touches on it! Oooh I'm so excited! Can't wait! biggrin.gif
DracosLady
OMG! I love this fanfic it's awesome. Draco is soooo hot in this story I got all hot when I read the part about him and Hermione out in the woods. Heart don't fail me now wub.gif Hurry up and write the next chapter, I'm hoping Lavender will break her leg or something so Hermione will play Juliet.

OOhhh the story of star crossed lovers, so romantic and thats exactly what Draco and Hermione are....Can't wait till the next post this story is great! tongue.gif
The Happy Dementor
QUOTE(hot-for-harry @ Oct 12 2008, 07:16 PM) [snapback]541722[/snapback]

I have some extremely good news! I PMed fjkrs to find out about the next installment, and she said that it would be up about today! She said she was putting some finishing touches on it! Oooh I'm so excited! Can't wait! biggrin.gif



WOW seriousely! I can't wait! I'm gonna go and check it....

...ah well....the more she edits it the better it'll be! biggrin.gif
Hey! I forgot to say! We've like just started reading Romeo and Juliet in class and analysing it and stuff! We've just gotten to the balcony bit Act 2 secene2!!! We were reading some of the lines that I had read previousely on here! That made me laugh...and then stop because my teacher was giving me the evils...anyway...hope the update is soon! laugh.gif biggrin.gif
fjkrs
UPDATED


Hey all! Thank you so so so so so much for your replies. Happy Dementor- that is the most hilarious thing I have ever heard. xD I'm sorry the chapter wasn't up on Sunday, my jump drive is a stupid head and it said the file was corrupted so I had to type it all back up again. D: This chapter is kind of boring but the next one will be better.

<333
fjkrs
hot-for-harry
Awww, he's not mad at her! I'm so glad she finally ended it with Ron, and there was no heartbreak involoved! You're so good at writing this! And that question at the end! I don't know if I'm just stupid, but I wonder who she means! More, more, more!
lisasnape
Yay, a new chapter! It was sooo good. I'm glad Draco's not mad at Hermione. I didn't even notice that the cast list was made up of only purebloods-that darn Umbridge! I can't wait for the play; I'm so excited to find out what happens! smile.gif

By the way, I'm so glad that Ron and Hermione broke up-just one step closer to Hermione and Draco coming out of the closet. Speaking of closets.... That scene was great!!!! I never thought of a stinky broom closet as being romantic, but you have changed my mind! wub.gif

Thanks for writing another terrific chapter. I'm on pins and needles waiting for the next one. This is my favorite fan fic and you're my favorite author! biggrin.gif
The Fifth Marauder
Oh! I love this story you're writing! Its really good! You are SUCH A good writer, and it is an interesting and engaging pairing.
The Happy Dementor
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!! NEW CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WOOOOOOPDIDOOOOOOOOO!
That chapter rocked. can't wait for the next one lol laugh.gif . Yeah I know what you mean about the whole Romeo and Juliet thing I found that quite amusing. Still can't wait, can't wait, can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It didn't seem boring to me...the fact that she finally broke it with Ron and that they both agree that they are not suited for eachother was a good way to keep them friends and let them relax around each other a bit. the fact that hermione is gonna get to be Juliet has just increased my want for more...can't wait until the play it is going to be great I can smell it. biggrin.gif


QUOTE
Thanks for writing another terrific chapter. I'm on pins and needles waiting for the next one. This is my favorite fan fic and you're my favorite author!

I couldn't agree with you more Lisasnape. Favorite fanfic definately and author.

keep writing,

THD

Alastorlet_and_Proud!
Oh... My... GOD! Seriously, when I saw that there was a new update, I screamed so loud that my dad thought the house was on fire or something. I live and breathe on your story, so don't let me die in between updates. Please update as soon as is humanly possible so that I can bore all my friends with rants about the fresh drama!

Ellie
xxx
DracosLady
smile.gif I just read your latest installment very good wub.gif wub.gif wub.gif The closet scene was awesome....I am so glad that Hermione ended it with Ron and on a good note, at least they are friends...I love the way you make Lavender out to be..Can you say Hooch? Draco was so sweet with Hermione...

