Very well written, some of those lines just made me giggle, looking forward to the next chapter!

*lol*
Harry got a Dumbledore portrait for his birthday!
I still can't stop laughing.

I like your story so far.
Just writingwise.. well, you should change a paragraph in the beginning. You have "window" twice and "taps" and "tapping" in two sentences and you might want to change it so it sounds smoother.

Good.
I'm looking forward to see more!

Oh, and I can't find nothing wrong with dialogue... Hehe... I am an expert in writing dialogues and usually skip telling the rest. *lol*

Flutterflie

It's really really good!
The Dumbledore portrait thing is great! I can't wait for the next part, keep it coming, I can't wait!

Thank you all, for the complements, and the criticisms. I quite like the way it's turning out so far, and I hope that you all continue the reviews; the next part should be up soon.

Yet again you have impressed me!!! I have only one critisism to make, Maybe you could have put a little more detail on what actually happened when Harry was made secret keeper. But apart from that small critisism, that was absouloutly (sorry, still cant spell) brilliant!

Yeah, sorry about that I would have but I really had no idea what it would look like because JK has never mentioned it, otherwise I would have. Thanks for the praise though, the next part should be up in a day or two.

OMG! I love this fic! It's great! But you did have a couple spelling errors throughout the chapters. I loved how you made Harry secret keeper for the Order. And I also loved how you had the three of them get DA embroidered on their cloaks and robes. That was a really cool idea! Keep up the good work! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Weasly's Wizard Wheezes

Why thank you, I really like it myself. But then again I wrote it so I'm a little biased. Sorry about the spelling errors, I run it through a spell check and read through it several times before posting, but it looks like I still missed some. If you remember any of the ones you found go ahead and tell me, and I'll correct them.

P.S. I started school today so I won't have as much time to write, but I hope to have a new chapter at the very least once a week. And thanks again, it's always nice to hear someone likes your work.

Can't wait for the next chapter! I don't remeber where the spelling errors were, but one of them was when you wrtoe 'sense' when it should've been 'since' or something like that.

Weasly's Wizard Wheezes

OMG!!! What's going on with Lucius and Voldy?!?!? I want to know! Oh, btw, it's Fleur, not Fluer.

Weasly's Wizard Wheezes

Great story, I loved nearly every part of it... Im insterested to keep reading this.

Freakin' great! I completley love this fan fiction its the best iv'e read on this forum easily. So keep it up and hurry up! ^^

Thank you for the complement, that's very high praise, though I'm not sure I'd say the same. But then again it is the reader and not the writer that determines how good the story is.

Hey Ghost, that's a nice story you have going there. I feel like I'm actually reading Harry Potter and not someone's fantasy of a fantasy. You're doing an excellent job, very enjoyable.

Now if you please, give us the next freakin' chapter, bro!

this is great!!!! I know what you mean about school, I just write behind the teacher's back in Homeroom...lol...anyway, I love the story and I figured out what Hermione wanted to show them, but I won't tell and spoil it for people who didn't. lol... keep writing!!!

Hi there, There was a small bit of net speak in you post ('skool') it's now been edited, net speak is not allowed here as it makes posts harder to read, thanks, Shane

Hello.

I just read your FanFic for the first time, and I love it.

Thank goodness for someone who would think to continue writing about the Order.

And thanks for creating the painting in which Dumbledore could appear.

That was clever, and a wonderful idea.


And the tension between Harry and Ginny is great.
I'm not much of a H/G shipper, but this is cute. =)


And I have a feeling what Hermione's letter says, but I'm not going to assume anything yet.

Please add the next installment soon.
=)

It's great. Just like usual. What does the letter say?! I have a good guess, but I don't want to think that unless you tell us what it says. Please hurry and post the next chapter!

Weasly's Wizard Wheezes

Wow, I don't normally get this many replies for a chapter, and especialy not so quickly. Well thank you all for the complements, and for taking the time to read my story. I've had a lot more time to work on it today and the next chapter should be up fairly soon, possibly as early as tomorrow afternoon. (My time that is) But don't hold me to that, just in case. And thanks again to you all.

this is a really good fan fic!! you've described everything really well and have a good story line so far! keep it coming!

This is really great, ghost. I should study but then I started to read this fanfic, and well...good job.
okay: I like how you developed Ron, I really do. I'm actually worried about the money thing, Harry spending so much and not caring about money, really. The scene with Lucius is great, I'm actually sorry for him. And I too got an idea what is in that letter...let's wait and see.
keep up with your very good work!

[COLOR=red]hi! this storie is the best ! pls write some more
soon!

I'd like to draw your attention to this thread here. Please read before posting in this section again. Thank you Shane.

Also Net speak and one liners are not allowed anywhere on the forum.

Very, very good. I enjoyed it immensely! I noticed that you are still spelling "barley" instead of "barely" though. It's almost as addicting as the actual books, hehehehe, which makes it hard to concentrate at work. Keep up the good work. I eagerly await the next installment.

Giannabella

Honestley this Rocks!
Your take hon the H/G relationship is so bloody right and the thing with Malfoy?... pheew already lining up mysteries eh' just like Rowling!

Keep em coming!

Oh, I definitely need to catch up on this one... didn't realize it got so long already, hehe. Erm.. I got as far as Harry meeting the Delacurs.
I particually liked how you described Hermione and Ron leaving to "get Fred and George"... hehe...

Good Luna and Neville are there, really.

I will read some more later, promise.

