I like it!

And I'd even more enjoyed reading it if there were ' instead of ? *lol*
Could you try to sort that out?

Okay, waiting for the next chapter.

Flutterflie

Hi, Heather! I'm excited to read your new story; it sounds great, and I'm anxious to see what Harry will do.

Your beginning was perfect, it really sets the scene and alerts us to Harry's mood right off. I loved the way you described it.

There's one small thing though that had me a little confused:

Thanks flutterflie and writingfreak

I fixed the confusing part, that's the problem when you proof read your own stuff, you miss things like that.

Anyway, working away, and will post soon. Glad you're into the story so far.

razz

excellent so far razz, sets the story up perfectly, keep it up!:)

This is a very well written story! keep it going its really good and i am enjoying myself reading it!

Absolutely wonderful! Can't fault it at all. Vernon's attitude is exactly the way it is in the books, as is Harry's. I always enjoy reading their squabbles, especially when Harry catches Vernon off-guard.

Poor Hedwig. If I was Harry, I'd miss her too. I hope he sees her again.

This is indeed very well-written, and I can't wait for the next segment.

Hi I am totally abusing my mod position here but I thought I should add in your post that I edited out the part where Hedwig was going away. I decided to keep her in, atleast for now.
Razz

brilliant story. Keep them coming, this is one of the first fan fictions i have read and it has certainly made the right inmpression. Look out jk! lol

that was exteremly good!!! i think the beginning of the book will be a bit like that
WRITE MORE!!!!!!!

This is really excellent, It's almost like the last book is here now! your writing style is very much like JKR, certain sections of the book are like reading her work.

Keep it up! cant wait till the next one!

REally awesome so when JKR finishes the 7th you can write us the 8th one

Really cool

MOD EDIT: Thank you But as a mod I have to put a wee note in about your slight use of netspeak. Please type the whole word for the people who dont use English as their first languge. Ta.

Excellent! Briliant! I've been writing my own Hary Potter 7. I've written 5 or so chapters but it's nothing like yours. Mine is a little bright during the first several chapters. It only gets bad when he moves out. I love your first chapter. Really great.

wow that was superb, i like the direction this is going in, and the story is moving at the right pace! its great

i'll keep my eyes open for the next installment!

I have to agree with Big D. That was wonderful, I loved the way you described everything. Keep going, please. You're doing a great job!

Wow, Wow, Wow, Wow, Wow, Wow, Wow, Wow, Wow!!!!

wow this is really excellent, you've captured hagrids character perfectly, thats exactly what he'd do!I'll be interested to see how you describe godrics hollow though, can wait for the next bit!

Brilliant. I like how you've written Hagrid as well but I don't thnik he would have let Harry go. I'm glad he did though. Can't wait to see what Harry finds!!

Yay, they're at Godric's Hollow! And Hagrid would do exactly that. His speech is perfect too, just like it is in the books. Wonder what's going to happen next?

how to keep an audience in suspense in 3 easy steps! That was awesome! like the way you described godrics hollow, i had a lot of problems thinking how to describe it in my own fic. But it was done very well. But is there anything left in their house? will he ever find it if there is? and if you dont mind me saying thats a pretty good cliffhanger!

Wow, it is really good!
I didn't get to read in the last days because I was busy writing, haha, but now I took the time I am amazed how the story continues. It just keeps getting better and better.

Flutterflie

Oh wow. That was superb! Godric's Hollow sounds like a nice place...except for the abandoned areas, of course.

And poor Harry, unable to find a single thing! That would be very depressing, to return to the place you once lived in only to discover there's nothing left. You described his emotions perfectly.

And that was a good cliffhanger. Very nicely done.

Whoa... just Whoa. Thats how I feel about your story in one word. This story is superb its really getting me in the mood to write my own but though my name is "The Clever" I lack the awesome writting qualities that some of you have. But by reading all these great SL's im learning on what is acceptable and what is extreme right down to the detail, and you Razz are extreme to the detail. I know you'll steer this story in the right direction so I can't wait for the next chapter.


Good Luck,

T.C.

WOW WOW WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! that all i have to say!!!

Whoa. That was fantastic, absolutely fantastic! You've got Harry's and Hagrid's personalities down perfectly: Hagrid's protectiveness and Harry's bravery and stubborness. They really showed in your last post.

I had to chuckle at the new characters you introduced. Fudd, in particular, sounds absolutely hilarious. Poor guy, though, to have a hearing problem.

Very nicely done. Keep going!

sorry i havent replied to you sooner, wanted to give it my full attention, so i'll do it at work! But wow this is getting better everytime i read it! my heart left my chest when the death eaters apparated, and i actually thought for one second you were going to kill off hagrid. glad i was wrong! keep up the good work!

wow amazing i was so like reading it not even knowing what was happening around me this is soo good please carry on i'm beggin you.

excellent, excellent stuff!

