Omg Razz don’t be so modest, you definitely deserve us as readers, so you think we’re cool huh cool!
There’s nothing better after a hard day of work to read your fantastic fanfic.*Refreshes her mind and forgets the last chapter* (that’s so hard)

I don’t know why, but this chapter seems more your style than the other version,
It’s probably because there’s less talking and more action. The introduction of the young blond girl was way better than in that other chapter, now we finally know her name: Julie.

‘Say goodbye, Harry Potter.’
That sentence says a lot, I can hear Bellatrix saying that in my head. The fact that she says his first and last name means that she really thinks she’s going to win this time.

btw, I'm going to save that previous chapter, by the time this fanfic is published into a book it's worth tons as a deleted scene

Wow! That was so much better, Razz, it really was. I loved the tension between Harry and Bellatrix at the end! And poor Neville! I knew he was going to seek revenge on Bella, but I never thought he'd get smashed by a tree! You'll let him live, though, won't you, Razz?? Wow, this is really wonderful! Please post more ASAP! How could you leave us hanging like that!
Cheers,
Amanda

I thought the first one was good but, Razz, this revised version so far is incredible! The dialoge is much better too! Great job so far! I can't wait for the rest!

Yeah this version is better, mainly beacuse its got a better flow to it which makes it more exciting. I sure hope you'll finish the rewrite soon beacuse I want to see if you change how Bellatrix dies or not (which I dont think you should beacuse the death she got in the first version was exactly the kind of brutal death she deserved).

Hope you're well!
Cheers!

Brilliant! Thanks for the feedback guys and I'm glad this feels more like the story I've been writing! LOL, dont worry captain, Bella will still get the horrible gruesome death she deserves, just written a little better this time I hope. After I post the second half, I'll start on the next chapter.

Thanks again all, I really value your opinions

I really love your style, Razz, it really reminds me of JKR herself. Anyway, I can't wait until you post the part about Bellatrix dying! I know, that sounds so evil, but she deserves it, does she not? Anyway, I really am hoping you'll update soon! I'll be checking hourly! *lol* As you can see, I've become a bit ... attatched...
Cheers,
Amanda

Okay, I promised to come back once I am done, and - tada - here I am.

So let me paste a few things I already told you, so all the others can read how much I love the revised chapter.

The whole start was loads better, Lupin only telling Harry to run for cover. And you emphasized Julie - which I like. I know she will be important soon, since she is a healer and Harry does have some sort of illness now. He will need her, and it's good if he gets to trust her before she takes care of him. How else would he know she is on the good side?
I really enjoyed the way you told the chase this time, I was on the edge of my seat. You mentioned Zonko's. Good. We are still in Hogsmeade, and it gives your fic something JKish if you keep mentioning things we know. Yes, we are still in her world, and it is so awesome you can keep that up!
I started sweating, too, when I read the scene with Julie underneath the cart. She is blonde, just as Gabrielle is. She reminds Harry on her. Uh.. *shiver* This is so good! This is goosebumps!
I only wondered why Julie couldn't stay in the pub? Huh?
She has an urge to help, too? Maybe?

Okay, I didn't like the way Harry behaved in the first installment. He had too much of a self-esteem, he was to impressed with his own abilities.
The way you describe him now is way better. His spells are strong. They actually make Bellatrix stumble backwards. But he is not: "Man, I am so good, I can kill anyone!"
He is just Harry now. *giggle* Sorry I say it that sharp. But I didn't like Harry from last chapter at all, and I am very very happy you decided to have another go and change it.


And as for the last paragraphs: Uh, you really made me shiver when you described that Quintaped. I mean, it got angrier and angrier as Harry's spells bounced off. Hey, why was he silly enough to go on? *lol* Didn't he realize it was not working? Oh, well, it was probably the only thing he was able to do, trying again and again to stop it. Better die standing, right?
For some reason, I could picture the Quintaped now, with its six hairy legs... *shiver* I was really anxious for Harry. Though I know he will make it and the Quintaped will kill Bella. Yeah, you're not gonna change that, right? Because I loved it! *twinkle*
So in the end Neville came to Harry's rescue - just as we had expected, and now all of us are eagerly waiting for the next revised part. We want to see Bella sniff it! Yeah. *lol*

Kudos to you, razzberry, and thank you sooo much for taking your time and re-writing it! It definitely was worth it! Take a bow!