Waiting on the next installment can't wait till Hermione and Draco come clean with everyone...Gee I wonder what everyone's reactions will be? It could do one of two things, unite the Houses of Gryffindor and Slytherin for good or forever draw a wedge between them that could never be fixed? We'll see...Great work tongue.gif biggrin.gif smile.gif
fjkrs
Hallo everyone. <3

hot-for-harry- Hello! Thanks for your feedback. ♥ Just to answer your question: When I wrote it I intended that last question to mean did Hermione really lie for Ron's sake? As in did she not mention Draco for him or for her? Or for Draco? Hmm questions question. :-P

lisasnape- lol! Oh my my my. Yes well....when Draco Malfoy is involved anything and down right nearly everything can be romantic. tongue.gif I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and I'm so pleased by your review. You really know how to make a girl's day.

The Fifth Marauder- Well howdy there! Thank you so much for the feedback! It means a lot to me that you are enjoying my fanfiction. I must agree about H/D- such a great pair. xD

The Happy Dementor- ;D lol it's most excellent to hear you weren't bored!!! Thank you for the kind words...I swear you bunch are the best readers everrrrrr.

Alastorlet_and_Proud!- LOL you crack me up!! Okay I'm brewing up a new batch of oxygen for you right now. xD Hahaha hopefully this fresh drama will really give you something to say. ;-)

DracosLady- Hooch!!! LMAO. Precisely!! You're definitley on the right track there...won't tell you which way specifically but DANG you're getting warm! :-D & thanks for the feedback it's really so encouraging.

Again. I can't thank y'all enough my little gum drops- oh sorry, channeling a little Greenleaf there. cool.gif

Basically I'm writing the new installment as we speak(type?). There are two ways this one can go....NEW FRESH SUPA DRAMA....or onward towards the beginning of the end.
I dunno maybe you guys can help me decide...?
Maybe I'll do a pinch of both....hmmm well you know me I love DRAMA so who knows where this one will end up.

Anyways... Next installment due: Sometime this week/weekend. But definitley next Monday at the absolute latest.
lisasnape
QUOTE(fjkrs @ Oct 20 2008, 09:47 PM) [snapback]542838[/snapback]

Basically I'm writing the new installment as we speak(type?). There are two ways this one can go....NEW FRESH SUPA DRAMA....or onward towards the beginning of the end.
I dunno maybe you guys can help me decide...?
Maybe I'll do a pinch of both....hmmm well you know me I love DRAMA so who knows where this one will end up.


What a difficult question. I'm sorry but I really can't help you because I want this story to go on forever, but I also want to see Hermione and Draco go public with their relationship. Is there a way to do both??? Like maybe get them together and then have NEW FRESH SUPA DRAMA? You're the author and I'm sure you know best. You've done an incredible job so far and I'm sure which ever way you decide to go with it we(your loyal readers) will all be satisfied. biggrin.gif

Lisa
Alastorlet_and_Proud!
Hmm, depends. NEW FRESH SUPA DRAMA as in, Hermione and Draco get discovered (that would be dramatic) or something else? I want to see what happens when they break it to everyone, but I also wants lots of drama along the way!

Ellie
xxx

P.S. I'm on a life-support already. I need oxygen! Oh, but make it good oxygen, or I'll just die anyway eeek.gif
hot-for-harry
QUOTE
Hmm, depends. NEW FRESH SUPA DRAMA as in, Hermione and Draco get discovered (that would be dramatic) or something else? I want to see what happens when they break it to everyone, but I also wants lots of drama along the way!


I totally agree! I never want this story to end, but I can't wait till they go public. It's a good thing you like drama fjkrs otherwise I'd think I was doomed! So drama would be very nice, don't ever end it! smile.gif
The Happy Dementor
NNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It can't end! I never want it to end....but then i suppose that is a bit extreme as no one can live forever let alone come up with a plot that would last for ever, (although I'm sure you would be able to). The need to see the looks on Harry and Ron's faces when she finally comes clean will be priceless I'm already picturing it....but there should be a nice big build up to the final revelation. Nice big build ups make stories longer and the longer they are the more slowly they end. woot.gif

The play is also something I'm really looking forwards to which I'm sure would include drama. lol laugh.gif I just can't face such an amazing story ending. Once it does I wont have anyting new to read sad.gif . We need new things to read! Like DL said! WE RE ON LIFE SUPPORTS! (excellent way to put it in my opinion biggrin.gif ) but it can't end....not yet....its too soon.....but we have a hunger to find out what happens when they come clean.