Everyone's actions amd speech is perfect, Sooty(great name by the way!) was perfect, your description of the thoughts In Harry's head about a female dobby!class! and the oh so typical reaction of people hearing harry's name and going crazy! everything was perfect!

and as for Harry's reaction to hearing about his parents, and tearing him back to reality was like something our of a JKR novel it was perfectly worded.

Im not leaving my computer till you write more!

Hiya Big D

I saw your post on the intro thread and I should point out I am a huge LOTR fan too, re-read the series a couple of months ago
Also you are a Ginny fan ... have you posted on the 'Do you think Ginny is likable thread?' I would be interested in hearing your views if you feel inclined. I hope to make Ginny likeable in my fic, maybe add a bit of depth to her character and give her and Harry a bit more insight so we know where he's coming from.

Okay ... Trek to Everest base camp Wow, that must have been an adrenalin rush! I did a round-the-world-backpack a few years ago over 6 months and went to some really cool places but I dont think I can top that!

And thanks loads for your comments, I really do appreciate them, and I'm more than happy to accept the good with the bad, though it's been good lately of which I am thrilled.

I haven't been replying but I have been reading it. I have to say that your work is exatly like J.Ks. I feel I'm reading the book!! Your doing great. Keep it up and you might replace her. hehe.

please please please carry on it gets better everytime you update you know that well maybe you don't but anyways carry on it a great story it is.

Beautiful, That was so well explaned. Amazing.

WOW.....

I really dont think there is anything else i need to say about that, it was incredible. Beautiful is the right word. Harry's emotional state was perfect. You really have got this down to a fine art, Like you said above its all good! I cannot find a single thing to fault.

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Im not leaving my computer till you write more!

that is probably the nicest thing anyone has ever said to me in the fanfic forum so thanks *blushes* [QUOTE]

well maybe a slight exaggeration on that part, i did have to go home, so for maybe half an hour i wasnt sat at a computer waiting for more!

As for, the other stuff, LOTR has always been a huge thing in my life, then i found about the films and it made my year! they were incredible, there are still things i would have changed or done differently, but then again there's a reason they were directed by peter jackson rather than me Ginny's only recently became my fave character, I love her attitude towards everything, the way she calms people just by looking at them, and that her and Harry are just right for each other, like they were made for each other.

And the trek was the best 3 weeks of my life, some of the friends i made out there are still some of my best friends and despite the hardships, and there were plenty of those believe me! to stand there in the shadow of the tallest mountain on the planet was inconparable!

If you like I can send you some photos/ continue to talk about it via pm, dont want to take the attention away from your masterpiece!

Okay, you got me crying now... thanks.

I only just read the last chapters, I didn't want to read them in a rush, so I took my time now.

Wow.

Don't know what to say. Wow, wow, wow.

It went straigt to my heart. And that is probably not just because I happen to be a mother myself.
You are just a thumping good writer.

Two thumbs up for you! And you can be sure I'll print you story out to read it again and again (Frankly, I don't like reading stories on the internet myself... *cough*)

Flutterflie

Do something to cheer me up, because the chapter leaves me in such a sad mood... *sigh*
I am really down now.
.oO(Besides, I am unnerved because _somebody_ doesn't want to take her nap...)

The chapters you write are just so full of emotion, I don't know. Even though it's not much that happened in "the guard" you can feel exactly how Harry feels and I do admit I never get that with JK... *cough*
I am rather annoyed by Harrys behavior sometimes.

So go ahead! I think when the two of us are done, we'll probably both have a 800-page-book. *lol*

So talk to you later I guess!

Flutterflie

wow wow wow thats all i can say really wow that ws magnificent great wonderful extroadanary amazing.

i don't know how you do it really because quite frankly i'm amazed totally amaazed by your writing skill.




MOD EDIT:A couple of smilies should be enough, surely you don't need twenty of them, do you? I'm pretty sure Razz get what you meant.

forgive the netspeak but OMG! wow. Im actually lost for words! and believe me that never happens, every word is dripping with emotion, and your descriptive writing, and the dialog is just as it would be, and has been in every JKR book before. Its like book seven is here 2 years early!

my webshots address is

http://community.webshots.com/user/wolf210883

enjoy!

Big D!! Those pics are amazing! I am blown away by the magnitude of what you and your mates did. I have always thought I was the out-doorsy kind because I've been on numerous overnight bush-walks and done so many day hikes up mountains (though I hate to use the word mountain after seeing your pics ) and into valleys etc, but seeing those pics really puts me in my place! 'An early lunch' lol, I laughed out loud at that one

Ummm... I actually copied a couple to my comp to use as desktop backgrounds, I hope you dont mind.

Just OMG right back at ya!! Now I feel like I have to go there, but I have to admit I'd want to be a bit fitter than I am when I take off on an overnighter. Did you have trouble with the atmosphere at base camp? I've watched loads of doccos on it and some people cant handle it. Are you planning anything else like this in the near future? I'd love to hear about it!

Anyways... hey flutter I'm glad you got dragged along with Harry's emotions, he has to sort a few things out to overcome his fears and take on the momentous task he has been left by Dumbledore

Soulja *blushes*, thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you have felt an affinity with where this is going!