Flutters

is it just me or did you remove a chapter?

Arghhh! You re-wrote this and added what we all feared! How dare you! Oh Razz...say it ain't so....

But, you added vividness and realness to the oh-so-pivital-chapter. I hope you are satisfied now with it. I am loathe to accept the fate of one of my most beloved characters...what will I do if this happens in canon?

So are we to move beyond this gruesome chapter now? Please, please write more soon! I wnat to find out what is happening and why!

Waiting with baited breathe....

LOL Well I had to write this one so you wouldn't be so confused anymore, however ... keep in mind that this Harry Potter world. and almost anything can happen...

You portray Neville just the way I see him (correction: the way I saw him) He’s a quit boy, but when it comes to his friends or family he’ll do anything to help, I’m so glad you gave him the confrontation with Bellatrix, I know for sure that’s the thing he always wanted though he knows he won’t stand a chance against her.

So our beloved Neville joined Dumbledore again, but I’ve got to say that this way of dieing is better than being splattered by a branch (that would be really sad for him)… I think he’ll rest in peace now he knows that Bellatrix is gone too.

There’s one thing I’m wondering (It’s not important to the story but I find it interesting) You wrote about the DE but have you named them all in your head? Example, you wrote:
One was watching Harry nervously, but did not move to attack him.
I’m wondering whether or not you named that DE (like it’s Greyback or Alecto) I hope you know what I mean. We know that Neville is murdered by one of them… but you didn’t mention the DE's name.

And than.. ofcourse the ending. Is there anyone else that talks like that except for Hagrid *scrolls through the entire fanfic to find out*
*sigh* no one, I thought it could be one of those wizards from the beginning. Ah well, I'll just stick to Hagrid then
All by all this chapter was way better than the first version of it.
This chapter was awesome! Keep up the brilliant work Razz, you are more than amazing, you amaze me everytime!

Oh my!
Razz, this was even better than before! It really took my breath away... I think my heart is still pounding!
Poor Neville! That was so sad! I nearly cried.... and Harry. I hope he gets well soon! He needs to take better care of himself, especially now that he's ill!
Brilliantly done! I can't wait for your next chapter!

No! No! No! As one of you many editors, I insist there must be a third re-write. I do not need much changed here just one word.

Yeah ... look sorry about that. I know you had to sit through two versions of this chapter, but I really am a lot happier with this version, and I'm ready to move on now.

Thanks for your honest and encouraging reviews, and dont panic, even if people didn't like this chapter, I wasn't about to try it again lol.

I'm looking forward to the next few installments, but in the meantime it would mean a lot to me if you'd drop in a reply to the revised chapter. I spent so long on this particular section, not so strange since I've been dreading it since I first planted it in the fic weeks ago, still ... it's over now *sigh* and I can move on now, happy with my attempt as I ever am!!



If you guys haven't already heard ...

I have been asking people to put a note in their sig if they would like the return of our little marauder mate 'Muddy Footprints' You never know, if people who liked the prints express themselves enough, then mybe we can convince the powers that be, to re-introduce them. I dont know about you, but I really miss snuffles too. It was so cute Anyways, a note in your sig would be greatly appreciated!

thanks again to y'all for your reply *waves with geeky grin*

I have one thing to correct, and its a very minor one.

Awe, just because it was a green jet of lightning doesn't mean it had to be a killing curse, right? *twinkle*

This installment was probably your best ever, I mean, goodness, I was shaking! I already knew what had to happen, but I was so tense! The whole thing is just loads and loads better now. Honestly, why can't all authors out there write like you? It would definitely save me a lot frustration about stupid books!

The way you descried the Quintaped move, and Harry fighting and the Death Eaters not knowing what to do... ah, you had me on the edge of my seat!