Hmmmm how did Shakespeare put it?......

.......Parting is such sweet sorrow......


update soon! happy.gif
THD
fjkrs
Hey guys thank you for the suggestions. I have taken them all into VERY CAREFUL consideration and I've found a good compromise. It's going to be FRESH NEW SUPA DRAMA but also...not too drawn out so that the "coming out" can begin. smile.gif

I'm working on it tonight as a matter of fact.
I'll update soon for y'all so you don't do any passing out! <3

Okay bye,
fjkrs

ps: there will be a sequel if you are interested...... :'D
lisasnape
QUOTE(fjkrs @ Oct 22 2008, 10:02 PM) [snapback]543201[/snapback]

ps: there will be a sequel if you are interested...... :'D



Hooray!!!! biggrin.gif I'm so excited that not only are you writing an incredible story, but when it does finally have to end there will be a sequel! OMG, you've made me so happy! Now I will have something to read for a long time. Thank you, thank you, thank you! biggrin.gif

Lisa
The Happy Dementor
.........happiness......rendering me.......unable to.....type.......so......full......of bottled up.......excitement!!!!!!!!!!!!

YaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! biggrin.gif laugh.gif biggrin.gif laugh.gif
soooooooooooooooo happy! hapy happy happy happy happy happy! Sequal!!!!!! biggrin.gif
Thank you thank you thaaaaaaaank you sooooo much! This is perfect! PERFECT! now our lives can continue for another whole book! We wont have to die!!!!!! yay! (no one wants to die....)

I can't wait for the next chapter. can't wait can't wait can't wait. Whoopieeeee it might be soon.!!!!!! hehe he hahaha muhahahahahahaha

*mad hyped up laughter carries self off of chair*

......ok

write soon, very soon.

pretty please.

THD
Alastorlet_and_Proud!
[Head snaps up so fast that I crick my neck]

Sequel????

[does mad victory dance, and then runs out of the pathetic stream of air that I live on at the moment while you're in between updates and am forced to plug myself back into the life support]

Oh my god, you have brightened this grey, gloomy, wet day. I can hear metaphorical birds singing! Metaphorical piccalos playing something bouncy and cheerful.

Yay!!!!!!!

Thank you thank you thank you!!!

Ellie
xxx
The Happy Dementor
I just heard the most amazing song on the radio! I mean...i've heard it before but I was sitting by the window thinking about how much time is left until the next TUL update and I heard the song and I was like wwwwhoooooooooaaaaaaa. I think it perfectly describes the DM/HG relationship. Its called She Will be Loved. I bet you've heard of it. I managed to find a D/H one on YouTube. Its a bit odd but I think it gets the message across. There is a link to it here. I do hope this is not off topic or anything but I just wanted to share my amazment with the rest of the TUL fans. It might inject them with a bit of...life. laugh.gif
hot-for-harry
OMG! A sequel! No way! I'm so so so so so (I could go on for days here) so so happy about that! Not only that, but we're going to be getting new fresh supa drama! You totally made my day!

Update very very soon! You've got me pumped and ready for it. Yay!
fjkrs
Hey guys. Working on the installment right now.
Should be up tonight (later). smile.gif
Alastorlet_and_Proud!
AAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!

I had to run twice around my house yelling just to let off some steam! How could you leave it there? What is going to happen? WHAT??!!!!

You certainly delivered the NEW FRESH SUPA DRAMA we ordered!!!! I cannot believe that it's going to be Hermione and Boot! Or is it?

You've already got me hyped up for more!

Ellie
xxx
The Happy Dementor
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Update!!!!!!! Whoooopppppeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!

His father wouldn't actually kill him would he? lac.gif eeek.gif he can't die... I mean I know that he is mean but his mother would never allow it...still NEW FRESH SUPA DRAMA!!!!! Muahahahahaha!!!! I've become all goosebumpy...you see that you've given me goosebumps!!! I never get goosebumps!How is he going to be in the play and live? Is he going to be in the play? Is he going to live? sad.gif Is Hermione going to survive?
So many questions!!!! you can't just leave it there I will die.....die!!!! Now I'm all hyper and typing incredibly quick;ly and probably making a load of mistakes butr I dson't care because there is new fresh supa drama and it ROCKS!!!!! laugh.gif

he...he...errrrr....ok

keep them comming!