Flutterflie

way to go, ghost! Neville and Luna! great, just great. Now Neville's finally got something for himself, some love for his own. I always hoped that Harry would pick Luna but Neville's my second choice.

Oh, by the way Fleur's sister is called Gabrielle.

Continue with your good work!

Wow! Ghost!
You are one great writer! I just started reading your fic 2 days ago and i'm utterly impressed. You have an abillity that is amazing to write stories. I think you should write more fics after this. No joke!!! Anyway great story and i look foward too reading the next installment. Dont stop anytime soon, I'm so intrigued!!! See you around.
-Pheonix

Waiting for your updates!

Please continue!!

Great chapter Ghost, cant wait for the next.
by the way its serious not serous, just a tip.

Keep it going good!

Wow!!! this is great!!! sorry i haven't been on in a while. Evil teachers, editor, the usual. I can't believe the part about the will!!!! Why would he write one?!!!! He can't think that he's the one the prophecy mentions will die?!!! Oh- I almost forgot, I loved the portrait thing. keep writing...I'm trying to think if I missed anything...hmm...nope...well just whatever you do: keep writing and keep Harry alive!!!! OH I REMEMBERED!!!!! I was right! I knew Hermione'd be offered Head Girl!!! heh heh. Well, that's all for now, caio!

This is really good, Ghost. I'm impressed! This last chapter, especially... I never thougt that anything would actually happen to the Dursleys. Not that I like them particularly as people, but as you said, no one should have to go through the dementor's kiss. And Moody's patronus was thrown off. Hmm, quite mysterious.

cheers,
Meg

Thanks Meggie, I'm having a lot of fun writing this and it's always nice to heat people like it.

I am sorry to say, however, that I promised some friends of mine to do somthing and I'm already past due for when I was suposed to have it done, so I'm not sure when I'll have the next chapter.

And thanks once angain for the complements.

Hey, you're the author here. You get to take as long as you want. Just so long as it stays excellent when you do put it up .

Holy moly Petunia was kissed by a dementor! This is getting more and more exciting by each chapter...

I must say that I was shocked when Petunia was kissed by the dementor. But I'm still really enjoying each chapter and check everyday for the next one. Keep up the good work!

I'm plodding on reading your fan fic, ive gotten to where harry gets to the burrow. Your doing amazing! all the characters are right on. i love the line where you said that "Thats was somthing coming from someone who had grown up with percy" or something like that. It made me laugh. I'm gonna try to finish cathing up tonight!

~Mae

oh man! petunia lost her soul? ugh! i wouldn't wish that on anyone, even the Durselys. The part with the Patronus was creepy. My favorite part of this chapter was when Dudley fainted. Oooh! and the Snape thing? suspicious. well remember what i said last time! caio!
~bri

Ghost i finished the whole thing! and i must say it is very good! Poor Petunia... I can't wait to read more, and im glad Hermione and Ron are going with Harry. he is going to need them.

As for the stronger Dementos, i think that was a great idea. Keep up the god work!

~Mae

I surely don't expected that!
Update sooon!

Hi there Kote.N and welcome to the vtm forum.

I'd like to draw your attention to this thread here. Please read before posting in this section again. Thank you Shane.

Wow, I really appreciate all of you taking the time to read and review my fic, thanks a lot.

I'm glad I shocked all of you, I had had a feeling that you guys might see the kiss coming, but I'm glad to say I was wrong.

I'm working on the next chapter and it should be up in a few days and thanks again.

I like it! Even though there's not a lot of action, it's still really intense - lots of feeling. I love everyone's reactions to the discovery that they are being followed. Harry acted exactly as I thought he would, and I can just see Hermione freaking out. Keep up the awesome work!

wow! this is great! I totally know what you mean, Meggie. I saw it too. this is great! keep writing! my advice is constant!

Another great chapter. I really liked the fact that he went to his house. And the letter from Lupin was a nice touch. It seemed really short though and like I was done in no time so keep it coming. I look forward to the next one.

Sheri

ps. I hope that it is actually Ginny following them

i really like that 1 and would really appreciate it if you could atleast write a little update as to tell what malfoy was doing there and what is going to happen to him, i'd be really grate full if you did thanks for a great up date.

Oh my goodness I never would have guessed that it would have been Draco. That is a fantastic twist! I loved it! I am so excited for the next chapter. Probably more excited than I've been for any chapter yet! Good job!

Sheri

DRACO MALFOY?! wow! suspicious...why's he following them? hmmm...i give up...I'll just wait for the next chapter. I can't believe James worked at the MoM! And he devolped curse?! A genius?! I'd have never quite imagined him a genius.Joof-off maybe but genius? Execllent work as always, Ghost! My advice is the same!

Umm, soulja, I don't make just simple updates, and I'll cover most of that in the next chapter. So you'll just have to wait, but thanks for saying you liked it, and thanks Giannabella, and lilyliveson.

Yeah, I was hoping that it would shock all of you, I've been planing that since about the fourth chapter, though orignaly I was going to have Lucius go rough on Voldemort and attack the three to get revenge.

What?! whoa I just read your last post! Lucius! Whoa! Congradulations, I'm shocked! No problem! He he!

Wow! That was exciting! I definitely didn't expect the follower to be Draco. Hmm... I wonder what he's doing there. This is getting very mysterious . Hopefully we'll find out soon...

Wow!! I just read the story and it is fantastic. It is very catchy and I cant wait until you put a new chapter in.




KEEP IT UP!!!