With whom is Harry now? I think it is Hagrid; Abe does speak "normal", right? Oh, I hope Julie gets there soon, she needs to help poor Harry.
The whole illness was much clearer in this installment. I just read over it in your first version, but now it really shocked me. Goodness, Harry tumbling around like that, his mind blanking... My heart beats like mad still.

Really, razz, we need to make up some words to match your chapters!


All I can say: I enjoyed it immensely and am more than curious to lean what will happen next.

Flutterflie

I really like how the rewrite came out, it became a bit more like JKR's style when you dropped some of the fighting (she usually does'nt write very long fight scenes), not to say that the first version was'nt good. Beacuse it was. This one is just better. Cant think of anything to say ^^, just keep on writing!

I'm holding out that Neville fainted... holding out... holding out. As usual wonderful chapter... and it is much clearer... not that there was anything wrong with the original. You're as briliiant as ever Razz!

Oh and i added the SPIMF to my siggy. I loved those footprints *tear* really loved them...

Ahhhh... the revision... I loved it! I thought the first original was good, but this was eve better. You are a great writer (I'm getting tips for my fan fic im going to write eventually) and I have something to look forward to everyday. But, poor Neville though. He died a hero and got revenge on Bellatrix. Who took Harry in at the end? Was it Abe? Hmmm... always a little cliffhanger at the end Can't wait for next chapter.

Hmm... Razz.
So much to say and I have so little time. I have some personal matters to attend to . I said I was going on the computer to print out homework.... I don't think they'll buy it much longer though. Oh well worth a shot.

This won't be one of my longer posts. So you have to bear with me. But all in all. It was much better. And it is true that this particular chapter is more of a JKR writing style: Not too much action, But written so well and so precise that to quit reading is absolutely not an option. Wonderful.

Ah.... Neville.... That's all I have to say. Great how you make up his character!! Lovin' it!

Now, on a more personal note. I PMed you yesterday or the day before ,Please when you get a chance can you PM me back. Thanks! It would be very much appreciated!

Peace!

~ Pheonix

Oh Heather. As always, very nicely done. Harry and Draco's enmity towards each other is just like it is in the books, and their personalities are perfect as well.

So Malfoy's supposed to accomplish some sort of task, huh? I wonder what it could be; it's very mysterious. You've got me a little worried, Heather; I hope he won't do something too drastic and heartbreaking.

Great job. Keep up the good work!

omg i've just had theory mode go into overdrive! When writingfreak mentioned Draco's task, the only thing i thought of was the AK coming out of nowhere! Could it have been Malfoy

thats all i have to say for now, hope the new chapter's going well

Hmmm...I dunno wich chapter i liked more, the old one or this one...Poor Neville though...Killed by a death eater Oh well, hopefully it was some other spell that's green. But at least Bellatrix died, in an ugly but cool way, she deserved to die like that.

Whoa! Okay.... Now for a longer reply.

The chapter, as usual Razz, was fantastic! I think that, between the new one and the old one, well .... I love them both so it is hard to tell which one is better. But in this one, you write extremely well and it is much easier to understand what is going on. Also, the transitions between scenes are amazing, there is not one single flaw on the transitions of which I can think of. Everyhting went so smoothly.

Now for the beginning of the chapter, with Bella chasing Harry, I think that, that part of the chapter was well done. And it was a lot better than this part in the first one. You put alot of emotion and you built up alot of tension inbetween characters.

Ohmigosh! You can't just let Neville die! Oh, I feel so bad for Harry! All he had to go through in one night! But I liked that chapter much better, Razz, more descriptive, just... it was better as a whole. I really think you're doing an awesome job! I have to see what happens next, so please update soon!
Cheers,
Amanda

P.S. Are you sure you're name isn't J.K. Rowling?

Hey Razz!

I'm just dropping in to ask you how your next chapter is going
I know I'm terrible and pushy but I'm really longing for your next chapter *sigh*. So please update soon and tell us how your next chapter is going
(we are desperate to find out)

Hugs, marieke

*tee hee* You guys are awsome!! I've been reading the reply's and I'm so happy you all liked the new version, and some of you even liked the old, so that was a bit of a bonus!!

I'm 3 pages into the next chapter, and I'm happy with it so far, though I'm changing the last paragraph I just wrote before coming on here because I just though of a better way to go with it.