Big D, you are too kind once again I am thrilled that you like Harry's last year. Well my version of it anyway lol

Got another installment almost ready, but I just had to post on those pics!

I know you've seen this word several times already, but I can think of nothing else to say other than that those last few posts were absolutely beautiful. Harry's emotions are exactly as they should be.

I like Sooty; she sounds funny and sweet. House-elves are great...except for Kreacher.

Seems we need to start a razzberry-fanclub now.
Good job!

Flutterflie

yh really your just great at writing i wonder what you got for your writing tests because i think you would have top marks really this story is so thrilling descriptive and extroadanary.

Theres no embarrased smilie! this will have to do for now! Im glad you liked them. If you'd like to talk about the trip via pm/msn id be happy to talk about it with you in more detail. Im flattered you'd want to use my pics as a desktop, thats really awesome! Which ones did you pick? For the moment all i'll say is by the time i came home i had lost about a stone, i was ready to sleep for a week, and i was ready to go right back again. It was the best 3 weeks of my life, without a doubt. You really do notice the lack of oxygen, and thats nothing compared to what it's like ontop of everest where you cant actually breathe properly. You try to move anywhere any faster than a slow walk and you just cant do it, its impossible, you just have to stop and gather yourself before setting off. Not everyone made it there though, a few people had to turn back, most did though.and those that didnt were just glad to be there. The reason i went, basically was to see Everest, because its my ambition to climb it one day

Brilliant! I like that you made Lupin mad at Harry, don't ask me why but when bad things happen the story seems better. It's kind of like the fifth book, gloomy and out of sorts. It giv es you the impression that, hey... this is war.
I don't know how you do it. And as for that Razz fan club...

Oh sigh... that IS a cliffhanger...
Hope nobody gets killed...

*sigh*

Once again: good job!
I so hope that Harry and Ginny get back together even if he thinks he endangers her. They are ment to be!
I loved that kissing scene!

Flutterflie

This is getting better as it goes! really nice work there.

just noticed a couple of spelling errors in there.

Thanks Big D Proof reading my own work again lol
I fixed them straight away. I appreciate you picking me up on it because it makes it so much better to read when those sort of mistakes aren't made!

Finished the next installment and it's a bit of a shocker. I hope people dont get offended by it I wont post yet though because I haven't even started on the one after that, buying a bit of time

I'm glad you liked it though because I didn't really enjoy writing the wedding scene. I hate big showy weddings, not my thing you know so it was a bit of a stretch for me. I like Fred and George though, I cant write them like Jk, my attempts at making them funny are a bit feeble lol Loved writing the next post though! Had an absolute ball figuring it all out! Hope you guys like it too.

Ah, I liked the wedding, it was so vivid, the way you described it. I felt like I was actually there watching it happen.

Ginny and Harry kissing...how sweet! It would be nice if they got back together again but if they didn't, that would be okay too. Either way, I still love your story.

The last part was definitely a shocker. Attacking a bunch of people at a wedding...how low can you get? And what's going to happen to them all?!

This is very well-written. Can't wait until the next post!

Once again you exceed expecations, actually now i think about it it was more outstanding than anything else!

One thing i had noticed was Bellatrix's dialog with Harry, she called him Harry which seemed almost personal from the evil [MOD EDIT]. I don't think she's ever called him by anything other than Potter, with as much disdain on the sylabals as possible but I dont think that really sounds like her?Just my thoughts though.

While we're on the subject of dialog the trio's at the end was right on, Hermionie and Ron's reactions and words of comfort were exactly as they would be in any other HP book. Harry's reaction and feeling of sorrow and grief was perfectly worded.

Poor Fleur though.

Now I don't know what to say, really. It goes straight to the heart.
Gabrielle dead... *sigh*
I know that I'd never be able to kill off a charakter like this... you did a great job, definitely. It showes that the wizarding world is at war again, nobody is save. No way denying it...
Wow.

Flutterflie

Thanks again Big D, as usual I have taken your advice! I'm really glad you liked it, It's sounds cruel because of what happens in it but I really enjoyed writing that installment.

Hiya flutter I'm glad it got to you too. I was drained by the time I had finished writing it, just so much stuff poor Harry has to deal with. And you're right, this is one of the reasons I put this in, because Harry, and the reader, need to realize this is not going to be like Harry's other years. They are under threat from a maniacal sociopath who will stop at nothing to dominate and that's a pretty scary thing to deal with. It's going to be a big year for Harry

Thanks for the support guys I really appreciate it. If there's anyone out there that might be reading but not commenting, I would love it if you'd take the time to post your thoughts. I'll take them to heart as Big D can vouch.

Wow! this fanfic is probably one of the best I've read (and I've read a lot ). If someone would tell me that JKR wrote it, I would believe it right away. It's full of brilliant emotions, Gabrielles dead was really heartbreaking, you worded it so perfect that I fellt so sorry for Harry and the rest. btw. sorry I haven't replyed earlier.
I can't wait to read the next chapter!

-Marieke