THD
lisasnape
You promised fresh new supa drama and you delivered!! biggrin.gif Wow, great chapter; I loved the Lucius twist. He's such an evil git-threatening his own son's life ohmy.gif . But could he really do it?? I'm not sure, but I wouldn't put anything past him!

I'm so proud of Draco for standing up to Blaise. He's really come along way. Love will do funny things to you! I can't wait for the next chapter-will Draco show or won't he? I'm dying to find out!

Lisa

p.s. Thanks for the reprise of the closet scene: "It meant dates and dancing at balls together and spontaneous broom closet snog sessions instead of precautious broom closet snog sessions. It was a beautiful thing." I love that!! wub.gif
The Happy Dementor
Sorry I haven't been on for a bit but.....you know.....I died.
I had to be ressusitated and if I am not soon supplied with a fresh healthy supply of oxygen then I will pass into the void where nothing but a new chapter can retrieve me...ooooh dizzy spell..... wacko.gif


laugh.gif biggrin.gif laugh.gif Anyone know when the fic is being updated because I have nothing to read and this is all I do with my time apart from homework dry.gif . Just sitting infront of the PC hyperventalaiting waiting for the next chap! XDDDD

Anyone? Anything? No? Oh well I'll check again later XD
Alastorlet_and_Proud!
Yes, WHEN???

As a fanfic author myself, I understand that it's kinda hard balancing life and your stories, but seriously WE ARE DYING OUT HERE! I hate to hurry you because what you're writing is SO awesome, but we really really really need more!

Ellie
xxx
fjkrs
Hello wonderful people!
Well I'm writing the new chapter RIGHT NOW. It ought to be up by tomorrow or best case scenario TONIGHT! O: Thank you for the LOVELY replies. I'm writing furiously to keep THD aliveeee!

Okay bye,

fjkrs
The Happy Dementor
YYYYAAAAAAAAYYYY!!!!!!! (injection of adrenaline)
Ists being posted soon! soon! whooopie! I'm a happy chappie!
Tommorrow....today? YaaaaaY!!!!!!!! I'm gonna go check just in case!
happy.gif smile.gif biggrin.gif laugh.gif
Alastorlet_and_Proud!
[Slumps into computer chair after 12 minute run that we were forced to do in sports. Tired eyes scan the page, find a post. Gasps. Stands up. Screams. Passing teachers stare as if she's mad. Sits back down and starts hyperventilating.]

NEW CHAPTER!!!!

News flash! Breaking news section of CNN and BBC News and every other news channel there is. THERE IS A NEW CHAPTER GRACING US PATHETIC MORTALS! [All pains from the run forgotten as she dances like a loony.]

Thankyouthankyouthankyouthankyou [etc. etc. (to infinity) etc.]

[Stops dancing and contents herself with shooting smug glances at all the people around her whispering 'I know something you don't know! AND IT'S THE BEST SOMETHING IMAGINABLE!!!']

Ellie
xxx

P.S. I hope I've made my point that I am absolutely, totally and completely over the moon (and this is Neptune's moon we're talking about!).
fjkrs
LMFAO.

Best posts ever.

Alright, I'm a big poo head. I know it was supposed to be up three days ago you guys but that night I had a minor set back. (My mom volunteered me to rake some old people's leaves and then I had to sit through dinner with them. It pretty much consumed my whole night.)

The good news is that during this wretched dinner I REthought the entire chapter and now it's BETTER THAN EVER. So...yay!

Edit: Shoot. Can't tonight. Probably tomorrow.

Bye,
fjkrs
The Happy Dementor
dry.gif I hate raking leaves they always get stuck in my rake. biggrin.gif
Better than ever!!!!!! biggrin.gif
Tomorrow!!!!! Woot!!!! Yaaaaay!!!!! woot.gif
Can't wait can't wait can't wait!!!!!
I'll check again later the next oppertunity I have!!!! thumbsup.gif
Update soon!!!!!
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