Anyways, if all goes well, at this rate it should be up by tomorrow night my time, which is roughly 24 hrs in real time. I may have to link this chapter, or the next, depending on how far I get. And I've never done that before so I'm not entirely sure how, though Big D is on the case!! and has sent me some links to follow up. *waves to Big D*

I know I've said this before, so feel free to vomit on mass, but I really cant express how much I appreciate your support. That goes not only for the people who loyally and dilligently post reviews *waves - hi guys *, but also for the people who PM me, and the people who just pop in to read. I really dont mind, I just love the fact that you're reading.

Okay, eh-hem ... I'll get and do some moding now

*vomits* only kidding Razz, There's nothing better as an author than having people reading, and commenting on your work, by whatever medium they care to use. I think i speak for all of us when i say we can't wait for the next installment, if you need any help with those sites i sent you, give me a shout sometime tomorrow. I dont quite know how much help i'll be given i've never used either of them, but stiil, you know me, i will try to fix it!

*waves to Razz! *

The new revised chapter was also amazing, but then again also is everything you write *lol* It did clear up a lot of questions that i had. it just kinda sucks that neville, as we now know for sure, is dead. Im upset about that because every one loves neville, i mean you can't not love him, but im really glad that he was the one to take down bella, his parents would be proud but life must go on the harry's world, and im sure in a later chapter harry will avenge neville's death. ok, now im excited for the next chapter, please hurry razz *lol*

Hey Razz. You are doing a great job as always. I stop in as much as I can to see whats going on with your story and where it is going. Sorry if I don't reply every chapter, but I'm reading it so I'm still here. Keep up the good work.

All right, the chapter is finished, I just have to figure out where I'm going to link the linkable part. I hope I can get it sorted before I head off to bed. With any luck it wont be long.

hey Razz, here I am once again
yeah, hope you update soon, I can;t wait for the new chapter!!!
Couldn't believe you've killed neville though Poor guy...
well update soon, update soon, and eh... update soon.
cheers, Lynn

p.s Update soon.

*cry*
Why did you do this...
*snivel*
I am not talking to you anymore... *sigh*
Harry was supposed to do it with Ginny... oh my, she will be devastated... I am in tears... I have to think about it.

Oh, razz... that is so mean... so much heartbreak... first you kill Gabrielle, then you kill Neville, now Harry does the horizontal Hokey-Pokey with some Healer... Uh-uh-uh... *cry*

Yes, I totally understand the situation. And I see how it happened, but... *snivel*
I am in grieve now. It is like Harry decieved Ginny. I need chocolate now... lots and lots of chocolate...

[fairygodmother]"I hope you got what you wanted. A diet is ruined!"[/fairygodmother]


No, to get back to the story. Your writing of course was brilliant as ever. Really. I was of course hooked from the first paragraph on. Abe having Harry drink firewhiskey was priceless.
Of course... geeze, now I totally lost my thought. *shakehead* What did I want to say? Oh well, it will come back.

I am just glad we found out on which side Julie is. Because ever after reading Richard Bachmann aka Stephen King we know good girls wear white undies! Yay! *lol*

Okay, I will come back once I remembered what I wanted to say. And don't be frustrated about my comment on Harry and Julie. I mean, I did it with Fin and Sirius, too, didn't I? *lol* I am just such a Harry/Ginny shipper, it tears me apart.

Whatever. Good job, razz! And I really don't want to be you, now that you have to write about Harry telling Ginny. Hehe.

Hugs, Flutters

flutters, you've got me in hysterics!!

Yes Harry did turn to a virtual stranger, but it was what it was, and I think it's the real nitty gritty of the real world, so I threw it in. It will also make for some interesting interaction between Harry and Ginny huh?

I know this is going to be un-popular, but I loved it. Really I did. I wanted to write a proper love scene with Harry for ages and Ginny's just not ready yet ... so along comes Julie LOL

I'm waiting for the proverbial to hit the fan with all the H/G shippers!!

Man good chapter, you really write those intimate scenes well. I liked the whole memory thing in the first part and I really admire your courage to kill off Neville (if hes actually dead...).

I really wonder how the aftermaths of part two will be (if Ginny finds out...^^)

Cant wait for the next one!

Ahhh Razz, nicely done. First, I loved your descriptions of the room. Once agian your graspof the English language places me right next to the characters and I see and feel everything you want me to. Julie is kind as is Abe. They handled that bit of news with care that few people sem to show Harry. Because it was a very "Dumbledore" thing to do, showing him what he had to remember. They knew he was strong enough to cope, if he learned it right away. Nice!

Now it brings me to the other part. What a wonderful, real situation Harry and Julie find themselves in. She was probably hurting and confused as much as harry was. Maybe not as intense, but still...That is real life, I agree. Sometimes things just...happen. Out of our primal need for human contact, we reduce ourselves to our instincts. I'm not that upset by Harry and Julie reaching out to one another, really. It just fits. Because it doesn't....does that make sense? Still interested in seeing how Ron and hermione are. Why did they say Harry was ill to begin with? Did I miss something? Or is it a secret for now? Ahh well...I am hapy you chose this avenue. And, might I add, very nicely done. Very tactful and clean. Well chosen words for that situation, it is hard not to make it raunchy and dirty. You made it comforting and....hmmm....what's the right word. Necessary.

Razz that was um...not what I was expecting. Our little Harry all grown up now. Shame on Julie for taking advantage of an innocent young boy. I can see the magical tabloids now, "Healer claims to be carrying Chosen One's child". Harry will have some explaining to do with Ginny. As you point out it will be interesting. You are right about Ginny not being ready.

I can not believe you are really letting Neville die. Gabrielle was bad enough but sweet Neville. We finally get the DA back and you knock off the primary person who got it going again. You are evil. I can live with the Harry scene, I mean she is young and blond and if I was seventeen again well...I can not fault the guy but Neville dying. That just was not necessary. I expect you to fix it next chapter.

Greg

PS Like Snapelover I too was wondering what they meant by Harry already being ill before he cast the spell.

Wow! So Harry lost his innocence...
I always imagined it would happen with Ginny, but Julie suffered a loss too and it's only human for what happened to occur. Besides, your'e writing a fanfic, not a fairy tale.
But poor Harry... he's been through so much.
Razz, you did it again though, another terrific chapter! I can't wait for the next!

PMSFL Greg! Is Harry going to turn out to be the next David Beckham!
"I had fling with Chosen One" says Healer. LOL whatever will the prophet make of that, Somebody call Rita!

Ok enough about that, that was amazing as always Razz. The Darkness of Harry's mind was so well done, His emotions are always so well done by you, and you wrote that first bit brilliantly. As for the next bit, with the memory extration that was at once terrifying, and harrowing to read. The memories of the night before, and him finally realising that Neville dying is the reason for everyone acting so wierd. I just cant believe that you're plan for Neville was to have him killed! Who'se next? I dread to think

And as for the 2nd part, well that was, ahem not exactly ahem. who i thought it would be between!!! I know you said you were writing a racy love scene, i just wasnt quite expecting it to be Harry, and anyone really! I wasnt really sure who it would be. Now that you've done it, im not nearly as annoyed as you'd probably expect me to be! It was necessary for the story, and given the situation, completely understandable, them both losing someone close to them, they reach out, and find each other. It was very well written, and im glad you didnt make any mistakes in there, otherwise i'd have to break the rules posting up those, ahem sections!

Nicely done as always, you're right on the money with this one! Its like reading grown up HP isnt it? Somehow i cant see old JKR writing that in book 7!

take it easy Razz, and hurry up with the next bit, i want to see Ron and Hermy's reaction to everything!

Jim

Hmmm.... so they did it.... i love this "did it" chapters *lol*. It was very tasteful, which is always good.

I still can't get over Neville, though i assume this willl make Harry work harder since he was killed. *sigh* i loved your neville, he was awesome.

I wonder how Hermione and Ron are, i bet they are worried sick about Harry. And now he has to go back and face them all, and he already blames himself for Neville's death.... tough times ahead.

Harry is a little tipsy eh? too much of a good thing *lol*

This was a good chapter Razz... you know how you are.... a great writer! Im off to class, bye!

~Mae

~LOL~ Great work Razzy!
Owh yes uhm... where was I?
I wanted to mention some things in my reply but I forgot about them when I read part 2 ah well.
Owh yes, I really laughed at the part that Harry and Abe were drinking firewhiskey and Harry feels himself treated like a kid by Julie.

I just can't wait 'till the moment Ginny finds out about Harry and Julie.
*runs to her birdcage, graps her pigeon binds a note at her tiny leg and sends it to Ginny*

The second part was really unexpected!
I expected Harry/Ginny but this one was even better. Harry can always blame the firewhiskey, like in real life *blame the alcohol*

Whoo hoo

I actually got such a high from writing that chapter, I think I have too much sympathy with my main character, even feeling the poor guys sexual frustration!! Well, I've vented it now, and I feel so much better
Captain, I'm glad you liked it mate, as I said I loved writing it, and I do love getting around the lovey dovey scenes in a 'tactful' way, its a great challang.
Mel - It really makes writing the fic worth it when people like you appreciate the intricasies of it. I have it all pictured in my head when I write it, so I try to put it all down for you guys, and if it comes across, then thats brilliant!! And I agree, I'm not upset at Harry either because he does this out of a need to be comforted, and he knows they're not in love, and that she'll get up in the morning and carry on, and he's not with Ginny official either after their last meeting, so he doesn't really see it as a betrayal ... yet, though I have a feeling he will come to see his actions will have consequences. You'll get to see Ron and Hermione next chapter, and you'll find out why Harry was ill, though its not really much of a mystery.
greg - rotfl I just love a bit of contraversy!! And you are talking to the Dark Mistress Razz remember. You had no idea how dark did you? But dont worry, it wont stray too far from canon, and you'll find out more about the Hufflepuff Horcrux next chapter too (I think) I can really see what happened between Harry and that woman as being true to life. Like you say, he's 17, he's sexually frustrated anyway because he's so noble, and he's upset, feeling a bit lost, and from her perspective, he is a young buck of 17, rather cute, and of course tragic, and th 'chosen one', so famous to boot. I cant say too much about why I've chosen to go this way with Neville, but believe me, his part in my fic is definitely not over.
cori - hiya! Yeah I thought it was realistic, so that's why I put it in. I really wanted my Harry to be much more mature in his attitudes and his needs this year, its the only way to satisfy all of the things he's going to need to do I think. Thanks for you post mate!!
Big D - I suppose it could go like that, though I think Harry knew when he made a pass at her, that Julie wasn't like that. lol. I love the fact that you compliment me on all the different bits, because this chapter has got so much of the stuff I love to write in it. And dont worry, its not the end of Neville's story. I so pleased you warmed to the idea of Harry and Julie too. She's no threat to Ginny, Harry loves her with all his heart, which is why he cant bring himself to sleep with her. But he has needs, especially when he's under such strain. rotfl!! I took extra special care to get the linked part right before I posted it *lol* so you wouldn't be forced to PM me!! And you're right, Jk would never put that in her book, but that's kind of why I'm writing it, it fills a gap that I know will be there in the last book because it has to be.
keepstar - Yep, Harry did it!! Yipee!! Thank goodness really, the poor guys been so frustrated in my fic (if you didn't pick that up) and finally he's had a release!! It'll be interesting to see what happens now, now he's all growd up!! And Neville still has a VERY important role to play which will come out gradually. And yeah, its going to be hard for Harry to face them all, he's going to feel like he was responsible I think because he plucked Neville into a higher position in the DA, and he confided in Neville what they were up to, so yeah, its going to be hard for him.
Krieltje - I love it!! I just love it when people are coming back from reading the link going "DUH ... where was I?" rotflmao!! Makes it all worth while. Abe's so cool isn't he? Very different to DD, but a great mentor for Harry I think! Oi, dont be such a dobber LOL. *stretches arm out with butterfly net on long pole and catches pigeon* I'm not ready to tell her yet!! Gotta keep some suspense... I'm really happy you liked the Harry/Julie scene. Like I've said I loved writing it!!



Thanks for the reviews folks I'll start on my next chapter tomorrow.

Why did you remove the second part?I missed it I want to read it, from what i read in the replies it seems interesting...
The first part was really good, i really liked the idea of making him remember what happened, and finally someone revealed "sir"'s name, though i doubt Harry payed attention.
Keep up the good work and if possible, can you repost or send me the second part?

Hiya Flea, its there, you just have to click on the link that says Part 2 at the end of the first part. Hope you're over 15!! Let me know what you think of it...

Ok...I guess this is one of those chapters you just can't not reply to. Did that make sense? Anyway, I must admit I liked the Harry/Julie thing, however much it threw me off, but its just so wierd! Harry? My Harry? Little Harry who saved Hermione from a troll? Who ran like mad when a cupid tried to recite a valentine? Little Harry tackling a boggart? My Harry? He's really growing up, isn't he? I gotta say, though...if I'm Ginny, "I've got needs, babe", doesn't really get you out of hot water. I'm just hoping she'd never finds out. And what an awkward position that would put Ron in! Can't tell him either. And Hermione? You know, she just might understand. She's an odd duck, that one. But then again, after the whole Lav-Lav thing, maybe she wouldn't be quite so inderstanding! Looking forward to seeing how you work this out, and what becomes of Julie.

Brilliant as usual, Razz Quite well done, although it was sad for Harry to have to relive everything. Ah, it's two-thirty in the morning here, and I'm feeling slightly drunk, so I think I'll finish this later

Edit to Add: Right, I'm back. Incidentally, there was no alcohol involved in my drunkeness last night - I was just really tired and I act like I'm tipsy all the time, so... Hehehe, my friends have made it their goal in life to get me drunk. That should be interesting.
Anywho, the story. Well, as I said, it's brilliant. I loved Harry drinking all the firewhisky. Hmm, maybe he should join in on the 'get Meg drunk' excursion I'm still slightly traumetized that Neville is dead, but I'm glad to hear that his part isn't over yet. I loved that they had to use legilimency to help Harry remember what happened, although it's horrible that he had to relive everything like that. You really showed just how much Harry has gone through and how much stress he has been under in this chapter . Hmm, I'm definitely dying to know the real reason Harry was sick Quite mysterious. Wait, you said it wasn't really a mystery Oh well, I still want to know. As to part two... Excellent job! Ah, Harry's growing up. And my sadistic mind is excited for all the tension this is going to cause between Harry and Ginny. Really, though, it was wonderfully written.

Kisses,
Meg

So Razz, I didn't post earlier, I had busy days.

A lot happened: I'm very sad about Neville's death. I wish he could have gone down a bit more like a hero, but it's your fic and you said there will be more of Nevilles story. I'm sorry, I just really like Neville and I fear who the next one will be who's going to die.

Oh, Harry isn't innocent anymore! And it's written so good. It's actually a bit of a boyish thing, you rather do that with a girl whom you don't love. There was much truth in this scene.

Good writing, Razz.

I promise I will post more often again!

As Always ... Perfect Razz

It's so rude of you to kill Neville I always loved his Role in the Books ...

And Harry and the Healer !!! Can't Beleave This !!!
Tough im 13 Years Old, i've Read it. I must Say: I have Read worse

So, it's not a big shock to read those things, but Harry with the HEALER!!! O my god, i was in kind of Shock, that's not the Harry i know ...

But as always, very very nice Chapter Razz

But, if you gonna Kill off Ron OR Hermione ... I'm gonna be so mad that you must be Carefull im not Standing behind you with a Knife or Something ... JUST KIDDING

But Please, don't kill of Hermione OR Ron Then my Computer is Wet from tears

Ahh ... Hey Razz!

Im sorry i didn't have the time to post earlier. And i don't have the time to really post now.

But quickly i just wanted to say something that I have NEVER said before on this thread. Ever! This right here mate, was not one of your best works. I don't mean to upset you or anything... but I know that you could have done better. I've seen you do better. I love the idea for the chapter... but in terms of writing it.... i don't know. I might be just dillusional.

You started out with a first paragraph, which, in my opion was nicely written....